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读后续写示例与写作训练6
【写作示例】
【原文呈现】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Wearing the thin sneakers with a few holes, Bobby was getting cold. He had been sitting out in his back yard in the snow for almost an hour, thinking. Try as he might, he could not come up with an idea for his mother’s Christmas gift. He shook his head as he thought, “Even if I do come up with an idea, I don’t have any money.”
His father passed away three years ago, and the small salary that his mother was earning could hardly make ends meet. Although the family lacked money and material things, they lived with love. Bobby had three sisters, who ran the household in their mother’s absence. All of them had made beautiful gifts for their mother. Frustratingly, he had nothing, and it was Christmas Eve already. Wiping a tear from his eye, Bobby started to walk down to the street.
He walked from shop to shop, looking into each decorated window. Everything seemed so beautiful and so out of reach. It was starting to get dark and Bobby unwillingly turned to walk home when suddenly he caught sight of something shining on the ground. He reached down and discovered a shiny dime.
Never before had anyone felt so wealthy as Bobby felt at that moment. However, his excitement quickly turned cold when he was told that he could not buy anything with only ten cents.
Suddenly the flowers in a shop caught his eye, and he went inside. Bobby presented the dime and asked if he could buy a flower for his mother’s Christmas gift. The shop owner looked at Bobby and his ten cents offering. Then he put his hand on Bobby’s shoulder and said to him, “You just wait here and I’ll see what I can do for you.”
As Bobby waited in the shop, he looked at the beautiful flowers and even though he was a boy, he could see why mothers and girls liked flowers.
The last customer’s leaving brought Bobby back to reality. Bobby began to feel lonely and anxious. (341 words)
注意：
所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；
续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语以为你写好；
续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。
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After what seemed an age, the shop owner came out.
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“Could this be true ”thought Bobby.
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【思维路径】
[核心内容]
文本主要内容为：一个身无分文的贫穷的小男孩想给妈妈准备一份圣诞礼物。他意外地在街上拾到一枚十美分硬币，可是很快就被告知十美分买不了任何东西。之后他走进了一家花店，询问能不能用硬币买一枝花，老板让他等一会，去看看能为他做点什么。店里最后一位客人的离开将他拉回了现实，他开始感到孤单和惶恐。
[写作思路]
(1)明确故事人物关系(characters)。故事中主要人物为小男孩Bobby和花店老板。
(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。想为妈妈准备一份圣诞礼物的小男孩带着十美分的硬币走近了一家花店，询问是否可以买一支花，花店老板让他在店里等一会儿。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展(development)。故事总体的发展应该是过了许久花店老板才从里面走出来，然后他所做的事情使小男孩感到难以置信。结合上文中花店老板对小男孩热情关怀的态度，和小男孩的请求，可以预测或许花店老板为小男孩准备了一束价值远远超过十美分的一束美丽的鲜花，因此小男孩有种不真实感。续写第一段：花店老板出来时，手里拿着一束包装好的美丽的鲜花，并且告诉Bobby这束花的价格正好是10美分。续写第二段： Bobby被吓到了，怀疑这不是事实。花店老板用善意的谎言骗小男孩说这些花正好在促销，他手上的钱正好够付；或者向他解释这是圣诞老人准备好放在他店里并且告诉他会有一个拿着十美分硬币的小男孩来买。最后Bobby开心地付了钱，接过花，回家去了。
(4)结合下划线词罗列写作要点(points)。结合下划线词和文本内容——花店老板走了出来以及Bobby的不真实感，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“What did the shop owner do for Bobby Did he get the little boy some flowers What did the flowers look like What’s the price 等”；第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“Why did Bobby feel it was untrue How did the shop owner explain to him Did Bobby believe Did he get the Christmas gift for his mather How would he feel 等”。
[参考范文]
After what seemed an age, the shop owner came out. There, in his hands, lying twelve long stem, red roses, with leaves of green and tiny white flowers all tied together. Bobby’s heart sank as the owner placed them gently into a long white box. “That will be ten cents, young man.” the shop owner said, reaching out his hand for the dime.
