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专题20 读后续写10:人与动物类（解析版）
从历年高考的读后续写话题中可以看出人和动物的话题备受命题者青睐。试题文本一般从两个角度展开，一个就是人和动物和谐相处, 要么是人类帮助动物解决问题，要么是动物帮助人类解决问题；另外一个就是，人类与动物产生冲突，尤其遇到勇猛高大的动物，遇到危险，首先沉着冷静与动物周旋，后来向别人求助，之后成功脱险的故事。例如：人狼大战：骑车旅途遭遇狼wolf追赶，脱险经历（2017年6月浙江高考）；人熊大战：北极探险者给北极熊拍照，遭遇polar bear追赶的惊险经历（2020年6 月浙江高考）；人狗和谐：父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴，帮助Poppy摆脱孤独和想念的故事（2020年1月浙江高考）。
思维导图
套路一：可爱型动物故事情节
可爱型动物，如狗，鸟等，主要构思陪伴、忠诚，或者人救助动物生命，动物（主要是狗）救人的生命等故事情节。
They were glad to see Poppy coming back to her usual self（他们很高兴看到Poppy又回到以前的自己）, guiding the little dog on daily walks and even introducing to it her favorite toys.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）
Smiling ever so bright（笑得更加灿烂。）, he called out to his parents, who tugged him in for a long hug. （2020年1月高考浙江卷）
Her parents watched them playing around and smiled with relief（轻松地笑了）–Poppy was back to her old cheerful self!（2020年1月高考浙江卷）
外貌
1. a pair of large watery eyes 一双水汪汪的大眼睛
2. two big round eyes 两只圆溜溜的大眼睛
3. beady/sparkling/twinkling eyes 小珠般圆亮的/亮晶晶的/闪闪发亮的 眼睛
4. a nose like a small black gem 一颗黑宝石般的鼻子
5. long/muscular/skinny/spindly legs 长的/肌肉发达的/皮包骨的/干瘦的 腿
6. fur is as white as snow 皮毛像雪一样洁白
7. a long little tail 一条长长的小尾巴
动作
wag the tail 摇尾巴
smell/sniff 嗅
bark/yap/yelp 狗吠
lick 舔
put the ears up 把耳朵竖起来
shake the whole body 抖动全身
bite the corner of the coat 咬住衣角
rub their necks and backs with their paws 用爪子摩擦它们的脖子和背部
hold it tightly with the paws 用爪子紧紧按住
fall on its back 摔得四脚朝天
run around me 围着我跑
keep scratching you with his front paws 用前爪不停挠你
raise its whole body on its hind legs 用后腿支起全身
leap to its feet 跳起来
rest the nose in its paws 把鼻子搁在爪子里
keep its fore legs doubled up 保持前腿弯曲
套路二：凶猛型动物故事情节
凶猛的动物，如狼、熊等，一般会给人造成生命威胁，所以主要是以遇险、脱险的故事情节为主。
1、害怕
Terrified（非常害怕）, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. （2020.7高考浙江卷）
Seeing the approach of the polar bear, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch（被恐惧吓呆，害怕到动也不能动）.（2020.7高考浙江卷）
My wife Elli grasped my clothes and trembled, swallowing hard（抓住我的衣服，颤抖着，使劲吞口水）.（2020.7高考浙江卷）
A numbing chill gripped me（一种麻木的寒战擢紧了我）.（2020.11金华十校）
Thinking of the wolf’s bloody mouth, Mac was nearly dead with fright（几乎给吓死） （2017年6月高考浙江卷）
I was seized by a strong sense of horror（被一种强烈的恐惧感所控制）, my palms sweating.（山东省青岛市2020年4月高三模考）
2、求助与获救
1. At the sight of it, Elli waved her hands wildly（疯狂地挥手）, screaming, “Help!” （2020.7高考浙江卷）
2. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot （惊奇地发现）that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. （2020.7高考浙江卷）
3. Having pulled the massive body out of the stump, Brian cleaned the wounds （清洁伤口）and then gave him careful treatment. Becky knelt down and tended to the wolf（蹲下来照顾狼）together with Brian. （2020.11金华十校）
4. I went near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy（擦干小狗） till he had become dry. （山东模拟）
5. Using a rock as the supporting point, I unlocked the chain and set the wolf free（放走这只狼）. （山东省青岛市2020年4月高三模考）
套路三：主题升华设计
可爱型动物主题：陪伴、珍爱生命、自然和谐、忠诚等。
凶猛型动物主题：难忘的经历、获得教训、感谢他人救助等。
1. Elli and I learned our lesson（学到一个教训）: Be aware of a bear with a toothache.（2020.7高考浙江卷）
2. Despite the chill autumn wind, their home was filled with the warmth of love and reunion（充满爱和团聚的温暖）.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）
