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(共25张PPT)
以2021年8月20开学考为例
以2021年8月20开学考为例---
A girl in search of the end of a rainbow
寻找彩虹源头的女孩
第二节：读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One summer afternoon, when I was about eight years of age, I was looking at a beautiful rainbow that, bending from the sky, seemed to be losing itself in a thick wood about a quarter of a mile distant.
“Do you know, Gracie,” said my brother, who was just recovering from a severe illness, weak and tired, "that if you should go to the end of the rainbow, you would find there precious treasures ”
“Is it truly so ” I asked.
“Truly so,” answered my brother, with a smile but a very serious face.
Now, I was a simple-hearted child who believed everything that was told to me; so, without another word, I rushed out toward the wood. My brother called after me as loudly as he was able to, but I did not take any notice of him.
I cared nothing for the wet grass, on and on I ran. I was so sure that I knew just where that rainbow ended. But when I reached the cedars (雪松林）, the end of the rainbow was not there! Abruptly I saw it shining down among the trees a little farther off; so on and on I
struggled, through the thick bushes, till I came within the sound of a stream. I reached the
bank of the stream, and I could see it a little way off on the other side. I crossed the stream on a fallen tree, and still ran on, though my muscles were aching and my knees shaking.
Suddenly I met in my way a large porcupine (豪猪）. I ran away from him as fast as my tired feet would carry me. In my fright and hurry I forgot to keep my eyes on the rainbow, and when, at last, I remembered and looked for it, it was nowhere in sight!
When I saw that it was indeed gone, I burst into tears, for I had lost all my treasures, and had nothing but muddy feet and a wet and torn dress. So I set out for home.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
But I soon found that my troubles had only begun. ___________________________
Paragraph 2:
At last I heard my own name called. _______________________________________
01
Understand the story and define the theme 读懂故事，确定主题
02
Use the given sentences and keywords to refine the plot 利用给出句和关键词，完善情节
03
Analyze the features of language and make use of micro-writing to enrich expression
剖析语言，巧用微写作，丰富表达
04
Use the micro-writing to perfect the situation
巧用微写作，完善情境
05
Model essay 范文
01 Understand the story and define the theme 读懂故事，确定主题
1. Why did Gracie’s brother call her when Gracie rushed out toward the wood
A. Because her brother regretted telling her the thing.
B. Because her brother fear her taking the treasures.
C. Because her brother wanted her sister to take care of him.
D. Because her brother had taken the treasures.
2. Why did Gracie run on end, ignoring the wet grass
A. Because she was told to do so.
B. Because she was cheated, running for wreaking.
C. Because she was afraid of the porcupine.
D. She believed firmly she could find the rainbow end.
3. What was the feeling when Gracie firstly rushed into the thick wood
A. pessimistic B. fearless C. timid D. nervous
4. Why did the brother mention the precious treasure to Gracie
A. Because there was really a lot of treasure at the end of the rainbow.
B. Because he wanted their family be rich.
C. Because it implied the theme of the article .
D. Because he wanted to prove he was healthy.
（1）阅读理解
（2）厘清脉络
5个W 1个H CONTENTS
who
when
where
what
why
how
Gracie and her brother
one summer afternoon
in a thick wood
Gracie was looking at a beautiful rainbow, when brother told that if she should go to the end of the rainbow, she would find there precious treasures.
Gracie was a simple-hearted child and she believed everything that was told to her.
To search for the precious treasures, Gracie ran out to a thick wood ……
（3）性格特点
We can learn about the traits of each character according to what he/ she says and does, using some adjectives to describe.
……
“Do you know, Gracie,” said my brother, who was just recovering from a severe illness, weak and tired, "that if you should go to the end of the rainbow, you would find there precious treasures ”
“Is it truly so ” I asked.
“Truly so,” answered my brother, with a smile but a very serious face.
Now, I was a simple-hearted child who believed everything that was told to me; so, without another word, I rushed out toward the wood. My brother called after me as loudly as he was able to, but I did not take any notice of him.
I cared nothing for the wet grass, on and on I ran. I was so sure that I knew just where that rainbow ended. But when I reached the cedars (雪松林）, the end of the rainbow was not there! Abruptly I saw it shining down among the trees a little farther off; so on and on I struggled, through the thick bushes, till I came within the sound of a stream.
……
When I saw that it was indeed gone, I burst into tears, for I had lost all my treasures,
……
simple-hearted/
unsophisticated
confident
jocular[ d kj l ]
(爱开玩笑的)
temperamental
[ tempr mentl]
喜怒无常的；性格不稳定的
stubborn
02 Use the given sentences and keywords to refine the plot 利用给出句和关键词完善情节
Paragraph 1:
But I soon found that my troubles had only begun. ___________________________
Paragraph 2:
At last I heard my own name called. _______________________________________
承上
Who called my name
启下
What were my troubles ( maybe lost in the forest)
feelings + reaction
What did I do
What was my situation at last
Why did he/she/they come here
启下
What was my reaction when I heard my own name called
What was his/ her/ their reaction
my feelings + reaction
What was the theme
What did I think of
What did I see
What did he/she/they say
+
+
feelings
feelings
+
由此可知，续文的语言特点要遵循原文的语言特点，做到语言协同。为此，笔者采用微写作的方式，引导学生创造和模仿原文语言，达到与原文语言风格一致的目的。
03 Analyze the features of language 剖析语言特征
【文本句子】One summer afternoon, when I was about eight years of age, I was looking at a beautiful rainbow that, bending from the sky, seemed to be losing itself in a thick wood about a quarter of a mile distant.
定语从句
现在分词作定语
【模仿要点】定语从句，现分作定的句式特点。
【句子仿写】就在我绝望的时刻，我听到了一个声音，在森林上方萦绕，似乎来自
家的方向。
【参考答案】It was the moment when I felt despaired that I heard that a voice, lingering
over the forest, came from the direction of my home.
【文本句子】Now, I was a simple-hearted child who believed everything that was told to me;
【文本句子】 “Do you know, Gracie,” said my brother, who was just
recovering from a severe illness, weak and tired, “that if you should go to
the end of the rainbow, you would find there precious treasures ”
【模仿要点】定语从句、宾语从句、虚拟语气和形容词作状语
【句子仿写】丛林中，感到孤独无助的我躺在地上，又饿又累。想像
着如果这个时候爸爸、妈妈在就好了。
定语从句
形容词作状语
【参考答案】I, who felt lonely in the wood, lay on the ground, tired and
hungry. I imagined that If only my parents were here at this moment.
that引导的宾语从句
if引导的虚拟语气
【文本句子】My brother called after me as loudly as he was able to, but I did not take any
notice of him.
【模仿要点】短语：take notice of = notice 注意
【句子仿写】我没有注意到来时的路，结果迷失在森林中。
【文本句子】I cared nothing for the wet grass, on and on I ran. I was so sure that I knew
just where that rainbow ended. But when I reached the cedars (雪松林）, the end of the
rainbow was not there! Abruptly I saw it shining down among the trees a little farther off;
so on and on I struggled, through the thick bushes, till I came within the sound of a stream.
【参考答案】I didn’t take notice of the way that led me here , lost in the forest.
【模仿要点】短语：on and on + 主+ 谓
【句子仿写】我焦急地寻找着回家的路，像个兔子一样在森林中不停地乱跑。
【参考答案】Anxiously, I searched for the way to go home, on and on I ran randomly just
like a rabbit .
【文本句子】I ran away from him as fast as my tired feet would carry me.
【句子仿写】尽管是白天，茂密的森林发出阴冷的光，好像一个巨大的怪物，张开
它的血盆大口，好像要把我吃掉。恐惧爬上了我的心头，使我浑身不寒而栗。
【参考答案】Daytime as it was, the thick forest glowed coldly and it was like a
huge monster, opening his endless mouth as if to eat me. Fright crept up on me/
A chill ran down my spine, making me shiver nonstop.
【模仿要点】无灵表达
【句子仿写】在空无一人的森林里，恐惧深深地抓住了我。
【参考答案】There was nobody but me in the forest, terror seized me deeply.
【文本句子】In my fright and hurry I forgot to keep my eyes on the rainbow, and when, at
last, I remembered and looked for it, it was nowhere in sight!
【模仿要点】keep one’s eye on 注视，监视； in sight 看见
【句子仿写】我靠在树上，抬头注视着天空，努力迫使自己冷静下来：我必须想出一
个办法使自己走出森林。
【参考答案】I dropped myself against the tree, keeping my eyes on the sky. At the
same time, I forced myself to compose to figure a way out but in vain.
【句子仿写】一看见哥哥，我就像离弦的箭一样朝他飞奔过去，委屈地嚎啕大哭。
【参考答案】The moment my brother was in sight, I ran towards him just like an
arrow leaving the bow, sobbing my grievance to him.
【文本句子】When I saw that it was indeed gone, I burst into tears, for I had lost
all my treasures, and had nothing but muddy feet and a wet and torn dress. So I set
out for home.
【模仿要点】be gone 消失了，不见了； nothing but 只有
【句子仿写】最后，我眯着眼睛凝视着天空，天上除了白云什么都没有。天
上的彩虹不见了，这使我伤心极了，心仿佛被撕成了碎片。
【参考答案】Ultimately, I stared at the sky, narrowing my eyes, there being
nothing but white cloud. The rainbow in the sky was gone, which made me
overwhelmed by sadness, and my heart was shattered into thousands of
pieces.
向学生强调细节对情境的重要性，并对细节进行分类，包括语言、心理、动作、表情、场景等。每一种类的细节都有其相应的作用。老师们可以利用微写作，创设相应的情境，赋予故事生命力和鲜活的画面感，让续写内容更加生动、有趣。
【参考译文】Daytime though it was, I felt as if it were dark night. In the middle of an
empty jungle, I was scared to death，standing rooted to spot.
【创设情境】虽然是大白天，可是在我心里，白天犹如漆黑的夜。在空无一人的茂密丛
林中，我吓得要死，呆在原地放声大哭。
比喻
夸张
心理描写+ 修辞
04 Use the micro-writing to perfect the situation 巧用微写作，完善情境
04 Use the micro-writing to perfect the situation 巧用微写作，完善情境
【参考译文】In the hot summer, the jungle is impenetrable , which made me sweat. Finding
no way to go home, I had difficulty breathing as if there were ten suns burning in the heart
due to my anxiety. Feeling a surge of helplessness, I couldn’t resist crying in despair.