“Could this be true ”thought Bobby. No one else would give him anything for his dime! Sensing the boy’s hesitatation, the shop owner added, “I just happened to have some roses on sale for ten cents a dozen. Would you like to buy them ” This time Bobby did not hesitate. He moved his hand to give the man his dime, and when the man placed the long box into his hands, Bobby knew it was true. Having these flowers for his mother’s Christmas gift, Bobby was more than happy. Walking out of the shop, he heard the shop keeper say, “Merry Christmas!” (154 words)
[范文解析]
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。花店老板拍拍小男孩的肩膀让他等一会可以看出他对小男孩的态度热情友好，并且续写第二段给出的开头是Bobby难以置信的感觉，因此第一段写了花店老板出来后手里拿着一束用绿叶和小白花装饰的玫瑰出来以十美分的价格卖给小男孩。第二段，小男孩感到难以置信，又结合文章前文描述的小男孩热切希望能够送妈妈一份礼物，写了最终小男孩买到了一份圣诞节礼物，而这份礼物就是花店老板提供的这束玫瑰花，中间缺少一个小男孩相信这一事实而接受了十美分买这束花的理由，因此，写花店老板告诉小男孩玫瑰花正好在促销也是符合情理的。
[提炼归纳]
1. 有效运用人物心理描写和语言描写推动故事发展
在有特定情境和人物对话的故事续写过程中，要通过对故事主要人物的动作描写和语言描写来推动故事的发展。例如范文中我们用了“Bobby’s heart sank”，“This time Bobby did not hesitate”两处描写表现了知道事实前后Bobby的心理变化；而结尾中花店老板的语言描写不仅切合了他善良友好的性格特点，又推动了故事的发展。
2. 巧用非谓语动词，使语言更自然地道
在具体的写作过程中，除了让故事发展合情合理，我们还可以考虑使用一些表达技巧使文本更加连贯，语言更加地道。例如，在范文中，我们用了多处非谓语动词结构，如“There, in his hands, lying twelve long stem, red roses …”，“, reaching out his hand”，“Sensing the boy’s hesitation”等。
【写作演练】
1.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
The doctors sent my mother home to die. As a fifteen-year survivor of breast cancer, she had suffered two heart attacks when advanced cancer was found in her lung. The doctor told me sadly, "She has a few days, maybe a week. Her heart is weak and unstable. "Mom had struggled to raise three daughters while holding a full-time job, yet worked hard to maintain a warm home for her family. My plan for Mom’s final days was simple: she would live with love, and die with grace.
I took mother to my home, small but comfortable, which was a heaven to four cats and a dog. The animals had the run of my house. We equipped the bedroom with an electric hospital bed and an oxygen machine, which frightened the cats. I’d moved their furniture and the cats were annoyed. The dog, on the other hand, an immature dog with bad habits, was excited by all the changes in the house. He jumped up, barking. He is Otto who was not afraid of the hospital bed, the oxygen machine or the medical smells. Nor was he afraid of the weak woman who had scolded him. Otto jumped onto the foot of Mom's hospital bed, and stayed. With the exception of eating and using the litter box, Otto never left Mom's room.
Days passed and Mom started to rally. “Not unusual,” I was told, “a rally is often a sign of imminent death(回光返照)” I was heart-broken. But Otto would not give her up so easily. He used her improved condition to reposition himself from the foot of her bed to her side. Her thin fingers found his soft coat. He leaned into her body, as if holding tight the strings of her will to live. Though weak, she petted the dog and would not allowed me to take him. Days turned into weeks and Mom continued to fight.
