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The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
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One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don‘t see what he can do.”
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After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).”
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The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. I’ll tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of com Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
1. 续写词数应为150左石：
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
With everything ready. Bernard started out on his new business.
梳理故事情节
who Mrs. Meredith, John, Harry, Clara,
Bernard, Uncle John
when One morning
where In the room
what The family helped Bernard to earn money.
why Bernard’s dad was sick and his mom couldn’t go out to work.
how The children made popcorn and Bernard sold it.
写作注意点
续写部分与原文在文体和语言上保持一致
时态一致
前文中有动作描写（如 he sprang to his feet and cried. The other children also jumped up all attention.) 、对话（如“ I wish we could help him to earn money.” “His family is suffering so much.”) 续写时应考虑与前文语言风格一样。
首句的解读
第一段首句 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. 表明Mrs. Meredith 同意John提出的建议，因此本段应该描写卖爆米花前的准备工作以及他们所需要的材料。
第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business 表明，Bernard 开始要卖爆米花了。此时可以从两方面入手，其中之一是爆米花卖得很快，他很快就赚到了钱；另一方面则是爆米花卖得不顺利，但在孩子们的帮助下，Bernard 最终赚到了钱，他非常感激Mrs. Meredith 和她的孩子们。
写作思路
思路一：孩子们去Uncle John 家里借爆米花机器并学习怎么制作爆米花，而Mrs. Meredith 出去买爆米花的纸袋，并把Bernard带了回来。一切准备就绪，Bernard 开始时很害羞，John帮助他一起卖爆米花，然后赚到了钱，Bernard高兴并感谢他们。
思路二：Mrs. Meredith和孩子们一起去告诉Bernard 这个计划。他们买了机器和纸袋，学会了做爆米花。一切准备就绪，Bernard 开始卖爆米花，赚到了钱。
写作思路微技能之G-N策略
运用Given-New策略，我们根据原文文本和首句（Given information) 提供的信息，采用围绕中心词和一些相关问题、回答问题（New information)的方法，拓展我们的思路和角度，最终形成合理的故事情节线。
从续写第一段首句 When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good idea, too. 我们可以设问：
1. What did Mrs. Meredith do
2. What did John, Harry and Clara do to help Bernard
3. How did they let Bernard know their idea
4. How did Bernard feel
第一段成段
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good idea, too. So Mrs. Meredith took out that big box of corn. The children were very happy. They went to see Uncle John to borrow the popcorn machine and learned how to make popcorn. The children made popcorn. Mrs. Meredith went out to buy the paper bags. She brought Bernard back. They told the idea to him. He was excited.
第二段提问
根据续写第二段首句 With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. 我们可以这样设问：
1. When Bernard sold popcorn, what problem would he meet
2. What did the children do
3. Did Bernard sell popcorn out
4. Was Bernard thankful to them
第二段成段
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. At first, Bernard was very too shy. John helped him to sell their popcorn. The popcorn was very delicious. In the evening, their popcorn was sold out and they earned some money. Bernard thanked and hugged John. Every week, Bernard sold popcorn and took money home.
微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇
上面这一段文字情节完整，但是存在着字数不足，信息量不够，表达干瘪的缺点，无法准确传达故事类文章的情感因素。为此，我们可以通过情绪情感、心理活动、具体动作、对话独白、场景描写以及修辞等更多方式使得文章血肉丰满，厚实感人。
微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇
一.词的积累
动词 cheer, delight 形容词 happy, glad, pleased, cheerful,
delighted, overjoyed, merry,
thrilled
名词 joy, happiness, excitement, pleasure 副词 enjoyably, cheerfully, joyfully
微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇
二.词块和句的积累
1. Both Mark and I are feeling on the top of the world.
2. Both Mark and I are floating on air.
3. Hearing/ Seeing…,he jumped up and down with excitement/joy.
4. The children were thrilled / wild with joy at the sight of…
5. His eyes glittered / shone with excitement.
微技能之准确的动作神态描写：高兴篇
二.词块和句的积累
6. She hummed and skipped in the forest like a bird.
7.The smile on her face shone like a diamond.
