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Continuation Writing
---A Meaningful Ending
读后续写微写作
Which mermaid is the most beautiful
a meaningful ending
vivid language
reasonable plot
A good continuation writing
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逻辑
语言
结构
阅读下面短文，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的故事。
1.One fall，my wife Elli and I had a single goal：to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill in Manitoba，Canada.
2.Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears-like all wild animals-should be photographed from a safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear，I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes，that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
3.As Elli and I cooked dinner，a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
4.The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp，which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
5.Terrified，Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear，hit pots hard，and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws（爪子）.
6.I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way，but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter（相遇），I took some pictures of the bear.
7.Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes，but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and，through the fence，sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar（吼叫），the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
A few minutes later , the bear headed back to our camp.____________________________________________
At that very moment , the helicopter arrived._____________________________________________________
2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
A. Man and Nature (Adventure)
B. Man and Society (Love & Kindness)
What's the theme of the story
Man and Nature---
People and animals live in harmony
Part 1:
What should you do
when you encounter a polar bear
keep calm
make some noise
ask for help
use pepper spray
helicopter
young,
male,
hungry
30 minutes
how
where
when
who
what
1. Characters (5)：
Read for original information
———————，————，
a_____________, a camper manager, a_______________
my wife Elli
I
polar bear
helicopter (pilot)
helicopter
how
where
when
who
what
2. Three scenes in the story
Scene1: (Para.1-2)
One fall, my wife Elli and I came to a research ______
to _____________ polar bear.
Scene2: (Para.3-4)
As we cooked dinner at camp, a young male polar bear was attracted by our _____________, intending to attack us. It desperately tried to tear down the ________ surrounding the camp.
Scene3: (Para.5-7)
We tried all ___________ actions to scare the polar bear off, and we radioed the camp manager for help, who told us a _____________ was on its way, but it took _____ minutes before it arrived. At this moment, the bear was running to the lake to wash his eyes, which were burned by our ______ _________.
camp
photograph
garlic bread
fence
defense
30
pepper spray
What's the main idea of the story
My wife Elli and I encountered a hungry polar bear at a research camp, and a helicopter is on its way to rescue us.
how
where
when
who
what
Read for arranging information
Paragraph 1:
What did the polar bear do and feel How did we react and feel
Possibly, the bear attempted to attack us again.
And we desperately defend ourselves against it.
It got annoyed and mad, while we were scared but determined...
Paragraph 2:
What did the pilot do What’s the bear’s reaction to the helicopter
Did the helicopter succeed to rescue us and how did we feel
Probably, we were saved.
Beginning
Climax
Happy
& Positive
Ending
At that very moment , the helicopter arrived.____________
A few minutes later , the bear headed back to our camp._____
Ending
⑥首尾呼应结尾
①自然结尾
②主题升华结尾
③融情于景结尾
④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式结尾
Part 2:
Ending Classification in Continuation Writing
A. 对话收尾(Dialogue Ending)B. 融情于景(Surrounding Ending )C. 画面定格(Scene Ending)D. 自然结尾 (Natural Ending)
E. 首尾呼应式结尾(Echo Ending)F. 主题升华(Theme Sublimation Ending)
Discuss and match
E.g. 1 (Para2) At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ...
The helicopter went across the fence, running to the bear. The bear was put into a cage. With the assistance of them, Elli and I were saved.
E.g. 2 ......
Match ending examples with different ending types：
D F B C A E
Para2：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ...
Several persons jumped out of the helicopter with specialized clothes which were able to defend against the bear in case of being hunted. The helicopter went across the fence, running to the bear. The bear was put into a cage. With the assistance of them, Elli and I were saved.
Advantages Disadvantages Tips
根据情节自然发展, 简洁、自然 常结合个人感悟, 否则易趋于平淡 自然结尾常见的元素有：
获救，平安回家，团聚
一、自然结尾(Natural Ending)
Useful patterns:
1. We made it home, safe and sound.
2. We reunited, and had a big dinner to celebrate our rescue. How scaring the day was!/ What an unforgettable/memorable experience!(结合个人感悟)
3. We went back home, tired but relieved. This thrilling experience would take root in my mind forever. (结合个人感悟)
Para2：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ...
