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continuation
writing
-----My
birthday
present
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A
few
years
ago,
my
mom
went
to
the
doctor
to
ask
him
about
her
neck,
which
had
been
a
little
bigger
than
usual.
It
turned
out
there
was
something
wrong
with
her
lymph
glands
(淋巴结),
and
soon
they
scheduled
Mom
to
have
a
biopsy
(组织切片检查)
on
the
seventh
of
September.
As
soon
as
I
found
out,
I
was
very
angry,
as
September
7
is
my
birthday.
They
had
promised
to
take
me
to
see
a
spider-man
movie
and
had
a
picnic
in
the
yard.
I
shouted
at
her
and
everyone
else,
too.
I
even
shouted
at
the
dog.
I
started
begging
her
to
reschedule
the
biopsy.
She
gave
me
this
look
like
she
was
about
to
cry
and
said,
"I've
done
everything
I
can.
I've
got
a
disease.
Could
you
forgive
me?"
Finally,
I
just
shouted,
"I
hate
you!"
and
ran
into
my
room,
crying.
I
sat
on
my
bed
thinking-Why
do
things
always
have
to
happen
to
me?
Everyone
gets
diseases
Why
couldn't
mum
just
go
to
hospital
another
day?
For
the
next
couple
of
weeks
I
remained
silently
angry.
Deep
down
I
knew
I
sbouldn't
act
that
way,
but
I
did
anyway.
Anyone
could
see
how
sad
I
was
making
my
mom.
I
knew
it
wasn't
her
fault,
but
I
had
to
have
someone
to
blame.
Finally,
my
birthday
came.
My
parents
left
early
in
the
morning
for
the
hospital,
and
I
was
sent
to
our
neighbor's
house.
No
spider-man
movie,
no
birthday
present,
and
no
picnic.
Though
I
was
taken
good
care
of,
I
was
not
having
a
good
time.
"This
isn't
fair,"
I
thought.
"This
was
supposed
to
be
my
day."
My
parents
came
home
late
that
night.
Mom
walked
in
with
a
bandage
on
ber
neck
She
sat
down
and
rested
her
head
on
my
dad's
shoulder.
It
hurt
so
badly
that
it
was
diffcult
for
her
to
talk.
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What's
the
writing
style
of
the
passage?
Narration（记叙文）
Argument（议论文）
Exposition（说明文）
A
narrative
story
has
six
elements.
what
are
they?
Fast-reading
Birthday
present
who
I
mother
father
when
A
few
years
ago
For
the
next
couple
of
weeks
September
7
Late
that
night
where
at
home
what
birthday
present
see
a
movie
have
a
picnic
why
My
mother
was
ill
how
I
was
sent
to
our
neighbour's
house
no
spiderman
movie
no
birthday
present
no
picnic
Summarize
the
main
content
of
the
article
according
to
the
time
clues
My
mother
________________and
learned
that
she
had
a
lymph
glands
and
______________
to
have
a
biopsy
on
September
7,which
happened
to
be
my
birthday.
A
few
years
ago
went
to
the
doctor
be
scheduled
For
the
next
couple
of
weeks
I
remained
silently_______
.
angry
Finally,
my
birthday
came
My
parents
_____early
in
the
morning
for
the
hospital,
and
I
__________our
neighbor's
house.
No
___________
movie,
no
birthday
present,
and
no________
.
left
was
sent
to
spider-man
picnic
Mom
walked
in
with
a
______
on
ber
neck
She
sat
down
and
rested
her
head
on
my
dad's
_______
.
It
hurt
so
badly
that
it
was
_______for
her
to
talk.
My
parents
came
home
late
that
night.
bandage
shoulder
diffcult
Para.1
Introduction
climax
ending
Para4
had
no
birthday
presents
no
spider-man
movie
no
picnic
in
the
yard
Para.2-3
development
para.5
happy?
excited?
shouted
at…begged
…ran
into…sat
on…
thinking…
My
mother
was
ill
and
be
scheduled
to
have
a
biopsy
on
my
birthday
What
is
the
little
child's
feeling?
angry
angry;
sad;
miserable;
confused
I
was
sent
to
neighbour's
house
no
any
present
upset;
disappointed;
sense
of
loss
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box.
_
she
pulled
out
a
box
?
it
was
not
cancer
para.7
shocked?
guilty?
happy?
A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
A:
actions
动作的丰富性
F:
feelings
情感表达的多样性
S:
surroundings
恰当运用环境描写
Writing
A:
用动作的描写来表达人物的情感
angry
I
shouted
at
her
and
everyone
else,
too.