【创设情境】炎热的夏天，丛林里密不透风，这使我满身是汗。找不到回家的路，我害
怕地喘不过气来，着急地好像有十个太阳在心里燃烧。我的无助感油然而生，情不自
禁地绝望地哭了。
【创设情境】正午的阳光热辣辣地撒向大地，投下的树影像一条条爬来爬去的蛇，吐着
长长的舌头朝我扑过来，我害怕极了，大声哭喊，感觉自己的心好像从身体里被撕开
了一样。
【参考译文】The sun on the noon was blazing down on the ground, casting tree shadows
like snakes crawling back and forth. They threw themselves at me with their long tongues,
and I was terrified, crying my eyes out. I felt as if my heart had been ripped from my body.
场景描写+心理活动+ 修辞
场景描写+心理活动+ 修辞
夸张
夸张
夸张
【参考译文】 When my brother and mother suddenly placed their foot before me，I felt
as if I had seen my family after ten years’ departure, and tears were welling up in my eyes.
I ran to them like a bird with my arms outstretched . At this point, I felt the air as fresh as a
rose, the sun as gentle as a girl and the smile on my face shone like a diamond.
【创设情境】当哥哥和妈妈突然出现在我眼前的时候，我就像看到了分开十年的亲人，
激动的热泪盈眶。我张开双臂，像鸟儿一样朝他们飞奔过去。此时，我感到空气如玫
瑰般清新，阳光如少女般温柔，我脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪闪发光。
夸张
无灵表达
比喻 + with的符合结构
比喻
动作描写+ 修辞
04 Use the micro-writing to perfect the situation 巧用微写作，完善情境
【参考译文】At last I heard my own name called，I was at the top of the world. All sadness and fatigue escaping from my body, I sprang to my foot, waved furiously towards the direction that voice came and raised a cry of warning, “Here I am.”
【创设情境】当听到有人叫我名字的时态，我高兴极了。忘记所有的伤心和疲倦，从地
上一跃而起，朝喊我的方向，拼命地挥手，并大声疾呼，“我在这儿。”
俚语表达
无灵表达
动作描写+ 无灵表达+俚语
【参考译文】A crooked smile overwhelmed him when he caught siht of me. He hugged me tightly, saying. “The most precious treasure in the world is kinship, not the rainbow in the sky.” I also hugged him with my eyes wet as if I wanted to squeeze the breath out of him.
【创设情境】当哥哥看到我的时候，一股歉意的微笑挂在他的脸上。 他紧紧地抱着我，
说，“世间最最珍贵的珍宝是亲情，不是天上的彩虹。” 我的眼睛湿润了，紧紧地抱着
哥哥仿佛想把他的呼吸挤出来。
无灵表达
夸张
动作描写+ 无灵表达+修辞
04 Use the micro-writing to perfect the situation 巧用微写作，完善情境
05 Model essay 范文
习作点评：
该生语言错误较少，能运用场景、心理等描写渲染氛围，且多处用到无灵表达,语言地道；能运用修辞，使语言鲜活，画面感强；在衔接、语言、主题等方面都与原文做到了无缝对接，是一篇很不错的作品。
两段的给出句与续写句衔接自然
第一段写到了“我”正在的孤苦无助的时候，听到了有人叫我的名字，两段间的衔接很自然
原文语言的产出，非常好
修辞：比喻
心理描写
动作描写
动作描写
升华主题与
原文呼应
A possible answer(共26张PPT)
01
02
03
04
Learning Objectives
The Roles
of the Endings
Different Styles of Endings
The Model Essays
The Application
成功的结尾在读后续写中起着至关重要的作用。精彩的结尾能使读者更加深入、透彻地理解文章内容，进一步领会文章的主旨, 亦能唤起读者的思考与共鸣，增强文章的感染力。在结构上，成功的结尾不仅能够起到总结上文而且还能首尾呼应，使文章结构完整；在内容上，成功的结尾不仅能深化主题起到画龙点睛的作用还可以言有尽而意无穷，留下想象的空间，增强感染力。
②融情于景式结尾
Different Classification of Endings
③主题升华式结尾
④首尾呼应式结尾
⑤悬念式结尾
⑦对话式结尾
⑧回忆式结尾
⑨欧亨利式结尾
①自然式结尾
⑩画面定格式结尾
⑥留白式结尾
高考链接 --- 2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world” - the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears-like all wild animals-should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though-he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws（爪子）.
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter（相遇）, I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar（吼叫）, the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Para 1.
A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. _______________
_______________________________________________________________
Para 2.
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. _________________________
_______________________________________________________________
① 自然式结尾：即用事情的结果作为文章的结尾,事物叙述完了,
文章随之结尾.
高考链接---2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
结尾：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. It resembled a bright light sparking our life. Several persons jumped out of the helicopter with specialized clothes which were able to defend against the bear in case of being hunted. They went across the fence, running to the bear. The bear was put into a cage. With the assistance of them, Elli and I were saved.
点评：根据故事的情节自然发展，简单、自然，没有套话和空话，只要把事情讲清楚就可以了。
② 融情于景式结尾：用现实的景色描写来表达人物内心的情感，
达到不言情而情自溢的效果。
高考链接---2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
结尾: (前面略）Eventually, we were saved. A ripple of joy swept over me. Looking around, I felt I had never seen such white snow and breathed such fresh air.
点评：“I had never seen such white snow and breathed such fresh air.”作者融情于景，将自己被救后的心情淋漓尽致地表达出来。
③ 主题升华式结尾：总结归纳文章的主题，用哲理性语言结尾，使文章
具有一定的思想性。可以是大家熟悉的名言警句，也可以是自已组织
的哲理性语言。
高考链接---2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
结尾：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. Catching sight of the helicopter, a ripple of hope creeping into my heart, I yelled out with my all strength, “Here! Help us!” Having found us, the helicopter quickly took action to help us out. So the bear failed to attack us, we were both in safety. Out of danger, I breathed with relief, hugging my wife tightly. It was the hunger that made the bear have the courage to attack us. It dawns on me that animals are to us what water is to fish. To protect the environment is to protect ourselves. It is time for us to take measures to protect our surroundings and give the bear a safe home.
点评：以感悟结尾。通过这件事，作者得到了什么样的人生感悟或启发。
高考链接---2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
开头: One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal：to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”-the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
④ 首尾呼应式结尾：指在开头和结尾的内容上要有着极其密切的关系是对
同一情况做出解释、说明、交代的。呼应可以使文章浑然一体更具有突
出的作用。内容上也要协调一致，前后呼应。
结尾1：Eventually, we achieved our goal with such an exciting and dangerous experience!
点评：这篇读后续写的开头写到我的妻子Elli 和我有一个目标：去拍北极熊。续写结尾的时候可以写目标的实现，和开头提出的目标首尾呼应，达到深化主题的目的。
结尾2：Though we lost our camp, we got the most valuable things: lots of close photographs of the polar bear!
高考链接---2020年7月浙江高考读后续写
结尾: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. One of the rescuers with a gun ran to the roaring bear, firing a bullet at it. It fell down to the ground, dead. We were safe. However, looking at “the dead bear”, Elli couldn’t resisted sobbing. Her happiness gave way to sorrow. The rescuer seemingly related to her, grinning with delight and told her that the bear wasn’t really dead and it just fell asleep. Actually, the bullet was just “ a drugged medicine ”. Hearing this, so happy were we that we took advantage of the chance to take some photos. We determined to make use of the photos to call on more persons to protect the earth’s environment.
⑤ 悬念式结尾: 文章开头部分，先将疑问悬在那儿，让人念念不忘，存有
种种猜想，在蓄积了长时间后，再解开“悬念”，写出结局。悬念式结
尾方式，可以造成情节的曲折有致, 牢牢地吸引读者，取得出奇制胜的
效果。
设悬念
解悬念
点评：由 “a gun fire dead ”设置悬念，让人以为熊被打死了，然后解开悬念，射出的只是“ a drugged medicine ”给人虚惊一场。
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结尾：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. Shocked by the noise, the bear stopped and turned around, seeing the persons equipped with the guns, and he ran away, disappearing in the woods as if he knew who they were. We finally got our breath and Elli and I embraced tightly with still pounding hearts. After we calmed down, the local persons told us that the bears were losing their homes and food because of human activities and climate changes. On the way back home, I checked the precious pictures in the camera, lost in thought. This experience would be remembered forever.
⑥ 留白式结尾：第一种结局留白 在写作中的作用就是留下让读者思考参
与情景的空间 是一种加深主题的手法给了想象空间又在前文中有所提
示 ；第二种是情节留白让读者自由补白随意想象。
点评:“lost in thought”给读者留下想象空间：到底是当地人的话让他陷入了沉思呢还是此次死里逃生的经历让他陷入了沉思呢？
⑦ 对话式结尾：很显然是以对话方式结尾，但前提是需要立意佳, 否
则会弄巧成拙。
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结尾： At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. The sound of it lit up our mind and we both took a deep breath. The bear was arrested into a cage and we were rescued successfully. I embraced my wife tightly, saying “Honey, don’t worry, and we are safe now.” Elli answered with tears welling up in her eyes, “Yes, but the animals are losing their homes. Returning home, we should post the pictures of the bears on the Moments to appeal to more people to protect our surroundings to give the animals safe homes ”
点评：以对话方式结尾，而且立意佳。
⑧ 回忆式结尾：顾名思义就是以回忆的方式结尾。它能深化文章主
旨, 突出作者的思想, 烘托出温暖的氛围, 更能感染读者产生共鸣!
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结尾：… The fact was that we were safe. But now, every time I saw the pictures in my camera, my heart pounded quickly. The breathtaking scene suggested itself to me: The hungry bear was throwing itself at us with roar. The thought of the scene pained me. It was time to take measures to protect our surroundings to give animals a peaceful and safe home.
点评：以回忆的方式结尾，让情景再现，从而引出主题：是时候采取措施保护环境，给动物们一个宁静安全的家园。
⑨ 欧亨利式结尾：在文章情节结尾时突然让人物的心理情境发生出人意料
的变化，或使主人公命运陡然逆转，出现意想不到的结果，既在意料之
外，又在情理之中，给人以出乎意料的感觉，又不得不承认他的合情合理。
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结尾：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. The rescuers shouted that we should keep a safe distance from the bear. Then we dragged ourselves away from the dangerous animal, less worried. In a flash, they arrived quickly, only to find that the bear had relieved its anger possibly due to the garlic bread. They dropped their jaws in amazement and tried to compose us down. Elli and I hugged each other, joyful tears streaming down our faces! Eventually, we shared the pictures with the rescuers in return for their timely help.
