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读后续写 Writing 1
读后续写
WRITING 1
（2021·河北省邯郸市高一下期末）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Once there was a little girl named Emily. Although her singing was very pleasant to hear, lacking courage, she never dared to sing in front of strangers.
One summer, the neighborhood where she lived would hold a singing competition. Her best friend, Lucy, came to invite her to participate in the competition, but Emily said, “I’m afraid to take part in it.” Her mother said, “It’s okay; just do it bravely.” Emily followed her mama’s advice and decided to give it a try. The day came. Emily and Lucy went to the competition site. But she was too timid (胆小的) to walk onto the stage. She had been waiting until others finished singing. She shakily forced herself to stand on the stage. She started to sing, but her voice was so low. What’s worse, she was so nervous that she forgot the lyrics (歌词) after singing a few words. She was laughed at by others. Embarrassed and shy, she ran away from the stage.
Some naughty boys ran after her and said, “Emily, coward (胆小鬼)! Emily, coward!” Emily didn’t argue with them. What she wanted was to go back home as quickly as she could. Finally, she rushed into the house, hugged her mom and cried sadly.
“Well, my poor girl. Don’t cry. Tell me what happened to you,” asked her mom. Emily looked up at her mother and told her what she had experienced.
Listening to her, her mom cupped her face in her hands and said, “It doesn’t matter, my girl. As long as you practice singing more in front of strangers, you will become braver little by little. So, my girl, don’t be beaten by a failure. You can go out to practice singing every day. No matter who is listening to you, go on singing and never stop. I believe there will be a harvest for you.”
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
Emily listened to her mother carefully and followed her mom’s suggestion. _____________________________________
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Paragraph 2:
Going on singing, she walked into the park, where many people were singing and dancing. ________________________
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语篇解读
本文是一篇记叙文。文章讲述了Emily唱歌很好听，但是她没有勇气在陌生人面前唱歌。一年夏天，Emily参加了一个歌唱比赛。由于胆小，她唱歌的声音很小，甚至忘词。淘气的男孩们嘲笑她是胆小鬼。Emily哭着跑回了家。妈妈知道后，鼓励她通过练习在陌生人面前唱歌来让自己逐渐变得勇敢。
难句分析
Although her singing was very pleasant to hear, lacking courage, she never dared to sing in front of strangers. 虽然她唱歌很好听，但由于缺乏勇气，她从来不敢在陌生人面前唱歌。
本句是主从复合句。although引导让步状语从句，主句是主谓宾结构，其中“lacking courage”作原因状语。
审 题 分 析
思 路 点 拨
续写第一段开头：“Emily认真地听妈妈讲话，并听从了妈妈的建议。”通过原文我们可以知道妈妈给Emily的建议是在陌生人面前练习唱歌。那么，接下来可以按照这样的思路来写：
1. What did Emily do
She began to practice singing outside. （与母亲的建议“You can go out to practice singing every day.”一致。）
2. What changes took place？
Her courage （与母亲让Emily练习的目的“you will become braver little by little”一致）；Her voice/singing （与原文中的“her voice was so low”形成对比）；The result （与原文中的“she never dared to sing in front of strangers”相对）
3. What happened while she was practicing （合理发挥想象，充实第一段的情节。）
提示：由续写第二段开头的“Going on singing”可以联想到应该是Emily在练习唱歌时被发生的某件事打扰了。
续写第二段开头：“她继续唱着歌，走进了公园，那里有很多人在唱歌跳舞。”不难想象，Emily唱着歌，公园里的人自然会听到她的歌声。那么，接下来可以想象：
1. What was people’s reaction to Emily’s singing （根据原文中对Emily唱歌的描述“her singing was very pleasant to hear”可猜想，人们应该是欣赏她唱歌的。）
2. How did Emily feel （可以接着描写Emily在看到人们反应后的感受。）
3. How did Emily behave when participating in a singing competition again （原文用了大量笔墨描写Emily参加比赛的过程，此处可以写她再次参加歌唱比赛的表现。）
Paragraph 1:
Emily listened to her mother carefully and followed her mom’s suggestion. She got up early the next morning and began to practice singing outside. Gradually, her courage became ①greater and greater, and her voice was also louder and louder. Months later, she was not afraid at all to sing in front of crowds. ②One of the naughty boys who had laughed at her before cried to her, “Emily, coward! Emily, coward!” However, she chose to ignore his behavior.
