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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in
and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen
forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a
fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over
and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided
not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I
was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave
him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well – he thought he was doing the
right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming
towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children,
but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of
his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that
David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer – that’s all. David had
not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children,
he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the
challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
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We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
故事解读
1. 主题分析
通过原文和续写段首语可知：
本文讲述了小学生 David 因脑疾无法像常人一样跑步，害怕被嘲笑而决定放弃准备已久
的越野跑，在特殊教育老师“我”的鼓励下，最终成功完成越野跑的故事。故事的主题是“直
面挑战，超越自我”。
续写中的人物塑造、情节发展和环境描写需紧扣故事主题。
2. 情节分析
1) 情节结构分析
按照冲突（conflict） 行动（action） 解决（resolution）的结构模式分析：
本文的情节结构是 David 怕被嘲笑，决定不参加越野跑（冲突） 在“我”的鼓励下，
David 决定勇敢面对挑战，参加越野跑（行动） David 经过努力，成功完成越野跑（解决）。
原文展示了故事的“冲突”部分，续写两段分别为故事的“行动”和“解决”部分。
2) 情节线索分析
故事围绕 David是否参加越野跑展开。越野跑是故事的情节线索之一。根据原文，David
因害怕被嘲笑而决定不参加越野跑，但事实上他在赛前刻苦训练，为越野跑全力以赴。经过
“我”的鼓励，David 决定直面挑战并成功完成比赛。
David 的心理变化是故事的另一个情节线索。从跑前到跑后，David 有以下心理变化：
determined（训练时） afraid of being laughed at（越野跑前） determined（经过“我”的
鼓励） proud（越野跑后）。
续写两段的内容需围绕越野跑和 David 的心理变化展开。
3) 情节安排技巧分析
在原文中，David 虽因脑疾无法像其他孩子一样正常跑步，但每次练习都全力以赴、
做到最好。该情节（He had worked so hard for this event! … He always participated to the best of
his ability in whatever they were doing… David had not missed a single practice, and although he
always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish.）为 David 最终成功完
成越野跑埋下了伏笔。
续写第一段中“我”对 David 的鼓励应与原文中 David 想参加越野跑但又害怕被嘲笑的
情节呼应。续写第二段中 David 在越野跑中的具体表现应与原文中他因脑疾而跑步困难的情
节呼应。
3. 人物分析
1) 主次人物分析
根据原文和续写两段段首语可知，David 和“我”是故事的主要人物，二人是师生关系；
教练和其他同学是次要人物。
根据续写两段段首语可知，在续写第一段中，会出现主要人物 David 和“我”。在续写
第二段中，David 和“我”仍然是主要人物，次要人物（教练和其他同学）可能会出现。
2) 人物特点分析
根据插叙内容（David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running
like other children, …）和 David 的外貌（He was small for ten years old.）、动作（his small body
rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward）和神态（His usual big toothy smile was
absent today.），可以总结出 David“身残志坚”的人物形象。
根据原文中关于“我”（walked over and asked, quickly searched for the coach, bit back my
frustration, was proud of his strong determination）和次要人物（the coach meant well, his
classmates thought of him as a regular kid）的描写，可以总结出大家对 David 的关爱。
在续写中，应根据主次人物的特点进行合理的人物刻画。David 在前文中的形象是“身
残志坚”，续写中可以从这一人物特点出发设计 David 比赛过程中的具体表现。
4. 环境分析
根据原文和续写段首语可知，故事的“冲突”和“行动”部分发生在孩子们去参加越野
跑经过的常绿林（thick evergreen forest）中，故事的“解决”部分发生在越野跑线路上。
5. 表达技巧分析
1) 表达方式分析
故事采用第一人称视角，使用了记叙（包括顺叙和插叙）和描写的表达方式。
2) 语言特点分析
故事语言通俗易懂，形象生动。语篇长短句结合，包含简单句、并列句和复合句（如定
语从句、宾语从句和状语从句）三大基本句型；词汇丰富；衔接自然。续写时应注意保持语
言特点的统一，可适当使用高级句式。
续写构思
Step 1 构思续写两段情节
根据故事的主题、情节、人物和环境分析，原文呈现了故事的“冲突”部分：David 怕
被嘲笑，决定不参加越野跑。续写两段分别是故事的“行动”和“解决”部分：在“我”的
鼓励下，David 决定勇敢面对挑战，参加越野跑（行动） David 经过努力，成功完成越野
跑（解决）。