点评：营救人员本来是来救他们的，但出乎意料的是，当他们赶到现场时，夫妻已经安然无恙了。他们两个已经用自己的“大蒜面包”救了自己，这既在意料之外，又在情理之中。
⑩ 画面定格式结尾：以特定的画面结尾。这个画面既可以是开头画面的
再现（相同画面再现，要么给人“物是人非”的沧桑感，渲染悲凉的气氛，
要么给人大团圆的喜庆感），也可以是其它的画面，映衬人物当时的心情。
点评：结尾将画面定格在“躺在飞机上，眼睛盯着窗外飘忽
不定的云”，映衬了此时的心情是受惊吓之后的“心有余悸”。
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结尾：At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. With a heavy load taken off my mind, I bit my lips tightly to hold back my tears, gripped Elli’s hands tightly and ran into the helicopter. Unable to stand the tremendous deafening noises from the helicopter, the bear escaped from my camp. Meanwhile, I lay on the plane with my heart pounding violently, eyes fixed on drifting cloud out of the window. Had it not been for the prompt rescue, I would have been a ghost, drifting in the air like the cloud. What a narrow escape!
画面
心情
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. The loud noise from it scared the bear off. Seeing the bear ran away, not until that time did we really realize we were safe, paralyzing on the ground with a ripple of excitement running through our whole body. The wildly pounding heart sped down. Suddenly, Elli and I thought of our goal----to photograph the bear. Knowing the rescuers would save us, we gathered our courage and used the garlic bread to tempt the bear back. While it was swallowing the bread, We took a lot of pictures with our camera. Back to the camp, we still wore a mixed expression of excitement and panic. What a narrow escape!
欧亨利式结尾
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Looking at me shivering with coldness, she asked me in surprise, “what had happened ” Before I answered, she quickly took off my wet coat and gave me a hot bath. After then, she asked me to rest on the bed. I sobbed out my grievances to her. Fuming with rage, she told Harry off. His head drooping, Harry was fear-ridden, saying nothing. So ashamed was he that he could feel the blood rush to his face. Scolded as he was, he didn’t change himself thoroughly and I changed myself root and branch. After that, the pond put a brand in my heart that I could never erase. It was “the pond” that made me understand at times we should say “No” to others in the first place. I didn't try to please others any more to put my ass on the line.
主题升华式结尾
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
God also felt sad and sighed to the butterfly, “Do you regret what you have done ” The butterfly cleaned her tears on the face，“No.” God felt a bit relieved and said，“Tomorrow you can become human again.” But she shook her head and said, “No, I want to be a butterfly for the rest of my life...” Then the butterfly would stay together with her lover forever. On the top of the mountain, she seemed to enjoy the sunrise and the sunset happily with them.
画面定格式结尾
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
As a proverb says, “Every coin has its two sides. Making full use of your strength is your achievement. Please remember that in no case will you give up especially in trouble. God is fair to everyone.”
主题升华式结尾
The beggar hesitated for a moment, and then he decided to open it. He declared aloud, “Who cares He wanted me to have it anyway. I might as well enjoy it now.” With that, he unwrapped the white tissue paper, but to his surprise, there was no hard rock candy inside. Instead, into his fingers fell a shiny white pearl worth thousands of dollars.
留白式结尾
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
Regretted and sad, Mike began crying.
“What had happened ” Mike couldn’t believe his ears--- it was Jack.
“People aren’t very friendly.” Mike answered with tears in his eyes.
Jack just held Mike’s hand and said: “You just have to give them a chance. Anyway, I’ll accompany you to the end.”
对话式结尾
Finding the man a robber, the police arrested him and threw him into prison.
自然式结尾
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
首尾呼应式结尾
开头：A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day.
结尾：What a funny day.
Mike was a frozen statue when he watched Jack walking away. Memories came flooding back. Two years earlier, it was he that accompanied Jack to walk along down the hall and to walk into the gym.
回忆式结尾
Para2: “Mom,” the kids asked, “Who was that Why did you give her our flowers Is she somebody’s mother ” I was curious, too. But my wife said she didn’t know the old woman. But it was Mother’s Day, and who wouldn’t be cheered by flowers “Besides,” she added, “I have all of you, and my mother, even if she is far away. That woman needed those flowers more than I did.” This satisfied the kids, and left me thinking. I bought half a dozen young lilacs bushes and planted them around our yard. Every Mother’s Day our kids gather beautiful lilacs. And every year I remember that smile on a lonely old woman’s face, and the kindness that put the smile there.
判断下面段落采用了哪种结尾方式？
悬念式结尾
回忆式结尾
读后续写不同的结尾方式给人的感觉不同。自然式结尾使续写故事娓娓道来，条理清晰；欧亨利式结尾能使平淡无奇的故事情节陡生波澜，撞击读者的心灵，产生震慑的力量；伤感的结尾令人回味，引人思考；高兴的结尾给人以欣慰愉悦之感；留白式结尾给读者留下想象空间，可以让读者进行艺术的再创作。悬念式结尾让读者带着疑问去揭晓谜底。总之，结尾方式无优劣之分，只要运用得体都是好的，同学们在续写时可以根据自己的喜好进行选择。
结尾方式无好坏之分，得体就好(共29张PPT)
以2020年6月浙江五校联考为例
读后续写都是围绕一个事件的冲突，要求构思一个处理问题的办法及处理冲突完毕后的释怀感悟等。
Dimensions of Thinking Quality
What
How
缺乏思维品质导致的问题：
文章缺乏生命力、灵动感
情节构思缺乏思维高度、深度
不能巧取角度、错失有效信息
文章立意肤浅、缺乏思想
文章思维偏离、导致离题
……
examples
Paragraph 1:
Everyone was shocked to see the blood-spattered mouth. ____________________
Paragraph 2:
Hearing the dog’s noise, the babysitter rushed to the room. ___________________
案例1：
Neil loves to travel and he was so fond of forests. Whenever he plans for a holiday, he would choose a place that is blessed by Mother Nature. To celebrate his son’s second birthday, he decided to stay and enjoy the celebration in woods, located at the lap of a mountain.
He with his family and friends, reached the village located near the woods and had his stay in the cottage. The cottage was located at the entrance of the dense forest, where the villagers warned them of wolves roaming in the nearby place.
Neil’s son saw a dog at the door and offered him a biscuit. The dog was happy and very soon the little boy befriended the dog. On second day, the birthday of the boy was celebrated grandly in the woods within beautiful nature. The dog did not leave the boy even for a minute and they both became close pals.
The next day, Neil, his wife and others decided to go for hunting in the forest and arranged a babysitter to take care of the little baby for half a day.
After 3 hours, all the elders returned to the cottage and they seemed very tired. The dog saw Neil and others, it rushed to them and licked Neil’s shoes. The cottage was open and nobody was there.
Neil’s wife was shocked to see the blood stains in the dog's mouth and she shouted. All of them thought that the dog has killed Neil’s little boy.
情节构思不合理，思维品质差，人物角色不明
狗非但被杀了，还被剥皮了。是不是太没人性了？人文素养呢？
小孩从外面拿着东西进来，质问“为何伤害我好朋友？” 两岁的孩子会用这种语气说话吗？
即使出现上文因为愤怒和误解而杀害了狗，第二段应该出现了解真相后，而懊悔和反思，不能一杀了之。
案例分析1：
反思：学生写出这样的文章，构思出这样的故事情节，根本原因不是语言水平的问题，而是缺乏基本的思维品质，才限制了文本的内容和高度。
Carl and Henry worked in the same company. One day they were both called into the manager’s office. They were informed that they were fired. It was a big hit to both of them.
Carl had a family to support. He knew he must keep earning money, or his family would suffer hunger. However, he also knew he had got fired of working at the company.
“Maybe it’s a good opportunity for me to start my own business,” he said to himself. After talking with his wife, he made a decision to start a career that he had always wanted to do. It was the first time for him to do business. So it was not surprising that things didn’t go well at first. However, Carl didn’t get discouraged. He worked hard and gradually his business got better and better. As a result, his business went so well that it expanded quickly.
So what did Henry do after he lost his work Well, he reacted quite differently. “Why me ” he asked, “Why did such a bad thing happen to me It’s so unfair!” Instead of thinking about what to do later, Henry kept complaining.
“You should go to work again, or you’ll become homeless,” his friends said to him. But Henry didn’t listen. He couldn’t stop thinking that life was unfair to him. The more he thought like that, the more he didn’t want to find work. What was worse, he started drinking alcohol. At last, he even couldn’t afford the rent and had to sleep on the street. As his friends had warned him, he became homeless.
One day, while sitting by the street, Henry was given a newspaper by a passer-by. It was cold that day and the passer-by thought that a newspaper might help keep him warm a bit. By chance, Henry saw a picture of a man in the newspaper, and there was a report about the man. He thought the man in the picture was a bit familiar to him. But he couldn’t remember who he was.
Paragraph 1
Henry decided to read the report. _______________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2
Henry started looking back upon his life after he lost his work.________________________________________________
案例2：
案例分析2：
本案例讲述的是两个同事同时被公司裁员的事件。一个被裁员后对生活充满抱怨，觉得生活对他不公平，于是自暴自弃，结果流落街头，成了无家可归的流浪汉。而另外一个在被裁员后，觉得这是生活给他的另外一个机会，为了生活他得奋斗，于是多年后他成功了，成了报纸刊载的成功人士。
Paragraph 1
Henry decided to read the report. ____________________________________
Paragraph 2
Henry started looking back upon his life after he lost his work. ____________
Paragraph 1
Henry decided to read the report. ___________________________________
Paragraph 2
Henry started looking back upon his life after he lost his work.____________
思维品质：
1. 看到报纸后的“好奇心”
2. 从同事身上发现“坚韧、勇敢”
3. 自我反思后对未来的“希望”，摆脱现状的“上进心”“乐观”
4. 遇见这份报纸的“感恩”
Henry decided to read the report. The hero of the story is a successful man who started his own business after being fired. losing a job is absoultely a shock to everyone who has a family to support and Carl was no exception. However, he picked himself up quickly and moved on instead of complaining. Eventually, his efforts paid off. Admittedly, he was the very man fired together with him. But why did they write totally different destinies (命运)？
Henry started looking back upon his life after he lost his work. To his surprise, he found his life was of nothing but complaints. Had he taken his friends’ advice, he wouldn’t be homeless now. It dawned on him that it was not the unfair fate but his negative attitude that ruined his life. Then, with the carefully folded newspaper in his pocket, he stood up and walked to the direction of a brand new life.
