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动作描写
读后续写之
简单有效的六个微技能
课件结构（建议隐藏）
课件结构（已隐藏）
基础技能：1. 运用具体动词替代笼统动词
2. 运用恰当短语替代普通动词
中阶技能：3. 增加修饰成分
4. 构造动作链
高阶技能：5. 多角度描述肢体动作
6. 构造动作面
如何使动作描写更饱满？
感知:结合语境,如何优化表达？
1. Because of his lies, she looked at him.
Because of his lies, she at him.
2 With only twenty seconds left, I ran to the line.
With only twenty seconds left, I to the line.
3. With only two minutes left, he ate his meal.
With only two minutes left. He up his meal.
4. She heard her mother say quietly as she walked down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up."
She heard her mother as she down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up. "
glared
rush/dashed
swallowed
whispered
tiptoed
Skill 1：Choose Accurate Verbs
用精准动词代替笼统动词
general words（笼统词） concrete words(具体词）
walk
run
look
say/talk
cry
eat
general words（笼统词） concrete words(具体词）
walk (蹑手蹑脚地走)
run (猛冲)
look (瞥见) (怒视)
(凝视)
say/talk (闲聊) (耳语)
cry （啜泣)
eat (咬) （咀嚼) (吞下)
tiptoe
dash/rush
glance
glare
stare
chat
whisper
weep/ sob
bite
swallow
chew
start/begin
decide
cry
remember
tired
see
attract
get down to doing
make up one's mind
burst into tears
keep in mind
worn out
catch sight of
appeal to
Skill 2：Choose proper phrases
用恰当短语代替普通动词
The fierce wolf stared at Mac with its _____________________teeth.
______________________________(adv), he jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the car.
As the hungry wolf was almost reaching him, Mac’s eyes were wide open __________________________. (in/with+名词)
动作描写语料库
in fear/panic/horror/shock
sharp/bloody/frightening/scary/terrible
Immediately/Instantly/ Hurriedly/Breathlessly
Skill 3：
探究
添加介词短语/副词修饰动作
拥抱
hug/embrace
冲向前
跳起来
一把抱住
思考：Which picture is more vivid
感知
Skill 4：
分解动作，形成动作链
Action chains
把动作过程分解成一连串的动作，构造动作链，让你的动作描写既丰富又生动！
一把抱住
she dashed forward,jumped up and hugged the boy tightly.
拥抱 hug
冲向前
跳起来
1. 连续的动作，直接用并列谓语表达。
Sentence pattern 1：
Sb. 谓语 A, 谓语B and 谓语 C
动作链
ACTION CHAINS
More examples
冲向湖边
脱掉衣服
跳入水中
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+
=
孩子们跳入湖中嬉戏
rushed to the lake
took off their clothes
jumped into the water
The boys rushed excitedly to the lake, took off their clothes and jumped into the water.
孩子们兴奋地冲到湖边，脱下衣服，跳进了水里。
思考：跳入湖前有哪些动作
I put on my coat hurriedly, grabbed my bag and rushed to school this morning.
我早上匆忙去上学。
思考：匆忙上学前有哪些动作
穿外套
抓起书包
冲去学校
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+
=
匆忙去上学
put on my coat
grabbed my bag
rushed to school
动作链
ACTION CHAINS
动作链 句型1 Practice
I anxiously glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.
我在台上开始唱歌
扫视观众
紧紧抱住
Wife walked forward,bent down and hugged the husband tightly.
妻子拥抱躺在病床上的丈夫
走上前
弯下腰
深吸一口气
开始演唱
动作链
看到戒指后，妻子感到很震惊。
Seeing the ring, she felt shocked.
句型2 Doing/ Having done,句子
2. 同时发生的动作，可以用现在分词作状语表达。
我父亲拍拍我的肩膀，鼓励我永远不要放弃我的梦想。
My father patted me on the shoulder, encouraging me never to give up my dreams.