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Once, after the nurses had gone for the day, I heard the sound of Mom’s voice coming from her room. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
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Three years later, Mom together with Otto is still here, medicines and nurses long gone. __ ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
There was something in the elderly woman’s grace that caught my eye. Although slow and unsure of her steps, the woman moved with deliberation(从容), and there was no hesitation in her gestures.
It was a few years ago, and I had taken a part-time holiday-season job in a video store at the local shopping mall. From inside the store, I could see the people outside rushing by.
The elderly woman entered the store, along with her daughter, who was displaying a serious case of impatience, rolling her eyes, sighing and checking her watch every few seconds. I guessed if she had possessed a rope, she would have fastened it to her mother to drag her along to keep step with the rush of other shoppers.
The elderly woman separated from her daughter and began to seek through the DVDs on the nearest shelf. After the slightest hesitation, I walked over and asked if I could help her find something. The woman smiled up at me and showed me a title written on an old piece of paper.
Rather than rush off to locate the DVD for the woman, I asked her to walk with me so I could show her where she could find it. Looking back, I thought I wanted to enjoy her company for a moment. Something about her deliberate movements reminded me of my own mother, who’d passed away the previous Christmas. I missed my mom and still felt regretful about the moments when I’d used my impatience to make her life unhappy.
As we walked along the back of the store, I introduced its floor plan: old television shows, action movies, cartoons, science fiction. The woman seemed glad of the unrushed company and casual conversation.
We found the DVD and she thanked me, saying that it was the one she’d enjoyed when she was her daughter’s age. Unwillingly, I accompanied her to the cash register, realizing I had to return the elderly woman to her daughter, who was still tapping her foot at the front of the store.
3.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
I like all kinds of chocolate.Mother had bought a bar of it,and somehow I couldn't stop thinking about it.I was helping Father in the yard when I got the idea that I could cut off the end of that bar of chocolate.Mother would be sure to miss it,but before she had any idea who had done it,I could admit that I'd taken it to escape a spanking(挨揍)。I waited until Mother was out feeding the chickens.Then I told Father I thought I'd go in for a drink of water.I got the bar down,but I heard Mother coming just when I had the knife ready to cut.So I slipped the chocolate into the front of my shirt and left quickly.Before I went back to help Father,I went to the barn(谷仓)and hid the chocolate there.
All the rest of afternoon,I didn't like to look at Father.Every time he spoke it made me jump.My hands began shaking so much that he asked me what was the matter.I told him it was just that my hands were cold.I knew he didn't believe me,and every time he looked my way my heart started pounding.I didn't want the chocolate anymore.I wanted a chance to put it back without being caught.
I was nearly out to where the cows were when I remembered what Father had said once-some of the family money was mine because I had helped to earn it.Why wouldn't it be all right to figure the bar of chocolate had been bought with my own money That seemed to fix everything.But by the time I had the cows headed home,I had begun to worry again.I decided to leave the whole matter to the Lord.I picked up a dried stick and decided I would throw it up into the air and take my orders from the way it landed.If it pointed west.I'd take the whole bar back.If it pointed south.I'd take half an inch off the end.If it pointed east,I'd bought the bar with my own money and it wouldn't be stealing to keep it.I swung the stick as high as I could.When it came down,it pointed mostly west-but a little south.That night I couldn't sleep.I kept trying to remember how much that stick had really been pointing to the south.
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At last I got up,slipped out into the yard and took the ax(斧头)from the chopping block.
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Then he stood me on my feet and asked if I thought I had deserved the spanking._
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4.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。 续写的词数应为150左右。
I sat at the breakfast table with my four-year-old son, Matthew, trying to ignore the ache in my stomach. “Mama, want to play ” “Not today, baby,” I shook my head. These days I could barely get out of bed. I was still recovering from a surgery. I hoped for strength and happiness. But the future seemed so hopeless.
Suddenly, Matthew jumped up from his spot on the kitchen floor. “Bird!” he shouted, rushing to our courtyard. Sure enough, there was a white dove seated in a rubber tree. It sat there for a few moments, and then flew away. Strange, I'd never seen one in our neighborhood before.
