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读后续写评讲课
three
steps
to
finish
a
continuation
writing:
Step1.Reading
人物时态和事件　语言特色不要变
Step2.Thinking
Step3.Writing
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for
“5W1H”
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for
language
第一段大意：两个首句决定（前中后原则）
第二段大意：第二个首句+故事正能量
1.
内容完整性、与原文情境融洽；
2.
词汇&语法结构准确恰当多样；
3.
上下文衔接&全文连贯
Task1
I
used
to
be
a
plasma（血浆）donor
and
what
follows
happened
one
chilly
day
in
the
fall.I
had
ben
going
through
a
tough
time
cmotonaly
and
financially.It
started
to
drizzle（下毛毛雨）and
I
knew
I
was
low
on
gas，butI
hoped
that
I
could
at
least
make
it
to
the
plasma
center
and
donate.
　　Unfortunately，when
I
came
out
of
the
center，I
couldn't
start
the
car
due
to
a
lack
of
gas.I
didn't
have
a
jacket
in
my
car
because
of
poor
planning
on
my
part，but
I
resigned
myself
to
getting
the
gas
can
out
of
the
trunk
and
walking
a
block
and
a
half
or
so
to
the
gas
station
just
up
the
street.
　　I
was
walking
along
the
sidewalk
rubbing
my
arms
to
try
and
stay
warm
when
a
car
pulled
up
to
me
and
the
lady
in
the
driver's
seat
leaned
over
and
asked
me
where
I
was
heading.
　“I'm
on
my
way
to
the
gas
station
because
my
car
is
totally
out
of
gas！"I
laughed
at
myself.
　“Well，hop
in（上车）and
I'll
drive
you
over
there.Just
this
one
up
the
street，right？"the
lady
asked.
　　I
was
just
grateful
to
be
getting
out
of
the
rain.She
drove
me
up
to
a
gas
pump
as
we
chatted.I
explained
that
I
was
hoping
that
I
had
money
on
my
donor
card
and
she
laughed
and
told
me
that
she
knew
all
about
being
low
on
money.I
got
out
to
pay
with
my
donor
card
but
it
was
declined
as
the
money
hadn't
been
deposited
yet.
　　The
lady
said
she
would
charge
it
for
me.
Hearing
the
words,I
didn't
know
what
to
say
to
express
my
appreciation.I
got
my
gas
can
filled
and
we
headed
back
to
my
car.
We
chatted
more
on
the
way.
Task2
：
时间：
地点：
人物：
时态:
事件：
主题：
从关键词得出以下信息：
one
chilly
day
in
the
fall；
came
out
of
the
plasma
center;I
was
walking
along
the
sidewalk.
I；a
lady
一般过去时
①I
had
been
going
through
a
tough
time
emotionally
and
financially.
②When
I
came
out
of
the
center,I
couldn't
start
the
car
due
to
a
lack
of
gas.I
got
the
gas
can
out
of
the
trunk
and
walk
to
the
gas
station
.A
lady
was
kind
enough
to
drive
me
to
the
station.
③When
I
had
no
money
to
pay
for
the
gas.The
lady
charged
it
for
me.I
was
grateful.We
headed
back
to
my
car.
根据以上整理出来的事件脉络，不难发现这篇文章在事件上主要体现the
lady对我的帮助（help）,缓解了我的困境，所以整个故事的主题应是the
lady对我的帮助（help）,
我感受到了陌生人的温暖，决定以后
也要尽力帮助需要的人们。
Step2.Thinking
一、细读首句，构思框架
1.?第一段大意：两个首句决定框架（可以采用“前”、“中”、“后”推断情节先后的方法
?
2.?第二段大意：第二个首句与故事正能量结尾，来确定框架
I
got
out
of
the
lady’s
car
to
fill
my
car
with
the
gas.
She
reached
out
her
hand,
and
I
reached
back
thinking
she
just
wanted
to
shake
my
hand.
由两段的关键词和主题，我们可以得出第一段的主要内容应是我给汽车加油并成功启动了汽车。第一
段的尾句呼应所给的第二段的首句，所以第一段的尾句还应写到
the
lady
还没走。
根据第二段的首句She
reached
out
her
hand,
and
I
reached
back
thinking
she
just
wanted
to
shake
my
hand，可以确定第二段的主要内容应是写the
lady
不是只想跟我握手，而是给了我一些东西。且主题是the
lady对我的help，我感受到了陌生人的温暖，根据结尾正能量的原则，尾句可以以作者决定要跟the
lady一样帮助有需要的人，凸显主题，升华精神。
语言表达：
简洁，不复杂；故事叙述为主，少量对话；
时态&语态：一般过去时；主动语态为主。
人称：第一人称为主
Step3.Writing
增加细节，开始写作
在已定框架范围内，依据情节推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做等给每段增加具体细节。
Paragraph
1?
I
got
out
of
the
lady’s
car
to
fill
my
car
with
the
gas.
