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备考2020年高考英语一轮复习41：记叙文写作
一、书面表达
1．（2017·浙江）读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn't a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac's heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶）。
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to show down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he'd be easy caught up and the wolf's teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn't think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意：
1）. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2）. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3）. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4）. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragragh 1:
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
Paragragh 2:
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
2．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I always prided myself on
being a wise shopper and having a good nose for bargains. So when I came across
a sporting goods store with a sign "Going Out of Business Sale" I
marched into the crowded store. Up and down the aisles (通道), I wandered, humming to myself and enjoying the energy and
excitement of a sale.
All of a sudden, there, at the back of the
store sat acanoe (轻舟) exactly like my husband's
dream Supremo Numero-Uno,whose picture had been stuck on the bathroom mirror
for years. My heart beat wildly. I pushed my way through the crowds, and nearly
fell into the canoe looking for the price tag. There it was, with the
manufacturer's suggested price at $6,750 plus tax crossed out and a handwritten
TO CLEAR $750 AS IS. Must be a mistake. $6000 off Salesman. I had to talk to a
salesman. I spotted a young fellow with a "Hi. I'm Mathew". "Mathew.
Tell me about this El Supremo canoe. What's wrong with it Why is it only $750 "
"Oh. There's nothing wrong with it. It's
brand new. We're closing the store. It's on clearance like everything else. I'll
go check." A few minutes later he came back and said, "I'm sorry ma'am.
Someone made a mistake on the sale tag. It should be $4,750 for the whole
package."
I felt tears well up in my eyes. "Oh
well", I said sadly. "Of course, it was too good to be true. This is
exactly like my husband's dreamboat. I guess I started to dream myself when I
saw that price tag. He's going to be 62 years old Friday. Had to retire
early for his health. It's been hard on just the pension but the stubborn old
fool has been saving $10 every week for years to buy one just like this. I promise
I won't buy anything, but it's just an old man's silly dream, you know. Always
said he wanted to fish in a canoe after he retired," my voice
lowered and I turned and walked away.
注意：①所续写短文的词数应为150左右；②应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；③续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；④续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
I was already at the mall
door when Mathew caught up with me. "Do you have $750 plus $25 for
delivery, ma'am "
Paragraph
2:
"Ma'am. There's something you should
know. This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe had been ordered by him.
3．（2019·衢州模拟）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I encountered God the summer I
was five. My father had finally grown too sick to get out of bed, so the
heat and nervous tension in the air inside the house made it impossible to
breathe. I would escape by squeezing under the front porch. All manner
of creatures lived there, but I mostly ignored them, with one exception — a
little frog who, every time I crawled (爬行) under the porch, stared at me with
great, golden eyes.
In late June, the frog finally hopped (跳跃) toward my arm and stared at me,
demanding eye contact. Once he had my attention, he opened his wide mouth and
said, "Hello, Sophie."
I should have been shocked, but for
some reason, I wasn't. Perhaps at five years old, I was more receptive to
something against the laws of nature. At any rate, I was not shocked
that a frog could speak. I had a more pressing question.
"How do you know my name "
The frog blinked slowly. "I know
everything. I am God."
I spoke, "You can't be God. You're
too small."
He extended a long, webbed finger and
was pointing to the edge of the porch's shadow — to the spot where my
mother had tried to grow flowers there for years. She had stopped trying
when my father's condition worsened.
"Look there," commanded the
frog, and I stared as a beautiful white flower blossomed as if stretching its
limbs after a long sleep. In my five years, I had never seen anything so
splendid.
God and I became good friends
that summer. I spent every day under the porch, talking to him.
Sometimes I asked God questions.
Sometimes he answered. Once, I asked him where Heaven was.
"Heaven," he said, "is
where I live."
In August, my father's illness
had progressed to the point that I was sent to my aunt's house in Virginia.
I told God I would be back soon, and then waited in Virginia for my father to
get better.
注意:
1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Six months later, I came back home for
my father's funeral.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, an idea crossed my mind that
my father might travel to Heaven.
4．（2019·舟山模拟）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Once, when I was a teenager my father
and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus. Finally
there was only one family between us and the ticket counter.
This family made a big impression
on me. There were eight children, all probably under the age of twelve. You
could tell they didn't have a lot of money. Their clothes were not expensive, but
they were clean, the children were well-behaved, all of them standing in line, two-by-two
behind their parents, holding hands. They were excitedly talking about the clowns,
elephants and other acts they would see that night with their brothers or sisters
in a low voice. One could sense they had never been to the circus before. It promised
to be a highlight of their young lives.
The father and mother were at the head of
the pack, standing proud as they could be. The mother was holding
her husband s hand, looking up at him as if to say, "You are my knight in shining
armor." He was smiling and responding in pride, looking back at her as if to
say "You got that right". The ticket lady asked the father how many tickets
he wanted. He proudly responded "please let me buy eight children's tickets
and two adult tickets so I can take my family to the circus.
The ticket lady gave the price. The man's
wife let go of his hand, lowered her head and her lips began to shake. The
father leaned a little closer and asked, "How much did you say " The ticket
lady again told him the price. The man obviously didn't have enough money.
How was he supposed to turn and tell his
eight children that he didn't have enough money to take them to the circus Actually
we were not wealthy in any sense, so I understand how the kids would feel.
I felt sorry for them.
注意:
1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragragh 1:
Seeing what was going on, my dad seemed
to have an idea.
Paragragh 2:
That day my father and I went back to our car
5．假设你叫李华，现在英国曼彻斯特大学留学，受到邀请，你准备参加“东方文化俱乐部"举办的用英语讲故事活动，让世界了解中国文化。你故事的内容是“凿壁偷光"。内容包括:
1）概述故事的含义；
2）谈谈个人感想。
注意:
1）可适当发挥，使文章内容充实，行文连贯；
2）文中不能出现考生的具体信息。
参考词汇:凿壁:make a hole in the wall
6．假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，记述你们班庆祝王老师即将退休的活动的全过程。
注意：词数不少于60。
7．（2019·台州模拟）读后续写，阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事
"Every cloud has a silver lining, "It drives me crazy when Mom says nonsense (废话) like that.
I'd barely had time to arrange myself in the passenger seat, my foot already blow up like a balloon when she came out with it, exactly like I knew she would. First, she patted my leg. Then she just couldn't help herself, "Every cloud has a silver lining, you know sweetheart." "Mom I appreciate the thought, but I' m not ready to look on the bright side of this." We hadn't even left the school parking lot yet.
On the farthest side of the field I could see my teammates doing sprints training, Coach Zito striding back toward them. He'd mercifully helped me to the car in silence. Unlike Mom, he knew when it was best to say nothing.
As Mom started the engine, I imagined my teammates cooling down without me while they listened to Coach Zito's pep talk. And next Thursday, they would go to practice without me, and the Thursday after that. When I had fallen and twisted my ankle, I'd cried from the pain, but I was crying out of self-pity in the car. Hours and hours of training, and then this. I told myself there was a glimmer(微光)of hope that everything would um out okay, and that
I'd make it to the track meet next month, but I knew it was just that: a glimmer. The tears fell hot and fast Mom gave me a weak smile. "It'll be okay, Case." I suspected this was another version of the silver-lining thing, but I felt so miserable that I let it pass.
We finally arrived at the hospital. Doctor Van gently moved my ankle around a bit before carefully lowering it I nervously asked how long it would be before I could run." Four weeks maybe, possibly five," he replied," and even then, you'll need to take it easy for a while. Is that possible " he asked with a smile.