Step 2 构思续写首尾内容
通过续写两段的段首句，可以确定每段故事的情节发展、场景和人物。
Paragraph 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
根据第一段段首句可知，本段故事场景为越野跑赛场下，接下来“我”要和 David 进行
沟通，鼓励他参加越野跑。
根据第二段段首句可知，在第一段结尾处，David 改变想法，决定参加越野跑。
Paragraph 2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
根据故事主题和情节结构分析，段尾应该是 David 成功完成越野跑的场景。
Step 3 构思具体情节
续写第一段具体情节构思：
展开细节时，可以尝试回答如下问题并考虑多种可能性：
a) What did I say to encourage David to join the cross-country run
b) How did David react to my encouragement
c) What was David’s decision after the talk
根据以上问题，续写第一段的具体情节可以是：“我”通过分析 David 很想参加越野跑
却害怕被嘲笑的心理，鼓励他勇敢面对挑战、超越自我 David 在“我”的鼓励下由消极变
得积极 David 下定决心参加越野跑（坚定）。
续写第二段具体情节构思：
展开细节时，可以尝试回答如下问题并考虑多种可能性：
a) What difficulty did David have in the cross-country run
b) How did people react to David’s performance in the run
c) What was the result of the cross-country run
根据以上问题，续写第二段的具体情节可以是：David 在越野跑中落后或出现意外情况
（紧张/担心） 他人对 David 的鼓励和关爱 David 成功完成越野跑（兴奋/自豪）。
Step 4 创作与优化
根据故事解读和续写构思，创作初稿并进行优化，完成续写。
范文 1：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. Holding him in my arms, I
said, “David, you’ve done so much for this run. Why not give yourself a chance ” He looked up
with sadness in his eyes. His lips moved but he said nothing. Knowing how he felt, I patted him on
his back and said, “There will always be someone laughing at us. Should we let them stop us
doing what we really want to do If you really want to run, then run.” He froze, seeming to ponder
my words. Then, eyes sparkling with determination, he said, “I’m gonna run.”
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The students darted
away as the shot rang out but David soon fell behind. “Come on, David,” I shouted. Students from
other schools said the same. As David disappeared into the forest, I hurried to the finish line. Most
runners crossed the line but there was no sign of David. My heart pounded. “There,” said the
coach, nudging me and pointing. Following his finger, I spotted David trudging towards us.
Hardly had he crossed the line when we cheered and applauded. Raising his arms in triumph, he
exclaimed, “I’m not the last.” His face creased into a big toothy smile.
范文 2：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. His confidence was in danger
of bursting like a bubble. It was clear that he feared he would be judged for his appearance rather
than his character. Knowing David trusted me, I cleared my throat and said, “Beautiful forest, isn’t
it ” Slowly and curiously, he raised his head and looked around. I continued, “That’s because
those trees never stop reaching for the sky, regardless of their position or shape. They never let
others define them.” On hearing this, David got up without a word. But now there was a sparkle in
his eyes. He had made a decision.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. He received curious
glances from runners from other schools but a warm welcome from his schoolmates. Then came a
shot from the starting pistol and David dashed forward. The slippery mud threw him off balance,
but he got up with determination. Seeing him disappear into the woods, I headed for the
destination with the school’s coach. Many runners withdrew from the race along the way, but not
David. He bounded and hobbled and plodded towards the finishing line, where the audience
cheered loudly as he crossed. I felt proud to see that big, toothy smile back on his face.

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