①“greater and greater”与“louder and louder”反映了Emily按照母亲的建议去做后发生的变化，她变得越来越勇敢与自信。这与原文最后一段中的“you will become braver little by little”呼应。
②巧妙运用原文中的场景，通过Emily面对同种情况时的不同反应，从侧面反映了她的变化，“ignore”与她之前的做法形成对比。
标准范文及评析
Paragraph 2:
Going on singing, she walked into the park, where many people were singing and dancing. Hearing her beautiful voice, some stopped to enjoy her singing and clapped when she finished the song. Emily felt ③encouraged and was pleased that she could finally sing ④confidently in front of strangers. The second year, the neighborhood held a singing competition again and Emily signed up for it. This time, Emily stepped onto the stage bravely, and her loud and beautiful voice of singing moved the audience present. They all ⑤cheered her, including those who had laughed at her. Her mother was delighted to see ⑥the timid girl had become a brave one.
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③心理描写：人们的反应让Emily受到了鼓舞（“encouraged”）；“pleased”表达出Emily对自己能在陌生人面前自信地唱歌而感到喜悦。
④副词“confidently”与“bravely”呈现了上一段“Emily的勇气不断增加，歌声越来越响亮”的结果，说明Emily变得自信又勇敢。
⑤动词“cheer”反映了人们对Emily的表现的认可。
⑥呼应开头，在故事开始时，Emily是 “lack courage”的女孩，“the timid girl”与之呼应；后来，“brave”与“timid”形成对比，说明Emily最终完成了蜕变。
标准范文及评析
亮 点 词 句
重要词汇
1. Hearing her beautiful voice, some stopped to enjoy her singing and clapped when she finished the song. （现在分词短语作时间状语；when引导时间状语从句）
听到她美妙的声音，一些人驻足欣赏她的歌唱，并在她唱完那首歌时为她鼓掌。
2. They all cheered her, including those who had laughed at her. （who引导定语从句）
他们都为她喝彩，包括那些嘲笑过她的人。
高级句型
1. be afraid to do sth. 害怕做某事
2. laugh at 嘲笑
3. cheer vt. 为……欢呼
4. be delighted to do sth. 高兴做某事
Paragraph 1:
Emily listened to her mother carefully and followed her mom’s suggestion. She often went outside to practice singing in front of strangers. At first, she was very nervous but after some time, she seemed not afraid of doing so. One day, while singing, she met some of those naughty boys, who shouted “Emily, coward!” again. This time, however, Emily ignored their shouts as if she had heard nothing. Seeing Emily didn’t care about their shouts, the boys, who had intended to make Emily feel ashamed, went away in embarrassment.
Paragraph 2:
Going on singing, she walked into the park, where many people were singing and dancing. This was the best place to practice singing in front of a crowd. Her beautiful voice soon attracted the attention of some people, who gave her admiring glances, and as she finished the song, they clapped wildly. Emily was glad she could sing confidently in public. When the second singing competition was held, she entered it again. The big day arrived! Emily, who was the last to sing, performed perfectly and the audience broke into loud applause. Lucy and Emily’s mother, who were also present, waited anxiously for the results. The winners were announced and Emily won first prize.