It dawns on me that animals are to us what water is to fish.
To protect the environment is to protect ourselves.
It is time for us to take measures to protect our surroundings and give the bear a safe home.
Advantages Disadvantages Tips
主题突出，哲理性语言 赋予文章思想性 对学生思维深度要求较高, 容易套路 哲理性语言可以是个人感悟，或名言警句；常见句式有：It句式、强调句、倒装句、what从句
二、主题升华(Theme Sublimation Ending)
Useful patterns:
1.It dawns on me that...(It句式)
2.It was then that I had a sudden burst of understanding that...(强调句)
3.It’s A (not B) that matters/ counts/ make a great difference.(强调句)
4.In no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.(倒装句)
5.After a storm comes a rainbow. (名言警句)
6.Determination and optimism are what it takes to conquer your fear and accomplish your goal.(what从句)
7.Sometimes, a small act of kindness may be powerful to make a huge difference.(助人为乐)
8.Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous trip before, which was deeply engraved in my mind.(感悟)
Para2：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ... Eventually, we were saved. A ripple of joy swept over me. Looking around, I felt I had never seen such white snow and breathed such fresh air.
三、融情于景(Surrounding Ending)
Advantages Disadvantages Tips
融情于景， 以景烘托心情 易生搬硬套， 不贴合语境 结尾常是温馨美好的自然环境描写，所涉及的元素有：阳光、微风、蓝天、星空、树梢等
Useful patterns:
1.The mist cleared off and the rest of the day was fine.
(迷雾消散)
2.By the time we got home, the storm had given way to the darkness.(风暴过后)
3.The moon appeared in all its elegant whiteness, lightening up the cloudless sky.(月光皎洁)
4.The day was bright, with a fresh breeze blowing.(和风, 天晴)
5.A soft wind kissed the tree tops.(和风，树梢)
6.The hills were bathed in the sunlight.(群山，阳光)
7.Dotted with glittering stars，the sky，midnight blue, gave the scene a fairy-tale quality. (星空)
四、画面定格(Scene Ending)
Advantages Disadvantages Tips
通过定格画面，营造 圆满结局的喜悦， 或物是人非的落差感 对场景画面的分析和表达能力要求高 描述画面常用动作描写和神态描写，如：笑声、拥抱、脸部、手部等；有时结合个人感悟来表达温馨感动、如释重负…
Para2：At that very moment, the helicopter ...
I lay on the plane with my heart pounding violently, eyes fixed on drifting cloud out of the window. Had it not been for the prompt rescue, I would have been a ghost, drifting in the air like the cloud. What a narrow escape!
Useful patterns:
1. Her face lit up/ brightened/ glowed.(脸部)
2. The laughter lingered around the house/
echoed through the house.(笑声)
3. A bright smile appeared on his face/ crossed his face/ played around his mouth.(微笑)
4. Speechless and happy, she held her son tightly into her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.(拥抱)
Para2：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ...
I embraced my wife tightly, saying “Honey, don’t worry, and we are safe now.” Elli answered with tears welling up in her eyes, “Yes, but the animals are losing their homes. Returning home, we should post the pictures of the bears on the Moments to appeal to more people to
protect our surroundings to give the animals safe homes ”
五、对话收尾(Dialogue Ending)
Advantages Disadvantages Tips
简洁、自然 选好对话的立意角度，否则易趋于平淡 对话内容与主题相结合,
配合动作神态描写更出彩；
用介词短语、副词修饰“说”
Useful patterns:
1. “I didn’t mean to,” said Alice in a low voice.
(in a loud/soft/trembling/frightened/...voice)
2. “I will never do it again,” I replied with certainty. (with delight/pride/patience/excitement...)
3. “I can make it!” Jack answered firmly. (calmly/coldly/softly/excitedly/regretfully)
Beginning:
One fall，my wife
Elli and I had a single goal：
to photograph polar bears. We
were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill
in Manitoba，Canada.
Ending2：Though we lost our camp, we got the most valuable things: lots of close photographs of the polar bear!
Ending1：Eventually,
we achieved our goal with such an exciting and dangerous experience!
