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(共29张PPT)
读后续写
做人与做事＋能“说”会“道”
1R Read for the characters
two police officers
Clara
a very thin woman
Alan
pulled out a gun and was about to break in
told him to put the gun away and knocked gently
poor, devoted to her son, desperate
Clara stood up and begged in a low voice
Clara's child
innocent
Bob
Mom, is anyone coming for my birthday Invite them in, please.
The two policemen quickly arrived at the shop
responsible, kind, sympathetic
two police officers were patrolling the streets and were told of a burgary
2R Read for the plot development
on a freezing morning of December
Clara climbed into the store and stole cheese, chocolate, butter and other ingredients for a cake
at 5: 20 a. m
reached her home and she understood the situation
moments later
a child invited them in for his birthday
at that very moment
Clara begged them not to take things away
Alan understood and walked into the house
after hearing the boy's words
two policemen and a thief
sympathetic
curious and confused
Read for the conflicts
conflicts
are
arising
stole cheese, chocolate, butter and other ingredients for a cake
pulled out a gun and was about to break in
I've got neither job nor money.
patrolling and getting a call about burglary in a shop
Please don't take those things away. I've just used them to make him a cake.
What about the things she stole
The door opened and out came a very thin woman.
What was Alan's and Bob's choice in face of justice and empathy
responsibility,
kindness， help，warmth, love, sympathy
Read for theme
The two policemen quickly arrived at the shop
But Alan told him to put the gun away and knocked gently.
Looking into the woman's teary eyes, Alan understood and walked into the house
Bob nodded thoughtfully and asked, “What about the things she stole ”
Please don't take those things away. I've just used them to make him a cake.
Read for language
On a freezing morning of December, two police officers were patrolling the streets. Suddenly, the walkie-talkie (对讲机) on Alan, one of the officers, rang. “The cake shop near the City Museum has reported a burglary ( 窃案). Please rush to the scene Immediately”, said the electronic voice.
环境和人物活动场景的描写+人物对话：两个巡逻的警察接到报警
人物外貌描写+动作描写，利用动作链突出单身妈妈Clara 在看到警察后的无奈和绝望。
The door opened and out came a very thin woman. From the outline of her figure, Alan recognized that she was exactly the thief. The woman, Clara, immediately understood the situation when she saw the two policemen. She buried her face in her hands and sat down on the floor.
After hearing the boy's words, Clara stood up and begged in a low voice, “Officer, I did steal those things, but there's nothing else I could do. It's my baby's birthday, and I've got neither job nor money. Please don't take those things away. I've just used them to make him a cake.”
利用人物动作+语言描写，再次表现单身妈妈Clara 的内心的无奈和绝望。
捕捉和对应原文续写点
On a freezing morning of December, two police officers were patrolling the streets. Suddenly, the walkie-talkie (对讲机) on Alan, one of the officers, rang. “The cake shop near the City Museum has reported a burglary ( 窃案). Please rush to the scene Immediately”, said the electronic voice.
天气的寒冷是否能被温情融化？在续写部分应用适当的环境描写与此呼应
Moments later, the two officers arrived at Clara's house. Bob, another officer, pulled out a gun and was about to break in. But Alan told him to put the gun away and knocked gently.
Alan和Bob 的不同态度，应反映在续写部分对Clara的不同处理的方式中
After hearing the boy's words, Clara stood up and begged in a low voice, “Officer, I did steal those things, but there's nothing else I could do. It's my baby's birthday, and I've got neither job nor money. Please don't take those things away. I've just used them to make him a cake.”
续写部分应交代警察是否带走Clara偷窃的用来做蛋糕的东西
Looking into the woman's teary eyes, Alan understood and walked into the house.
What did Alan see
What was the room like
What was the child doing
What did the child say to Alan

What did Alan 's choice to deal with CLara
Read the two given sentences 推测续写情节
一段尾句与二段首句要衔接
Bob nodded thoughtfully and asked, “What about the things she stole ”
想象Clara的家是什么情况？可描写屋子的情况才能与原文衔接融洽
How did Alan replied
How did they deal with the things Clara stole
How did Bob react and feel
可描写两个警察不同的态度以及最终达成的一致并利用环境描写与原文衔接融洽
Bob nodded thoughtfully and asked, “What about the things she stole ”
捕捉原文可续写点
与首尾句的照应
与特定伏笔的照应
与特定物品的照应
1.在他眼前是一个营养不良的男孩，他忙着拿面粉，眉开眼笑。
① A undernourished boy was in front of his eyes. He was beaming from ear to ear while working busily with flour at hand. （神态+动作描写）
② In front of his eyes was a undernourished boy,
_____________________________________________________________________________________________. （倒装句+非谓语动词）
2.他抬头看到了艾伦，艾伦立刻解释道:“嘿，我是艾伦。我在这附近巡逻，是来祝你生日快乐的。”
He __________________________，who immediately explained, “Hey, I am Alan. I come to say Happy Birthday to you as I am patrolling this neighborhood.”
续写第一段 （（侧重描写“看”的动作、人物对话和场景描写））
beaming from ear to ear while working busily with flour at hand
looked up and saw Alan
3.Alan走出来，递给Clara一张20美元的钞票，微笑着说:“既然我还在值勤，你能帮我给你儿子买一份漂亮的生日礼物吗 ”
①Alan stepped out, handed Clara a twenty dollar bill, and smiled,“Would you help me buy a nice birthday gift to your son now since I am still on duty ” (三连动词构成动作链+对话描写）
②Alan _____________, and __________ Clara a twenty dollar bill, ___________,“Would you help me buy a nice birthday gift to your son now since I am still on duty ” （非谓语动词）
stepped out
handed
smiling
续写第二段 （侧重动作、情感细节和环境细节描写）
Seeing Clara's bean-pole figure gone into the distance, Alan answered in a firm voice
4.Alan看到Clara那消瘦的身影渐渐远去，他坚定地说:“我会帮助弥补店铺的损失。”
①As Alan saw Clara's bean-pole figure gone into the distance, he answered in a firm voice,“I will help cover the loss of the shop.” （时间状语从句）
②___________________________________________________________________________________________,“I will help cover the loss of the shop.” （非谓语动词）
5.听了这话，鲍勃感到很尴尬，他不停地搓搓双手，似乎想在这寒冷的十二月里暖和起来。
①At this, Bob felt embarrassed, twisted and rubbed his hands over and over again seemingly to get warm in this freezing December. （三连动词，情感+动作+环境描写）
②At this, Bob felt embarrassed, twisting and rubbing his hands over and over again seemingly to get warm in this freezing December. （非谓语动词）
1.神态+场景描写
阿兰凝视着鲍勃的眼睛，看到了真诚的善意，天空中飘下小小的雪花，白而纯净。
Staring into the Bob's eyes, Alan saw the genuine kindness glistening with little soft snowflakes falling down from the sky, white and pure. （非谓语动词）
2.自然式结尾
Clara承诺她将通过自己的努力改善她的生活，不再做任何非法的事情。
Clara promised that she would improve her life by her own efforts and would no longer do anything illegal again.
a good ending
与原文首句细节的照应
与特定物品的衔接
特定物品1
与段首句的衔接
环境描写与原文首句的衔接
与特定细节的照应
再次营造环境与人物活动场景，解决冲突，以美好结尾结束续写

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