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高分范文
高分揭秘
1. 续写自然流畅、情节合理：作者能够在阅读前文和提示句的基础上展开合理的想象，设计的情节符合逻辑，衔接顺畅。
2. 描写细致、语言生动、表达准确，较好地完成了写作任务。
3. 使用了大量高级词汇和短语，如“ignore”“care about”“intend to do”“admiring”“give sb. a glance”等。
4. 使用了许多高级句型，如who引导的非限制性定语从句、as引导的时间状语从句等，还使用了复杂结构，如“现在分词+宾语从句”作状语。
写作素材
人物描写——情感
be delighted at 对……感到很高兴/满意
be fascinated by sth. 对……入迷
be keen on sb./(doing) sth. 喜爱，对……着迷
an extremely happy couple 极其幸福的一对
dance/jump for/with joy 高兴地舞/跳起来
be wild with delight 欣喜若狂
an encouraging response 一个令人鼓舞的回应
a pleasant evening 一个令人愉快的夜晚
be/feel on top of the world 心满意足，非常幸福
to one’s great joy 令某人非常高兴的是
a mixture of excitement and happiness
既兴奋又开心
in cheerful/high spirits
心情愉快/情绪高涨
keep one’s spirits up
振作精神；保持高昂的情绪
a satisfied look 满意的表情
be content/satisfied with 对……感到满意
词汇锦囊
幸福和喜悦
写作素材
人物描写——情感
be full of hope 大有希望
have high hopes for sb. 对某人寄予厚望
have hopes of doing sth. 抱有……的希望
exceed one’s expectations 超出某人的预期
live up to expectations 不负众望
with great expectations 满怀希望地
feel hopeful 抱有希望
be (very) hopeful about sth.
对……抱有（很大）希望
be overjoyed at sth./to do sth.
对……感到非常高兴
shed tears of happiness 喜极而泣
yell with delight 乐得大叫
be in a good mood 心情很愉快
set one’s mind at rest 使某人安心
feel inspired/encouraged 受到鼓舞的
perfectly happy 幸福极了，幸福美满
a glimmer of hope 一线希望
词汇锦囊
幸福和喜悦
写作素材
人物描写——情感
During the camping trip, we were all in high spirits. 野营旅行过程中，我们都兴致勃勃。
Her eyes sparkled/twinkled with pleasure. 她的眼里闪耀着喜悦的光芒。
I am feeling on top of the world. 我觉得非常幸福。
I was pleased beyond description. 我的高兴无法形容。
She was in seventh heaven when she met him. 她见到他时异常开心。
The girl was wild with delight. 那个女孩欣喜若狂。
Happiness and joy showed clearly on his weather-beaten face.
他那饱经风霜的脸上洋溢着幸福与喜悦。
Her heart was glowing with happiness. 她的心中洋溢着幸福。
经典例句
幸福和喜悦
写作素材
人物描写——情感
All her heart went up in flames of joy. 她心花怒放。
He nodded, and was filled with joy. 他点了点头，满心欢喜。
Tears of happiness flowed down her cheeks. 幸福的泪水顺着她的脸颊流淌。
When the mother kissed the baby on the cheek, she gave a smile of sweetness.
当妈妈亲吻宝贝的脸颊时，她露出甜蜜的微笑。
They led a happy life with their three children. 他们和三个孩子过着幸福的生活。
Your future is full of hope. 你的前途大有希望。
He was very hopeful about the outcome of the interview. 他对面试结果抱有很大希望。
经典例句
幸福和喜悦
写作素材
人物描写——情感
shake/tremble vi. 发抖，颤抖
stress out （使）焦虑不安
mental stress 思想压力
be/feel stressed (out) 焦虑不安
nervous adj. 紧张的
be desperately nervous
极度紧张
uneasy adj. 不安的
词汇锦囊
紧张和不安
tense adj. 神经紧张的
anxious adj. 焦急的
tension n. 紧张，不安
be on edge 紧张不安
经典例句
He looked anxious when he saw his mother in company with his teacher.
当看见妈妈和他的老师在一起时，他流露出焦虑不安的神色。
Exercise will help improve your physical health and help you cope with stress better.
