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It was time to go home. “Remember to work on your class speeches for homework,” Miss Walker called as everyone started talking and packing their school bags. Jenny felt sick. She hated having to read aloud in class. She was sure everyone got really bored listening to her. Once, when Jenny was reading out her holiday diary, Lee was even looking at his watch, a silver and blue one which seemed just magical. Jenny watched Lee walk ahead of her as they left school. He seemed so clever, and he had a certain sort of shining confidence. He was just one of those people who were good at everything. Jenny sighed. As she turned the comer, she saw Lee’s watch lying right in the middle of the path.
Jenny knew she should just pick it up and return it to him, but she didn’t want to run after him. Jenny bent down quickly, picked up the watch and ran home. On arriving home, Jenny put it on almost without thinking. She was surprised it fitted so well. She walked to the mirror and started practicing her speech. Words just flooded out of her. “I’m going to talk about swimming. I have been lucky. I’ve won lots of competitions. But when I’m in a race, I’m not really thinking about winning. I’m just loving the feeling of being in the water…” Jenny laughed with excitement. She walked across the room. She suddenly
seemed to have a certain sort of confidence. Turning back to the mirror, Jenny saw a flash of light from the watch in the glass. The flashes of silver seemed almost magical. So maybe Lee’s watch really DID have something magic about it.
The next day, as the lesson began, Miss Walker asked who was going to be brave and go first. Nobody moved. Jenny slowly raised her arm. Before Miss Walker could say anything, there was a shout from behind. “She’s stolen my watch!” Lee said angrily, “It went missing at school yesterday.”
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Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny, waiting for an explanation.
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Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first.
文章剧情主线： 补充细节描写： 文章润色：
1. 人与人 1. 动作描写 1. 主被动句式
2. 人与自然 2. 表情描写 2. 从句的使用
3. 人与社会 3. 对话描写 3. 非谓语动词
4. 人与自我 4. 环境描写 4. 特殊句式
5. 高级词汇
人物：Jenny, Miss Walker, Lee
道具：a watch
主题：confidence, encourage, trust
Paragraph 1:
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny, waiting for an explanation.
尴尬/紧张+Jenny否认偷表→老师出面调节→Jenny要求先演讲再解释真相
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Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first.
Jenny走上讲台(紧张/害怕)→老师鼓励的目光→自信的说→赢得掌声→还表、说
真相→Lee道歉并鼓励Jenny
Paragraph 1:
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny, waiting for an explanation.
尴 尬/紧张+Jenny否认偷表→老师出面调节→Jenny要求先演讲再解释真相
Everybody was fixing their eyes on Jenny, waiting for an explanation. Embarrassed as she was, Jenny said nothing. Dead silence suddenly fell. Then came Miss Walker’s voice, “What if Jenny picked up your lost watch I am sure no one in our class would steal things from others.” Hearing the warm words, Jenny felt relieved and encouraged. “Miss Walker, can I give my speech first and explain about the watch ”
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Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first.
Jenny走上讲台(紧张/害怕)→老师鼓励的目光→自信的说→赢得掌声→还表、说
真 相→Lee道歉并鼓励Jenny
Miss Walker smiled and asked the class to listen to Jenny’s speech first. Inspired by the encouragement and trust, Jenny made her way to the platform confidently and courageously. Words began to flood out of her, “I am going to talk about swimming…”. Such a splendid speech did Jenny make that a storm of applause erupted from the class. Jenny then told the truth, especially the magic of this shining watch. “I am sorry. I apologize for my rude words to you. But I think it is not the watch but you yourself that have the magic of confidence.” Tears misted her eyes.

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