3. The rain that came that day was a miracle（那天下的雨是一场奇迹）, saving our farm, just like my boy saved a life.（202103宁波十校）
4. Appearing to be feeling better, the wolf slowly raised his head and gave a gentle kiss to Becky’s hand as if to express thanks（好像在表达感谢）. What a warm scene! （2020.11金华十校）
真题演练
【2020年1月浙江卷】小狗找到新的玩伴
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it.” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit, Poppy didn’t.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried, “What should we do to cheer Poppy up ” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy
welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on
it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【读后续写解析】
本语篇写了男孩要去上大学，和自己的狗Poppy道别。而没有了男孩在家里，Poppy非常想念男孩，于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买条小狗做伴。符合我们的困境类（发现问题--解决问题--结尾升华，也可以不升华）的框架式写作，男孩要去上大学，Poppy非常想念男孩，（问题），男孩父母决定给Poppy买条小狗做伴（解决问题），续写结尾应该写男孩回到家以后看到两条狗的反应，以及父母告诉男孩这条狗是买给Poppy的（如果升华，可以适当写人类有责任关爱动物）。
[高频词汇，不需要记太多，管用够用即可。]
问题触发后的语料：（本文的问题冲突为如何帮助Phillips）
环境描写：Everyone was beside me. （共患难）
动作描写：Seeing this, I suddenly realized that she was very lonely... （突出细节）
表情描写： Her face turned pale with loneliness. (细节+动作)
动作描写：She wagged her tail. (动物有尾巴，就需要摇一摇)
外在描写：The dog/pup has golden fur. (狗/小狗长着金色的皮毛)
动作描写： Put the ears up (竖起耳朵)
Bite the corner of the coat (咬衣服)
Hold it tightly with paws (用爪子抓东西)
Fall / roll on its back (四爪朝天)
Leap to one’s feet (跳了起来)
Rub their necks and backs with paws (用爪子摩擦脖子和后背)
解决问题语料:
表情描写： My face lit up. （表达高兴）
动物描写： bark with joy （表达高兴）
动作描写： I walk up to her, and hug her tightly with tears rolling down her cheeks. (拥抱)
动作描写： On doing.... (高频句型 “一……就……”)
环境描写：Everything went amazingly. (事情进展一切顺利)
动作描写: lie / roll on the ground (躺在地上)
Jump / go happily around you (围着你跳)
脱困后的感悟语料:（解决问题后感动相拥）
表达感动： I was moved to tears. / smiled gratefully (苦笑皆可感动)
动作描写： I hugged him tightly with moved tears rolling in the eyes. (拥抱不能少)
Lick my face (擅长舔脸)
表情描写：the look of shock on the face (震惊，惊讶)
结尾升华： We should take care of the animal.
【参考范文：】
Paragraph 1：
Dad put the box on the ground and opened the top. A shiny little wet nose popped up. Then two soft paws. Next the box tipped over sideways, and a cute creature came out and rolled on the ground. Poppy was amazed. She wagged the tail. She barked with joy. She smiled, her tongue rolling out as I walked up to the pup. The little pup was not shy and immediately starting jumping around the older dog. “That didn’t take long,” remarked Mom, as both dogs went happily around the house in a pleasant game of chase. Dad laughed.
Paragraph 2：
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had missed Poppy and was looking forward to seeing her. When he bent down and hugged her tightly, he fell over in surprise as a small golden pup came up to lick his face too. “Oh my gosh, who is this ” he said surprisingly. His parents laughed at the look of shock on his face. “That’s Pee-wee.” said Dad. “I can’t believe you got yourself a puppy!” “We didn’t!” replied Mom, “This puppy is for Poppy!” As humans, we should also take care of the animal’s loneliness.
【2017年6月浙江卷】骑行遇狼遇险
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of hear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶）.