锻炼有助于改善你的身体健康，帮助你更好地应对压力。
写作素材
人物描写——情感
紧张和不安
经典例句
So nervous was I about my exams that I couldn’t sleep. 我为考试紧张得睡不着觉。
With my heart in my mouth, I went for the job interview. 我提心吊胆地前去参加面试。
Whenever I have to speak in public, I get butterflies in my stomach and my hands are sweaty. 每当我要在公共场合发言的时候，我心里就直打鼓，手心都是汗。
He was pacing the room nervously. 他正紧张地在房间里走来走去。
Tony had had a hard day and his nerves were on edge. 托尼累了一天，神经很紧张。
She tried to hide her nervousness, but it was clear that she wasn’t comfortable when making the speech. 她试图掩饰自己的紧张，但是她演讲的时候显然很不自然。
写作素材
人物描写——情感
紧张和不安
经典例句
Everyone waited anxiously for the winner’s name to be announced.
每个人都在紧张地等待着宣布获胜者的名字。
His voice was full of anxiety. 他的声音饱含焦虑。
She looked at the clock with growing uneasiness. 她看着钟，心里越来越不安。
There was a short period of uneasy calm throughout the region.
整个地区有一段短暂的令人不安的平静时期。
His term paper has been really stressing him out—he just doesn’t know what to write!
他的学期论文让他非常焦虑——他就是不知道要写什么！
She wondered uneasily what he was thinking. 她很不安，想知道他在想什么。
写作素材
人物描写——情感
the joys and sorrows of childhood
童年的欢乐与悲伤
come as something of a surprise 有点惊讶
be overwhelmed by… 对……感到不能自持
be in low spirits 情绪低落
lose heart 丧失信心；泄气
one’s heart sinks 心里一沉
mourn (for) sb./sth.
因失去某人或某物而哀悼/忧伤
a strong sense of loss 强烈的失落感
fall into despair 陷入绝望
be in a bad mood 心情不快
a sense of release 解脱感
ease the pain 减轻痛苦
a broken heart 破碎的心
heartbroken adj. 极为悲伤的，心碎的
be overcome with grief 悲痛欲绝
with a heavy/sinking heart 心情沉重地
词汇锦囊
悲伤和消沉
写作素材
人物描写——情感
He came to me with a long face. 他哭丧着脸来找我。
I feel like I am floating in an ocean of sadness. 我感觉自己漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。
I didn’t want to break down in front of the children. 我不想在孩子们面前失控痛哭。
Jane turned to me with tears in her eyes, and begged me to help her.
简眼含泪水地转向我，恳求我帮助她。
Upon hearing the bad news, Mary felt seized by a burst of sadness and couldn’t help weeping bitterly. 听到那个坏消息，玛丽感到一阵悲伤，忍不住痛哭起来。
Words cannot express my sorrow. 言语无法表达我的哀伤。
经典例句
悲伤和消沉
写作素材
人物描写——情感
She held the letter, her hands shaking/shivering and her eyes showing deep sorrow.
她拿着信，双手颤抖，眼睛流露出深深的悲伤。
When he heard the news of his friend’s accident, his face clouded over.
当听说朋友出了事故时，他的脸色阴沉下来。
经典例句
悲伤和消沉
The dog lay at his feet, looking up from time to time with big mournful eyes.
那条狗趴在他脚边，不时地抬起头来看看，
大大的眼睛里充满了忧伤。
写作素材
人物描写——情感
be speechless with rage 气得说不出话
rage at sb. 对某人发火
complain constantly 不断地抱怨
panic vi. & vt. （使）惊慌 n. 惊慌，恐慌
flame with anger （脸）气得通红
fly into a rage 勃然大怒，暴跳如雷
be shaking/trembling with rage/anger 气得发抖
be dark/purple with rage/anger
（脸色）气得发青/发紫
get irritated 被激怒
get mad at sb. 对某人很生气
afraid adj. 害怕的，担心的
be afraid of sb./sth. 害怕某人/某物
frightened adj. 受惊的
shocked adj. 震惊的
horrified adj. 充满恐惧的，震惊的
startled adj. 吃惊的，受惊的
fearful adj. 可怕的；恐惧的；担忧的
alarmed adj. 担忧的；恐慌的
terrible adj. 可怕的；非常严重的；糟糕的
freeze/stiffen with fear/terror/horror 吓呆
be easily annoyed at trifles 易为琐事恼火
词汇锦囊
愤怒和恐惧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
feel numb with horror 惊呆
a resentful look 充满怨恨的眼神
be paralysed with fear
吓得呆若木鸡
drive sb. crazy/mad 使某人发疯
be furious with sb. 生某人的气
stamp one’s foot in anger 气得跺脚
get annoyed 恼火
词汇锦囊
愤怒和恐惧
经典例句
His remark left his boss speechless with anger. 他的那番话气得老板哑口无言。
Filled with anger, Jim was unable to say a single word. 吉姆满腔愤怒，一句话也说不出来。
He was silent, a fire of rage burning in his heart. 他沉默着，一股怒火在心中燃烧。
Seeing the room was in a mess, he trembled with anger from head to foot.
