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读后续写真题
2022年6月新高考卷:
身残志坚的男孩
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试题再现
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试题分析
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写作思路
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范文赏析
目录
CONTENTS
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试题再现
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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真题再现
第二节(满分25分) 阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
Para.1 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
Para.2 I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
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试题分析
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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Setting
Time---- the day of the big cross-country run
Place---- the race spot (a place with thick ...)
Characters:
I---- a special education teacher of David’s school
David ----a ten-year-old boy with a brain disease; unable to walk or run like other kids;
rock from side to side while walking
读故事
Plot & Emotions
Though unable to walk or run like other kids, David was treated equally as a regular kid and usually lived a happy life in the school.
He decided to take part in the cross-country run and practiced very hard, never missing a single practice, though he was always finished his run long after the others.
He was asked to decide by himself whether to run or not on the run day because the coach was afraid he was laughed at by the kids from other schools.
He was standing by himself off the side by a fence but his usual big toothy smile was absent.
Happy
Determined
Hesitant
Depressed / Lost and down
读故事
Plot & Emotions
As a special education teacher, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
I found David standing alone by a fence, not warming up and walking the route like other runners before the race.
I asked his coach and learned the reason.
After making sure David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me.
Admired
Surprised
Frustrated
Detemined
读故事
原文中哪些句子可用作原文线索？
特定的人物在特定的时间和地点做出特定的事情，说特定的话语，有特定的情感，这些特定的因素是有内在联系的，即有它特定的逻辑关系。
所以在续故事的细节时，细节必须合乎原文中的时间地点等背景信息所设定的逻辑；也要合乎主要人物的身份逻辑；这也是读后续写内容上的协同发展。
此文中围绕David是否参加这次越野赛的关键是：他特殊的走路和跑步的姿势可能会引起不熟悉他的人的嘲笑，会伤害到他，所以教练让他自己决定。而他平时的惯常做法就是这里的伏笔，可作为原文线索在续写中复现。
“我”作为学校的一个特殊教育老师，又对他的困境和平常的表现很熟悉，还对他的身残志坚倍感骄傲，所以在比赛中前夕，我才会很关注他，并能成功鼓励他勇敢面对挑战，超越自我。
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写作思路
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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两种构思方法
“四到一行”
“线索呼应”
看 听 想 说 做
找出线索，前后呼应
“两法六句”
第一步 依据首句，构思框架
两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。
(1) 读懂两段首句
第一段首句后的衔接句、第一段尾句 、第二段首句后的衔接句。
即第二段的尾句——能体现故事圆满结局的句子或故事给我们启示的句子。
(2) 写好三个衔接句
(3) 写好一个升华句
动作描写
增加细节
所见
所闻、所说
所思
所做
环境描写
人物描写
语言描写
心理活
动描写
第二步 增加细节，展开续写
续故事
Theme
Conflicts
1. 最终David参加比赛了吗？是什么让他改变了主意？
2. 比赛过程中，其他学校的孩子嘲笑David了吗？为什么有或没有嘲笑他？
读后续写一般都用正能量结尾。所以其他学校的孩子们应该没有嘲笑David，反而会很敬佩他，会为他的身残志坚和不畏困难坚持到最后的精神而鼓掌。
-----所以根据事情的发展顺序和所给的首句，Conflict 1 就是第一段要解决的内容，第二段就解决Conflict 2.
续故事
Clues----首句线索
Para1:
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
Para2:
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
Why What was he doing then How was he feeling then
What did I decide to do
What and how did I say to him then, making him determined to run
----I managed to persuade David to join in the race.
----Though David finished the run long after the other children,
he was admired and respected by other kids.
How did he perform in the race
What did I feel when seeing him perform that way
What was the other kids’ response to his performance
续故事
Clues ---- 原文线索
1. His usual big toothy smile was absent today.
2. After making sure ..., his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
3. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.
4. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish.
5. ..., I was familiar with the challenges DAvid faced and was proud of his strong determination.
比赛结束时，受到在场师生的鼓励和钦佩甚至尊敬，David很可能有这个表情。
可以用来描述David赛跑时的样子----动作描述
两个always的部分可以用来描述David在比赛时的结果：他不可能跑赢别人，但仍坚持跑完全程。这可能是有些同学容易忽视的地方。
此处是我能够成功鼓励David参加越野赛跑的基础。所以续写第一段时可以参照此句。
这是David最令人敬佩的品质，也应该是“我”说服他参赛的关键点。
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范文赏析
历年高考英语读后续写真题分析
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We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Seeing his face filled with anxiety, I felt sad, deciding to talk something with him. Turning to David, I smiled, “David, Look, what a wonderful event!” “Yeah!” David smiled weakly, bowing his head. Patting on his shoulder, I said in a soft voice, “I heard you had worked so hard for this event. How I admire your strong determination. Why not give it a try ” “Teacher, I am afraid kids from other schools will laugh at me. I think what the coach said is right.” murmured David, with glum looks on his face. “But David, what counts most is to participate to the best of your ability in whatever we’re doing. Do you agree ” After a temporary hesitation, David nodded in agreement, finally deciding to join in the cross-country team.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. With a blast of the gun, David tried his best to shoot from the start line, but he failed. Painful and a bit embarrassed as he was, he still dragged his feet to keep moving forward. The sun was beating down, the hot weather suffocating. After what seemed years, David, rocking his small body like a cat on a hot brick, eventually finished his run as the last one. When approaching the finish line, he burst into a big toothy smile and waved to me with excitement, crying “ I made it! I made it!” All the kids including those from other schools erupted into a big applause, cheering for his determination and persistence. At that moment, a flush of admiration and joy swept over me.
Characteristics of the language
语言通俗易懂，长短句结合，包含简单句，并列句和复合句（三大从句都有出现）；非谓动结构正在文中也被灵活运用；还含有少量直接引语。词汇丰富，衔接自然。
备考建议
1. 课堂教学中微型训练
给教师的建议
课文/语篇练习/试卷:
对故事后续内容进行猜测 一个情节/一个语段/一两个句子
续写训练穿插于课堂教学过程中
让学生不经意间完成微型的续写任务
由浅入深，循序渐进

要适合自己学生的实际
让绝大多数学生都能读得懂写得出
适时给予积极评价和鼓励
调动学生的想象力和逻辑思维能力，激发学生的写作热情
2. 由易到难渐进式训练
给考生的建议
1. 在阅读中尝试预测后续内容
适当的位置暂停
设想可能的几种结尾
对照原文的结尾
2. 在阅读中积累细节描写素材
多留意故事类文章结构和语言表达
人物描写、动作描写、语言描写、情感描写、环境描写

做好分类积累，以备续写之用
3. 注意积累记叙文的关联词语
记叙文在时间先后、故事起因、发展的共通表达

时间，让步，转折结果，最后感悟
4. 多练多写熟悉续写套路
除了在阅读中积累素材外，一定要多练多写，每周至少写一篇练习。
熟悉评分标准，依照标准去写，在适量练习中总结出适合自己的方法和套路
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