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定主旨明意图 续写不走偏
读后续写高分技巧1
读后续写遵循的原则：
读后续写不是无视原文的独立创作，而应顺着原文作者的思路完成未完成的文本。动手续写前，应先认真阅读原又·埋清原文的人物、故事情节发展线和情感发展线，把握其文本大意和叙事意图图:
①记叙文类的文本大意,即主要人或物描述的主要事件和结果;而叙事意图指故事主要内容、传递给读者的信息，可以是情,也可以是理;
②准确理解原文,根据“谁、发生了什么”,快速理清原文对主要人或物的描写并整理相关事件,提炼原文大意和叙事意图;
③续写部分要在文本大意、叙事意图和主题上与原文保持一致。
举例说明：如 2020 新高考I卷读后续写部分的主题应与原文主题“爱、帮助和善行”一致。
During this past year, I’ve had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK（千斤顶）, and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.
He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw（锯子）from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.
I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.
The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand, but he wouldn’t take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.
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After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
续写四步曲：1 把握原文大意 明主旨和两线
原文大意：作者的汽车出故障后，本以为无人愿意帮忙，没想到墨西哥一家人不嫌麻烦不计回报，帮作者修好汽车。
原文两线：情节线：汽车出故障—好心人帮忙修车—支付报酬；
情感线：disppointed—happy—grateful
叙事意图：叙述一次不计报酬的助人故事，体现无私和传递爱的精神。
2 据两句信息 确定续写方向
1.两段首句定一框:根据段首句关键信息“the girl asked if I'd had lunch”可知,续写首句可写作者对此的回答;接着叙述是否一起吃午饭。又由第二段关键信息“the paper bag”可逆推出，该该段应提及墨西哥家庭给了作者一个纸袋子。
2.二框二首正能量:①根据第二段段首句中的“opened the paper h oag”,第一段首句中的“lunch”和原文中的“a$20 bill”可叙述:纸袋里是吃的和20美元;②尾句应呼应原文主题写出感悟体现正能量:“payit forward”
3. 原续两情相悦 合理添加细节（运用思维导图）
思维导图解析
两“情”相悦续写部分情节线和情感线的发展,应与原文故事情节线和情感线一致,以使“两情相悦”。如图:①续写部分情节线是:和墨西哥家庭一起吃午饭→给作者纸袋→打开纸袋→在纸袋里发现什么，应侧重面部表情、心理活动、动作细节植写;②情感线的走向应是惊喜、惊讶、感激、感动等情感描写。
◎添加细节在描写墨西哥家庭邀请作者吃午饭时，可利用面部表情(如微笑)和动作细节描写。情感细节方面的描写，叙道作者打开纸袋发现里面的东西时应该侧重描写惊讶、感激、感动等情感。
4 沿原语言特点 完美连贯表达
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.My gut feeling was to refuse. But my stomach was growling since I hadn’t eaten for more than four hours. Seeing my embarrassment, the girl just pressed some bread into my hands and changed the subject to talk about my car. After the seemingly simple meal which pulled us closer together, the family was ready to leave. When the father started his truck, the little angel handed me a paper bag, then waved goodbye to me. I stood and watched the truck until it vanished around a turn.
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.
首尾衔接
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.The fruit inside didn’t look perfect, but the tantalizing aroma filled the air. Picking one up to take a big bite, I found a $20 bill in the bag. Recalling their sincere eyes and smiles while chewing the juicy fruit, I felt the warmth flowing into my heart. Certainly, I’ve encountered many indifferent people and I’ve experienced some helpless moments, but I still put my trust in this beautiful world. Because I finally realized one thing that stands the brunt of life throughout its course: a kind heart. (177 words)
出彩表达积累（替换词？）
1. gut adj. 本能的 ——————————————————————————————————————————————————————
2. growl v. 低声吼叫 ————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
3. vanish v. 突然消失————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————————
4. tantalize v. 逗引，招惹
5. aroma n. 芳香；香味
6. indifferent adj. 漠不关心
7. stand the brunt of sth. 首当其冲
8. When the father started his truck, the little angel handed me a paper bag, then waved goodbye to me.
当那位父亲发动他的卡车时，小天使递给我一个纸袋，然后向我挥手告别。（对动作的生动描写）
9. Recalling their sincere eyes and smiles while chewing the juicy fruit, I felt the warmth flowing into my heart.
咀嚼着多汁的水果，回忆着他们真诚的眼神和微笑，我感到温暖流进了我的心里。（对神态的生动描写）
优秀范文2
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.Before I could speak, my stomach answered in a delighted grumble. After ages of hopelessly waiting and an hour of hard work, my body was desperate for fuel. The girl giggled and led me to their truck. There I saw a small portable table. I must have said “thank you” a thousand times during the meal. The father simply smiled and patted my shoulder. His wife gestured to the dishes. “This one good ” she asked. And then I was handed a paper bag filled with Mexican delicacies.
After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.Lying on top of the food was my $20 bill. I immediately looked around for the truck, but it was long gone. Since then, each time I drove past a fruit farm, I would look for a small truck and the family with a heart of gold. But weeks passed with fruitless searches. In the meantime, I began to help travelers with car problems, all for free. I stopped whining and seized every chance to pass on kindness; kindness I hope will reach these good people one day. (175 words)
出彩表达积累（替换词？）
1. grumble n. 咕隆声；隆隆声
2. giggle v. （因感到有趣、窘迫或紧张而）咯咯地笑；傻笑
3. portable adj. 便携式的；轻便的
4. pat v. （喜爱地）轻拍
5. gesture v. 做手势；用动作示意
6. delicacy n. 精美的食物；佳肴
7. whine v. 哭哭啼啼；哭嚷
8. a heart of gold 善良的心
9. Before I could speak, my stomach answered in a delighted grumble.
我还没开口，我的肚子用开心的咕隆声作了回答。（拟人的生动描写）
10. After ages of hopelessly waiting and an hour of hard work, my body was desperate for fuel.
经过长久的无望等待以及一小时的辛苦工作，我的身体极度需要补充能量。（夸张和比喻的生动描写）
微小题训练（每期拓展题：见学案）
续写大题训练（实战作业:见学案）
Para 1: “This is for you!” he said. _____________
Para 2: Confuse, I asked Afzal how he knew so much about me.__________

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