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to show down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1：
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
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Paragraph 2：
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
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【读后续写解析】
故事情节完整紧凑合理，讲述了Paul and Becky尽管赤手空拳，仍然靠近那只狼，勇敢地与狼搏斗，狼
看到人多而感到害怕最终迅速逃跑。
符合我们的困境类（陷入困境--脱离困境的办法--脱困后结尾升华，也可以不升华）的框架式写作。
[高频词汇，不需要记太多，管用够用即可。]
问题触发后的语料：（本文的问题冲突为如何摆脱狼的追赶）
动作描写：She wagged her tail. (动物有尾巴，就需要摇一摇)
Give help immediately (伸出援手)
Approach the danger bravely (勇敢面对危险)
found the dangerous situation, where ... (发现危险处境)
外在描写：The dog/pup has golden fur. (狗/小狗长着金色的皮毛)
动作描写： Put the ears up (竖起耳朵)
Bite the corner of the coat (咬衣服)
Hold it tightly with paws (用爪子抓东西)
Fall / roll on its back (四爪朝天)
Leap to one’s feet (跳了起来)
Rub their necks and backs with paws (用爪子摩擦脖子和后背)
Shout loudly at sb (朝某人大喊大叫)
Take out the weapon （拿出武器）
Jump off the bike (跳车)
解决问题语料:
表情描写： My face lit up. （表达高兴）
动作描写： I walk up to her, and hug her tightly with tears rolling down her cheeks. (拥抱)
Fight bravely with the wolf / fight against the wolf (与狼搏斗)
动作描写： On doing.... (高频句型 “一……就……”)
动作描写: lie / roll on the ground (躺在地上)
might feel the threats from the people, starting to withdraw. (被打败就会逃跑的动物)
Disappeared in the distance (逐渐消失在视野)
脱困后的感悟语料:（解决问题后感动相拥）
表达感动： I was moved to tears. / smiled gratefully (苦笑皆可感动)
动作描写： I hugged him tightly with moved tears rolling in the eyes. (拥抱不能少)
Lick my face (擅长舔脸)
表情描写：the look of shock on the face (震惊，惊讶)
【参考范文：】
Paragraph 1：
The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Paul and Becky got out of the car immediately to give help. But with the bare hands, they didn’t dare to fight with the wolf. However, they still approached the wolf bravely. At the same time, the wolf also noticed them and fiercely turned its head back, shouting loudly at Paul and Becky. Mac then jumped off the bicycle and was ready to fight against the wolf. That reached deadlock.
Paragraph 2：
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They found the dangerous situation, where three men circled the wolf. Mac’s friends also jumped off their bicycles and joined the fight with the wolf. More and more cars stopped. Some drivers took out the sticks from the cars, and some took out the knives, even the guns towards the wolf. Just at that time, the wolf might feel the threats from the people, starting to withdraw. Soon, it ran away off the road and swiftly disappeared in the distance.
【2020年7月浙江卷】拍照北极熊遇险
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1:
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ___________________
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Para 2:
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. _____________________________
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Para 1:
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn’t long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
Para 2:
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. “Thank goodness we are saved!” Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene — we were robbed by a polar bear!
几分钟后，这只熊回到了我们的营地。然后我们意识到，浪花只是更激怒了他，因为这次他似乎更凶狠了，而且像疯了一样猛烈地推了推篱笆。我的心狂狂，不知道该怎么办。在这个关键时刻，埃利抓起几块蒜蓉面包，扔过了栅栏。它已经成功了！熊阻止了进攻，跑到面包边。但没过多久，他就吃完了所有的面包，又回来了。
就在那一刻，直升机来了。“谢天谢地，我们得救了！”埃莉喊道。直升机一降落，我们很快就上了飞机，兴奋而松了一口气。当我们安全地坐在直升机上时，我惊讶地发现这只熊终于撕掉了栅栏，向我们留下的食物跑去。我迅速拿出相机，拍摄了这个罕见的场景，我们被一只北极熊抢劫了！
模拟演练
例1：人与麻雀
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It's getting hot. It's time to put on lighter clothes and open up the windows. I can't wait to do so. Yesterday, an unforeseen visit to the kitchen happened during the brief time we were out. Two daring sparrows (麻雀) had risked landing on our territory to enjoy the freshness in our sink and some other breadcrumbs (面包屑) on our kitchen counter.
Actually, sparrows are everywhere. The tiny, gray -and brown birds are found on every continent except Antarctica, flying or jumping around cities, picking up leftover food on side-walks, and sometimes chasing with native bird species. These small creatures have adapted to living alongside humans- similar to pet dogs.
