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范文讲解+素材
Part 1 范文详解(1)
Jenny was the only child in her family. She had a quarrel with her mother that afternoon and she ran out of the house angrily. She couldn’t help weeping sorrowfully when she thought of the scolding(斥责) from her mother. Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat. She stood beside a stand(货摊) for a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy doing his business. However, with no money in hand, she gave a sigh and had to leave.
The seller behind the stand noticed the young girl and asked, “Hey, girl, you want to have the noodles ”
“Oh, yes, but I don't have money on me,” she replied.
“That's nothing. I'll treat you today,” said the man. “Come in.”
The seller brought her a bowl of noodles, the smell so attractive. As she was eating, Jenny cried silently.
“What is it ” asked the man kindly.
“Nothing. Actually I was just touched by your kindness!” said Jenny as she wiped her tears.
“Even a stranger on the street will give me a bowl of noodles, while my mother drove me out of the house. She showed no care for me. She is so merciless(残忍的) compared to a stranger!”
Hearing the words, the seller smiled, “Girl, do you really think so I only gave you a bowl of noodles and you thanked me a lot. But it is your mother who has raised you since you were a baby. Can you number the times she cooked for you Have you expressed your gratitude to her ”
Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shock(震惊得目瞪口呆); she remembered her mother’s familiar face and weathered hands(饱经风霜的手). “Why didn’t I think of that A bowl of noodles from a stranger made me feel indebted(感激的). Why haven't I thanked my mum for what she has done for me ”
On the way home, Jenny made up her mind to make an apology to her mother for her rudeness as soon as she arrived home.
Paragraph 1:
Approaching the doorway, _____________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
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S--Setting(when/where)
Where: house—a stand--doorway
When: afternoon, after having a quarrel with mother
01 Read for setting& characters
C--Characters
The mom: familiar face and weathered hands
The daughter: rebellious, angry, sorrowful
The seller: kind, considerate
Jenny had a quarrel with her mother and ran out of house.
02 Read for clues and emotions
She was hungry and a seller brought her a bowl of noodles.
She was moved by the seller. The seller told her she should be grateful to her mother.
Jenny realized her mistake and stood in the doorway.
Mother came back and Jenny made up with her mother.
Plot diagram
Para1.
Approaching the doorway,
Para2.
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
Jenny had a quarrel with her mother and ran out of house.
02 Read for clues and emotions
She was hungry and a seller brought her a bowl of noodles.
She was moved by the seller. The seller told her she should be grateful to her mother.
Jenny realized her mistake and stood in the doorway.
Mother came back and Jenny made up with her mother.
Emotional change
Para1.
Approaching the doorway,
Para2.
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
angry
hungry
moved, calm
anxious
grateful
Jenny had a quarrel with her mother and ran out of house.
03 Read for conflict（冲突—行动—解决）
She was hungry and a seller brought her a bowl of noodles.
She was moved by the seller. The seller told her she should be grateful to her mother.
Jenny realized her mistake and stood in the doorway.
Mother came back and Jenny made up with her mother.
Plot diagram
冲突: Jenny had a quarrel with her mother.
行动: Under the guidance of the seller, Jenny realized her mistake and come back home.
解决: Mother finally appeared and they made up.
Para1.
Approaching the doorway,
Para2.
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
What is the seller trying to tell the daughter
She should be grateful/indebted to her mother.
04 theme: gratitude or family education
What is the author trying to tell the reader
When having quarrels with our parents, we should keep calm, try to communicate with them and find out the solution instead of running away from home.
Identify the theme by asking yourself:
Who is telling the story
What is the story about
What is the author trying to say to the reader
04 theme: gratitude or family education
Identify the theme by asking yourself:
Who is telling the story
What is the story about
What is the author trying to say to the reader
Paragraph 1:
Approaching the doorway, _____________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back.
______________________________________________________________________
Is mother home
What’s Jenny thinking
What’s Jenny’s action after feeling the gentle touch
What’s the mother’s action after seeing Jenny
How would Jenny apologize to her mother
How would the mother react to Jenny’s apology
问题1, 2
问题3, 4, 5, 6
theme
Paragraph 1:
Approaching the doorway, Jenny took a deep breath. When she knocked at the door, she found the door was locked and her mother was not in. Tired and sad, she sat down in front of the house. "Where could my mother be " she wondered," was she still angry with me "Again, the scene of the quarrel appeared in her mind. She remembered her rudeness to her mother. Realizing that all the scolding from her mother was due to the fact that her mother really cared a lot about her, she felt rather ashamed, and tears began to roll down her cheeks.
Paragraph 2:
A gentle touch on her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw the familiar face of her mother. "Here you come! I’ve been looking for you," she said, tired and relieved. Jenny couldn't help throwing herself into her mothers arms." Mum, I’m so sorry and thank you for all you have done for me." She expressed her sincere apology and great gratitude. Hearing this, her mother smiled patting her back gently.