如何分解动作链
状从（while, when, as, before, after）
并列谓语动词
（sb did sth1, did sth2 and did sth3 ）
非谓语doing
(sb did sth1, doing sth2或者
doing sth1，sb did sth2）
受惊吓的Mac冲到车的后座，在狼袭击到他之前把门关上了。
麦克毫不犹豫跳下自行车，冲向车的后门，猛然地关上车门。
想到狼血淋淋的嘴，麦克吓得要死，踹不上气。
狼继续追着(chase)车，猛烈地拍打着窗户并咆哮着。
The frightened Mac dashed into the back seat of the car and slammed the door before the wolf struck him.
Mac jumped off the bicycle without any hesitation, dashed to the back door and slammed the door heavily.
Thinking of the wolf’s bloody mouth, breathless, Mac was nearly scared to death.
The wolf continued chasing the car, beating the window wildly and howling.
句式总结
如何分解动作链
独立主格结构
(n./pron.+ doing/ done/adj./prep. phrases…)
狼紧紧地(closely)追赶着小汽车，他凶猛的(fierce)眼睛在车窗外闪闪发光。
两辆自行车放在车的后面，他们在明媚的阳光下出发了。
Mac从自行车上跳下来，吓得满脸通红。
Mac jumped off the bicycle, his face red with fear.
The wolf chased the car closely, its fierce eyes shining outside the window.
Two bicycles placed in the back of the car, they set off in the bright sunshine.
The manager sat quietly in the office and his eyes were closed.
The boy stood there and his face was rigid（僵硬的） with anger.
Example
The manager sat quietly in the office, (his ) eyes closed.
The boy stood there, his face rigid with anger.
摔门
slam the door
手抖
转头
struggle to one’s feet
throw oneself into one’s arms
心激动得直跳
咆哮
用尽全力奔跑
run with all one’s strength
howl
pound with excitement
投入某人的怀抱
挣扎着站起来
turn one’s head around
one’s hands tremble
tears well up inside one’s eyes
眼含泪水
冲进
dash into
扭头往后看狼有多远
紧握把手；用力关车门
跳下自行车；冲进车里；腿抖
心吓得狂跳
探究
dash into the back seat of the car
slam the door
lean against the back seat; his legs tremble
breathless/his heart pound out of control
探究
Skill 5：describe body actions from multi-perspectives
从头部手部腿部呼吸心跳等多角度描写肢体动作
紧紧相拥；投入sb.怀抱；挥舞手臂；举手；拍肩膀；摔门；手抖
低头；抬头；点头；摇头；转头；陷入沉思；挠头
冲向；逃跑；溜进；拖着疲惫的双腿；加快脚步；挣扎着起来；跪下；用尽全力奔跑
心情低落；心融化了；心跳的很快；激动得直跳；心痛
hug tightly; throw oneself into one’s arms; wave one’s arms; raise one’s hand; pat sb on the shoulder; slam the door; one’s hands tremble
lower/bend/ raise/ nod/shake one’s head; turn one’s head around; be lost in thought; scratch one’s head
dash into; flee away; slip into; drag one’s legs; quicken one’s pace; struggle to one’s feet; kneel down; run with all one’s strength
one’s heart sink/melt; beat fast; pound with excitement; one’s heart ache
露出灿烂的笑容；
脸上焕发出了光彩；
喜悦洋溢在脸上；
苦笑；
欢乐涌上眼眶；
最常用的4大动词
耳语；责骂；吹口哨；尖叫；喊叫；好奇地问；安慰；继续说；打断说；咆哮
大哭；抽泣；擦去泪水；抑制泪水；泪水流下脸颊；泪水模糊了视线；眼含泪水
看到；盯着；怒视；扫视；眨眼；目不转睛；直视;
whisper; scold; whistle; scream; shout/yell; ask with curiosity; comfort; add; interrupt; howl
flash a bright smile;
face light up/brighten;
joy spread one’s face;
smile bitterly;
joy well up inside one’s eyes
burst out crying/burst into tears; sob; wipe the tears; hold back one’s tears; with tears streaming down the face; tears blur one’s vision; tears well up inside one’s eyes
catch sight of…
stare at; glare at; glance at; blink; can’t take one’s eyes off…;look into one’s eyes;
hug tightly; throw oneself into one’s arms; wave one’s arms;
raise one’s hand; pat sb on the shoulder; slam the door;
one’s hands tremble
raise/lower/bend/nod/shake one’s head; turn one’s head around;
be lost in thought; scratch one’s head
dash into; flee away; slip into; drag one’s legs;
quicken one’s pace; struggle to one’s feet; kneel down;
run with all one’s strength
one’s heart sink/melt; beat fast; pound with excitement;
one’s heart ache
flash a bright smile;
face light up/brighten;
joy spread one’s face;
smile bitterly;
joy well up inside one’s eyes
catch sight of… stare at;
glare at; glance at; blink;
can’t take one’s eyes off…;
look into one’s eyes;
burst out crying/burst into tears;
sob; wipe the tears;
hold back one’s tears;
with tears streaming down the face;
tears blur one’s vision;
tears well up inside one’s eyes;
whisper; scold; whistle; scream;
shout/yell; ask with curiosity;
comfort; add; interrupt; howl
Skill 6：
构造动作面
Creating a whole picture
把动作和面部表情，心理，语言等结合，形成动作面。
①Encouraged by the teacher's words, Li Hua raised his hand high,
saying, “ I volunteer.”