该学生紧抓所给文章的意象，借助留白的结局塑造了一个很唯美的画面，把文章需要的氛围点缀的很到位，没有直抒其意, 而是让读者自己去营造一个意境。
“Then, with the carefully folded newspaper in his pocket, he stood up and walked to the direction of a brand new life.” 该句中的 “carefully folded newspaper” 和 “walk to the direction of a brand new life”
中的 “carefully” “brand new” 把Henry对未来的期望，对改变现状的决心以及可期的成功都淋漓尽致的表达了出来。
浙 江 五 校 读 后 续 写
Theo stood at the microphone. Silence settled over the hall. “Your word is onomatopoeia,” said Mr. Ramirez, the announcer. I got this! Theo thought. Spelling was sort of his superpower. He wasn’t a math or science guy, but he had a gift for spelling.
Theo’s brain fast-forwarded to the spelling bees ahead: first the county championship, then the state championship, and finally the national spelling bee. “Your answer, please, Theo ” He glanced back at Alexa, another fourth-grader, sitting on the edge of her chair. She wanted another chance at winning. If he missed his word, she’d be back in the game. But that wasn’t going to happen. Theo got the right spelling.
Theo’s sister, Deandra, who had also competed but missed her word, applauded with the rest of the crowd. Mr. Ramirez presented the trophy (奖杯) to Theo. He lifted both arms into the air. “I’m the alpha-best.” Then he raced toward his sister. “Ha!” Tero said, making the trophy dance in front of Deandra’s nose.
She rolled her eyes. “You’re a terrible winner.”
“What’s wrong with celebrating my victory ”
Deandra crossed her arms and made a sour face. “You know, it wasn’t cool the way you ignored Alexa onstage. She tried to shake your hands.”
Theo shrugged. “I didn’t notice. Anyway, county bee, here I come!”
“You might want to crack open the dictionary before counties. In two weeks, you’ll be facing the best of the best.”
“And they’ll up against me, the alpha-beast.”
Deandra shook her head. “Well, good luck. I think you’re going to need it.”
Two weeks passed in a blink. As the county bee, students from different schools gathered around onstage, some looking more worried than others. Finally, it was time for the contestants(选手) to take their seats.
After six rounds, the group of more than 100 students decreased to just seven. This was no regular spelling bee. Theo barely made it through the last round with a lucky guess on conscience. And if he’d had to spell aerospace or conical, he’d be out already. His sister’s advice suddenly made sense.
Paragraph 1:
When it was his turn again. Theo stood frozen for the longest moment. ____________________________________
Paragraph 2:
The following Monday at school, Theo found Alexa in the lunchroom. _____________________________________
分析文本暗含的思维品质 Para. 1
Theo stood at the microphone. Silence settled over the hall. “Your word is onomatopoeia,” said Mr. Ramirez, the announcer. I got this! Theo thought. Spelling was sort of his superpower. He wasn’t a math or science guy, but he had a gift for spelling.
self-confident/ proud
Deandra : generous, considerate
kind; honest
分析文本暗含的思维品质 Para. 1 - Para. 9
Theo’s sister, Deandra, who had also competed but missed her word, applauded with the rest of the crowd. Mr. Ramirez presented the trophy (奖杯) to Theo. He lifted both arms into the air. “I’m the alpha-best.” Then he raced toward his sister. “Ha!” Tero said, making the trophy dance in front of Deandra’s nose.
She rolled her eyes. “You’re a terrible winner.”
“What’s wrong with celebrating my victory ”
Deandra crossed her arms and made a sour face. “You know, it wasn’t cool the way you ignored Alexa onstage. She tried to shake your hands.”
Theo shrugged. “I didn’t notice. Anyway, county bee, here I come!”
“You might want to crack open the dictionary before counties. In two weeks, you’ll be facing the best of the best.”
“And they’ll up against me, the alpha-beast.”
Deandra shook her head. “Well, good luck. I think you’re going to need it.”
Theo :boastful / over-confident; rude
Two weeks passed in a blink. As the county bee, students from different schools gathered around onstage, some looking more worried than others. Finally, it was time for the contestants(选手) to take their seats.
After six rounds, the group of more than 100 students decreased to just seven. This was no regular spelling bee. Theo barely made it through the last round with a lucky guess on conscience. And if he’d had to spell aerospace or conical, he’d be out already. His sister’s advice suddenly made sense.
Prediction:
Will he win the final round Did he realize his problem
分析文本暗含的思维品质 Para. 10-11
Paragraph1:
When it was his turn again. Theo stood frozen for the longest moment. ___________________________________________________________
Paragraph2:
The following Monday at school, Theo found Alexa in the lunchroom. ___________________________________________________________
1. What’s the real purpose of the passage
2. Which is the focus of the ending
A. Whether Theo won the spelling bee
B. Theo realized his problem.
3. What quality did Theo lack
4. What would he do after he came to be aware of his problem
quality
When it was his turn again. Theo stood frozen for the longest moment. The silence hurt his ears. He wiped his sweaty palms on his pants. It seemed that his superpower disppeared at the moment. Almost every word that followed was the one that Theo couldn’t spell. He remembered the school spelling bee and Alexa just missing the win. He hadn’t even make it as far in this bee as she had in that one. He had to admit that Deandra was right. He was absolutely a terrible winner, and now, a terrible loser.
本段作者想要通过一个自然的例子告诉读者：骄必败。让作者在经历一次失败后明白这个道理。如果本段作者构思的是一个Theo 再次获胜的结局，那与作者最初所给的思维品质培养的初衷背道而驰了。
Pride goes before a fall.
骄兵必败。
One swallow does not make a summer.
一燕不成夏，轻率推论必成大错，一关渡过并非万事大吉
It is an ill wind that blows nobody good.
祸不单行。
A rolling stone gathers no moss.
滚石不生苔；户枢不蠹
Good heart will get good rewards.
好人有好报。
Quality
The following Monday at school, Theo found Alexa in the lunchroom. “Do you mind if I sit down ” he asked in a weak voice. Alexa slid her books aside to make room. Theo gathered up his courage and apologized for his rudeness after he won the school bee. “It’s ok. How was the county bee ” Alexa asked. “What a disaster.” Theo shrugged his shoulders. “Would you like to be my study partner for next time ” “Why not ” Alexa’s beam of smile seemed to wipe off Theo’s frustration and he was expecting to be the next Alpha-best.
本段陈述的是Theo意识到问题后积极主动向对方道歉，寻求谅解。而Alexa 不顾前嫌，宽容的原谅了Theo。Theo 还在此事件中学会要与人合作共赢。这才是本文真正想要传达的思维品质：
modest、generous、considerate、a sense of cooperation...
Modest helps one go forward, whereas conceit makes one lag behind.
Quality
Not generous heart, not real hero.
没有宽宏大量的心肠，便算不上真正的英雄。
Generous spirit is the greatest of all things.
宽宏精神是一切事物中最伟大的。
One tree can’t make a forest.
独木不成林。
When everybody adds fuel, the flames rise high.
众人拾柴火焰高。(共38张PPT)
以2021.1 浙江读后续写真题为例
【学生在读后续写中失分原因】
1.审题不够仔细，缺乏合理的想象，导致出现张冠李戴的现象；续写内
容不符合逻辑，与上文不连贯，不考虑文章的基调和各情节之间的逻
辑关系。
2.大部分学生认为只要有合理的故事情节就可以了，而忽视了语法和词
汇的丰富性、准确性、贴切性、鲜活性等方面，导致续写得分不高。
3.续写部分与原文风格不相符。
4.续写忽视结尾部分，没有立意或立意不高；有的同学虽有立意，但立
意跑偏脱离原文情节；情节未能传递正能量。
5.忽视衔接。
第5档作文评分原则
本题总分为25分，分5个档次给分
第五档
(21-25) 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。
内容丰富，应用了5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。
所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确， 可能有些错误，但完全不影响意义表达。
有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
很多学生在这里翻车！那么如何表达你的语言，让它丰满、生动、地道呢？这是我们今天学习的主题：如何使语言丰满且生动。
读后续写（满分25）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写, 使之构成一个完整的故事。
Pumpkin (南瓜) carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage - I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (软木塞）forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard. my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle. but it was no use. “I can’t get it out! ” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. _____________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. ______________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
语
言
的构成和
提升
1. 丰富性
2. 多样性
3. 准确性
4. 地道性
5. 贴切性
6. 鲜活性
7. 时文性
8. 感情线
9. 运用描写
10. 主题升华
1. 丰富性：指词汇和语法表达的丰富性。主要指词汇的使用、
不同语法的表达和长难句的运用。词汇和语言的积累是提高
读后续写能力的基础。学生只有脑中储备足够数量的词汇，
才能保证在运用时随意支取，使续写语言准确、地道、生动。
(以2021.1高考真题为例)
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother, John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
词汇的运用
1. 用seize替换常
用的catch
3. 用swoop替换
常用的catch /grap等
6. 用instantly替换了常见的as soon as
5. 用dissect替换
了常见的divide
4. 用pierce替换常见的stab
2. 用grin替换常用的laugh
词的运用方面----再举个例子
用tick替换常用的go
用turn to sb替换常用的ask sb. for help
用cannot resist doing 替换常用的cannot help doing
用pierce替换常用的stab
用dissect替换常用的burst/divide
用beam替换常用的smile/laugh/look cheerful
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull
the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t work at that time.
I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a famer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
句式的运用
have no choice but to do sth. 的句型
if only 引导的虚拟语气
非谓语
非谓语
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
宾语从句
非谓语
部分倒装
强调句型
非谓语
感叹句
定语从句
2. 多样性：语言是文化的载体，语言的多样性保证了文化的多
样性。英国大文豪塞缪尔·约翰逊说:“语言是思想的外衣。”
诚然，为了表达思想、抒发情感、交流意见，人们离不开语
言。
在读后续写中语言的多样性主要是指：
1. 同一词意的用词不同表达。
2. 同义句的多样化表达。
3. 同一成分的不同表达形式。
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull
the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t work at that time.