注意：
1）所续写短文的词勤应为150左右
2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1
I couldn't answer.
Paragraph 2:
One month later, I made my appearance on the field.
8．（2019·浙江模拟）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
After study for hours, I went outside and up to the roof nearby for a break and watched people swimming in the sea. It was a sunny day—a blue, cloudless sky over a calm sea. But then, as I looked in the distance. I discovered a series of three or four big waves heading towards the shore. I'd seen these mini-tsunamis (小型海啸)many times before. They were heading at speed in the direction of the swimming area. Most people knew to look out for them, but from the screams that started coming from the beach, I could tell someone was in trouble.
Without thinking, I ran down into the street, holding my bodyboard (冲浪板)on the way and shouted at a stranger to call the coastguard(海岸警卫). My neighbor Tom had heard the screaming as well and was also outside with his bodyboard, so together we rushed to the steps that led down to the sea.
Once we got closer, we discovered the waves had pulled a boy and a girl into the open sea. I knew that the nearest boat would take at least 30 minutes to reach us. I wasn't used to this sort of emergency—I'd never been trained as a lifeguard—but I didn't think twice about trying to save them.
I suppose in a way I wanted to impress everyone; at 19, a deal like that can seem like a good opportunity to show off.
Tom and I dived into the water and it took us 10 minutes to get to them. When we finally reached them, they were almost lifeless with only their heads coming in and out of the water. We could tell they were still alive from their small breaths but it was clear they wouldn't have been able to stay there much longer. I held the boy and pulled him over my board. Tom then moved the girl onto his board.
Paragraph 1:
We discussed pushing them back to the shore, but we were too far out.
Paragraph 2:
That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition.
9．（2019·北京模拟）书面表达
假设你是红星中学高三(1)班学生李华。上周六你和同学骑共享单车去购书时看到某些不文明现象。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，以“Our Meaningful Work”为题，给校刊“英语角”写一篇英文稿件，介绍事情的整个过程。
注意：词数不少于60。
提示词：共享单车shared bicycle
Our Meaningful Work
10．（2019·北京模拟）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序, 写一篇英文周记, 记录你在上周末爸爸出差期间，为家里拼搭花架的经历。
注意：词数不少于60。
提示词：花架flower shelf
答案解析部分
1．【答案】 The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed to the door of the car. But before Mac could open the door, the wolf had caught up and jumped to attack. Luckily， the magic spray saved Mac a third time。 Seeing the wolf back off，Paul quickly unlocked the door， and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time， shutting the door behind him heavily。 Bechy looked out of the back window and saw the wolf standing over Mac's bicycle as if it were a kill。 Soon after， the animal ran off。
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They were shocked at what they saw and joined Paul. One of Mac's friends picked out some raw meat and threw it to the wolf. Satisfied with what he got, the wolf ran into the woods. Mac thanked Paul and Becky，“How grateful I am that you stopped to save me and I owe it to you that I'm still alive.” As Mac got injured, the three men had to give up the rest of their journey and returned home.(170 words)
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】前文提要：小学老师Mac Holland在一个晴朗温暖的一月份的下午与朋友一起骑车去阿拉斯加。路上，朋友停下来修自行车，让Mac先走他们随后会赶上他的。Mac一个人骑行的时候，一只狼追上并试图攻击他。正拼命逃跑的时候，前面遇到了上坡。正在万分紧急的关头，Paul and Beeky驾车从后面赶上Mac，看见汽车，Mac立刻停在汽车的前面。
续写线索：第一段所给首句：The car abruptly stopped in front of him。抓住关键信息the car stopped，对停车后Mac如何摆脱饿狼获救加以描写，力求写出千钧一发的紧迫感，同时还要合乎逻辑。
第二段所给首句A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.该句承上启下。朋友到了之后发生了什么事，Mac又有何体会，在该段续写中加以提炼升华。
续写词汇：Mac； friends；bicycle；pedaled；home；wolf；jumped；cars；climb；Paul
话题激活词汇：
动作：jump；wave；kick；hit；beat；strike；hug； bite；shout；scream；rush；hurry
情绪：frightened；fiercely；madly；crazily；burst into tears；thankful；grateful；gratitude
【点评】读后续写既考查学生对所学语言知识的运用能力，又考查学生的发散思维能力和创造力。要求考生首先读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络和关系 。续写时，需要明白故事的发展进程，前因后果，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来，同时，在组织语言的同时，切记使用5个以上的提示词。
2．【答案】
I was already at the mall door when Mathew caught up with me. "Do
you have $750 plus $25 for delivery, ma'am " "Yes. Yes. That's about
all I have," "Well then, you just have your husband sitting at
the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there
when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe. We'll even put a bow on
it for his birthday." I started to cry. My old hand shook as I wrote out
my cheque.
"Ma'am.
There's something you should know. This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe
had been ordered by him. He always promised to retire one day. Said he
wanted to spend time relaxing and out fishing in a canoe." He swallowed
hard. "My Grandpa died, sudden-like, just last week. He was only 68 years
old. I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe. You
just have to make sure he uses it a lot, okay Promise " "I promise,"
I said as I dashed off to look for my dear sweet husband.
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇文章续写，写作要求已经给出，包括：1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。通过阅读所给文章可知：主人公在商场促销看到自己的丈夫梦想的轻舟正在做促销，当看到标价比原价便宜＄6000时，主人公激动万分，最后却得知是商场将价格标错。情绪起伏的主人公感到万分难过，想到快要退休的丈夫一直想要一个这样的轻舟，但是却没有能力去担负这个价格。第一段用上了关键词：husband、Friday、canoe；第二段用上了关键词：retire、promise。文章使用了"dash off匆忙完成、put..on...、make sure..... "等高频短语，使内容更加丰满。文章衔接紧密，条理清晰，上下文行文流畅。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： you just have your husband sitting at the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe. 运用了因果并列句和时间状语从句； My old hand shook as I wrote out my cheque.运用了时间状语从句；There's something you should know. 运用了限制性定语从句；This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe had been ordered by him.运用了并列句； I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe. 运用了名词性从句； I said as I dashed off to look for my dear sweet husband.运用了时间状语从句。
3．【答案】Paragraph 1:
Six months later, I came back home for
my father's funeral. Death is very confusing for a child. I didn't understand
what it meant to die; all I knew was that my father had been lying in
his bed and receiving medical treatment for his illness when I left, and
now when I came back, he was nowhere to be found. He must be hiding somewhere,
I was sure; people couldn't just disappear, especially without saying good-bye.
Though my mother told me he had "passed on", I thought she
meant he'd traveled to another town.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, an idea crossed my mind that
my father might travel to Heaven. I knew exactly how to find my father. I ran
to the front porch. However, I had grown during those six months in
Virginia, and I could no longer squeeze into the porch's shadows. I
sat in front of the porch all afternoon, calling for someone to answer me. No
voice came. No father returned from the dead. No frog jumped out of its
hiding spot. I was too big to talk to God, so I started to cry.