When you come across such sudden callers, you are likely to sense it as an unwanted visitor into your comfort zone, or you might receive it as a lovely angel of life. I chose the second option, with no hesitation while my husband preferred driving them away. After all, I've never come to stop to feel the relationship with sparrows.
I recalled when I was a little girl living in the city, I lived in an apartment with a flat roof viewed from our kitchen window. Every day my mom and I would go out to feed the sparrows. She taught me how to call them with a clicking sound she made with her tongue. I have loved sparrows ever since. So every day in my spare time, I can't stop observing and celebrating their dance from our window. I stuffed them with the leftovers on our tablecloth after every meal. And I have provided them with every kind of bases and stands of our house.
Undoubtedly, they feel at ease in our backyard. And that has led them to gather up courage and slide into our kitchen, bedroom or even reading room. Perhaps because they have the feeling that we don' t consider them trouble makers, but friendly neighbors. But I am slightly worried about their droppings (粪便).
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
One day, they left some droppings in my husband's reading room.
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About two weeks later, I heard my husband calling “Oh, my God!”
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【答案】One day, they left some droppings in my husband 's reading room. They happened to dirty his important work reports on the desk. He was so angry that he asked me to close the windows. I immediately did a thorough cleaning and promised that the doors and windows of the reading room will be closed tightly, and the sparrows can't break in again. My husband kept silent, and at last he calmed down. I know he is a caring person, who always loves animals.
About two weeks later, I heard my husband calling “Oh, my God !” Thinking something similar happened again, I ran over to have a look. He was looking out of the window and said excitedly, “Look! What a surprise! There are three eggs in the sparrow's nest! They 're going to have babies of their own!” He was happy, like a child and unconsciously opened the closed window. After that, there are always breadcrumbs on the window platform of the reading room.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，在作者生活之处有许多麻雀，作者欢迎它们的到来，在后院为它们准备了食物和落脚处，作者将它们当成了友好的邻居，只是有点担心它们的粪便。
【详解】续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：有一天，它们在我丈夫的书房里留下了一些粪便，所以应该写粪便落在书桌上给丈夫带来的尴尬和懊恼，要详细描述丈夫的动作和心理，与作者的反应及应对措施等。第二段开头是：大约两周后，我听到我丈夫说:“哦，天哪!”本段应该写丈夫的感叹、作者的好奇，并描述事情的原委，以及丈夫对于麻雀态度的转变等等。要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：do a thorough cleaning，break in，run over，have a look等高级词汇；结果状语从句，如He was so angry that he asked me to close the windows；宾语从句，如I immediately did a thorough cleaning and promised that the doors and windows of the reading room will be closed tightly, and the sparrows can't break in again；定语从句，如I know he is a caring person, who always loves animals等高级句式。
例2：人与狗
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Many years ago, I had a friend named Jonathan who lived only a few houses down the street. He was a cool kid and a real friend and in retrospect (回想) I can see he had all the usual qualities and hang-ups of a typical boy. He was fun to be with because of his innocent enthusiasm, and he knew all the best places to hang out in the neighborhood.
The best part about Jonathan, though, was his dog. This is not to say that my friend was any less memorable than his pet, but that dog had a very special quality. A friendly Labrador that never met anyone he didn’t like, or immediately want to lick, Bowzer was born without any vocal chords (声带). He simply couldn’t bark though he behaved just like any other dog.
Even though he couldn’t make any sounds, Bowzer surely made his presence known anyway. We couldn’t play a pickup baseball game in the neighborhood park without an extra infielder, outfielder, base runner, or bellboy running around on four paws. It looked like his life depended on bumping into every single player on the field, regardless of which team that player played on. For all of us, it became an accepted part of our playtime that Bowzer would somehow be involved in whatever activity we decided on.
Then, one day, something terrible happened to Jonathan. His parents were called away to the hospital because his grandmother was ill, and so Jonathan was left at home by himself. Two men had chosen that house for an unannounced visit.
Jonathan was in his bedroom and heard the noise from the break-in, and because of panic, he didn’t scream for help. Bowzer was in the bedroom, and heard the noise as well, but because of his birth defect (缺陷), he couldn’t make a sound. As Jonathan read a book, the robbers made their way through the entire house and probably figured that no one was home.