I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother, John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
词汇的多样性
用seize替换常用的catch
用swoop替换常用的catch/ grap等
同一词意的用词不同表达方式
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t
work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
同义句的多样化表达
开心大笑
异常开心
异常开心
异常开心
同一成分的多样性
（以主语为例：看主语的不同表达形式）
当然，主语的表达还有很多种方式，比如动名词作主语，不定式作主语等，这里就不一一列举了。
人称代词作主语
名词作主语
物作
主语
无灵
主语
无灵
主语
强调句中的it
It作形式主语
改为“I”
3. 准确性：主要指原文信息的准确性和语言表达的准确性。
缺少连词and
so┄that 引起倒装，此句只有so,没有that 不能倒装
sit的过去式为sat
前面是句号，不能用which.
是so┄that结构，不是so ┄which结构.
正确：I was so stupid that I looked like a foolish pig.
注意：
如果没有准确的信息和正确的句子表达，即使故事情节合理，那么得分也不高，所以希
望同学们平时注重基础，多做句子翻译，为读后续写作铺垫。
张冠李戴：原文中有一句话：All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event.可知拍视频的是妈妈而不是爸爸。
4. 地道性：所谓“地道的英语”，是指行文造句应该符合目的语的表达习
惯且不留“译痕”，而不是生搬硬套译为中式英语。中国学生语言不地
道的原因主要有二个，其一英语学习习惯的影响，学生大都把注意力放
在了背单词、学语法，习惯性地养成了用汉语来思考英语，这势必造成
英语地道性的缺失；其二是汉语的锚定作用、母语负迁移及中西思维的
差异使地道性语言属于稀有者的“专属高配”。
短期内学生可以用无灵主语和俚语来提高读后续写语言的地道性。
如何获取地道语言：提高学生的英语地道性表达不是一朝一夕就能成功的，平时要做好积累。
1. 积累英文的习惯表达，不能按照字面意思去翻译。
2. 摘抄英文原版文章，可以从知名网站和BBC等原版报纸或期刊中摘录英语句式
的地道表达。
地道语的表达
无灵表达使语言灵动地道
无灵表达使语言灵动地道
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t
work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
地道语的表达
地道表达：努力作某事
无灵表达：头脑一片空白
地道表达：后悔
地道表达：开心
地道表达：异常开心
地道表达：尴尬
地道表达：
笑死了/太搞笑了
地道表达：惊呆了
地道表达：
非常开心
5. 贴切性：用词贴切就是根据语境条件使用语
言，即符合外部语境的各种要求。语境有
“外部语境”和“内部语境”。“内部语境”
指上下文，“外部语境”指言语交际的各种
情境条件， 包括交际的场合，对象，目的，
表达方式等。读后续写的遣词造句须从内部
语境考虑，表达才得体。也就是说在几个可
用的词中选出最恰当、最得体的那个，把所
要表达的意思恰如恰如其分地表达出来。具
体用哪个最恰当，要根据具体的情况，仔细
斟酌，反复推敲。
到底用哪个词更好呢？
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
grin: to smile widely.
laugh: to make sounds with your voice, usually while you are smiling.很显然，此处用grin更贴切，把大人的成熟稳重写了出来。
grin: to smile widely.
Laugh: to make sounds with your voice, usually while you are smiling.很显然，此处用laugh更贴切，把孩子的天真活泼写了出来
force: to use physical strength to move sb/sth into a particular position 汉语意为“强行把┄移动”，显而易见，这个词比put 用的贴切。说明塞不下而强行塞进去，结果拔不出来了。
再举个用词不贴切的例子（学生其他的语法错误暂时忽略）
put: to move sth into a particular place or position
squeeze: to press sth firmly, especially with your finger
用“put” 说明南瓜有足够大的空间，容易进容易出，那么就不会出现后面“头拔不出来”的情况。“squeeze”说明南瓜口窄小，头被作者强行塞了进去，为后面的“ 头拔不出来”很好地做了铺垫 。很显然，这里用“squeeze”比用“put”更贴切，更符合当时的场景。建议此句改为：I began to rue the day that I had squeezed my whole head into the pumpkin.
1. 补充说
2. 重复地说
3. 聊天
4. 通知某事
5. 宣布某事
6. 告诉某人
7. 小声地说
8. 安慰某人
9. 解释说
10. 抱怨说
11. 叹息说
12. 回应说
13. 恳求说
14. 插话
15. 脱口而出
add
repeat
chat with sb.
inform sb. of sth.
announce/declare
tell sb. sth.
whisper/murmur
comfort sb.
explain
complain sb.
sigh
respond to
plead
put in
blurt out
同学们平时要多留意，做好语言的积累！譬如“说”，有哪几种？如何用？只有充足的积累，才能应用自如。
1. She the bad news before I could stop her.
2. He expressed his satisfaction of my answers, that he would
visit me the next day.
3. The poor was pinned down totally by the walls in the earthquake for one
week, so he in a weak voice for help.
4. The teacher it to me over and over again until I
understood it.
5. Our monitor a notice yesterday.
6. Within mintunes, they become familiar and ___________ like old
friends.
7. In order not to disturb others, they to each other.
8. In the live program, she _______a surprising voice, “Oh, my God!”.
选择正确的“说法”
tell, announce, speak, blurt out, add, explain, chat, murmur, whisper, let out.
blurted out
adding
murmured
explained
announced
chatted
whispered
let out
6. 鲜活性：想让读后续写的语言鲜活起来，就要恰当使用一些修辞手法。
修辞的使用可以使文章语言生动活泼，增加语言的美感，提高语言的
说服力和感染力，而且画面感十足。
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
比喻：把拔南瓜的动作比喻为拔萝卜，生动形象而且有很强的画面感
比喻：写出了绝望
夸张
夸张
夸张
比喻：写出了焦灼的心情
比喻：写出了南瓜被拿下来之后的轻松愉悦
7. 时文性：在英语教学阶段有一项关键的教学任务就是将时文内容渗透到
课堂，去发展学生的语言能力和深层次地了解语言的内涵以及拓展课程
的外部延伸知识，让学生能够进一步认识社会、认识生活，从而培养学
生的自信心，发展学生的优势与个性，提升学生的人文素养。
2021.01浙江高考续写需要用到网络词汇
发朋友圈：post sth. on the Moments
发到YouTube上：post sth. on the YouTube account
分享朋友圈：share sth. with
聊天记录：chat history
点赞： likes/ thumbs-up
撤回消息： recall a message
有人@你： You were mentioned.
转发：repost
扫二维码： Scan QR Code
屏蔽：block
(取消)关注： (un)follow sb.
删除好友：unfriend
拉黑;黑名单：blacklist
迅速走红：go viral
评论：make comments on
网红：internet celebrity
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
粉丝
点赞
网红
粉丝
签名
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It was unexpected that it should go viral, attracted millions of followers and got a thousand and one likes. What’s even more humiliating for me was that some naughty children carved my embarrassing moment on their pumpkins. With the carved pumpkin on the head and the ghost coat on the body, they knocked at the door on Halloween night and shouting, “ Trick or treat! ” They sang and danced in front of my house. The thought of the scene that they were delighted filled me with awkwardness. However, my mom told me it was I that brought happiness to them. Hearing this, my awkwardness gave way to my delight. I reckoned it deserved it if I could bring pleasure to others on the special festival. What an unforgettable Halloween!
粉丝
走红
点赞
8. 感情线：读后续写蕴含了两条线，一条是动作线，另一条是感
情线。动作的变化推动着情感的变化。读后续写是让我们做一
个有情有义的人，通过读文章走进作者的情感世界，与之产生
共鸣，才能真正懂得续写的内容和情感的发展。
喜
怒
哀
乐
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. What an unforgettable Halloween for me!
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t
work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , John, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a famrer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He swooped a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away form my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
感情线贯穿全文
写出了被南瓜套住的“后悔”心理
想拔又拔不出来的“绝望”心情
南瓜被拿下来之后的“喜悦”
后悔
绝望
开心
感情曲线变化
被传到网上之后的“尴尬”
收到无数点赞之后的“开心”
意外成为网红之后的“吃惊”
粉丝要求签名和拍照之后的“异常开心”
感情曲线变化
尴尬
高兴
吃惊
异常开心
9. 巧用描写: 读后续写主要涉及动作描写、环境描写、情感描写和
对话描写。在续写中描写的运用不仅可以衬托人物的内心世界，
而且可以让你的语言充满满满的画面感。
Para.1
It was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Inch by inch, I worked my fingers to the bone to pull the pumpkin up, but in vain. My brain didn’t work at that time. I rued the day if only I hadn’t forced my head into the pumpkin. I had no choice but to turn to my family for help. My brother , Jason, seized the pumpkin and pulled it over and over again, like a farmer pulling a carrot form his garden, but still in vain. I was thrown into a world of darkness and sank into despair. Just at that time, my dad went downstairs, seeing my embarrassment, grinning from ear to ear. He grabbed a knife and pierced the pumpkin with care. The pumpkin was dissected in two. I was full of the joys of spring instantly my father took the pumpkin away from my head. I felt the air much fresher than ever before. During the time, my mom was constantly filming the whole moment.
环境描写
动作描写
心里活动描写
心里活动描写
动作描写
动作描写
9. 巧用描写: 读后续写主要涉及动作描写、环境描写、情感描写和
对话描写。在续写中描写的运用不仅可以衬托人物的内心世界，
而且可以让你的语言充满满满的画面感。
Para.1
I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. All possible means have been tried to pull my head from the pumpkin, but to no avail(徒劳无功). I was seized with remorse, anxiously stamping my foot .With time ticking by, I had trouble breathing, feeling dizzy owing to a lack of oxygen. I had no choice but to turn to my family. Seeing my awkwardness, my brother, John, managed to crack my pumpkin open with his pumpkin. In a flash, I felt my head was as light as a feather. I was on the top of the world. My mom grinned from ear to ear, filming the whole embarrassing moment. My dad uttered with humor, “You get the biggest pumpkin, and your brother get the hardest one. You are both winners.” Everyone in the room laughed his head off.
动作描写
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对话描写
10. 主题升华：主题升华是十分重要的一部分。一般要写在结尾句，句式
无需很复杂，但需要体现真善美。读后续写能否拿高分某种意义上说
全在于立意，而立意又在于能否给出一个好的结尾。升华句可以是格
言警句、歌词，也可以是自己组织的有立意升华的句子，只要和续写
的主题保持一致就可。
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. It was unexpected that it should go viral, attracted millions of followers and got a thousand and one likes. What’s even more humiliating for me was that some naughty children carved my embarrassing moment on their pumpkins. With the carved pumpkin on the head and the ghost coat on the body, they knocked at the door on Halloween night and shouting, “ Trick or treat! ” They sang and danced in front of my house. The thought of the scene that they were delighted filled me with awkwardness. However, my mom told me it was I that brought happiness to them. Hearing this, my awkwardness gave way to my delight. I reckoned it deserved it if I could bring pleasure to others on the special festival. What an unforgettable Halloween!