When I dragged myself to the kitchen the next morning, the dove was back. This time with a mate carrying twigs. “Look, Matthew,” I said, pointing to the tree. “They ’re going to make a nest.” The doves flew in and out of the courtyard all week, building on top of the rubber tree.
Matthew could hardly contain his excitement. Every morning, he'd run into the kitchen and take his spot by the sliding glass door, talking to the birds while they worked. His enthusiasm was influential. As much as I was grieving, I couldn't help but look forward to the doves' visits too.
Then it all went wrong. The courtyard was a safe enough spot for a nest, but the rubber tree's broad, thin leaves were far from stable. One night, a strong wind blew, throwing the doves' nest to the ground. I heard the twigs break apart.
I surveyed the damage. Nothing good ever lasts. I wouldn't blame the doves if they never came back. But they returned. And they paid no attention to the pile of sticks that had once been their nest.They started again from scratch. Again, though, the wind destroyed all their hard work. The next day, and the next, they renewed their efforts, as if nothing had happened.
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I knew I had to do something.
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“It works! The birds are back!” Matthew announced.
5.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
It was a Sunday morning. Betty woke up earlier than usual. She couldn’t sleep any longer because she was so excited that her uncle Mark was taking her to the beach. She had always loved going surfing with her uncle. She put her swimming suit on and took quickly that she had prepared the night got before and went outside to wait. She jumped up and down with joy when she saw her uncle’s red jeep turn the corner down her street.
Uncle Mark got out of the car and helped Betty get in. “Are you ready ” he asked. “Yes!” replied Betty. Uncle Mark could see the excitement in her face. Suddenly he said seriously, “Well, before we go, I have to let you know that a shark appeared recently where we're going to surf today.” Scared and shocked, Betty couldn’t say a word. “Haha! I'm kidding you,” Uncle Mark burst out laughing. Betty laughed too. She knew Uncle Mark liked teasing others. “Let’s go and have some breakfast, I know just the place,” Uncle Mark said. They went to a breakfast shop and ate some tacos (炸玉米饼).
After breakfast the two of them went down to Pacific Beach and got their surfboards ready. “First you have to wax(打蜡)the bottom,explained Uncle Mark. “I know. I’ve watched you do it before!" Betty said as she took the wax from Uncle Mark's hand. It took about 15 minutes to wax the bottom of their boards. When Betty finished, Uncle Mark looked it over to make sure it was done well. “Nice job, Betty, you wax your board like a true surfer.”
Finally, they were ready to get into the water. They carried their boards down to the beach and went out into the water. Betty was overly excited and tried to rush to catch a wave. Predictably, she crashed and had to start over. Next was her uncle's turn. He stood up on his first try and smoothly surfed the wave before jumping into the water. Betty cheered for her uncle's perfect run.
注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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All of a sudden, Betty felt something touching the bottom of her foot.
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“Help! Help!” Betty screamed in horror.
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答案与解析
1.【参考范文】
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Once, after the nurses had gone for the day, I heard the sound of Mom’s voice coming from her room. I found her with the head of the bed raised, reading from the newspaper, with Otto in her arms, listening adoringly. I will forever cherish the memory of Otto’s touching her face. Eventually, using a walker, Mom began to take walks through the house, followed by Otto. Where she rested, Otto rested. Where she moved, Otto shadowed. Somehow, Otto knew that during those days he became her dog child, giving her life purpose.
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Three years later, Mom together with Otto is still here, medicines and nurses long gone. When we saw the doctor a while ago, “I can’t believe it, Lula,” he said. “I can’t find your cancer and your heart is strong. When your daughter brought you to me, I thought you were a ship that had sailed.” Mom gives the credit to Otto, who continues to share his gift of love―a medicine more powerful than any drug a doctor could prescribe.