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇续写。本文是一篇记叙文，要求对故事进行续写。根据提示信息和要求，本文的写作可以根据以步骤1.精读文章，确定文章线索，本文是以时间为线索这有利于"顺藤摸瓜"。2.仔细审题，明确续写要求，如字数限制（150）、使用几处（5）下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示（开头语已为你写好）等，做到"心中有数"。3.回扣原文，想象续写内容。快速回读短文，揣摩文章的思路，结合段首的提示语和划线词语提示，确定续写段落的内容。本文续写的两个段落首句已给出，就减少了难度，考生可以根据首句内容续写（1.六个月后，我参加父亲的葬礼；2. 突然，一个想法掠过我的脑海，我的父亲可能去天堂。）结合提示语和文中划线的关键词写出文章，注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，上下文的衔接。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： I didn't understand what it meant to die运用了宾语从句；all I knew was that my father had been lying in his bed and receiving medical treatment for his illness when I left, and now when I came back, he was nowhere to be found. 运用了限制性定语从句，表语从句，时间状语从句和并列句；Though my mother told me he had "passed on", I thought she meant he'd traveled to another town.运用了让步状语从句； I sat in front of the porch all afternoon, calling for someone to answer me. 运用了现在分词作伴随状语。
4．【答案】Paragraph 1
Then he picked it
up and tapped the man on the shoulder and said, "Excuse me, sir, this fell
out of your pocket.' The man turned around and saw the money. He knew what
was going on, he looked straight into my dad's eyes, took my dad's hand in both
of his, squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill, and with his lip shaking and
a tear running down his cheek, he replied, "Thank you, thank you, sir. This
really means a lot to me and my family."
Paragraph 2
We didn't go to the
circus that night, when I asked dad why he did so, Dad said, "My child, it
was a desperate, heartbreaking and embarrassing situation for a father. Surely
he wasn't begging for a handout, but he reminded me of my father, when I was young."
He paused for a while, as if wandering in his memory. "We should appreciate
what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others. We didn't
go to the circus tonight, but we didn't go without. Now, who wants an ice
cream "
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本文是一篇记叙文，作者在本文中讲述了小时候排队买票看马戏时看到的一幕．在作者前面一家人给了他很深的印象，这个家庭中有8个孩子，大约都在12岁以下．可以看得出这个家庭没有多少钱，孩子们穿得并不好，但却很干净．孩子们都排队站着，表现很好，他们兴奋地谈论着小丑，大象，还有他们看到的其它表演，每人都可以感觉到他们从没看过马戏表演．第一段所给首句，Seeing what was going on, my dad put his hand in his pocket, pulled out a $20 bill and dropped it on the ground.这一句是故事发展的转折点，接下来他应该是手里拿着20美元，眼含热泪表达感谢。无论从何角度续写需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。第二段所给首句，That day my father and I went to our car and drove home without any tickets.接下来应该是问父亲为什么要这么做的时候，父亲做出了的回答。文章应从这一角度入手进行续写。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Then he picked it up and tapped the man on the shoulder and said, "Excuse me, sir, this fell out of your pocket.' 运用了并列句；He knew what was going on, he looked straight into my dad's eyes, took my dad's hand in both of his, squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill, and with his lip shaking and a tear running down his cheek, he replied,运用了宾语从句和并列句； We didn't go to the circus that night, when I asked dad why he did so 运用了时间状语从句，宾语从句；Surely he wasn't begging for a handout, but he reminded me of my father, when I was young.运用了转折并列句；He paused for a while, as if wandering in his memory. 运用了方式状语从句；We should appreciate what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others. 运用了宾语从句；We didn't go to the circus tonight, but we didn't go without.运用了转折并列句。
5．【答案】 There is always a picture in my mind. Aboy, who is in worn clothes, sat at a wooden table with a pile of books on it.A weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall and he wasabsorbed in his reading.
This is a well-known story from an ancient Chinese idiom.
The boy, being poor, couldn't afford even a candle, so he made a hole in the
wall to “steal" light from his neighbor's house to read at night. The
moral of the story is: spare no effort to acquire knowledge and never get
discouraged easily no matter how difficult the situation may be.
Of course, things are totally different today. It is not the
story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts. Hard work pays
off. We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get
prepared for the future.
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇提纲类作文，要求写“凿壁偷光"的故事。第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一个故事：假设你叫李华，现在英国曼彻斯特大学留学，受到邀请，你准备参加“东方文化俱乐部"举办的用英语讲故事活动，让世界了解中国文化。你故事的内容是“凿壁偷光"。内容包括:1. 概述故事的含义;2. 谈谈个人感想。时态应为一般现在时。第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；make a hole in the wall（凿壁），well-known（众所周知的），idiom（成语），afford（买得起），candle（蜡烛），steal（偷），discouraged（气馁的），moral（寓意）及reflect（反映）等。第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【点评】本书面表达要点齐全，上下文连贯，使用一定数量的句式结构，让句子更加生动丰满，同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语，提高文章的档次，体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。例如： There is always a picture in my mind. 运用了there be结构；A boy, who is in worn clothes, sat at a wooden table with a pile of books on it.运用了非限制性定语从句； A weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall and he was absorbed in his reading.运用了并列句； The boy, being poor, couldn't afford even a candle, so he made a hole in the wall to “steal" light from his neighbor's house to read at night.运用了因果并列句； It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts.运用了表语从句。
6．【答案】 Last Monday I was walking on the campuswhen I heard two students saying that Mrs. Wang, who had been teaching usEnglish for two years, would retire the next month.
I returned to the classroom and shared the news with my
classmates. To express our thanks to Mrs. Wang for his patient teaching, we
agreed on a celebration after a heated discussion.
After school we began to make preparations. I went to the
flower shop to buy a bunch of flowers, representing our love and respect for
our dear teacher. One of my classmates made a PPT, which included some photos
recording the touching moments we spent together.
On Tuesday morning, when Mrs. Wang came into the classroom,
all of us stood up and I presented the flowers to her, with the background
showing "Thank you Mrs. Wang! May you be happy every day." With tears
in her eyes, Mrs. Wang was greatly moved by what we did! She said her feelings
were beyond words.
But for this experience, I would have never realized the
importance of cherishing every moment in our daily life.
【知识点】看图写话；图画式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇图画作文。要求根据图画提示，写一篇周记，记述你们班庆祝王老师即将退休的活动的全过程。图表作文的关键是仔细审图，明确每幅图的内容。第一幅图描述了作者听到王老师要退休的消息的场景。第二幅图描述了作者将这个消息告诉同学们的场景。第三幅图描述了同学们为庆祝老师退休做的一些准备活动。第四幅图描述了同学们庆祝王老师退休举行的活动。因为描述的是发生在过去的事情，所以整篇文章应该用过去时态。
【点评】本书面表达要点齐全，上下文连贯，使用一定数量的句式结构，让句子更加生动丰满，同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语，提高文章的档次，体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。例如： Last Monday I was walking on the campus when I heard two students saying that Mrs. Wang, who had been teaching us English for two years, would retire the next month.运用了时间状语从句，宾语从句和非限制性定语从句； To express our thanks to Mrs. Wang for his patient teaching, we agreed on a celebration after a heated discussion.运用了不定式作目的状语； One of my classmates made a PPT, which included some photos recording the touching moments we spent together.运用了非限制性定语从句； On Tuesday morning, when Mrs. Wang came into the classroom, all of us stood up and I presented the flowers to her, with the background showing "Thank you Mrs. Wang! 运用了时间状语从句； But for this experience, I would have never realized the importance of cherishing every moment in our daily life.运用了虚拟语气。
7．【答案】暂未更新
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。
【点评】通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的母亲总是用“祸兮福所倚”来教育作者，作者的一次亲身经历，让作者体会到了其中的真谛。根据第一段所给首句 “ I couldn't answer. ”这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从作者对医生所说的话展开，说明自己的所思所想。第二段首句是 One month later, I made my appearance on the field说明作者满怀希望，信心满满。恢复得很好。续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
8．【答案】 We discussed pushing them back to the shore, but we were too far out. We had to wait, trying to keep them on the bodyboards. Patting their faces to wake them up, we continuously told them to be strong. After what seemed a century, I fell extremely exhausted while swimming hard to keep myself afloat. Casting a look at Tom. I could tell he was also apparently worn-out. Looking at the vast sea, I fell a sense of fear surging through my whole body. Salt stinging my eyes, I could hardly know how long I could hold on. But I still shouted in my head: focus. In sheer desperation, I finally caught sight of some boats with lifeguards on them heading towards us in the distance. Thank you, Lord. Quite soon, I fell strong arms pull me out of the sea onto the board.
