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读后续写真题
2016年10月浙江卷:吵架出走迷路
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试题再现
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试题分析
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写作思路
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范文赏析
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CONTENTS
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试题再现
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。(2016年10月浙江高考试题)
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned
示例
around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could
hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1：
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. _______________________________________
_____________________________________________
Paragraph 2：
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _____________
_____________________________________________
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试题分析
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
原文分析
夫妻吵架，可能跟寻找野营地点意见不一致有关。
Jane吵架出走，迷路了。
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
原文分析
情绪描写
心里描写
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
原文分析
Jane的自救
Jane想寻找回去的办法。
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
原文分析
直升机出现
Jane想到有可能吸引直升机的办法。
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写作思路
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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句子润色
1. 一片漆黑立刻笼罩了整个森林。
Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest.
ruled the forest
句子润色
2. 简，精疲力竭，害怕，躺在一块石头旁边，想念她遥远的家人。
Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance.
exhausted and scared
注意非谓语动词的用法
句子润色
3. 所有美好的回忆涌上心头，她忍不住哭了起来：“如果不是我和汤姆吵架，走开，爬到高处，我就不会被困在这个可怕的地方，面对死亡的危险。”
All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “if I hadn’t quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying.”
All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying.”
memory crowded in
confronted with the danger of dying
虚拟语气的倒装
句子润色
4. 她后悔万分，醒着，眼睛里噙着晶莹的泪水。
She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
regretted with endless anxiety
with shining tears in her eyes
句子润色
5. 尽管她很虚弱，她还是挣扎着站起来，继续寻求帮助。
Although she was weak, she continued to search for assistance.
Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance.
struggled to her feet
search for assistance
句式升级
句子润色
6. 令她非常高兴的是，一架直升飞机一次又一次地从头顶飞过。
To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again.
To her great joy
Fly overhead
课前检测：
1. On _________(see) me, he gave such a start of surprise that he dropped all the things in his hand.
2. He was so surprised ____he stood there ____ his mouth open.
3. Maybe _______ (ashame) of what he had done, he was about to turn away _____ I seized his arm quickly.
4. I stared____ him for several seconds and broke the silence, _________(say) “Roy, trust me. I am willing to help you.”
5. _______________ (regret) what he had done, he couldn’t hold back his tears, bent down and burst out ________(cry) with his head buried in his hands.
seeing
that
with
ashamed
when
at
saying
Having regretted
crying
6. _________ (feel) a sense of relief, Roy can’t wait __________ (apologize) to our teacher for his behavior.
7. In front of the office, he hesitated ____________ (knock) at the door.
8. __________(encourage) by me, he eventually made it.
9. Roy pulled out the money and handed it to the teacher, ____________ (apologize) for his behavior.
10. Once your outgoing personality left a deep impression _____ us.
11. You are blessed _____ such a good friend.
12. _________(step)out of the office, we felt a sense of relief with the sun ___________ (shine) down over us.
Feeling
to apologize
to knock
Encouraged
apologizing
on
with
Stepping
shining
Read
步骤？
Think
Write
1) 5W1H
2) organization
3) language
关键词
开头语
Predict the plot properly
1) Actions动作
2) Feelings情感
3) Surroundings环境
Get the main idea
读线索5W1H
content who
when
where
what
Why
Jane was lost
they quarreled
Jane, Tom
one weekend in July
in the forest
main idea
On weekend in July, Jane was lost in the forest because she had quarreled with Tom.
In what order is the material developed
One weekend in July, ……
As night was beginning to fall, ……
Jane rose at the break of the day, ……
But …… and it was getting dark again.
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
Time
读结构
With no path to follow, Jane……with复合结构
……, she turned around, hoping to ……分词作状语
Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that ……
Jane rose……, hungry and thirsty. 形容词作状语
If only she had not left her mobile phone …… 固定句式
Never in her life had she tasted anything better. 倒装
读语言
Beginning
Climax
Ending
quarrel
angry
saw helicopters
was rescued
process
lost
confused，tired
构思
Para. 1: But no more helicopters came and it was dark.
续写部分: 简当时的感受？
简是如何过夜的？
简睡着了吗？
Para. 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
续写部分：简获救了吗？
谁救了简？
怎么救的？
她当时的感受？
Paragraph 1 ：
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
_______________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2 ：
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
_______________________________________________________________________
原文分析
根据下面的推断， 本段应该是Jane肚子在森林里度过，根据前文， 本段侧重于Jane的内心描写。
表明上一段Jane在森林里又独自度过了一天。
本段应该是Jane如何被救，根据前文， 可能直升机又来了。
Paragraph 1
Paragraph 1 ：
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
Jane lay down near a stone.
She reminded her husband’s good deed.
She missed Tom.
She regrated to quarrel with Tom.
Paragraph 2
Paragraph 2 ：
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
helicopter was flying overhead again.
she flagged her yellow blouse.
she was eventually noticed.
It was her husband,they agreed never to quarrel again.
A: actions 动作的丰富性
F: feelings 情感表达的多样性
S: surroundings 恰当运用环境描写
Write
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范文赏析
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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续写赏析
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family at a distance. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
注意连接词以及短语的使用。
续写赏析
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the helicopter.
注意倒装句的亮点句型的使用。
续写赏析
There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
注意结尾的升华表达。
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