看到房间杂乱不堪，他气得浑身发抖。
写作素材
人物描写——情感
Mum will be angry with us when she finds out about the broken vase.
妈妈知道花瓶被打破了会生我们的气的。
She was white with anger and could not speak. 她气得脸色发白，说不出话来。
And then the fierce, buried anger surged up into his throat.
然后，埋藏在心头的满腔怒火直冲到他的喉咙里。
Boiling with rage, Jim shook his fist at me. 吉姆怒火中烧，朝我挥拳。
Filled with fury, Jim was unable to utter a single word. 吉姆满腔愤怒，一句话也说不出来。
He looked as if he were going to burst. 他看上去快要气炸了。
His face clouded over with anger. 他怒容满面。
经典例句
愤怒和恐惧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
Sam stormed out of the room, slamming the door furiously behind him.
萨姆冲出房间，狠狠地摔上门。
Sally was mad at the children for making so much noise. 萨莉对于孩子们那么吵闹非常生气。
The young man’s face flushed angrily. 那个年轻男子的脸气得绯红。
A flood of fear welled up inside him. 他心中涌起一阵恐惧。
At the sight of the fierce wolf, I froze with horror, too scared to move an inch.
看到那只凶恶的狼时，我吓呆了，不敢动弹。
Dan rushed out of the room, terror in her eyes. 丹从屋子里冲出来，眼里显出害怕的神色。
Fear flooded over him. 他心中充满恐惧。
经典例句
愤怒和恐惧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
He suddenly realized to his horror that the brakes weren’t working.
突然间，他惊恐地意识到刹车失灵了。
He turned to me, with his eyes full of horror. 他转向我，眼里充满了恐惧。
He was so frightened that his knees were knocking. 他吓得两个膝盖直打哆嗦。
I stood still, scared to move forward and scared to go back.
我站着不动，不敢前进，也不敢后退。
Their faces were white, and their eyes were filled with terror. 他们脸色惨白，眼里充满恐惧。
It made my hair stand on end. 它吓得我毛骨悚然。
I was frightened to move in case the branch broke. 我不敢动，怕树枝断掉。
经典例句
愤怒和恐惧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
I was terrified that my father would find out I had lied to him.
我很害怕父亲会发现我对他撒了谎。
Tom turned white, a look of horror on his face.
汤姆脸色变得苍白，脸上露出惊恐的表情。
She got into a real panic when she thought she’d lost the ticket.
当以为自己把票弄丢了时，她着实惊慌起来。
When he came back he looked scared stiff, as if he’d seen a ghost.
他回来时看上去害怕得要命，好像见了鬼似的。
经典例句
愤怒和恐惧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
unfulfilled adj. 未满足的，未实现的
upset n. 失望，沮丧 adj. 失望的，难过的
discouraged adj. 沮丧的，气馁的
discontent n. 不满；不满足
gloomy adj. 沮丧的
let sb. down 使某人失望
feel let down 感到沮丧
be depressed about sth.
对某事感到沮丧
depressing news 令人沮丧的消息
词汇锦囊
失望和沮丧
disappoint vt. 使失望 → disappointed adj. 失望的，沮丧的 → disappointing adj. 令人失望的 → disappointment n. 失望，扫兴
despair vi. 绝望 → despairing adj. 无望的；感到绝望的
displease vt. 使不愉快 → displeased adj. 不满意的
hopeless adj. 绝望的 → hopelessness n. 绝望
desperate adj. 绝望的 → desperation n. 绝望
dissatisfied adj. 不满意的
写作素材
人物描写——情感
He felt very disappointed about his failure to pass the exam.