【解析】
1.第一段给出的首句是Jatin looked up and he saw the other boys rushing ahead.这一句是故事发展的转折点。可以从“我发现她抬起床头，读着报纸，怀里抱着奥托，崇拜地听着。”入手扩展开去，——无论从何角度拓展，需注意与续写第二段首句呼应，最后一句应该用“不知道为什么，奥托知道在那些日子里，他成了她的狗孩子，给了她生活的目标。”与第二段首句相呼应。
2.第二段所给首句Filled with pleasure, Jatin walked home in no time.这一句呼应前文，紧接着可以从“不久前我们去看医生时，他说:‘我真不敢相信，卢拉。’”入手续写。
【范文点评】
这是一篇续写。符合续写要求，段落之间衔接紧密，句子环环相扣，层次清晰。同时文中使用高级句子。I found her with the head of the bed raised, reading from the newspaper, with Otto in her arms, listening adoringly.句中现在分词作伴随状语；Eventually, using a walker, Mom began to take walks through the house, followed by Otto.过去分词作方式状语；Where she moved, Otto shadowed.句中where引导地点状语从句；When your daughter brought you to me, I thought you were a ship that had sailed.句中when引导时间状语从句。
2.【参考范文】
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As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. “Mind some advice ” I asked. She rolled her eyes and said. “Of course not.” But clearly there was annoyance in her reply. I smiled to show her I wasn’t criticizing. “Cherish her and cherish every single moment you can stay with her,” I said, to her surprise, And then I answered her curious expression by saying, “When she’s gone, it’s these little moments that will come back to you. Moments like this.” Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation(优雅) back to her daughter.
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Together they made their way toward the store’s exit. They stood there for a moment, side by side, watching the rush of the holiday current and then looking at each other. Slowly, the daughter placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mother’s shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd. Tears filled my eyes when I watched them disappearing in the crowd.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者在录像带工作做兼职时，看到了一对母女一起走进了商店。女儿非常不耐烦，而母亲只是从容地选着DVD。看到这里作者想到了自己的母亲，于是在收银台排队时给了女儿一些忠告。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：当那位老妇人在收银台排队时，我走向她的女儿。可知后文应当描写作者和女儿的对话，作者劝告女儿珍惜现在和母亲相处的时刻；第二段开头是：他们一起朝商店的出口走去。后文应当描写听了作者建议的女儿和母亲在一起的表现，她把她的胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上，带着明显不习惯的感情，轻轻地把她带回到人群中。作者看着消失在人群中，热泪盈眶。
最后注意词数为150词左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如： annoyance, to one's surprise, deliberation等高级词汇；时间状语从句When she’s gone, it’s these little moments that will come back to you.；非谓语动词的运用Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation back to her daughter.等高级句式。
3.【参考范文】
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At last/got up, slipped out into the yard and took the ax from the chopping block Then I went into the barn and took the chocolate outside.By the light of the moon,I was about to cut off the end of the bar when I heard"Son!"I couldn't think of a thing to say.I grabbed up the bar of chocolate and hid it next to my chest before l turned around.Father picked me up and took me over to the woodpile.I didn't know anybody could spank as hard as he did.
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Then he stood me on my feet and asked if l thought I had deserved the spanking.He said it wasn't so much that I'd taken the chocolate,but that I'd tried to hide it from him."Son,"he said,"I know you help to earn the family money.We might say the chocolate was yours in the first place.You could have had it if you'd asked for it,but I won't have you being sneaky about things.