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1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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One of the robbers opened the door to Jonathan’s bedroom, and was frightened to find a boy in the bed.
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Luckily, Jonathan survived that horrific gunshot without any physical injuries, and he loved his dog more afterwards.
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【读后续写解析】
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的朋友Jonathan有一只名叫Bowzer的狗，但是他生来就没有声带。有一天，乔纳森一个人留在家里。有两个强盗来到他家。一个强盗发现床上有个男孩（险境），乔纳森在那场可怕的枪击中幸存了下来，没有任何身体上的伤害，（脱困）狗狗身上有伤，可知续写部分借助Bowzer的力量（解决问题），最后结尾升华，人与动物的默契和爱。
[高频词汇，不需要记太多，管用够用即可。]
问题触发后的语料：（本文的问题冲突为如何帮助Phillips）
环境描写：Everyone was beside me. （共患难）
心理描写：I was frightened to see this.
动作描写：Seeing this, I suddenly realized that she was very lonely... （突出细节）
表情描写： Her face turned pale with loneliness. (细节+动作)
动作描写：She wagged her tail. (动物有尾巴，就需要摇一摇)
动物描写： bark with anger (愤怒地大叫)
外在描写：The dog/pup has golden fur. (狗/小狗长着金色的皮毛)
动作描写： Put the ears up (竖起耳朵)
take a big bite out of someone (咬某人)
Hold it tightly with paws (用爪子抓东西)
Fall / roll on its back (四爪朝天)
Leap to one’s feet (跳了起来)
Rub their necks and backs with paws (用爪子摩擦脖子和后背)
解决问题语料:
表情描写： My face lit up. （表达高兴）
动物描写： bark with joy （表达高兴）
动作描写： I walk up to her, and hug her tightly with tears rolling down her cheeks. (拥抱)
动作描写： On doing.... (高频句型 “一……就……”)
环境描写：Everything went amazingly. (事情进展一切顺利)
动作描写: lie / roll on the ground (躺在地上)
Jump / go happily around you (围着你跳)
chew on one’s arm/bite on one’s arm （咬住胳膊)
shout in pain/scream painfully （痛苦大叫)
respond swiftly/responsive （反应迅速)
arrest/take into custody （逮捕)
go through/shot through （射穿)
语言描写： Shout in pain （痛苦地大喊）
脱困后的感悟语料:（解决问题后感动相拥）
表达感动： I was moved to tears. / smiled gratefully (苦笑皆可感动)
动作描写： I hugged him tightly with moved tears rolling in the eyes. (拥抱不能少)
Lick my face (擅长舔脸)
Protect his master in his own way (狗的忠诚，保护主人)
Hang out with the dog a lot (带狗出去玩)
表情描写：the look of shock on the face (震惊，惊讶)
脱困后的感悟语料:
结尾升华： We should take care of the animal. （照料好动物）
Take the dog wherever he goes. (形影不离)
【参考范文：】
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One of the robbers opened the door to Jonathan’s bedroom, and was frightened to find a boy in the bed. The robber was even more frightened to discover a fifty-pound Labrador flying at him. Bowzer couldn’t bark, but that didn’t mean he did not have teeth or that he did not intend to take a big bite out of that robber. With an angry dog chewing on his arm, the robber began shouting in pain. The second robber suddenly appeared, and that’s when Jonathan saw the gun. The last thing he remembers is hearing one gunshot.