That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition. Sighing a relief, I couldn't stop thinking about the whole event. I knew they would have died if they had been in the sea for my longer. Obviously I had done a big deal which is surely a good opportunity to show off. 1 had expected to experience some sort of sense of wellbeing or greatness, but none of that came. Rather than feel like a hero believe anyone who could swim would have done the same thing.
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇文章续写，通过阅读所给文章可知：作者看到了有人在海中遇险，告知陌生人向经纬求救的同时，和邻居Tom带着冲浪板进入海中，进行营救。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：这我们讨论过把他们推回岸边，但我们离得太远了。……，所以应该写作者和Tom对遇难者如何进行施救；第二段开头是：那天晚上，医院传来消息说这两个孩子的情况良好。本段应该写对援救结果表示欣慰的同时，自己的感受。写作时考生需要注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Patting their faces to wake them up, we continuously told them to be strong.运用了现在分词作伴随状语； After what seemed a century, I fell extremely exhausted while swimming hard to keep myself afloat. 运用了宾语从句；Casting a look at Tom. I could tell he was also apparently worn-out. 运用了宾语从句； Salt stinging my eyes, I could hardly know how long I could hold on.运用了独立主格结构和宾语从句； That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition. 运用了同位语从句；I knew they would have died if they had been in the sea for my longer.运用了宾语从句和虚拟语气； Obviously I had done a big deal which is surely a good opportunity to show off. 运用了限制性定语从句；I had expected to experience some sort of sense of wellbeing or greatness, but none of that came. 运用了并列句；Rather than feel like a hero believe anyone who could swim would have done the same thing.运用了限制性定语从句。
9．【答案】Our Meaningful Work
Last
Saturday my classmates and I did some meaningful work as we went to buy books.
That
afternoon we rode shared bicycles to Beijing Book Building as planned. Everyone
was excited, enjoying the convenience brought about by the shared bicycles.
However, something unexpected happened on arrival. We noticed the shared
bicycles parked here and there, blocking the way of the passersby. One of my
classmates proposed placing them in order, so we got down to work immediately.
It took us about twenty minutes to finish the work. Seeing the tidily arranged
bicycles, we all felt delighted. We also received high praise for what we had
done.
The
experience caused my concern about shared bicycles. I think we should put them
in place after using them, which not only brings us neat and tidy environment,
but also reflects qualities of a good citizen.
【知识点】看图写话；图画式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇看图作文。上周六和同学骑共享单车去购书时看到某些不文明现象。图片中展现出图书大厦外单车到处乱扔、到处堆放的现象，状况惨不忍睹，购书的学生看到这种情况立刻把它们排放整齐。写作时要求学生根据题目中要求的信息，结合图片的内容，找出文章的中心，做适当描述和拓展。学生要采用第一人称来写作，写出活动的内容，并发表自己的感受。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Everyone was excited, enjoying the convenience brought about by the shared bicycles. 运用了现在分词作伴随状语； One of my classmates proposed placing them in order, so we got down to work immediately. 运用了因果并列句；It took us about twenty minutes to finish the work. 运用了it作形式主语；We also received high praise for what we had done.运用了宾语从句； I think we should put them in place after using them, which not only brings us neat and tidy environment, but also reflects qualities of a good citizen.运用了宾语从句和非限制性定语从句。
10．【答案】 Last weekend, I fixed up a
wooden flower shelf for my family when Dad was away on business, which was
really a rewarding experience.
On Sunday afternoon, I was
reading my favorite book when the doorbell rang. It was a package delivered to
Mum. After thanking the courier, I helped Mum carry it in. Mum suggested
leaving the work to Dad. But I decided to do it myself. Immediately, I opened
the package. Inside, there were some wooden boards, iron parts, and an
instruction manual. Having read the manual carefully, I got down to work. With
a screwdriver, I fixed the frame first, and then put the boards on it piece by
piece. After two hours of hard work, a lovely flower shelf appeared in front of
my eyes. Mum and I were both pleased and we started putting potted plants onto
it.
When Dad came back, hearing
it was I who had assembled the flower shelf, he, with a broad smile, gave me a
thumbs-up. At that moment, my feeling of content and pride was beyond
description.
Though I am a busy student,
I still can do something for my family.
【知识点】看图写话；图画式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇看图写作，一共四幅图。一般说来，看图写话中的汉语提示往往给定了有关的时间、地点、人物等相关的信息，有的还规定了文章所采用的体裁，如使用书信、留言、日记等。因此，在审题时我们一定要注意所给的汉语提示。第一步，认真阅读汉语提示和图片，把握中心。本文根据汉语提示可知，是写一篇英文周记，记录你在上周末爸爸出差期间，为家里拼搭花架的经历。这是文章要表达的中心。第二步，初步构思，考虑用词、短语、句型和时态。讲述上周末自己做的事，确定时态是过去时、第一人称。之后构思一个基本的框架，并考虑使用恰当的词语、短语和句型，以充分地表达文章的内容。第三步，连词成句，然后再连句成文。运用适当的单词或短语正确表达各图的意思。然后再将各图的单个句子串连起来。串连时，要注意使用适当的连接词语或过渡性语句，不至于让读者觉得文章中出现跳跃现象，更使上下文更为紧凑、自然。第四部，反复审核，修改错误。一篇文章写好后，应进行检查，看短文中是否有错，如拼写、用词、时态、语态及表达方面的错误。第五部，宜详则详，该略则略。对于一些细节方面的内容，如果是文章必不可少的，在写作过程中是不可将其忽略的。如果是可有可无的细节，则可视具体情况进行增删。据此，我们在读图时一定要注意阅读各图中的一些细节内容，看其是否影响文章的内容。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Last weekend, I fixed up a wooden flower shelf for my family when Dad was away on business, which was really a rewarding experience.运用了时间状语从句和非限制性定语从句； On Sunday afternoon, I was reading my favorite book when the doorbell rang.运用了时间状语从句； Mum and I were both pleased and we started putting potted plants onto it.运用了并列句； When Dad came back, hearing it was I who had assembled the flower shelf, he, with a broad smile, gave me a thumbs-up. 运用了时间状语从句和强调句； Though I am a busy student, I still can do something for my family.运用了让步状语从句。
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备考2020年高考英语一轮复习41：记叙文写作
一、书面表达
1．（2017·浙江）读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that's a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn't a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac's heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac's relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase（追赶）。
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to show down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he'd be easy caught up and the wolf's teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Beeky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn't think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
注意：
1）. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2）. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3）. 续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已为你写好；
4）. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragragh 1:
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
Paragragh 2:
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.