他对没有通过考试感到非常失望。
She was completely overcome by disappointment. 她完全被失望的情绪压倒。
Words cannot express how disappointed I was. 言语无法形容我是多么失望。
She swallowed her sigh of disappointment and looked at her dancing partner.
她忍住失望的叹息，望着她的舞伴。
I would think it was a very tearful and desperate time for him.
我认为这对他来说是一个非常令人伤心和绝望的时刻。
经典例句
失望和沮丧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
A police officer gave evidence that on arrival at the police station, the complainant was very upset and tearful. 一名警官作证说，起诉人一到警察局就感到非常沮丧，而且泪流满面。
Lucy gave a frown of disappointment and shook her head after a moment.
露西失望地皱了皱眉头，一会儿又摇了摇头。
“I despair of her,” he sighed. “我对她感到绝望。”他叹息道。
Finally, never leave the examination hall in despair, however hopeless things may seem.
最后，永远不要绝望地离开考场，无论事情看起来多么无望。
I was somewhat gloomy and depressed those days, but I felt refreshed by the surrounding trees and flowers. 那些日子我有些阴郁和沮丧，但周围的树木和花朵使我感到神清气爽。
经典例句
失望和沮丧
写作素材
人物描写——情感
Every nerve in my body is tense. 我的每根神经都绷得紧紧的。
My heart is as sweet as honey. 我心里像喝了蜜一样，甜滋滋的。
Her heart almost leapt into her throat. 她的心快要跳到嗓子眼了。
A smile lit up her face. 微笑使她容光焕发。
A ripple of sadness welled up inside him. 他内心涌起一阵阵悲伤。
His heart was pounding with excitement. 他激动得心怦怦直跳。
Loneliness and grief come in waves. 孤独和悲伤不断涌上心头。
So angry was she that she went red in the face. 她气得面红耳赤。
I felt as if a knife were piercing my heart and my tears kept running down.
我心如刀绞，眼泪不住地往下流。
佳句诵读
写作素材
人物描写——情感
She felt extremely excited and delighted, her eyes glittering/sparkling with joy and sweetness.
她感到极度兴奋和喜悦，她的眼睛因喜悦和甜蜜而闪闪发光。
She bit her lower lip to keep it from trembling and then tears filled her eyes and started running down her cheeks. 她咬着下唇不让它发抖，然后眼泪充满了双眼，开始顺着脸颊往下流。
Her eyes misted over as she immersed herself in their good memories.
当她沉浸在他们之间的美好回忆中时，泪水模糊了她的眼睛。
At the sight of the fierce wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating.一看到那匹凶猛的狼，我就被一股强烈的恐惧感所控制，手心出汗。
When the host announced that she won the prize, her heart was thumping with excitement.
当主持人宣布她获奖时，她激动得心怦怦跳。
佳句诵读
写作素材
人物描写——情感
She thought of the flowers glittering in the sunshine and the mountains turning rosy in the setting sun. And every night she cried, burying her face in her pillow as though her heart would break.
她想起了阳光下闪耀的花朵，落日下慢慢变成玫瑰色的山脉。每一个夜晚，她把脸埋在枕头里
哭，仿佛心都要碎了。
Betty was still in a temper when I arrived. 我到达的时候贝蒂还在发脾气。
He was unable to restrain his anger. 他无法抑制他的愤怒。
The farmers were uneasy until it finally rained. 直到天终于下雨了农民们才安心。
Her tears, like pearls, rolled down her cheeks. 她的眼泪，像珍珠一样顺着面颊滚下。
Gazing at the sweet couple, the butterfly felt she was thrown into the depths of despair.
注视着这对甜蜜的情侣，蝴蝶感到自己陷入了绝望的深渊。
Sitting in the car, Mike was still shivering with fear after such a narrow escape.
迈克侥幸脱险后坐在车里，仍然害怕得发抖。
佳句诵读

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