I
even
shouted
at
the
dog.原文中的表达
He
stamped
his
foot
in
anger
His
face
was
red
with
anger
He
opened
his
eyes
angrily,
the
veins
in
his
forehead
bulging
with
the
roar
of
his
breath.
他怒睁着眼,额角的青筋随着呼呼的粗气一鼓一张。
burst
with
anger
surprise
He
was
so
surprised
that
he
stood
there
with
his
mouth
open.
ashamed
ashamed
of
what
he
had
done,
he
was
about
to
turn
away
regretful
feelings
Having
regretted
what
he
had
done
,
he
couldn’t
hold
back
his
tears
,bent
down
and
burst
out
crying
with
his
head
buried
in
his
hands.
他对自己所做的事感到羞愧，打算转身离开
他对自己的所作所为感到后悔，忍不住流下了眼泪，弯下腰，双手捂着头痛哭起来。
moved
Tears
welling
up
in
my
eyes,
I
hugged
my
mother
tightly
and
put
my
head
against
her
shoulder,
sobbing
and
saying…
Description
Description
The
smile
on
her
face
shone
like
a
diamond.
Description
?I
was
wild
with
joy.
Description
Her
flushed
face
was
shining
with
excitement.
Description
?I
was
pleased
beyond
description.
happy
F:
情感表达的多样性
my
feelings
Why…
?
Everyone
gets
diseases
Why…
?
"I
hate
you!"
"This
isn't
fair"
…
shouted
at…
run
into…crying…
actions
words
thoughts
The
sound
of
the
stream
sounded
relaxing,
which
relieved
Jane's
anxiety.
S:
恰当运用环境描写
1
2
environmental
description
Stepping
out
of
the
office,
we
felt
a
sense
of
relief
with
the
sun
shining
down
over
us.
They
hugged
each
other
tightly
in
the
warm
light
of
the
setting
sun.
A
ray
of
sunlight
shines
through
the
dark
clouds,
bringing
warmth
and
hope
to
the
world.
Seeing
the
moon
shining
in
the
dark
sky,
he
couldn't
help
thinking
of
the
days
that
she
spent
with
his
family.
The
cold
wind
blew
violately
in
the
gloomy
air.
10
key
words
mom;
neck;
angry;
cry;
forgive;
Deep
down;
birthday
present;
fair
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box.
have
a
try
这篇作文再写一次
A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box
My
mother
slowly
handed
me
my
birthday
present
and
said
with
a
smile
:“Happy
birthday
!
my
dear
son.
”
妈妈慢慢地递给我生日礼物，笑着说:“生日快乐!”我亲爱的儿子”
I
couldn't
wait
to
open
the
box,
pleased
beyond
description.
我迫不及待地打开盒子，高兴得无法形容。
一个期待已久的蜘蛛侠玩具出现在我面前。
A
toy
of
spider-man
appeared
in
front
of
me,
which
I
was
expecting
for
a
long
time.
我紧紧地抱住她说:“谢谢妈妈，我爱你!”我还以为你忘了我的生日呢!”
I
hugged
her
tightly
,
saying:“thank
you
mom,
I
love
you!
I
thought
you
forgot
my
birthday!”
The
whole
family
was
immersed
in
the
warm
atmosphere.
全家人都沉浸在温暖的气氛中。
A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
“What?
cancer?”
I
was
so
surprised
that
I
stood
there
with
my
mouth
open.
“什么?癌症吗?我惊呆了，目瞪口呆地站在那里。
I
was
flooded
in
the
shame.
我感到羞愧难当。
妈妈病得这么重，我却因为她没有在我生日那天陪我看电影和野餐而生气。
Mom
got
terribly
serious
desease
.
However,
I
was
angry
that
she
didn't
go
to
the
movieand
picnic
with
me
on
my
birthday.
我紧紧地抱住妈妈，把头靠在她的肩上，泣不成声地说:“妈妈，请您原谅我!”
Tears
welling
up
in
my
eyes,
I
hugged
my
mother
tightly
and
put
my
head
against
her
shoulder,
sobbing
and
saying
“Mom,
please
forgive
me!
I'm
sorry
to
be
angry
with
you!
It
isn't
fair
for
you!”
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box,
slowly
handed
me
my
birthday
present
and
said
with
a
smile
:“Happy
birthday
!
my
dear
son.
”I
couldn't
wait
to
open
the
box,
pleased
beyond
description.A
toy
of
spider-man
appeared
in
front
of
me,
which
I
was
expecting
for
a
long
time.
I
hugged
her
tightly
,
saying:“Thank
you
mom,
I
love
you!