【答案】 The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac jumped off his bicycle and rushed to the door of the car. But before Mac could open the door, the wolf had caught up and jumped to attack. Luckily， the magic spray saved Mac a third time。 Seeing the wolf back off，Paul quickly unlocked the door， and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time， shutting the door behind him heavily。 Bechy looked out of the back window and saw the wolf standing over Mac's bicycle as if it were a kill。 Soon after， the animal ran off。
A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. They were shocked at what they saw and joined Paul. One of Mac's friends picked out some raw meat and threw it to the wolf. Satisfied with what he got, the wolf ran into the woods. Mac thanked Paul and Becky，“How grateful I am that you stopped to save me and I owe it to you that I'm still alive.” As Mac got injured, the three men had to give up the rest of their journey and returned home.(170 words)
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】前文提要：小学老师Mac Holland在一个晴朗温暖的一月份的下午与朋友一起骑车去阿拉斯加。路上，朋友停下来修自行车，让Mac先走他们随后会赶上他的。Mac一个人骑行的时候，一只狼追上并试图攻击他。正拼命逃跑的时候，前面遇到了上坡。正在万分紧急的关头，Paul and Beeky驾车从后面赶上Mac，看见汽车，Mac立刻停在汽车的前面。
续写线索：第一段所给首句：The car abruptly stopped in front of him。抓住关键信息the car stopped，对停车后Mac如何摆脱饿狼获救加以描写，力求写出千钧一发的紧迫感，同时还要合乎逻辑。
第二段所给首句A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived.该句承上启下。朋友到了之后发生了什么事，Mac又有何体会，在该段续写中加以提炼升华。
续写词汇：Mac； friends；bicycle；pedaled；home；wolf；jumped；cars；climb；Paul
话题激活词汇：
动作：jump；wave；kick；hit；beat；strike；hug； bite；shout；scream；rush；hurry
情绪：frightened；fiercely；madly；crazily；burst into tears；thankful；grateful；gratitude
【点评】读后续写既考查学生对所学语言知识的运用能力，又考查学生的发散思维能力和创造力。要求考生首先读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络和关系 。续写时，需要明白故事的发展进程，前因后果，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来，同时，在组织语言的同时，切记使用5个以上的提示词。
2．阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I always prided myself on
being a wise shopper and having a good nose for bargains. So when I came across
a sporting goods store with a sign "Going Out of Business Sale" I
marched into the crowded store. Up and down the aisles (通道), I wandered, humming to myself and enjoying the energy and
excitement of a sale.
All of a sudden, there, at the back of the
store sat acanoe (轻舟) exactly like my husband's
dream Supremo Numero-Uno,whose picture had been stuck on the bathroom mirror
for years. My heart beat wildly. I pushed my way through the crowds, and nearly
fell into the canoe looking for the price tag. There it was, with the
manufacturer's suggested price at $6,750 plus tax crossed out and a handwritten
TO CLEAR $750 AS IS. Must be a mistake. $6000 off Salesman. I had to talk to a
salesman. I spotted a young fellow with a "Hi. I'm Mathew". "Mathew.
Tell me about this El Supremo canoe. What's wrong with it Why is it only $750 "
"Oh. There's nothing wrong with it. It's
brand new. We're closing the store. It's on clearance like everything else. I'll
go check." A few minutes later he came back and said, "I'm sorry ma'am.
Someone made a mistake on the sale tag. It should be $4,750 for the whole
package."
I felt tears well up in my eyes. "Oh
well", I said sadly. "Of course, it was too good to be true. This is
exactly like my husband's dreamboat. I guess I started to dream myself when I
saw that price tag. He's going to be 62 years old Friday. Had to retire
early for his health. It's been hard on just the pension but the stubborn old
fool has been saving $10 every week for years to buy one just like this. I promise
I won't buy anything, but it's just an old man's silly dream, you know. Always
said he wanted to fish in a canoe after he retired," my voice
lowered and I turned and walked away.
注意：①所续写短文的词数应为150左右；②应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；③续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；④续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
I was already at the mall
door when Mathew caught up with me. "Do you have $750 plus $25 for
delivery, ma'am "
Paragraph
2:
"Ma'am. There's something you should
know. This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe had been ordered by him.
【答案】
I was already at the mall door when Mathew caught up with me. "Do
you have $750 plus $25 for delivery, ma'am " "Yes. Yes. That's about
all I have," "Well then, you just have your husband sitting at
the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there
when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe. We'll even put a bow on
it for his birthday." I started to cry. My old hand shook as I wrote out
my cheque.
"Ma'am.
There's something you should know. This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe
had been ordered by him. He always promised to retire one day. Said he
wanted to spend time relaxing and out fishing in a canoe." He swallowed
hard. "My Grandpa died, sudden-like, just last week. He was only 68 years
old. I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe. You
just have to make sure he uses it a lot, okay Promise " "I promise,"
I said as I dashed off to look for my dear sweet husband.
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇文章续写，写作要求已经给出，包括：1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。通过阅读所给文章可知：主人公在商场促销看到自己的丈夫梦想的轻舟正在做促销，当看到标价比原价便宜＄6000时，主人公激动万分，最后却得知是商场将价格标错。情绪起伏的主人公感到万分难过，想到快要退休的丈夫一直想要一个这样的轻舟，但是却没有能力去担负这个价格。第一段用上了关键词：husband、Friday、canoe；第二段用上了关键词：retire、promise。文章使用了"dash off匆忙完成、put..on...、make sure..... "等高频短语，使内容更加丰满。文章衔接紧密，条理清晰，上下文行文流畅。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： you just have your husband sitting at the front gate on Friday morning around 10 o'clock so he can be there when my Dad and I come to unload his new canoe. 运用了因果并列句和时间状语从句； My old hand shook as I wrote out my cheque.运用了时间状语从句；There's something you should know. 运用了限制性定语从句；This store was my Grandpa's and the canoe had been ordered by him.运用了并列句； I think he'd be mighty happy that your husband will get this canoe. 运用了名词性从句； I said as I dashed off to look for my dear sweet husband.运用了时间状语从句。
3．（2019·衢州模拟）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I encountered God the summer I
was five. My father had finally grown too sick to get out of bed, so the
heat and nervous tension in the air inside the house made it impossible to
breathe. I would escape by squeezing under the front porch. All manner
of creatures lived there, but I mostly ignored them, with one exception — a
little frog who, every time I crawled (爬行) under the porch, stared at me with
great, golden eyes.
In late June, the frog finally hopped (跳跃) toward my arm and stared at me,
demanding eye contact. Once he had my attention, he opened his wide mouth and
said, "Hello, Sophie."
I should have been shocked, but for
some reason, I wasn't. Perhaps at five years old, I was more receptive to
something against the laws of nature. At any rate, I was not shocked
that a frog could speak. I had a more pressing question.
"How do you know my name "
The frog blinked slowly. "I know
everything. I am God."
I spoke, "You can't be God. You're
too small."
He extended a long, webbed finger and
was pointing to the edge of the porch's shadow — to the spot where my
mother had tried to grow flowers there for years. She had stopped trying
when my father's condition worsened.
"Look there," commanded the
frog, and I stared as a beautiful white flower blossomed as if stretching its
limbs after a long sleep. In my five years, I had never seen anything so
splendid.
God and I became good friends
that summer. I spent every day under the porch, talking to him.
Sometimes I asked God questions.
Sometimes he answered. Once, I asked him where Heaven was.
"Heaven," he said, "is
where I live."
In August, my father's illness
had progressed to the point that I was sent to my aunt's house in Virginia.
I told God I would be back soon, and then waited in Virginia for my father to
get better.
注意:
1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
Six months later, I came back home for
my father's funeral.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, an idea crossed my mind that
my father might travel to Heaven.
