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人教版8年级上册期中书面表达训练
假如你是李丽,上周日你和家人一起参观了北京紫禁城。你有许多感悟,请写一篇40词左右的日记,记录下你的所见所闻。(5分)
提示:
紫禁城讲述了中国的过去,它是一个博物馆;
紫禁城是美丽的花园,有很多房间,每个房间都非常特别;
现在人们可以在这里了解中国文化。
要求:
表达清楚, 语句通顺, 意思连贯, 书写规范;
2. 词数在 40 词左右;
3. 短文中不得出现真实的地名或人名等信息。
参考范文One possible version:
I visited the Forbidden City last Sunday with my family. The Forbidden City is in Beijing. The Forbidden City is full of history. It tells the story of China's past. It is very old and big. It was the palace for Chinese emperors. I saw many beautiful buildings and gardens. There are a lot of rooms, and each room is very special. I felt like a king when I was walking there.
It is now a museum where people can learn about Chinese culture.
书面表达（A）解析
主题与背景：本题设定情境为李丽上周日和家人参观北京紫禁城，要求以日记形式记录所见所闻及感悟。紫禁城作为中国历史文化的重要象征，承载着丰富的文化内涵，此写作主题旨在引导学生关注中国传统文化，培养文化意识，并通过日记这种较为自由的文体形式锻炼语言表达能力。
写作要点分析
开篇引入：“I visited the Forbidden City last Sunday with my family.” 简洁明了地交代了时间（上周日）、人物（李丽和家人）以及事件（参观紫禁城），为后文描述紫禁城做铺垫。
紫禁城的历史文化意义：“The Forbidden City is full of history. It tells the story of China's past.” 直接点明紫禁城充满历史底蕴，是讲述中国过去故事的场所，呼应了提示中“紫禁城讲述了中国的过去”这一要点。
紫禁城的建筑特色：“It is very old and big. It was the palace for Chinese emperors.” 描述了紫禁城年代久远且规模宏大，曾是中国皇帝的宫殿，体现了其历史地位和建筑规模。“I saw many beautiful buildings and gardens. There are a lot of rooms, and each room is very special.” 进一步描绘了看到的美丽建筑、花园以及众多各具特色的房间，与提示中“紫禁城是美丽的花园，有很多房间，每个房间都非常特别”相符。
参观感悟：“I felt like a king when I was walking there.” 形象地表达了参观时的独特感受，仿佛自己成为国王，增添了参观的趣味性和个人体验感。“It is now a museum where people can learn about Chinese culture.” 说明紫禁城现在作为博物馆，能让人们了解中国文化，紧扣提示中“现在人们可以在这里了解中国文化”这一要点。
语言特点：整体语言简洁、流畅，使用了简单易懂的词汇和句式，如“visited”“is full of”“tells the story of”等，符合 40 词左右短文的简洁要求，同时准确传达了关键信息，使读者能清晰了解作者参观紫禁城的所见所闻和感悟。
家是爱的港湾, 是温暖的拥抱。假如你是李华, 你每一天都被家人悄悄温暖和拥抱。我校青少年英文网站开展以“A Warm Family”为题的英语征文比赛, 请你围绕以下内容, 写一篇80词左右的短文投稿。(15分)
内容:
他/她是谁
他/她做的一件让你觉得暖心的事;
呼吁大家做一个温暖的、传递正能量的人。
要求:
短文必须所有要点, 可适当增加细节;
表达清楚, 语句通顺, 意思连贯, 书写规范。
(B)One possible version :
A Warm Family
A family is like a cozy blanket on a cold day it makes you feel safe and loved. My family may be small, but it 's filled with warmth and laughter.
Every morning, my mom wakes up early to make breakfast. She always adds a smile to my pancakes. My dad, who is a teacher, helps me with my homework after dinner. Even when l make mistakes, he patiently explains things again. Last week, I failed a math test, but instead of scolding me, he said, “Let's try together! " We spent the whole evening practicing, and I felt so supported.
We also share sad moments. When Grandpa passed away last year, we hugged each other and cried. Mom told us,“Love keeps people close, even when they' re gone. " Now, we plant flowers in the garden every spring to remember him.
In my family, we talk, we argue, we forgive, and we care. It's not always perfect, but its always warm. I'm thankful for every ordinary day with them.
书面表达（B）解析
主题与背景：以“A Warm Family”为题，围绕家庭温暖展开写作。家是学生生活中最熟悉、最重要的环境，此主题贴近学生生活实际，能够引发学生的情感共鸣，引导学生关注家庭中的温暖瞬间，培养感恩之心和积极向上的生活态度，同时锻炼学生用英语表达情感和事件的能力。
写作要点分析
开篇引入主题：“A family is like a cozy blanket on a cold day it makes you feel safe and loved.” 运用比喻的修辞手法，将家庭比作寒冷天气里的温暖毛毯，生动形象地引出家庭给人带来安全感和被爱的感觉这一主题，为后文描述家庭温暖做铺垫。
介绍家庭成员及暖心事件：
妈妈：“Every morning, my mom wakes up early to make breakfast. She always adds a smile to my pancakes.” 描述妈妈每天早起做早餐，并且在煎饼上“添加微笑”，这种细节描写体现了妈妈对孩子的关爱，充满了生活情趣。
爸爸：“My dad, who is a teacher, helps me with my homework after dinner. Even when l make mistakes, he patiently explains things again. Last week, I failed a math test, but instead of scolding me, he said, ‘Let's try together!’ We spent the whole evening practicing, and I felt so supported.” 先介绍爸爸的职业，接着描述爸爸晚饭后辅导作业，即使孩子犯错也耐心讲解。通过具体事例，如孩子数学考试不及格，爸爸没有责备而是鼓励一起练习，展现了爸爸的耐心和支持，突出了家庭的温暖。
家庭共同经历的悲伤时刻及应对方式：“We also share sad moments. When Grandpa passed away last year, we hugged each other and cried. Mom told us, ‘Love keeps people close, even when they' re gone.’ Now, we plant flowers in the garden every spring to remember him.” 描述了爷爷去世时家人的反应，互相拥抱哭泣，妈妈的话语以及每年春天种花纪念爷爷，体现了家庭在面对悲伤时的团结和相互支持，进一步丰富了家庭温暖的主题。
总结家庭氛围及个人感受：“In my family, we talk, we argue, we forgive, and we care. It's not always perfect, but its always warm. I'm thankful for every ordinary day with them.” 总结家庭中既有交流、争论，也有原谅和关心，虽然不完美但始终温暖，表达了作者对家庭的感恩之情，升华了主题。
呼吁部分：虽然原文未直接出现呼吁大家做温暖、传递正能量之人的语句，但从整体对家庭温暖的描述中，可以隐含地传达出希望读者珍惜家庭温暖，并将这种温暖传递给他人的情感，符合题目中“呼吁大家做一个温暖的、传递正能量的人”的要求。
语言特点：表达清楚，语句通顺，意思连贯。使用了丰富的词汇和多样的句式，如比喻句、定语从句等，增强了文章的感染力和表现力。同时，通过具体事例和细节描写，使家庭温暖的形象更加生动鲜活，符合 80 词左右英语短文的写作要求，完整包含了所有要点。

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