主题升华句：在这个特殊的节日，只要能给别人带来快乐，我认为这是值得的。
Para.2
That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. At the outset, I had an egg on my face due to an awkward dilemma. However, my mom told me with pride that the video filmed by her was so popular that it attracted millions of followers and received a thousand and one likes. Hearing the news, I almost laughed my head off. Never in my wildest dreams was it the video that made me become a web celebrity, which made my jaw drop. Everywhere I went, there were millions of followers, asking for my signature and taking photos with them, which made me float on air. It occurred to me that “helping others” by accident at times will be happy, even if a trivial matter.
主题升华句：有时无意间的帮助他人也是一种快乐，即使是一件微不足道的小事。
续写部分是故事发展的高潮，是需要学生发挥想象力充分地去创新和自我思想深度的挖掘，既要有独特的内容还要有思想上的升华。续写想要拿高分仅有故事情节是不够的，一定要在语言上多下功夫。要从语言的丰富性，多样性，地道性，贴切性、时文性等多方面去考虑。建议同学们平时做好语言的积累让自己的续写语言鲜活、生动而且画面感十足；结尾要有立意，读后续写能否拿高分在某种程度上来说全在于立意，而立意又在于是否有个好结尾；还要注意感情线的贯穿。
结 语
读后续写最好的攻克方法就是把1篇读后续写反复打磨100遍，那么你就化茧成蝶了。(共49张PPT)
读 后 续 写
之
高 考 真 题
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
(一)
(2021年1月浙江卷) Pumpkin (南瓜）carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-pounder back last year.
This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time.
With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I
managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork(软木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders.
My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space.
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. ______________________________________________________
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I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Although I was panicking, my family found my foolish display more comical than dangerous. To my dismay, instead of trying to help, Jason reached for his phone. While mom and dad worked hard to help calm me down, Jason recorded the whole ordeal. He was determined to keep a video record of the events in its full entirety, surely to tease me with it for a long time to come. Pull as I might, my head couldn’t budge. Finally, after some olive oil to help ease the friction and a final pull with all my might, I stumbled back to the ground - my head free and the pumpkin firmly grasped by mom and dad.
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That video was posted the day before Halloween. If I didn’t feel humiliated enough at home, now I get to live with my foolishness in school as well. It was not long before I was given the nickname “Pumpkin Head”, and it stuck. I could not do anything but smile and chuckle along with the rest of my e Halloween night, I figured might as well be a good sport and play along with the joke. I went around my community with my friends, trick-or-treating with my head in another pumpkin that mom and dad had found for me. This time, I made sure to cut a big enough hole.
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(二)
(2020年新高考全国Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷)The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. I'll tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
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When Mrs Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. ___________________________________________
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. _______________________________________________________
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When Mrs Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Then she said, “You may send him the popcorn every Saturday morning, if you will pop the corn for him yourself. John, will you agree to take charge of the work ” “Indeed, I will,” replied John, and he kept his word. Then the children were busy popping the corn, while their mother went out to buy the paper bags. When she came back, she brought Bernard with her. Very soon the paper bags were filled.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. And much sooner than he expected, he returned with an empty basket. Never had he earned so much money. When he found that it was all to be his, he was so delighted that he could hardly speak, but his bright smiling face spoke for him. People began to watch for the “little popcorn boy”, and every week he had at least fifty cents to take home, and often more. All this was because of John’s bright idea.
(三)
(2020年7月浙江卷) One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “the polar bear capital of the world”—the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears—like all wild animals—should be photographed from a safe distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though—he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子).
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear.
Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them.
So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. _______________________________________________________
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. ________________
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A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Roaring even more angrily this time, he smashed his paws crazily against the wire fence, trying to stab us with his sharp claws. Panicked as we were, Elli and I screamed at the top of our lungs, and waved our fists at him in an attempt to intimidate and scare him away. To our disappointment, all these efforts were in vain. The bear violently dashed against the wooden posts which were evidently on the verge of collapsing!
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At that very moment, the helicopter arrived. The gusting wind from the hovering vehicle swept away our fear immediately. Out of the helicopter descended a rope to pull us up. Thrilled yet relieved, we grabbed the rope and eventually landed on the helicopter safe and sound. While looking at the chunky bear from high above, I was amazed to spot this stubborn guy had crushed the fence and headed toward our camp for the inviting garlic bread. At this once in a lifetime moment, I reached into my backpack and pulled out the camera, photographing that impressive scene.
(四)
(2020年1月浙江卷) “I’m going to miss you so much, Poppy,” said the tall, thin teenager. He bent down to hug his old friend goodbye. He stood up, hugged his parents, and smiled, trying not to let his emotions (情绪) get the better of him.
His parents were not quite able to keep theirs under control. They had driven their son several hours out of town to the university where he would soon be living and studying. It was time to say goodbye for now at least. The family hugged and smiled through misty eyes and then laughed.
The boy lifted the last bag onto his shoulder, and flashed a bright smile. “I guess this is it,” he said. “I’ll see you back home in a month, okay ”
His parents nodded, and they watched as he walked out of sight into the crowds of hundreds of students and parents. The boy’s mother turned to the dog, “Okay, Poppy, time to go back home.”
The house seemed quiet as a tomb without the boy living there. All that week, Poppy didn’t seem interested in her dinner, her favorite toy, or even in her daily walk. Her owners were sad too, but they knew their son would be back to visit. Poppy didn't.
They offered the dog some of her favorite peanut butter treats. They even let her sit on the sofa, but the old girl just wasn’t her usual cheerful self. Her owners started to get worried. “What should we do to cheer Poppy up ” asked Dad. “We've tried everything.”
“I have an idea, but it might be a little crazy,” smiled Mom. “Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun. Let’s get a little dog for Poppy.”
It didn’t take long before they walked through the front door carrying a big box. Poppy welcomed them home as usual, but when she saw the box,
she stopped. She put her nose on it. Her tail began wagging (摆动) ever so slowly, then faster as she caught the smell.
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Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. __________ _______________________________________________________
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A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university.
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Dad opened the box and a sweet little dog appeared. Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the little dog. The little puppy, cute with yellow curly hair, slowly crawled out of the box. At first he was a bit shy, but soon got familiar with Poppy. It didn’t take long before the two played around the house, cheerfully running after each other. His owners were released to see this but kept the secret of the new family member, waiting for the boy to come back and find it out himself.
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A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from university. He had been missing his parents and the dog since it was the first time that he had been away from home for such a long time. When the boy caught sight of Poppy, he went rushing toward the dog and bent down to give her a big hug. Suddenly, the boy noticed the little dog. “Oh my god, who is this ” His parents laughed at the look of surprise on his face. “It’s Poppy’s new companion,” said Mom.
(五)
(2018年6月浙江卷) It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.
We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dad’s friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.
His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby.
Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze (吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool.
In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasn’t going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Don’t be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you don’t get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back.
After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (编织的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.
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Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. It was so cute and I just rode after it without hesitation, hoping to catch it and make friends with it. My dad followed me immediately, knowing that I wouldn’t give up until I got it. Alarmed, the rabbit ran away in a flash. We tracked it down into a forest, completely off the road. After a while, we realized we got lost in the forest. There was nothing left in our sight but the trees.
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We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Depressed and tired, we stopped at where we were and tried to find a way out. Tears of fear and regret rolling down my cheeks, I cried, “Sorry, Dad, I shouldn’t have been losing my head.” “Don’t worry, my son. I remember there is a river near the farm house. Find the river and we will be back home.” Dad replied, in a soft tone. Finally, we found the river and got back to the house along it. Needless to say, we ate a late dinner.
(六)
A vacation with my mother
(2017年11月浙江卷) I had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother — loving, sweet, and yet absent minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again
Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I'll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids ” “What ! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom
suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections (反对). If a strange family showed up on her front doorsteps, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. __________________________________________
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The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. However, when we were about to set up the tent, Mom realized that she had left it behind in the last hotel. Dad recommended buying a new one, while Mom insisted on our going back to fetch it, saying “Forgetful people like me may lose things repeatedly, so it’s unwise to give up the tent.” Finally, we got the tent back and hit the road again. If Mom hadn’t been that absent-minded, it would have saved us the trouble of going back again and again.
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We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. One day, towards evening, we found a great camping site at the foot of a high mountain. David and I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mom was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an orange light over the mountains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting around the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentioned the funny incidents of the journey, a pleasant smile would spread over Mom’s face.
(七)
(2017年6月浙江卷) On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled (骑行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.
Mac’s heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase (追赶).
Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.
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The car abruptly stopped in front of him. “Hey, get in the car, quick!” yelled Paul. Hearing the voice, Mac jumped off his bicycle at once and got in the car. Paul looked back and saw the wolf still in the behind. He drove away at dizzy speed. There was
a moment of silence in the car and it seemed as if a century had passed, the car stopped. Paul checked again and there was no sight of the wolf. Mac called his friends immediately and told them his position.
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A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. After hearing Mac’s experience, they froze, their mouth hanging open. They felt so lucky that they didn’t meet the wolf on their way to here. “Thanks a million! I would have died without you.” Mac turned to Paul and Becky. “It’s nothing.” They replied with smile. Knowing that Mac and his friends were also heading to Alaska, Paul offered to give them a ride in case they might encounter some dangerous animals. Bathing in the sunshine, they set off to their journey again.
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(2016年10月浙江卷) One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries.
Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
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But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Falling into despair, Jane feel exhausted and overwhelmed. She found somewhere near a rock to sit down, tears blurring her vision. She missed her family so much and blamed herself for arguing with Tom. And what’s worse, leaving him without saying how deep she loved him. “What if I died here ” she thought. After having some berries, she felt asleep with great regret and sorrow.