Advantages Disadvantages Skills
首尾呼应，深化主题 使文章浑然一体 对原文结构有要求， 不是所有文章都适合 适合总分类文章
六、首尾呼应式结尾(Echo Ending)
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Mama and I spend mornings cleaning up the dirt that blows into our house. Mama says all the dust is due to the drought. The dirt is everywhere. It covers our clothes. We have to wash the dishes before each meal. We rarely drive the truck because Papa fears the dust from the road will ruin the motor. So it became our amusement park, where we flash the lights and sound the horn, pretending to be real drivers．
When my sister, Faye, and I walk to school, we wear scarfs over our mouths so we don’t breathe in the dirt. On days when the air is so bad that they close the school, we stay home and help Mama put wet sheets over the windows. But the dirt always finds a way in.
Last Sunday, there was no dirt in the air, only bright spring sunshine and a clear blue sky. After church, Papa headed out to the field to check on the cattle while Mama start dinner. Faye and I played in the yard. The temperature suddenly dropped—it felt good. The heat has been building since dawn.
Then Mama shouted from the house, “Iris, you and Faye get inside, real quickly now!”
I looked to the west and saw a huge black cloud of dust, like thick smoke from a railway engine’s stack. All the birds flew away. “Faye, go with Mama !” I shouted. “I’ ll warn Papa.”
Faye ran towards the house. The storm hit so fast I barely saw her climb the steps. Fine sand beat against my face and in an instant the day turned into night. I tripped over our bicycles left carelessly in the yard. I screamed for Papa, hoping my voice would lead him back.
The dirt and sand stung my skin like a thousand bees. I needed to get to shelter. Covering my face with one hand, I felt my way towards the truck and opened the door. Dirt flew in with me as I pulled the door closed.
Papa is still out there and I needed to help him find the way to the truck.__________________________________
Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window._____________________________________________________
高二上期末考泉州质检读后续写
What's the theme of the story
A. Adventure
B. Family affection
Part 3:
Ending
Beginning
Climax
A storm came
I helped Papa find the way...
(Para.1)
Papa appeared at the window...
(Para.2)
Read for information
We lived in
a place full of
dust and dirt
Papa was still out there
I felt my way to the truck
how
where
when
who
what
2. Can you infer the ending of the story
Para1: Papa is still out there and I needed to help him find the way to the truck.________
Para2: Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window._____________
1. What's the main idea of the story
We live in a place full of ____________.
One day, _________ came. I asked my
sister Faye to get inside with Mama, and
I felt my way to ________, trying to lead _____ back, who was still out there.
dust and dirt
a storm
the truck
Papa
At last, Papa succeeded in getting in the truck.
I felt relieved and Papa was proud of me.
Our family reunited...
Happy
& Positive
Ending
Appreciate & Identify ending types
Para2：Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window. So delighted was I that I automatically pulled the door open despite the dirt and sand. “Thank you, my dear son. Without your guidance, I would have got lost in the darkness.” Dad hugged me tightly, his voice trembling a bit. When the storm ended with everything covered in sand, we reunited with Mama and Feya. From that day on, it dawns on me that someone who loves you will always guide your way home through darkness.
（K二7 施宏涛）
Part 4: Discussion
④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式
结尾
③融情于景结尾
②主题升华结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
①自然结尾
主题升华结尾
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④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式
结尾
③融情于景结尾
②主题升华结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
①自然结尾
Para2：Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window. " Papa!＂I screamed, dizzy with wild joy. After papa entered the truck, we were locked in a wam embrace, tears blurring our eyes. Immersed in the happiness, we forgot the storm. After a while, the storm escaped like a thief, without warning. Out of the truck, the trees were bathed in the amber-like sunshine again. It was then that I have a sudden burst of understanding that calmness was really of great importance in emergency.