8. Then came a voice far from where we were, bathing us in extreme joy.
9. A flood of joy/ pleasure welled up in him.
10. An extreme happiness dominated their hearts immediately.
牛刀小试
一. 一看到那个大盒子，孩子们高兴地跳起来。
1. The children jumped up and down with joy _______.(运用时间状语从)
2. _______，the children jumped up and down with joy.(运用非谓语动词结构)
3. _______，the children jumped up and down with joy. （运用介词短语结构）
二. 然后他们去拜访了Uncle John, 借了机器，学习了怎么制作美味的爆米花。
1. Then, they paid a visit to Uncle John, _______ the most delicious popcorn. （运用三连动句式）
牛刀小试
2. Then, they paid a visit to Uncle John, _______ the most delicious popcorn. （运用非谓语动词结构）
三. Bernard 如此感动，一句话也说不出来。
1. _______ that he could hardly speak. （运用so…that...句型）
2. _______ that he could hardly speak. （运用倒装结构）
四. Mrs. Meredith 回来了，后面跟着 Bernard.
1. When Mrs. Meredith came back, _______（运用主从句）
2. Mrs. Meredith came back, and _______ （运用并列句）
牛刀小试
3. Mrs. Meredith came back, _______ （运用非谓语结构）
五. 天空开始出现闪闪的星星，高兴地向他们眨眼睛。
Stars appeared in the sky, _______. （运用非谓语动词结构和拟人地修辞手法）
六. 听到这个好消息，他感到非常高兴。
Hearing the great idea, _______ dominated his heart immediately. （抽象名词作主语）
七. 没过多久，他们便制作出了美味的爆米花。
_______ they could make delicious popcorn. （运用含before的句型）
牛刀小试
八. Bernard 带着空篮子回来了，手里拿着一些硬币。
1. Bernard returned with an empty basket, _______ （运用并列句）
2. Bernard returned with an empty basket, _______ （运用with复合结构）
3. Bernard returned with an empty basket, _______ （运用独立主格结构）
参考范文1
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So Mrs. Meredith took out that big box of corn. At the sight of it, the children jumped up and down with joy. Then, they paid a visit to Uncle John, borrowed the popcorn machine and learned how to make the most delicious popcorn. Very soon, they were busying popping the corn , while Mrs. Meredith went out to buy the paper bags. She came back , followed by Bernard. They shared the idea with him. His eyes shone with excitement.
With everything ready , Bernard started out on his new business. At
first, Bernard was too shy. But John, a smart and lovely boy , helped him to sell their popcorn from door to door. It was its sweet smell that made it popular. In the evening , their popcorn was sold out. Stars appeared in the sky , twinkling their eyes at them in happiness. Holding money , so moved was Bernard that he could hardly speak , but his bright smiling face spoke for him. Bernard hugged John tightly. Sometimes our small action can make a great difference to others.
参考范文2
When Mrs. Meredith heard of the idea , she thought it was a good one too. They hurried to tell Bernard the great idea. Hearing it , an extreme happiness dominated his heart immediately. Then Mrs. Meredith together with four kids made their way to a supermarket , bought a popcorn machine and some paper bags, and went home. It wasn't long before they could make delicious popcorn. Bathed in the sunshine , they put the paper bags filled with popcorn into a basket in excitement.
With everything ready , Bernard started out on his new business. The
popcorn was so sweet that it was sold out in a short time. Bernard returned
with an empty basket , some coins in his hand . He held the coins tightly , tears rolling down without control. Since then , every Saturday morning , John saw it that the corn was all popped , the paper bags filled and arranged in the
basket when Bernard arrived. Thanks to John , all things went well . Even a
small act of kindness can make the world better.
官方范文
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John‘s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.
With everything ready. Bernard started out on his new business.
He took the popcorn around the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also add cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Meredith, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
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