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It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Just at that very moment, she heard a helicopter came by! Jane screamed and waved her yellow blouse with every bit of her strength. To her great joy, the helicopter noticed her and landed. Jane was rescued. Bursting into tears, she throwed herself into Tom’s arms the moment she saw him. Their reunion after a long separation brought great delight to them both. It was the narrow escape that made them love each other deeper than ever.(共24张PPT)
浅谈读后续写
课 前 导 入
从前有座山
山上有座庙
庙里有一个小和尚
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从前有座山，山里有座庙，庙里有个盆，盆里有个钵， 钵里有个碗，碗里有个匙， 匙里有个花生仁，我吃了，你谗了，我的故事讲完了。
有能力去合理地编故事！
高 考 解 读
1. Learn the steps to finish the extended passage；
2. Learn to use formula AFSL；
3. Accumulate beautiful expressions.
Learning Aims（学习目标）：
题型介绍
选材特点
（1）所需阅读的短文词数在350左右；
（2）多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为
主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但是，故事线
索的逻辑性比较强。
题型介绍
评分参考
阅卷时主要考虑以下内容：
（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
（2）内容的丰富性；
（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
（4）上下文的连贯性。
题型介绍
读后续写以读为辅，以写为主，其目标是考查学生的综合语言运用能力，主要包含以下四个方面：
1.把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力;
2.语言运用的准确性和丰富性;
3.对语篇结构的把握能力;
4.创造性思维能力。
写作步骤
Read
Think
Write
1) 浅层信息理解：4W
2) 深层信息理解：
故事发展
开头语
Predict the plot properly
1) Actions 动作的丰富性
2) Feelings 情感表达的多样性
3) Surroundings 恰当运用环境描写
Get the main idea
1) 故事主要发展情节
2) 文章风格
3) 写作主题
4) Language 语言的运用
1. When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. _______________________________
2. With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. __________________________________________
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
1. The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
2. Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
3. One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much.
4. “I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.”
5. After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
6. “So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
7. For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish（完成）.”
8. The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn（爆米花）, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
2020年全国高考英语真题试卷（山东卷）
People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Well, we can make popcorn（爆米花）, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.
2. 深层信息理解
（1）故事主要发展情节
(2) 文章风格
人称：______________________; 时态：_______________________;
何种细节描写为主：心理 □；动作 □；语言 □；表情 □；环境□；外貌□
(3) 写作主题: __________________________________________________________________________
1. 浅层信息理解
when：________________________ ; where: ____________________________ ;
who ：________________________ ; what:_____________________________.
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Mrs.Meredith, Bernard,
John, Harry, Clara
Behaviors（行为） Feelings（情感）
Para. 1&2
Para. 3&4
Para.5&6&7&8
kind; thoughtful
第三人称
过去式
√
√
√
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Help Bernard earn some money
Mrs. Meredith visited the poor people; brought food and medicine to them;
Mrs. Meredith told her own children; Bernard wanted very much to earn money; what to do;
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We can make popcorn（爆米花）, and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.
excited
People were trying to help each other meet the challenges．
Read 例：(how to read)
紧扣语境构思情节，分析：
1．据第一段开头关键词可知，________________________。
细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；
梳理语篇内容推进方向，合理创新故事情节。
Para. 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
Think
本段应该描写孩子们
如何制作爆米花
本段应该描写Bernard 如何卖爆米花，结果如何
Para. 2: With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
2．据第二段开头关键词可知，________________________。
Write
字迹工整
篇幅充实：___________________________________________
_____________________________________________________;
3. 语言丰富：___________________________________________
_____________________________________________________;
内容得体：__________________________________________ __________________________________;
空白横线至多剩余一行；或者每一段落续写至
无基本语法错误；衔接得当；有形容词和副词；
情节向前发展；
符合原文逻辑；
体现作者写作目的
少7句话
有从句和非谓语
范 例 展 示
学生范文 展示&赏析 ①
Para. 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. After that, John, Harry and Clara went to Bernard’s home to tell him this good idea. Having heard their plan, Bernard really appreciated their help and he was so glad that he could help his parents out of problems by his own effort. However, he become disappointed quickly, he said: “I don’t have corn and machine to pop corn!” “You don’t need to worry about that. The world is different now. And we can go to the bank to borrow some money and buy it...... ”
现在分词短语做伴随状语
语言运用恰当；语法知识准确；情感表达到位；但是，后段情节发展不够合理。
v. 欣赏; 感激
学生范文 展示&赏析 ②
Para. 1: When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. With Mrs. Meredith’s arrangement, John popped corns with Harry. And Clara put them into paper bags. All of them felt expected because this was the first time for them to make popcorns by themselves. At the same time, helping Bernard make a living and out of struggling life made them fell proud.
强调人物之间协作；语法知识运用准确；人物心理描写丰富；但
是，缺乏人物对话！
动名词短语做主语
with的复合结构做伴随状语
学生范文 展示&赏析 ③
Para. 2: With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. On the first day, he went to a shopping center. It was so nervous of him that he could barely peddle the popcorns to the people in the street. Thinking of her mother and father, he told himself, “Bernard, you can do it!” Then, he shouted, “Come and taste my popcorns, delicious and crispy!” People around were attracted by “the little popcorn boy”. They were really willing to give hands to lovely Bernard. Finally, Bernard earned money. It was really a happy ending.
如此...以致于
被动语态
各方面都很恰当! 结局之处再回扣主题将会更加完美！
范文 展示&赏析
Para. 2: With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. And much sooner than could be expected, he returned with an empty basket. Never had he earned so much money before in his life. When he found that it all belonged to himself, he was so delighted that he could hardly speak, but his bright smiling face spoke for him. People began to watch for the “little pop﹣corn boy,” and every week he had at least fifty cents to take back home, and often more. All this was because of John’s great idea, and the way he carried it out.
遣 词 造 句
Make sentences
1. 你同意负责这项工作吗？（agree to do; take charge of ）
2. 在他的人生中，他从未挣过如此多的钱！（Never had he ...）
3. 他高兴得无法言语，但他微笑的表情说明了一切。（So ...
that ... ; speak for）
Will you agree to take charge of this work
Never had he earned so much money before in his life．
He was so delighted that he could hardly speak, but his bright smiling face spoke for him．
积 累 总 结
回顾本课内容：
Read
Think
Write(共42张PPT)
读后续写
解题策略&样题说明
考纲摘录
题型：读后续写。
满分25分。提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右）, 将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
命题揭秘
卷别 词数 体裁 主题
全国 2020.7 315 记叙文 因经济萧条, 三个孩子想出了一个绝妙的主意帮助社区中的一位小男孩挣钱的故事。
浙江 2021.1 341 记叙文 在万圣节的时候，主人公把头卡在南瓜里面了，之后如何被解救出来的故事。
2020.7 341 记叙文 一对夫妻在拍摄北极熊时, 被北极熊袭击，两人自救失败后, 呼叫了营地指挥, 最终被直升机救走。
2020.1 360 记叙文 男孩要去上大学了, Poppy非常想念男孩, 于是男孩父母决定给Poppy买一条小狗作伴。
命题揭秘
卷别 词数 体裁 主题
浙江 2018. 6 320 记叙文 爸爸带儿子去朋友家农场游玩迷路的故事
2017.11 338 记叙文 和父母一块去旅游的故事
2017.6 344 记叙文 和朋友一起骑车游玩, 野外遇到狼的故事
2016.10 332 记叙文 小两口野外游玩不幸走散, 女主人迷路, 在野外独自过夜的故事
考试说明样卷 354 记叙文 Arthur在帮助一个年轻人时听到有人抢劫银行, Arthur怀疑这个年轻人就是抢劫银行的嫌疑犯
题材内容
可读性强，多以具有冒险色彩的故事出现, 如野外游玩走散、野外遇狼或者被北极熊袭击; 但也有相对贴近考生生活的题材, 如2017年11月浙江卷的 “和父母一起旅游”, 2018年6月浙江卷的 “父子在农场迷路” 以及 2020年1月浙江卷的 “男孩要上大学, 父母给家里的狗找个伴” 等题材。
评分细则
考生了解评分细则，有助于平时用此评标来衡量和要求自己，清楚自己的弱点，明确努力的方向。
评分原则
1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2. 评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的
要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3. 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
4.评分时，主要从以下四个方面考虑：
(1) 与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
(2) 内容的丰富性；
(3) 应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
(4) 上下文的连贯性。
5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际
的影响程度予以考虑。
6.如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
各档次的给分范围和要求
档次 描述
第五档 (21—25) — 与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。
— 内容丰富。
— 所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。
— 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分, 使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档 (16—20) — 与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。
— 内容比较丰富。
— 所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。
— 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第三档 (11—15) — 与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。
— 写出了若干有关内容。
— 应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义的表达。
— 应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。
各档次的给分范围和要求
档次 描述
第二档 (6—10) — 与所给短文有一定的关系, 与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。
— 写出了一些有关内容。
— 语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的
表达。
— 较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。
第一档 (1—5) — 与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差。
— 产出内容太少。
— 语法结构单调，词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响
了意义的表达。
— 缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。
0 白卷、内容太少无法判断或所写内容与所提供内容无关。
解题方法
七个不 “不”
一不增加人物
二不增加旁支情节
三不用过多对话
四不用负能量结局
五不在文末设置悬念
六不偏离原文主题
七不违背逻辑常理
三个原则
原文一致原则
正能量原则
曲折性原则
通读全文，理清脉络
细读首句，构思框架
增加细节，展开续写
修改润色，整洁誊写
四个步骤
七三四法则
1. 不增加人物。
由考纲样题及近5年高考真题中所给的段落首句可知, 续写的故事情节发展都是由原文的人物所推进, 因此, 强行增加人物有可能会偏离情节发展。
2. 不增加旁支情节。
题目要求“考生根据所给情节进行续写”，旨在延续原材料的故事情节，并不是要发展新情节。
3. 不用过多对话。
在续写中展示对话, 虽能丰富内容和语言, 增强语篇的连贯性, 但使用过多的对话, 会显得篇幅累赘且很难在限定的词数里把整个后续的情节发展补充完整。
七个 “不”
4. 不用负能量结局。
结局设计绝对不能负能量。内容应该积极向上, 能增长知识或传播正
能量。
5. 不在文末设置悬念。
题目要求是 “使之构成一篇完整的短文”, 若在文末设置悬念, 就会给
人一种还没结束的感觉，这样的故事是不完整的。
6. 不偏离原文主题。
续写的情节应时刻围绕着短文的主题去推进。
7. 不违背逻辑常理。
情节和细节的想象要合理, 符合生活常识及具有逻辑性。
七个 “不”
原文一致原则：内容要前后衔接，上下连贯,语言表达风格一致。
01
正能量原则：故事内容一定要正能量，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言归于好，和睦相处；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，等等。
02
曲折性原则：凡是故事都应有跌宕起伏，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但最终能解决。
03
三个原则
四个步骤
01
02
03
04
细读首句，构思框架
增加细节，展开续写
修改润色，整洁誊写
通读全文，理清脉络
1. 通读全文，理清脉络
读所给的不完整故事，借助 “5W1H工具” 提炼故事的六要素（时间、地点、人物、事件的起因、经过和结果），弄清大意和主题，理清故事的主要人物和事件脉络。当中, 需要特别留意故事里的人物、时态（通常是一般过去时）、事件（起因和经过）、故事的结构特点及语言特色，以便在续写时保持上下文一致。牢记一句口诀：
人物时态和事件，语言特色不要变。
2. 抓住关键，构思框架
仔细阅读原文，抓住三个关键句：续写部分的两段首句和 续写第一段的最后一句，再结合正能量结尾，按照故事发展的要素(起因、经过、转折、高潮、结局), 便可构建大致框架, 合理设计后续情节。紧记口诀：
两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量。
即由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架；第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。
3. 增加细节，展开续写
在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做，选择性地加入多角度的细节性描写，增加故事的可信度、真实度和饱满度，给每段增加约5至8个具体细节，我们称之为 “58细节添加法”。
动作
描写
环境描写
人物描写
语言
描写
心理活
动描写
所闻、
所说
所思
所做
所见
增加细节
4. 检查优化，整洁誊写
最后，默读初稿，注意检查全文的故事情节是否完整，所续写内容是否符合逻辑，与所给段首句语义是否衔接，上下文是否连贯，语言风格特色是否与前文一致。在修改润色之后, 整齐工整地誊写在答卷上。
读后续写八股文模板
读后续写, 一般都是围绕 conflict（冲突, 矛盾）, solution（解决方案）来组织的, 在阅读文章时你要找到文章到底有什么样的冲突或问题。基本模式如下：
1.情绪: 消极情绪;
a flush/wave of rage/panic/sorrow/embarrassment…
2. 细节: 进一步描写细节;
one’s eyes misted/dimmed with tears
3. 转折:个人的努力或借助外力;
pluck up/gather one’s courage to do sth
4. 转机: 事情似乎有了转机, 并抱有希望, 感到欣慰;
feel a glimmer of hope, breathed a sigh of relief
5. 失望: 但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问题;
……，but in vain/without success, sb was at a loss what to do
6. 新法:突然有了一个想法（一句话说明这个想法）;
It dawned on sb that……
An idea/a thought flashed into one’s mind/crowded in one’s mind
7. 结局: 过了一段时间, 事情有了最后的转折;
It didn’t take long before……
But what happened next was pure magic.