（K二6 黄臻贤）
融情于景
+
主题升华结尾
Para2：Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window. Without hesitation, I opened the door delightedly. Papa rushed into the truck and gave me a big hug. He wiped the tears from my face with his huge hands. “Thank you, my dear." Papa said in a trembling voice. I could clearly felt his excitement. The wind gradually slowed down. We went home and reunited with Mama and Faye. Through the window, I smiled at the truck--- it serves as not only a loyal partner sheltering us from danger, but a time capsule reminding us of the thrilling experience.（K二7 陈昕语）
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④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式
结尾
③融情于景结尾
②主题升华结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
①自然结尾
画面定格
+
首尾呼应结尾
Para2：Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window. A wave of happiness and wild joy flooded over me. I opened the door for Papa without delay. Worn-out and dirty, poor Papa was engulfed by the dirt from head to toe. “Papa!” I threw myself into Papa’s hug, feeling it too dramatic to be true. “Dear, we are safe now!" Papa wiped my tears with his rough hands, "You have done a definitely good job!" Papa’s words swept over my fear and horror. After a few hours, we made it home, safe and sound. What a thrilling experience!
（K二6 蔡佳宝）
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④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式
结尾
③融情于景结尾
②主题升华结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
①自然结尾
对话
+
自然结尾+感悟
single type
or
mixed type
Para2：Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window.
My heart leaped with excitement and relief. He opened the door and climbed onto the seat next to me. He coughed and wiped his eyes with dirty hands, then pulled me into his arms. I held Papa tightly and sobbed. I could feel the tears streaming down my dirty cheeks. Papa looked into my face. “I'm so proud of you,” Papa said. “The horn and lights led me to shelter.”____________________________________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
①自然结尾
②主题升华结尾
③融情于景结尾
④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
Write a meaningful ending
Micro-writing
Part 5:
Polish your ending in the final exam or rewrite
a meaningful ending for the story.
Useful patterns for different ending types：
1.We made it home, safe and sound.
2.We were reunited, and we had a big family dinner to celebrate our rescue.
What a scaring/ thrilling/ an unforgettable experience.(结合个人感悟)
1.It dawns on me that...我渐渐明白了...(It句式)
2.It’s A (not B) that matters/ counts/ make a great difference.(强调句)
3.It was then that I had a burst of understanding that...(强调句)
4.In no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.(倒装句)
1.The mist cleared off and the rest of the day was fine.(迷雾消散)
2.By the time we got home, the storm had given way to the darkness.(风暴过后)
3.The moon appeared in all its elegant whiteness, lightening up the cloudless sky.(月光)
4.The day was bright, with a fresh breeze blowing.(和风, 天晴)
1.Her face lit up/ brightened/ glowed.(脸部)
2.The laughter lingered around the house/ echoed through the house.(笑声)
3.A bright smile appeared on his face/ crossed his face/ played around his mouth.(微笑)
4.Speechless and happy, she held her son tightly into her arms, with tears welling up
in her eyes.(拥抱)
1. “I didn’t mean to,” said Alice in a low voice. (in a loud/soft/trembling/frightened/...voice)
2. “I will never do it again,” I replied with certainty. (with delight/pride/patience/ excitement...)
3. “I can make it!” Jack answered firmly. (calmly/coldly/sogtly/excitedly/regretfully)
④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式
结尾
③融情于景结尾
②主题升华结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
①自然结尾
Para2：Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window.
My heart leaped with excitement and relief. He opened the door and climbed onto the seat next to me. He coughed and wiped his eyes with dirty hands, then pulled me into his arms. I held Papa tightly and sobbed. I could feel the tears streaming down my dirty cheeks. Papa looked into my face. “I'm so proud of you,” Papa said. “The horn and lights led me to shelter.”____________________________________
________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Polish your ending in the final exam or rewrite
a meaningful ending for the story.
①自然结尾
②主题升华结尾
③融情于景结尾
④画面定格结尾
⑤对话式结尾
⑥首尾呼应结尾
write a meaningful ending
Micro-writing
Part 5:
The Show Time
A Good Ending
5. Is the handwriting beautiful (书写)
2. Is the ending logical & coherent ？(逻辑性和连贯性)
3. Do you use some advanced patterns & vivid language (语言)
4. Does the ending highlight the theme (主题)
1. Which type is the ending, single or mixed type (类型)
Ending
Echo Ending
Natural Ending
Theme Sublimation
Ending
A Meaningful Ending in Continuous Writing
Surrounding Ending
Scene Ending
Dialogue Ending
A Meaningful Ending matters!
1. Continue to finish and polish the ending.
2. Evaluate the ending to better understand the six ending types and how to write a meaningful ending.
Homework:

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