Part 2 范文详解(2)
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It took place in a teachers family. One day, Ben was playing basketball in the living room after school, when he accidentally threw the ball at a vase sitting on the shelf. The vase dropped to the floor and a large piece broke off. What made Ben more upset was that the vase was not a common decoration but an antique, which was handed down through generations from the 18th century. It was also his mother's favourite possession. To cover his terrible action, the terrified boy glued the pieces together hastily and put the vase back to its place.
三颗巧克力的故事
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As the mother herself dusted the vase every day, she naturally noticed the cracks(裂纹) that evening. To her surprise, the repair work was actually very good. At dinner time, she asked her boy if he broke the vase. Fearing punishment, the suddenly inspired boy said that a neighbour’s cat jumped in from the window and he couldn’t drive it away no matter how hard he tried. It raced around the living room and finally knocked the vase off its shelf. His mother was quite clear that her son was lying, for all the windows were closed before she left for work each morning and opened after she returned. However, in the face of her son’s nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members. Ben’s mother remained calm. She realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying. She came up with another idea.
三颗巧克力的故事
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Before going to bed, the boy found a note from his mother in his room, asking him to go to the study at once. The boy thought he would now be punished but, as he had already lied, he was determined to deny everything to the end, no matter how angry his mum became. In the study, calmly bathed in the light, his mothers face showed no sign of anger. On seeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter, she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.
1.续写词数应为 150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1. The mother said, "This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a
window-opening cat!“
Para2. Now with some chocolates in hand, the boy's bad attitude disappeared.
三颗巧克力的故事
Paragraph 1:
The mother said, "This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a
window-opening cat!“
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Paragraph 2:
Now with some chocolates in hand, the boy's bad attitude disappeared.
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Before going to bed, the boy found a note from his mother in his room, asking him to go to the study at once. The boy thought he would now be punished but, as he had already lied, he was determined to deny everything to the end, no matter how angry his mum became. In the study, calmly bathed in the light, his mothers face showed no sign of anger. On seeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter, she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.
1.续写词数应为 150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1. The mother said, "This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a
window-opening cat!“
Para2. Now with some chocolates in hand, the boy's bad attitude disappeared.
三颗巧克力的故事
S--Setting(when/where)
Where: in the study of a teacher’s family
When: at night/before going to bed
01 Read for septcccc---setting& characters
C--Characters
The mom: a teacher& a calm mom who realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying.
Her son Ben: a rebellious boy who was determined.
T---Theme(what is the author trying to say to the reader )
02 How to identify the theme of the story
the events of the narrative
internal and external character conflicts
drives both plot and story from beneath the surface
1. The plot of the story is based on the theme.
2. The theme can be implied by the author.
3. Themes are bigger than the story.
It took place in a teachers family. One day, Ben was playing basketball…. It was also his mother's favourite possession. To cover his terrible action, the terrified boy….
As the mother herself… Fearing punishment, the suddenly inspired boy said…
His mother was quite clear… Ben’s mother remained calm. She realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying. She came up with another idea.
02 Identify the theme of the story
Identify the theme by asking yourself:
Who is telling the story
What is the story about
What is the author trying to say to the reader
…However, in the face of her son’s nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members. Ben’s mother remained calm. She realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying. She came up with another idea.
Before going to bed, the boy found a note from his mother in his room, asking him to go to the study at once. The boy thought he would now be punished but, as he had already lied, he was determined to deny everything to the end, no matter how angry his mum became.
In the study, calmly bathed in the light, his mothers face showed no sign of anger. On seeing her son push open the door and cautiously enter, she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.
03 Read for Conflict and Clues
03 Read for Coherence and predict the plot
Para1.
The mother said, “This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a window-opening cat!”
Para2.
Now with some chocolates in hand, the boy's bad attitude disappeared.
Another chocolate for
One more chocolate for
Ben broke the valuable vase by accident and glued
04 Read for Clues and predict the plot
Ben lied but his mom could tell his lie.
Ben’s mom was wondering how to uncover the lie without punishment.
Ben’s mom had a talk with him with a box of chocolates.
...
Plot diagram
Key sentence: She realized she shouldn’t just simply blame and punish her son for lying…she took a chocolate box out of a drawer and gave him one.
scared
nervous
Bad attitudes
embarrassed
ashamed
Ben’s Emotion mountain
04 Read for Emotions and prepare your language
Para1.
The mother said, “This chocolate is a reward for your imagination: a window-opening cat!”
Para2.
Now with some chocolates in hand, the boy's bad attitude disappeared.
Part 3 素材积累
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（一）主题情节表达积累
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
冲突出现 Her heart skipped a beat when she noticed that her left ring finger（左手无名指） felt a bit lighter.
Dad‘s business wasn’t doing So well, and our stable life started getting shaky/ e ki/（不牢固的，摇晃的）.
He had recently been adopted by my parents. I was not in the mood for being onstage（台上的，演出的） with him.
I stared back, not understanding the question.