【答案】Paragraph 1:
Six months later, I came back home for
my father's funeral. Death is very confusing for a child. I didn't understand
what it meant to die; all I knew was that my father had been lying in
his bed and receiving medical treatment for his illness when I left, and
now when I came back, he was nowhere to be found. He must be hiding somewhere,
I was sure; people couldn't just disappear, especially without saying good-bye.
Though my mother told me he had "passed on", I thought she
meant he'd traveled to another town.
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, an idea crossed my mind that
my father might travel to Heaven. I knew exactly how to find my father. I ran
to the front porch. However, I had grown during those six months in
Virginia, and I could no longer squeeze into the porch's shadows. I
sat in front of the porch all afternoon, calling for someone to answer me. No
voice came. No father returned from the dead. No frog jumped out of its
hiding spot. I was too big to talk to God, so I started to cry.
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇续写。本文是一篇记叙文，要求对故事进行续写。根据提示信息和要求，本文的写作可以根据以步骤1.精读文章，确定文章线索，本文是以时间为线索这有利于"顺藤摸瓜"。2.仔细审题，明确续写要求，如字数限制（150）、使用几处（5）下划线关键词语、续写段落的首句提示（开头语已为你写好）等，做到"心中有数"。3.回扣原文，想象续写内容。快速回读短文，揣摩文章的思路，结合段首的提示语和划线词语提示，确定续写段落的内容。本文续写的两个段落首句已给出，就减少了难度，考生可以根据首句内容续写（1.六个月后，我参加父亲的葬礼；2. 突然，一个想法掠过我的脑海，我的父亲可能去天堂。）结合提示语和文中划线的关键词写出文章，注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，上下文的衔接。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： I didn't understand what it meant to die运用了宾语从句；all I knew was that my father had been lying in his bed and receiving medical treatment for his illness when I left, and now when I came back, he was nowhere to be found. 运用了限制性定语从句，表语从句，时间状语从句和并列句；Though my mother told me he had "passed on", I thought she meant he'd traveled to another town.运用了让步状语从句； I sat in front of the porch all afternoon, calling for someone to answer me. 运用了现在分词作伴随状语。
4．（2019·舟山模拟）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Once, when I was a teenager my father
and I were standing in line to buy tickets for the circus. Finally
there was only one family between us and the ticket counter.
This family made a big impression
on me. There were eight children, all probably under the age of twelve. You
could tell they didn't have a lot of money. Their clothes were not expensive, but
they were clean, the children were well-behaved, all of them standing in line, two-by-two
behind their parents, holding hands. They were excitedly talking about the clowns,
elephants and other acts they would see that night with their brothers or sisters
in a low voice. One could sense they had never been to the circus before. It promised
to be a highlight of their young lives.
The father and mother were at the head of
the pack, standing proud as they could be. The mother was holding
her husband s hand, looking up at him as if to say, "You are my knight in shining
armor." He was smiling and responding in pride, looking back at her as if to
say "You got that right". The ticket lady asked the father how many tickets
he wanted. He proudly responded "please let me buy eight children's tickets
and two adult tickets so I can take my family to the circus.
The ticket lady gave the price. The man's
wife let go of his hand, lowered her head and her lips began to shake. The
father leaned a little closer and asked, "How much did you say " The ticket
lady again told him the price. The man obviously didn't have enough money.
How was he supposed to turn and tell his
eight children that he didn't have enough money to take them to the circus Actually
we were not wealthy in any sense, so I understand how the kids would feel.
I felt sorry for them.
注意:
1）所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragragh 1:
Seeing what was going on, my dad seemed
to have an idea.
Paragragh 2:
That day my father and I went back to our car
【答案】Paragraph 1
Then he picked it
up and tapped the man on the shoulder and said, "Excuse me, sir, this fell
out of your pocket.' The man turned around and saw the money. He knew what
was going on, he looked straight into my dad's eyes, took my dad's hand in both
of his, squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill, and with his lip shaking and
a tear running down his cheek, he replied, "Thank you, thank you, sir. This
really means a lot to me and my family."
Paragraph 2
We didn't go to the
circus that night, when I asked dad why he did so, Dad said, "My child, it
was a desperate, heartbreaking and embarrassing situation for a father. Surely
he wasn't begging for a handout, but he reminded me of my father, when I was young."
He paused for a while, as if wandering in his memory. "We should appreciate
what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others. We didn't
go to the circus tonight, but we didn't go without. Now, who wants an ice
cream "
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本文是一篇记叙文，作者在本文中讲述了小时候排队买票看马戏时看到的一幕．在作者前面一家人给了他很深的印象，这个家庭中有8个孩子，大约都在12岁以下．可以看得出这个家庭没有多少钱，孩子们穿得并不好，但却很干净．孩子们都排队站着，表现很好，他们兴奋地谈论着小丑，大象，还有他们看到的其它表演，每人都可以感觉到他们从没看过马戏表演．第一段所给首句，Seeing what was going on, my dad put his hand in his pocket, pulled out a $20 bill and dropped it on the ground.这一句是故事发展的转折点，接下来他应该是手里拿着20美元，眼含热泪表达感谢。无论从何角度续写需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。第二段所给首句，That day my father and I went to our car and drove home without any tickets.接下来应该是问父亲为什么要这么做的时候，父亲做出了的回答。文章应从这一角度入手进行续写。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Then he picked it up and tapped the man on the shoulder and said, "Excuse me, sir, this fell out of your pocket.' 运用了并列句；He knew what was going on, he looked straight into my dad's eyes, took my dad's hand in both of his, squeezed tightly onto the $20 bill, and with his lip shaking and a tear running down his cheek, he replied,运用了宾语从句和并列句； We didn't go to the circus that night, when I asked dad why he did so 运用了时间状语从句，宾语从句；Surely he wasn't begging for a handout, but he reminded me of my father, when I was young.运用了转折并列句；He paused for a while, as if wandering in his memory. 运用了方式状语从句；We should appreciate what we have obtained from life and seize every opportunity to help others. 运用了宾语从句；We didn't go to the circus tonight, but we didn't go without.运用了转折并列句。
5．假设你叫李华，现在英国曼彻斯特大学留学，受到邀请，你准备参加“东方文化俱乐部"举办的用英语讲故事活动，让世界了解中国文化。你故事的内容是“凿壁偷光"。内容包括:
1）概述故事的含义；
2）谈谈个人感想。
注意:
1）可适当发挥，使文章内容充实，行文连贯；
2）文中不能出现考生的具体信息。
参考词汇:凿壁:make a hole in the wall
【答案】 There is always a picture in my mind. Aboy, who is in worn clothes, sat at a wooden table with a pile of books on it.A weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall and he wasabsorbed in his reading.
This is a well-known story from an ancient Chinese idiom.
The boy, being poor, couldn't afford even a candle, so he made a hole in the
wall to “steal" light from his neighbor's house to read at night. The
moral of the story is: spare no effort to acquire knowledge and never get
discouraged easily no matter how difficult the situation may be.
Of course, things are totally different today. It is not the
story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts. Hard work pays
off. We should take pains to improve ourselves through learning and get
prepared for the future.