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Luckily, Jonathan survived that horrific gunshot without any physical injuries, and he loved his dog more afterwards. Bowzer protected his master in his own way. Just like on the baseball field, he responded swiftly and successfully bit the arm that held the gun. That gunshot, originally aiming at Jonathan, unfortunately went through one leg of Bowzer, causing him unable to run. Luckily, the police arrived just in time to arrest the robbers. Bowzer came to himself. Jonathan still hang out with his friends a lot, but he never leaves Bowzer at home alone. He takes him wherever he goes.专题20 读后续写10:人与动物类（解析版）
从历年高考的读后续写话题中可以看出人和动物的话题备受命题者青睐。试题文本一般从两个角度展开，一个就是人和动物和谐相处, 要么是人类帮助动物解决问题，要么是动物帮助人类解决问题；另外一个就是，人类与动物产生冲突，尤其遇到勇猛高大的动物，遇到危险，首先沉着冷静与动物周旋，后来向别人求助，之后成功脱险的故事。例如：人狼大战：骑车旅途遭遇狼wolf追赶，脱险经历（2017年6月浙江高考）；人熊大战：北极探险者给北极熊拍照，遭遇polar bear追赶的惊险经历（2020年6 月浙江高考）；人狗和谐：父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴，帮助Poppy摆脱孤独和想念的故事（2020年1月浙江高考）；人猫和谐：作者的丈夫从讨厌猫到向猫求助，赶走土拨鼠的故事（2021年3月临沂市一模）。
思维导图
套路一：可爱型动物故事情节
可爱型动物，如狗，鸟等，主要构思陪伴、忠诚，或者人救助动物生命，动物（主要是狗）救人的生命等故事情节。
They were glad to see Poppy coming back to her usual self（他们很高兴看到Poppy又回到以前的自己）, guiding the little dog on daily walks and even introducing to it her favorite toys.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）
Smiling ever so bright（笑得更加灿烂。）, he called out to his parents, who tugged him in for a long hug. （2020年1月高考浙江卷）
Her parents watched them playing around and smiled with relief（轻松地笑了）–Poppy was back to her old cheerful self!（2020年1月高考浙江卷）
外貌
1. a pair of large watery eyes 一双水汪汪的大眼睛
2. two big round eyes 两只圆溜溜的大眼睛
3. beady/sparkling/twinkling eyes 小珠般圆亮的/亮晶晶的/闪闪发亮的 眼睛
4. a nose like a small black gem 一颗黑宝石般的鼻子
5. long/muscular/skinny/spindly legs 长的/肌肉发达的/皮包骨的/干瘦的 腿
6. fur is as white as snow 皮毛像雪一样洁白
7. a long little tail 一条长长的小尾巴
动作
wag the tail 摇尾巴
smell/sniff 嗅
bark/yap/yelp 狗吠
lick 舔
put the ears up 把耳朵竖起来
shake the whole body 抖动全身
bite the corner of the coat 咬住衣角
rub their necks and backs with their paws 用爪子摩擦它们的脖子和背部
hold it tightly with the paws 用爪子紧紧按住
fall on its back 摔得四脚朝天
run around me 围着我跑
keep scratching you with his front paws 用前爪不停挠你
raise its whole body on its hind legs 用后腿支起全身
leap to its feet 跳起来
rest the nose in its paws 把鼻子搁在爪子里
keep its fore legs doubled up 保持前腿弯曲
套路二：凶猛型动物故事情节
凶猛的动物，如狼、熊等，一般会给人造成生命威胁，所以主要是以遇险、脱险的故事情节为主。
1、害怕
Terrified（非常害怕）, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. （2020.7高考浙江卷）
Seeing the approach of the polar bear, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch（被恐惧吓呆，害怕到动也不能动）.（2020.7高考浙江卷）
My wife Elli grasped my clothes and trembled, swallowing hard（抓住我的衣服，颤抖着，使劲吞口水）.（2020.7高考浙江卷）
A numbing chill gripped me（一种麻木的寒战擢紧了我）.（2020.11金华十校）
Thinking of the wolf’s bloody mouth, Mac was nearly dead with fright（几乎给吓死） （2017年6月高考浙江卷）
I was seized by a strong sense of horror（被一种强烈的恐惧感所控制）, my palms sweating.（山东省青岛市2020年4月高三模考）
2、求助与获救
1. At the sight of it, Elli waved her hands wildly（疯狂地挥手）, screaming, “Help!” （2020.7高考浙江卷）
2. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot （惊奇地发现）that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. （2020.7高考浙江卷）
3. Having pulled the massive body out of the stump, Brian cleaned the wounds （清洁伤口）and then gave him careful treatment. Becky knelt down and tended to the wolf（蹲下来照顾狼）together with Brian. （2020.11金华十校）
4. I went near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy（擦干小狗） till he had become dry. （山东模拟）
5. Using a rock as the supporting point, I unlocked the chain and set the wolf free（放走这只狼）. （山东省青岛市2020年4月高三模考）
套路三：主题升华设计
可爱型动物主题：陪伴、珍爱生命、自然和谐、忠诚等。
凶猛型动物主题：难忘的经历、获得教训、感谢他人救助等。
1. Elli and I learned our lesson（学到一个教训）: Be aware of a bear with a toothache.（2020.7高考浙江卷）
2. Despite the chill autumn wind, their home was filled with the warmth of love and reunion（充满爱和团聚的温暖）.（2020年1月高考浙江卷）
3. The rain that came that day was a miracle（那天下的雨是一场奇迹）, saving our farm, just like my boy saved a life.（202103宁波十校）
4. Appearing to be feeling better, the wolf slowly raised his head and gave a gentle kiss to Becky’s hand as if to express thanks（好像在表达感谢）. What a warm scene! （2020.11金华十校）
真题演练
【2020年1月浙江卷】小狗找到新的玩伴
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
“I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it.” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ” His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit, Poppy didn’t.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried, “What should we do to cheer Poppy up ” asked Dad. “We’ve tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy
welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box, she stopped. She put her nose on
it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【2017年6月浙江卷】骑行遇狼遇险
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of hear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶）.