I
thought
you
forgot
my
birthday!”
The
whole
family
was
immersed
in
the
warm
atmosphere.(第一段)
A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
“What?
cancer?”
I
was
so
surprised
that
I
stood
there
with
my
mouth
open.
I
was
flooded
in
the
shame
,
thinking
“
Mom
got
terribly
serious
desease.
However,
I
was
angry
that
she
didn't
go
to
the
movie
and
picnic
with
me
on
my
birthday.”
Tears
welling
up
in
my
eyes,
I
hugged
my
mother
tightly
and
put
my
head
against
her
shoulder,
sobbing
and
saying
“Mom,
please
forgive
me!
I'm
sorry
to
be
angry
with
you!
It
isn't
fair
for
you!”（第二段）
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box,
slowly
handed
me
my
birthday
present
and
said
with
a
smile
:“Happy
birthday
!
my
dear
son.
”I
couldn't
wait
to
open
the
box,
pleased
beyond
description.A
toy
of
spider-man
appeared
in
front
of
me,
which
I
was
expecting
for
a
long
time.
I
hugged
her
tightly
,
saying:“Thank
you
mom,
I
love
you!
I
thought
you
forgot
my
birthday!”
The
whole
family
was
immersed
in
the
warm
atmosphere.
A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
“What?
cancer?”
I
was
so
surprised
that
I
stood
there
with
my
mouth
open.
I
was
flooded
in
the
shame
,
thinking
“
Mom
got
terribly
serious
desease.
However,
I
was
angry
that
she
didn't
go
to
the
movie
and
picnic
with
me
on
my
birthday.”
Tears
welling
up
in
my
eyes,
I
hugged
my
mother
tightly
and
put
my
head
against
her
shoulder,
sobbing
and
saying
“Mom,
please
forgive
me!
I'm
sorry
to
be
angry
with
you!
It
isn't
fair
for
you!”
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box.
_
她用颤抖的手把它递给我。显然，她很虚弱。这是我的生日礼物——一个蜘蛛侠玩具。
She
handed
it
to
me
with
her
shaking
hands.
Obviously,
she
was
weak.
It
was
my
birthday
present——
a
toy
of
spider-man.
“对不起，没有包装。”她低声说。“我们没有时间去买电池，不过我很快就会去买的。”
“I
am
sorry,
it's
not
wrapped,”
she
said
in
a
very
low
voice.
“And
we
didn't
have
time
to
get
batteries,
but
I'll
get
some
soon.”
“谢谢你，”我说。这就是我能说的。我心里还是有点生气。
“Thank
you,”
I
said.
That
was
all
I
could
say.
I
still
felt
a
little
angry
in
my
heart.
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A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
Cancer!
I
was
numb
with
shock.
I
had
never
thought
Mom
have
got
cancer.
癌症!我吓呆了。我从没想过妈妈会得癌症。
一想到我就快失去她了，我就害怕，我有多自私，尽管我知道她没事。
It's
scary
to
think
how
close
I
was
to
losing
her
how
selfish
I
had
been,
even
though
I
knew
she
was
all
right.
我的话对她的伤害肯定比疾病更大。
My
words
must
have
hurt
her
more
bitterly
than
the
disease.
“妈妈，请原谅我!”我再也抑制不住眼泪，扑进她的怀里。
“Mom,
please
forgive
me!”.
I
could
no
longer
hold
back
my
tears
and
threw
myself
into
her
arms.
Later
that
night,
Mom
asked
me
to
get
into
her
room
and
she
pulled
out
a
box.She
handed
it
to
me
with
her
shaking
hands.
Obviously,
she
was
weak.
It
was
my
birthday
present——
a
toy
of
spider-man.“I
am
sorry,
it's
not
wrapped,”
she
said
in
a
very
low
voice.
“And
we
didn't
have
time
to
get
batteries,
but
I'll
get
some
soon.”
“Thank
you,”
I
said.
That
was
all
I
could
say.
I
still
felt
a
little
angry
in
my
heart.
A
week
later
when
Mom
got
the
test
result,
she
hugged
me
tightly
and
said,
“Thank
God,
it
was
not
cancer(癌症)！”
Cancer!
I
was
numb
with
shock.
I
had
never
thought
Mom
have
got
cancer.
It's
scary
to
think
how
close
I
was
to
losing
her
how
selfish
I
had
been,
even
though
I
knew
she
was
all
right.
My
words
must
have
hurt
her
more
bitterly
than
the
disease.“
Mom,
please
forgive
me!”.
I
could
no
longer
hold
back
my
tears
and
threw
myself
into
her
arms.
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