8. 总结:点题, 呼应前文。
one’s words lingered in one’s mind
当然, 并非每个环节都需要, 也可能不是这个顺序, 甚至可以穿插进行,
这不是固定不变的。
备考建议
充分利用平时练习中记叙文类的阅读理解以及完形填空。在做此类试题时，读到适当的位置，不妨中断自己的阅读，根据已读部分文章的脉络，对结局进行一定的猜想，然后对照原文，检查自己的设想是否与原文一致。
适当地实施微型化训练，即对所读文章的某一段落进行设想。根据某一段落的首句提示，结合上文对该段进行合理设想，具体推断该段可能要讲述的细节内容。
注重语言积累。读后续写部分不仅要求有丰富的情节，也要求应用丰富的词汇。所以备考时，考生应尽量扩大词汇量，加强对于词汇、句型的准确熟练运用。由于读后续写多以故事性的文章为原材料，而故事类文章多侧重动作和心理描写，因此对于动词和形容词词汇的积累显得尤为重要。另外，为了使情节衔接顺畅，也应多积累一些记叙文中常用的衔接词。
普通高等学校招生全国统一考试
英语科考试说明样题
普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语科考试说明样题
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写, 使之构成一个完整的故事。续写的词数应为150左右。
A funny thing happened to Arthur when he was on the way to work one day. As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car. He tried again and again but couldn’t get the car moving. Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked, “It looks like you've got a problem,” Arthur said.
“I’m afraid so. I’m in a big hurry and I can’t start my car.”
“Is there something I can do to help ” Arthur asked. The young
man looked at the two suitcases in the back seat and then said,
“Thanks. If you’re sure it wouldn’t be too much trouble, you
could help me get these suitcases into a taxi.”
“No trouble at all. I’d be glad to help.”
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back
seat. After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other one.
Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he
heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
It was from the bank. There had been a robbery (抢劫)!
Park Avenue had been quiet a moment before. Now the air was filled with the sound of the alarm and the shouts of people running from all directions. Cars stopped and the passengers joined the crowd in front of the bank. People asked each other, “What happened ” But everyone had a different answer.
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the bank and walked right into the young woman in front of him.
She looked at the suitcase and then at him. Arthur was surprised. “Why is she looking at me like that ” He thought. “The suitcase！She thinks I’m the bank thief!”
Arthur looked around at the crowd of people. He became frightened, and without another thought, he started to run.
Paragraph 1：
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” ____________________________________
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Paragraph 2：
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur _______________________________________________________
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on Arthur’s way to work one
day
When
Where
In the Park Avenue near the
First National Bank
Who
Arthur, a young man, people,
a young woman
Main Idea
While Arthur was helping a young man to get his suitcases into a taxi, an alarm from the bank rang, which meant there had been a robbery.
What
Main Idea
Why
The young man couldn’t get his car moving, and he has two suitcases,
How
A young woman saw Arthur
carrying a suitcase and assumed
that he was the bank thief. Arthur became frightened, so he ran with
the suitcase.
读大意，抓中心主题
把故事六要素结合起来，我们即可得知原文大意：Arthur在
帮助一位年轻人搬行李箱时，银行警钟突然大响。他因抬着行李箱而被怀疑是抢劫犯，过于害怕，他便拿着行李箱逃跑了。
读人物，找续写人物
读续写两段的首句可知，Arthur和那位年轻人是续写内容的关键人物，故年轻女士及人群可以排除不要。
读时态，选续写时态
通读全文可知，该故事主要是用一般过去时讲述的，故续写内容的时态也应一致。
读结构，辨划分方式
弄清故事的结构特点及表现形式，选择合适的方式划分段落，常用的有4：以时空变化划分(指时间和地点)；以人物思想感情的变化来划分；按记叙内容的变化来划分；按描述角度的变化、事情发展的阶段来划分。
再看回样题，一开始，Arthur是在Park Avenue，而由续写两段首句可知，续写第一段Arthur是在的士里，第二段是在警察局里，Arthur所处地点不断变化，由此可知, 样题是按照时空变化来划分的。 而我们在构思续写内容时也应在这两个地点的基础上进行拓展。
读语言，定风格特色
挖掘文本语言表达风格，模仿原文语言写句子。使续写部分的语言风格与原文的风格相一致，以促进语言协同。此外，如果原文有较多对话, 续写也可出现对话；如原文没有对话, 尽量少用对话形式。如样题原文中的语言特色 :
由as引导的时间状语从句：
As he walked along Park Avenue near the First National Bank, he heard the sound of someone trying to start a car.
Just as Arthur picked up the first suitcase and started walking, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!”
并列动词来描述人物的动作：
Arthur turned and looked inside at the face of a young man who looked worried. Arthur stopped and asked…
The young man got out and took one of the suitcases from the back seat.
介宾短语作状语：
After placing it on the ground, he turned to get the other
one.
分词短语作状语：
Arthur, still carrying the suitcase, turned to look at the
bank and walked right into the young woman in front of
him.
现将短文关键信息梳理成以下表格：
故 事 发 展 的 要 素 起因 When Arthur was on his way to work, he found a young man in trouble.
经过 Just as Arthur helped the young man to move his suitcases into a taxi, he heard the long loud noise of an alarm.
转折 A young woman saw Arthur carrying a suitcase and assumed that he was the bank thief. Arthur became frightened, so he ran with the suitcase.
三 个 关 键 句 高潮（续写第一段） 首句: As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” 以及最后一句
结局（续写第二段） 首句：The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur…
基于以上信息，再根据口诀 “两段首句定一框” 可知，第一段内容发生的地点应该是在的士里，我们设想Arthur怀疑那个年轻人是银行抢劫犯，于是他打的士去警察局报案。
注意：这段结尾要与下段首句衔接。
再由口诀 “二框二首正能量” 去构建第二段的框架: Arthur到警察局后跟警察说明情况, 并且把行李箱交给他们检查。最终那个年轻人被抓到。这里还可以设计第二种结局：Arthur到警察局后跟警察说明情况，并且把行李箱交给他们检查。年轻人随后也到了，经过调查，是误会一场。
基于第二段的框架，我们可以补充以下细节：
结局1：Arthur的动作描写（冲进警察局，跟警察说明情况, 并且把行李箱交给了他们检查）→警察动作描写（打开行李箱发现满箱是钞票, 向Arthur问罪犯特征）→年轻人被抓到, Arthur被表扬为见义勇为。
结局2：Arthur的动作描写（冲进警察局，跟警察说明情况，并且把行李箱交给了他们检查） →警察动作描写（打开行李箱发现是衣服和日用品） →年轻人的动作描写（年轻人到警察局）→年轻人的语言描写（年轻人向警察报案Arthur偷行李） →Arthur的人物描写（感到尴尬，满脸通红）→Arthur的动作描写（向年轻人道歉）→警察的动作描写（表扬了Arthur的见义勇为）。
One possible version:
As he was running, Arthur heard the young man shouting behind, “Stop, stop!” All of a sudden, a horrible thought just came into Arthur’s mind: the young man might be the bank robber! Having realized the seriousness of the matter, Arthur ran straight to a taxi and jumped in with the suitcase.
He looked back and saw the young man, whose face was filled with fury, shouting and chasing after their taxi. Arthur turned to the driver and said, “Quickly, go to the Police Station! The man chasing behind is the bank robber!” The taxi arrowed toward the Station.
结局1
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur rushed into it, told the police what had happened and handed the suitcase in to them. They opened the suitcase and found that there was full of money inside, just as Arthur had expected. With the description of the robber from Arthur, the police caught the robber very soon. The police and the bank both thanked Arthur a lot and spoke highly of his bravery.
结局2
The taxi stopped in front of the Police Station and Arthur rushed into it, told the police what had happened and handed the suitcase in to them. As they opened the suitcase and found that there were only clothes and daily necessities inside, the young man ran into the station, too. After only one look at Arthur, the young man pointed at him and yelled, “Thief, he stole my suitcase!” Feeling embarrassed, Arthur blushed. He walked to the young man, explained everything and apologized for the misunderstanding. Though mistaken, Arthur was still spoken highly of his bravery by the police.

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