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to show down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
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【2020年7月浙江卷】拍照北极熊遇险
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ___________________
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. _____________________________
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模拟演练
例1：人与麻雀
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It's getting hot. It's time to put on lighter clothes and open up the windows. I can't wait to do so. Yesterday, an unforeseen visit to the kitchen happened during the brief time we were out. Two daring sparrows (麻雀) had risked landing on our territory to enjoy the freshness in our sink and some other breadcrumbs (面包屑) on our kitchen counter.
Actually, sparrows are everywhere. The tiny, gray -and brown birds are found on every continent except Antarctica, flying or jumping around cities, picking up leftover food on side-walks, and sometimes chasing with native bird species. These small creatures have adapted to living alongside humans- similar to pet dogs.
When you come across such sudden callers, you are likely to sense it as an unwanted visitor into your comfort zone, or you might receive it as a lovely angel of life. I chose the second option, with no hesitation while my husband preferred driving them away. After all, I've never come to stop to feel the relationship with sparrows.
I recalled when I was a little girl living in the city, I lived in an apartment with a flat roof viewed from our kitchen window. Every day my mom and I would go out to feed the sparrows. She taught me how to call them with a clicking sound she made with her tongue. I have loved sparrows ever since. So every day in my spare time, I can't stop observing and celebrating their dance from our window. I stuffed them with the leftovers on our tablecloth after every meal. And I have provided them with every kind of bases and stands of our house.
Undoubtedly, they feel at ease in our backyard. And that has led them to gather up courage and slide into our kitchen, bedroom or even reading room. Perhaps because they have the feeling that we don' t consider them trouble makers, but friendly neighbors. But I am slightly worried about their droppings (粪便).
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
One day, they left some droppings in my husband's reading room.
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About two weeks later, I heard my husband calling “Oh, my God!”
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例2：人与狗
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Many years ago, I had a friend named Jonathan who lived only a few houses down the street. He was a cool kid and a real friend and in retrospect (回想) I can see he had all the usual qualities and hang-ups of a typical boy. He was fun to be with because of his innocent enthusiasm, and he knew all the best places to hang out in the neighborhood.
The best part about Jonathan, though, was his dog. This is not to say that my friend was any less memorable than his pet, but that dog had a very special quality. A friendly Labrador that never met anyone he didn’t like, or immediately want to lick, Bowzer was born without any vocal chords (声带). He simply couldn’t bark though he behaved just like any other dog.
Even though he couldn’t make any sounds, Bowzer surely made his presence known anyway. We couldn’t play a pickup baseball game in the neighborhood park without an extra infielder, outfielder, base runner, or bellboy running around on four paws. It looked like his life depended on bumping into every single player on the field, regardless of which team that player played on. For all of us, it became an accepted part of our playtime that Bowzer would somehow be involved in whatever activity we decided on.
Then, one day, something terrible happened to Jonathan. His parents were called away to the hospital because his grandmother was ill, and so Jonathan was left at home by himself. Two men had chosen that house for an unannounced visit.
Jonathan was in his bedroom and heard the noise from the break-in, and because of panic, he didn’t scream for help. Bowzer was in the bedroom, and heard the noise as well, but because of his birth defect (缺陷), he couldn’t make a sound. As Jonathan read a book, the robbers made their way through the entire house and probably figured that no one was home.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1：
One of the robbers opened the door to Jonathan’s bedroom, and was frightened to find a boy in the bed.
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Luckily, Jonathan survived that horrific gunshot without any physical injuries, and he loved his dog more afterwards.
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