【知识点】提纲作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇提纲类作文，要求写“凿壁偷光"的故事。第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一个故事：假设你叫李华，现在英国曼彻斯特大学留学，受到邀请，你准备参加“东方文化俱乐部"举办的用英语讲故事活动，让世界了解中国文化。你故事的内容是“凿壁偷光"。内容包括:1. 概述故事的含义;2. 谈谈个人感想。时态应为一般现在时。第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如；make a hole in the wall（凿壁），well-known（众所周知的），idiom（成语），afford（买得起），candle（蜡烛），steal（偷），discouraged（气馁的），moral（寓意）及reflect（反映）等。第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。本文内容完整，层次分明，结构紧凑，表达准确。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【点评】本书面表达要点齐全，上下文连贯，使用一定数量的句式结构，让句子更加生动丰满，同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语，提高文章的档次，体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。例如： There is always a picture in my mind. 运用了there be结构；A boy, who is in worn clothes, sat at a wooden table with a pile of books on it.运用了非限制性定语从句； A weak ray of light came in through a small hole in the wall and he was absorbed in his reading.运用了并列句； The boy, being poor, couldn't afford even a candle, so he made a hole in the wall to “steal" light from his neighbor's house to read at night.运用了因果并列句； It is not the story itself but what is reflected in the story that counts.运用了表语从句。
6．假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，记述你们班庆祝王老师即将退休的活动的全过程。
注意：词数不少于60。
【答案】 Last Monday I was walking on the campuswhen I heard two students saying that Mrs. Wang, who had been teaching usEnglish for two years, would retire the next month.
I returned to the classroom and shared the news with my
classmates. To express our thanks to Mrs. Wang for his patient teaching, we
agreed on a celebration after a heated discussion.
After school we began to make preparations. I went to the
flower shop to buy a bunch of flowers, representing our love and respect for
our dear teacher. One of my classmates made a PPT, which included some photos
recording the touching moments we spent together.
On Tuesday morning, when Mrs. Wang came into the classroom,
all of us stood up and I presented the flowers to her, with the background
showing "Thank you Mrs. Wang! May you be happy every day." With tears
in her eyes, Mrs. Wang was greatly moved by what we did! She said her feelings
were beyond words.
But for this experience, I would have never realized the
importance of cherishing every moment in our daily life.
【知识点】看图写话；图画式记叙文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇图画作文。要求根据图画提示，写一篇周记，记述你们班庆祝王老师即将退休的活动的全过程。图表作文的关键是仔细审图，明确每幅图的内容。第一幅图描述了作者听到王老师要退休的消息的场景。第二幅图描述了作者将这个消息告诉同学们的场景。第三幅图描述了同学们为庆祝老师退休做的一些准备活动。第四幅图描述了同学们庆祝王老师退休举行的活动。因为描述的是发生在过去的事情，所以整篇文章应该用过去时态。
【点评】本书面表达要点齐全，上下文连贯，使用一定数量的句式结构，让句子更加生动丰满，同时运用了许多高级词汇和固定短语，提高文章的档次，体现了对英语的熟练的驾驭能力。例如： Last Monday I was walking on the campus when I heard two students saying that Mrs. Wang, who had been teaching us English for two years, would retire the next month.运用了时间状语从句，宾语从句和非限制性定语从句； To express our thanks to Mrs. Wang for his patient teaching, we agreed on a celebration after a heated discussion.运用了不定式作目的状语； One of my classmates made a PPT, which included some photos recording the touching moments we spent together.运用了非限制性定语从句； On Tuesday morning, when Mrs. Wang came into the classroom, all of us stood up and I presented the flowers to her, with the background showing "Thank you Mrs. Wang! 运用了时间状语从句； But for this experience, I would have never realized the importance of cherishing every moment in our daily life.运用了虚拟语气。
7．（2019·台州模拟）读后续写，阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事
"Every cloud has a silver lining, "It drives me crazy when Mom says nonsense (废话) like that.
I'd barely had time to arrange myself in the passenger seat, my foot already blow up like a balloon when she came out with it, exactly like I knew she would. First, she patted my leg. Then she just couldn't help herself, "Every cloud has a silver lining, you know sweetheart." "Mom I appreciate the thought, but I' m not ready to look on the bright side of this." We hadn't even left the school parking lot yet.
On the farthest side of the field I could see my teammates doing sprints training, Coach Zito striding back toward them. He'd mercifully helped me to the car in silence. Unlike Mom, he knew when it was best to say nothing.
As Mom started the engine, I imagined my teammates cooling down without me while they listened to Coach Zito's pep talk. And next Thursday, they would go to practice without me, and the Thursday after that. When I had fallen and twisted my ankle, I'd cried from the pain, but I was crying out of self-pity in the car. Hours and hours of training, and then this. I told myself there was a glimmer(微光)of hope that everything would um out okay, and that
I'd make it to the track meet next month, but I knew it was just that: a glimmer. The tears fell hot and fast Mom gave me a weak smile. "It'll be okay, Case." I suspected this was another version of the silver-lining thing, but I felt so miserable that I let it pass.
We finally arrived at the hospital. Doctor Van gently moved my ankle around a bit before carefully lowering it I nervously asked how long it would be before I could run." Four weeks maybe, possibly five," he replied," and even then, you'll need to take it easy for a while. Is that possible " he asked with a smile.
注意：
1）所续写短文的词勤应为150左右
2）应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语：
3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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I couldn't answer.
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One month later, I made my appearance on the field.
【答案】暂未更新
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文
【解析】【分析】读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，不仅能读懂字面含义，还要理清文章的脉络。续篇这篇短文时，考生要搞清楚故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的变化等。在此基础上，考生要顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用语言表达出来。
【点评】通过阅读所给文章可知，作者的母亲总是用“祸兮福所倚”来教育作者，作者的一次亲身经历，让作者体会到了其中的真谛。根据第一段所给首句 “ I couldn't answer. ”这一句是故事发展的转折点，可从作者对医生所说的话展开，说明自己的所思所想。第二段首句是 One month later, I made my appearance on the field说明作者满怀希望，信心满满。恢复得很好。续写时注意要使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后要用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
8．（2019·浙江模拟）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
After study for hours, I went outside and up to the roof nearby for a break and watched people swimming in the sea. It was a sunny day—a blue, cloudless sky over a calm sea. But then, as I looked in the distance. I discovered a series of three or four big waves heading towards the shore. I'd seen these mini-tsunamis (小型海啸)many times before. They were heading at speed in the direction of the swimming area. Most people knew to look out for them, but from the screams that started coming from the beach, I could tell someone was in trouble.
Without thinking, I ran down into the street, holding my bodyboard (冲浪板)on the way and shouted at a stranger to call the coastguard(海岸警卫). My neighbor Tom had heard the screaming as well and was also outside with his bodyboard, so together we rushed to the steps that led down to the sea.
Once we got closer, we discovered the waves had pulled a boy and a girl into the open sea. I knew that the nearest boat would take at least 30 minutes to reach us. I wasn't used to this sort of emergency—I'd never been trained as a lifeguard—but I didn't think twice about trying to save them.
I suppose in a way I wanted to impress everyone; at 19, a deal like that can seem like a good opportunity to show off.
Tom and I dived into the water and it took us 10 minutes to get to them. When we finally reached them, they were almost lifeless with only their heads coming in and out of the water. We could tell they were still alive from their small breaths but it was clear they wouldn't have been able to stay there much longer. I held the boy and pulled him over my board. Tom then moved the girl onto his board.
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We discussed pushing them back to the shore, but we were too far out.
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That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition.