1.?增加细节
2.开始写作?
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
所做：我加完油后启动汽车，成功了。
所想：还好遇到好心的LADY,??要去道谢。????
所说：跟LADY说汽车已经可以启动了，感谢她
我给汽车加完油后，去启动了汽车
.
我转动钥匙，发动机发动了，我成功了。
听着那声音，我非常高兴，心想：幸亏遇到好心的女士。
我想跟她道谢，所以回头看，发现她真的原处。
所以我激动地跑过去,告诉她我车已经可以启动了并感谢她在寒冷的路上载我。
女士回答：她很高兴能帮上忙。
I
got
out
of
the
lady‘s
car
to
fill
my
car
with
the
gas.
After
doing
that,I
climbed
into
the
driver’s
seat
to
start
the
car.
I
turned
the
key
and
the
engine
turned
over.
Hearing
the
sound
,my
face
lit
up
like
the
sun.
“
How
lucky
I
am
to
meet
the
kind
lady”
I
thought.I
must
express
my
appreciation
to
her,so
I
looked
back.I
was
surprised
to
find
she
was
still
waiting
for
me.
I
ran
back
over
to
the
lady's
car
excitedly.I
told
her
my
car
could
start
and
thanked
her
sincerely
for
saving
me
from
walking
in
the
cold.She
replied
that
she
was
very
glad
to
do
me
a
favor.
Paragraph
2?
She
reached
out
her
hand,
and
I
reached
back
thinking
she
just
wanted
to
shake
my
hand.
1.?????增加细节
2.开始写作
1.
2.?
3.?
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
所见：原来不是仅仅要握手，而是给我一些钱??。
所做：婉拒钱。??????????
所感：无限感激。
所想：要像the
lady一样地帮助更多需要的人
突然，我发现有东西掉地上了。
我惊讶地发现原来是100元。
女士说：她完全清楚身无分文的感受，所以希望我可以接受她这点小心意。
我深深地感动了，但是我还是拒绝了。?
女士坚持说我比她更需要钱，希望有一天会想办法把钱还给需要帮助的人.
听到这些，泪水盈满了我的眼睛，我表达了我衷心的感谢。
我紧紧拥抱了女士，心想：当遇到需要的人们，我会像这个女士一样竭尽所能
地帮助他们。
正能量结尾：（只有这样越来越多的人才会有互相帮助）
She
reached
out
her
hand,
and
I
reached
back
thinking
she
just
wanted
to
shake
my
hand.
Suddenly,
I
felt
something
falling
onto
the
ground.
I
was
surprised
to
find
that
was
a
$100
bill.
“I
know
all
about
being
no
money,I
hope
you
can
accept
it.”The
lady
said
softly.I
was
deeply
moved
but
declined
the
money.
But
she
insisted
that
I
would
need
it
more
than
she
did
and
she
hoped
I
would
find
some
ways
to
pay
it
back
to
someone
in
need
one
day.
At
that
moment,
tears
filling
my
eyes,
I
offered
my
heartfelt
gratitude
.I
hugged
her
tightly
thinking
that
I
would
try
my
best
to
help
people
who
were
in
need.
Only
in
this
way,
could
more
and
more
people
help
each
other
in
the
future.
I
got
out
of
the
lady‘s
car
to
fill
my
car
with
the
gas.
After
doing
that,I
climbed
into
the
driver’s
seat
to
start
the
car.
I
turned
the
key
and
the
engine
turned
over.
Hearing
the
sound
,my
face
lit
up
like
the
sun.
“
How
lucky
I
am
to
meet
the
kind
lady”
I
thought.I
must
express
my
appreciation
to
her,so
I
looked
back.I
was
surprised
to
find
she
was
still
waiting
for
me.
I
ran
back
over
to
the
lady's
car
excitedly.I
told
her
my
car
could
start
and
thanked
her
sincerely
for
saving
me
from
walking
in
the
cold.She
replied
that
she
was
very
glad
to
do
me
a
favor.
She
reached
out
her
hand,
and
I
reached
back
thinking
she
just
wanted
to
shake
my
hand.
Suddenly,
I
felt
something
falling
onto
the
ground.
I
was
surprised
to
find
that
was
a
$100
bill.
“I
know
all
about
being
no
money,I
hope
you
can
accept
it.”The
lady
said
softly.I
was
deeply
moved
but
declined
the
money.
But
she
insisted
that
I
would
need
it
more
than
she
did
and
she
hoped
I
would
find
some
ways
to
pay
it
back
to
someone
in
need
one
day.
At
that
moment,
tears
filling
my
eyes,
I
offered
my
heartfelt
gratitude
.I
hugged
her
tightly
thinking
that
I
would
try
my
best
to
help
people
who
were
in
need.
Only
in
this
way,
could
more
and
more
people
help
each
other
in
the
future.
Practice
makes
perfect!
Homework
Please
polish
your
individual
writing
and
hand
it
in
tomorrow.
Thanks
for
your
listening！

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