In no time, he got annoyed and stormed into our room, questioning us in glare who it was that made such a mess of his flowers.
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（一）主题微情节—“爱的和解”
采取行动 Then much to his astonishment, he pulled out two T-shirts, both in light pink.
After working out how they all fit together, he put his gloves on and started to delicately rebuild the bowl, filling the crack lines with a special paint.
As her brush moved smoothly across the paper, daisies（雏菊） came alive.
He handed her a large box, which she carefully placed on the desk near my bed.
I would excitedly turn the tap on, and then brush the comb with a used toothbrush as hard as I could.
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（一）主题微情节—“爱的和解”
解决冲突 With his eyes twinkling（闪亮）, he cried out, “I love you, Mom.”
“I love you, Mom, I whispered to her with tears streaming down my cheeks.
I picked up the receiver（话筒）, and on the other end of the receiver, a tiny voice said, “I love you, Daddy.”
Deeply touched, dad held the flowers tightly yet gently, and immediately gathered us into his arms.
Hugging him tightly, the mother knew that her son would taste the bitter sweetness in his chocolates.
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—羞愧内疚
1. So ashamed was she that she could feel the blood rush to her face.（倒装）
她是如此羞愧以至于脸如充血般发烫。
2. He hung/dropped/lowed/bent/bowed his head in shame.
他羞愧地低下了头。
3. He felt his cheeks burning with shame.
他羞得两颊发红。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—羞愧内疚
4. I dropped my eyes.
我垂下了双眼。
5. So ashamed did she feel that she was close to tears. （倒装）
她羞愧得几乎要哭了。
6. He felt the regret burning his heart.
他感到悔恨燃烧着他的心。
7. Hearing the words, he hung down his head for shame.
听到这些话，他羞愧地低下了头。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—羞愧内疚
8. What he had done made me feel ashamed of myself.
他的所作所为让我对自己感到羞愧。
9. But at the same time, a sense of guilt came over me.
但与此同时，一种愧疚感涌上我的心头。
10. “If only I hadn't yelled at my mom," I thought.”
要是我没有对妈妈大喊大叫就好了。”我想。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—羞愧内疚
11. Ruled by a flood of guilt, I made an apology to the girl.
一阵内疚充斥着我，我向那个女孩道了歉。
12. After I heard his words, regret overwhelmed me like endless tides.
听了他的话，悔恨如潮水般涌向我。
13. Faced with the truth, we felt ashamed for what we had done.
眼前的事实让我们对自己的所作所为感到羞愧。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—羞愧内疚
14. The guilty mother looked upset, great sorrow clouding her face.
内疚的母亲看起来很不安，巨大的悲伤笼罩着她的脸。
15. I was almost rooted to the spot with regretful tears rolling down my cheeks.
我几乎被钉在了原地，悔恨的泪水从脸颊上滚落下来。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—焦虑不安
She frowned at her anxiously.
她焦急地皱了皱眉。
2. She gives me a worried look.
她忧虑地看了我一眼。
3. She glanced worriedly at her friend.
她忧心忡忡地瞥了朋友一眼。
4. We are all very nervous about the future.
我们对未来充满焦虑。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—焦虑不安
5. I couldn't look after him any more, the strain was too much for me.
我再也不能照顾他了，压力太大了。
6. Before exams, I always have butterflies in my stomach.
考试前，我总是紧张不安。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—感动
Touched deeply, we…
被深深感动，我们…
2. With tears streaming down her face, she...
泪水顺着她的脸颊流了下来，她……
3. All those present to listen to her sad story were moved to tears.
凡在场听到她悲惨经历的人无不感动得流泪。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
亲情主题—写作技能培养
（二）人物情绪—感动
4. I was greatly touched by what you told me.
你对我讲的话使我大受感动。
5. It is very moving to see how much strangers can care for each other.
看到陌生人之间这般彼此关照，实在令人感动。
6. His speech was inspiring and touched my heart.
他的发言鼓舞人心，让我很受触动。
故事中的亲人，通常因为一些事情而出现隔阂，之后因为偶然发生的事件而和解。情节一般包括“冲突—行动—解决”三部分。
Part 4 课后练习
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150词左右。
Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
Paragraph 1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.______________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. ______________________________________________________________________
Para 1:
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Seeing the mess, their father froze with shock, as if rooted on the ground. But soon he realized their intention. In consequence, he joined the twins in preparing the Mother’s Day surprise. Though he had never been seen cooking, actually, he was expert in doing so. The twins assisted their father with the breakfast with great curiosity, and it was a pleasure to team up with their father. Eventually, they could smell how good the dishes were.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They said “Happy Mother’s Day”, with their eyes twinkling with excitement. Their father laughed heartily and told her the twins had prepared breakfast for her. Then the twins whispered to her that they loved her so much and they were eager to see her smile every day. Hearing the words, so glad was she that her face beamed and her bright smile lit up the room. At that moment, they all sensed how beautiful something living could be. What a sweet surprise!
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