【答案】 We discussed pushing them back to the shore, but we were too far out. We had to wait, trying to keep them on the bodyboards. Patting their faces to wake them up, we continuously told them to be strong. After what seemed a century, I fell extremely exhausted while swimming hard to keep myself afloat. Casting a look at Tom. I could tell he was also apparently worn-out. Looking at the vast sea, I fell a sense of fear surging through my whole body. Salt stinging my eyes, I could hardly know how long I could hold on. But I still shouted in my head: focus. In sheer desperation, I finally caught sight of some boats with lifeguards on them heading towards us in the distance. Thank you, Lord. Quite soon, I fell strong arms pull me out of the sea onto the board.
That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition. Sighing a relief, I couldn't stop thinking about the whole event. I knew they would have died if they had been in the sea for my longer. Obviously I had done a big deal which is surely a good opportunity to show off. 1 had expected to experience some sort of sense of wellbeing or greatness, but none of that came. Rather than feel like a hero believe anyone who could swim would have done the same thing.
【知识点】其他作文；文字式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇文章续写，通过阅读所给文章可知：作者看到了有人在海中遇险，告知陌生人向经纬求救的同时，和邻居Tom带着冲浪板进入海中，进行营救。续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：这我们讨论过把他们推回岸边，但我们离得太远了。……，所以应该写作者和Tom对遇难者如何进行施救；第二段开头是：那天晚上，医院传来消息说这两个孩子的情况良好。本段应该写对援救结果表示欣慰的同时，自己的感受。写作时考生需要注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Patting their faces to wake them up, we continuously told them to be strong.运用了现在分词作伴随状语； After what seemed a century, I fell extremely exhausted while swimming hard to keep myself afloat. 运用了宾语从句；Casting a look at Tom. I could tell he was also apparently worn-out. 运用了宾语从句； Salt stinging my eyes, I could hardly know how long I could hold on.运用了独立主格结构和宾语从句； That night, word came from the hospital that the two kids were in good condition. 运用了同位语从句；I knew they would have died if they had been in the sea for my longer.运用了宾语从句和虚拟语气； Obviously I had done a big deal which is surely a good opportunity to show off. 运用了限制性定语从句；I had expected to experience some sort of sense of wellbeing or greatness, but none of that came. 运用了并列句；Rather than feel like a hero believe anyone who could swim would have done the same thing.运用了限制性定语从句。
9．（2019·北京模拟）书面表达
假设你是红星中学高三(1)班学生李华。上周六你和同学骑共享单车去购书时看到某些不文明现象。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，以“Our Meaningful Work”为题，给校刊“英语角”写一篇英文稿件，介绍事情的整个过程。
注意：词数不少于60。
提示词：共享单车shared bicycle
Our Meaningful Work
【答案】Our Meaningful Work
Last
Saturday my classmates and I did some meaningful work as we went to buy books.
That
afternoon we rode shared bicycles to Beijing Book Building as planned. Everyone
was excited, enjoying the convenience brought about by the shared bicycles.
However, something unexpected happened on arrival. We noticed the shared
bicycles parked here and there, blocking the way of the passersby. One of my
classmates proposed placing them in order, so we got down to work immediately.
It took us about twenty minutes to finish the work. Seeing the tidily arranged
bicycles, we all felt delighted. We also received high praise for what we had
done.
The
experience caused my concern about shared bicycles. I think we should put them
in place after using them, which not only brings us neat and tidy environment,
but also reflects qualities of a good citizen.
【知识点】看图写话；图画式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇看图作文。上周六和同学骑共享单车去购书时看到某些不文明现象。图片中展现出图书大厦外单车到处乱扔、到处堆放的现象，状况惨不忍睹，购书的学生看到这种情况立刻把它们排放整齐。写作时要求学生根据题目中要求的信息，结合图片的内容，找出文章的中心，做适当描述和拓展。学生要采用第一人称来写作，写出活动的内容，并发表自己的感受。根据所给提纲，列出要点，并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来。写作时注意时态、语态的合理运用，同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Everyone was excited, enjoying the convenience brought about by the shared bicycles. 运用了现在分词作伴随状语； One of my classmates proposed placing them in order, so we got down to work immediately. 运用了因果并列句；It took us about twenty minutes to finish the work. 运用了it作形式主语；We also received high praise for what we had done.运用了宾语从句； I think we should put them in place after using them, which not only brings us neat and tidy environment, but also reflects qualities of a good citizen.运用了宾语从句和非限制性定语从句。
10．（2019·北京模拟）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序, 写一篇英文周记, 记录你在上周末爸爸出差期间，为家里拼搭花架的经历。
注意：词数不少于60。
提示词：花架flower shelf
【答案】 Last weekend, I fixed up a
wooden flower shelf for my family when Dad was away on business, which was
really a rewarding experience.
On Sunday afternoon, I was
reading my favorite book when the doorbell rang. It was a package delivered to
Mum. After thanking the courier, I helped Mum carry it in. Mum suggested
leaving the work to Dad. But I decided to do it myself. Immediately, I opened
the package. Inside, there were some wooden boards, iron parts, and an
instruction manual. Having read the manual carefully, I got down to work. With
a screwdriver, I fixed the frame first, and then put the boards on it piece by
piece. After two hours of hard work, a lovely flower shelf appeared in front of
my eyes. Mum and I were both pleased and we started putting potted plants onto
it.
When Dad came back, hearing
it was I who had assembled the flower shelf, he, with a broad smile, gave me a
thumbs-up. At that moment, my feeling of content and pride was beyond
description.
Though I am a busy student,
I still can do something for my family.
【知识点】看图写话；图画式记叙文；半开放性作文
【解析】【分析】本题是一篇看图写作，一共四幅图。一般说来，看图写话中的汉语提示往往给定了有关的时间、地点、人物等相关的信息，有的还规定了文章所采用的体裁，如使用书信、留言、日记等。因此，在审题时我们一定要注意所给的汉语提示。第一步，认真阅读汉语提示和图片，把握中心。本文根据汉语提示可知，是写一篇英文周记，记录你在上周末爸爸出差期间，为家里拼搭花架的经历。这是文章要表达的中心。第二步，初步构思，考虑用词、短语、句型和时态。讲述上周末自己做的事，确定时态是过去时、第一人称。之后构思一个基本的框架，并考虑使用恰当的词语、短语和句型，以充分地表达文章的内容。第三步，连词成句，然后再连句成文。运用适当的单词或短语正确表达各图的意思。然后再将各图的单个句子串连起来。串连时，要注意使用适当的连接词语或过渡性语句，不至于让读者觉得文章中出现跳跃现象，更使上下文更为紧凑、自然。第四部，反复审核，修改错误。一篇文章写好后，应进行检查，看短文中是否有错，如拼写、用词、时态、语态及表达方面的错误。第五部，宜详则详，该略则略。对于一些细节方面的内容，如果是文章必不可少的，在写作过程中是不可将其忽略的。如果是可有可无的细节，则可视具体情况进行增删。据此，我们在读图时一定要注意阅读各图中的一些细节内容，看其是否影响文章的内容。
【点评】本篇作文要点齐全，结构完整，条理清晰，应用了较多的语法结构和词汇，熟练地使用了语句间的连接成分，使整个文章结构紧凑，很好地完成了写作任务。例如： Last weekend, I fixed up a wooden flower shelf for my family when Dad was away on business, which was really a rewarding experience.运用了时间状语从句和非限制性定语从句； On Sunday afternoon, I was reading my favorite book when the doorbell rang.运用了时间状语从句； Mum and I were both pleased and we started putting potted plants onto it.运用了并列句； When Dad came back, hearing it was I who had assembled the flower shelf, he, with a broad smile, gave me a thumbs-up. 运用了时间状语从句和强调句； Though I am a busy student, I still can do something for my family.运用了让步状语从句。
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