②Encouraged by the teacher's words, Tom hesitated to raise his hand , whispering, “ ignore me.”
Sentence pattern : Done/Doing, 句子主干 , doing
句子主干, doing +doing
心理
肢体
语言
1. 肢体
2. 面部
3. 心理 4. 语言
动作面 句型1 练习
他们站在空旷的路边，
仰望着天空，
心理
感受着这份珍贵的宁静。
动作面 句型1: doing+句子主干+doing
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up to the sky,feeling the precious peace.
肢体
面部
动作面
贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，眺望远方，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。
肢体
肢体
面部
心理
动作面 句型2 练习
贝贝坐在泳池边，低着头，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。
心理
肢体
肢体
With his head dropped,Beibei sat beside the pool,thinking whether he was white or black.
动作面 句型2: with +逻辑主语+非谓.
Summary
how to describe an action vividly
4.看到一辆车开过来，他猛烈地挥手，希望能搭车。
3.被她的善良所感动，我决定把这份无私的爱传递下去，将来帮助更多的人。
1. 他拦下出租车，拿着箱子跳上去，告诉司机去警察局。
2. 被母亲误解后，她跑回房间，哭得很伤心。
Practice
4.看到一辆车开过来，他猛烈地挥手，希望能搭车。
3.被她的善良所感动，我决定把这份无私的爱传递下去，将来帮助更多的人。
1. 他拦下出租车，拿着箱子跳上去，告诉司机去警察局。
2. 被母亲误解后，她跑回房间，哭得很伤心。
He stopped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police station, please.”.
Deeply moved by her kindness , I decided to pass on the selfless love, helping more people in the future.
Seeing a car approaching, he waved violently, hoping to get a ride.
Misunderstood by her mother, she ran back to her room, crying sadly.
患有脑疾的小男孩David参加越野比赛，赛前他信心动摇想要放弃，“我“鼓励他积极面对困难，战胜自我，David接受了我的建议，尽管困难重重他依然勇敢地完成了比赛，赢得其了同学们的喝彩。(选自2022年高考全国1卷)
请运用所学技巧续写故事：
患有脑疾的小男孩David参加越野比赛，赛前他信心动摇想要放弃，“我“鼓励他积极面对困难，战胜自我，David接受了我的建议，尽管困难重重他依然勇敢地完成了比赛，赢得其了同学们的喝彩。(选自2022年高考全国1卷)
请运用所学技巧续写故事：
Para 2： I watched as David moved to the starting line with the other runners.
He_________________________________________ and I __________________________ ______________________. He_________________________________________________
__________________________________. With a bang, every runner (跑得像箭一样快) _________________. He________________________________________________. ___________, he finished the running. As David, the last one, made it to the finishing line, (时间像静止了一样)__________________________. Thunderous applause broke out, with the name David echoing again and again.
turned his head around to look at me
signaled to him with a thumbs
up, feeling proud of him
smiled, took a deep breath and got ready for the race，
eyes brimming with determination
shot like an arrow
ran with all his strength, in spite of his abnormal steps
Eventually
time seemed to stand still
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