【解析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知，作者记叙了孩童时一次“偷”东西的经历，因为很爱吃巧克力，作者打算偷吃一点妈妈买的巧克力却意外地将其整块巧克力拿走，然后就陷入了不知如何处理的尴尬局面中，他选择了扔棍子让天意告诉他该怎么做，如果落下来指向西就还回去，指向南就切一点，指向懂就花钱买下来，最终棍子是指向西偏一点南。续写的部分就从那天晚上开始。
【范文点评】
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我起了床，溜到院子里拿起了斧头。所以应该写他准备切巧克力了，但是第二段开头是：他让我站好然后问我觉得自己值不值得挨揍。由此可知作者在切巧克力时应该是被父亲发现了然后被父亲揍了一顿，这些都要在第一段体现。而第二段则应该承接父亲的问题，借由父亲之口向作者讲清道理，或总结作者从中的收获，使文章完整。
续写时要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右，需按要求完成续写任务。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇。如：by the light of the moon，be about to，be sneaky about等；情境描写得较为生动，代入感强；英文表达地道，如：He said it wasn't so much that I'd taken the chocolate,but that I'd tried to hide it from him熟练地运用了形式主语it，彰显了较高的英语水平。
4.【参考范文】
I knew I had to do something. The white dove and its mate had given me something to look forward to, even in my darkest days. Now I was going to help them in return. I woke up the following morning with a plan. There was only an hour before the doves usually made their visits. I hammered a shelf into the wall next to the rubber tree and covered it with leaves to make it look like a tree. Then Matthew and I stood by the sliding glass door, waiting and hoping.
“It works! The birds are back !” Matthew announced. There they were—sitting on top of the shelf, adding some twigs to the new nest despite damage from the strong wind. Three weeks later, we watched three chicks break free from their shells. “Chirp, chirp!” Matthew sang. I held him close and kissed him, feeling more positive and hopeful than I had in months. I realized all around me, life went on. And it was filled with wonders and surprises that I couldn't even imagine.
【解析】
通过阅读所给文章可知，作者四岁的儿子Matthew每天都看到白鸽来到自己家的院子里，每天早上，他都会跑进厨房，站在滑动玻璃门旁边，在鸟儿搭巢时和它们说话。一天夜里，刮起了一阵大风，把鸽巢掀到地上。作者以为鸽子再也不回来，但他们又回来了。它们对那堆曾经是它们巢穴的树枝毫不在意。他们又从零开始。然而，风又一次摧毁了他们所有的辛勤工作。第二天，接着第二天，他们又继续努力，仿佛什么也没发生过。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：我知道我必须做点什么。所以后文应该是讲述鸽子给了作者一些值得期待的东西，于是作者在橡胶树旁边的墙上敲了一个架子，并用树叶覆盖，使它看起来像一棵树。然后和Matthew站在滑动玻璃门旁边等待着，希望着。第二段开头是：“起作用了！鸟儿回来了!” Matthew宣布。本段应该写鸽子们回来后的情况，三个星期后，三只小鸽子破壳而出。作者和儿子都感到几个月来从未有过的乐观和希望。作者也意识到，在周围，生活在继续，充满了无法想象的奇迹和惊喜。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【范文点评】
本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：look forward to, in return, cover with等高级词汇；There was only an hour before the doves usually made their visits.运用了时间状语从句；And it was filled with wonders and surprises that I couldn't even imagine.运用了定语从句等高级句式。
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All of a sudden, Betty felt something touching the bottom of her foot. She began to panic. She tried to climb on top of her surfboard and look to see what was swimming below. She turned around and saw a giant shark fin circling her. Before Betty could call out to her uncle, the shark attacked her surfboard. Luckily the shark missed her but now she was stuck in the water.
“Help! Help! Betty screamed in horror. Hearing Betty's scream and seeing the shark, Uncle Mark was quick to act. By the time he arrived, Betty was exhausted from keeping herself afloat without a surfboard. Uncle Mark told Betty to grab onto his surfboard. He swam crazy and quickly brought them both back onto the shore. Betty was crying but felt safe as she knew Uncle Mark would always be there protecting her.
【解析】
为完成续写任务，首先需要掌握所给文章的大意，理清其叙事脉络、说明方法或论证方式，可以先从梳理每段的大意开始：
第一段：本段交代了主要人物和故事背景，一个周日的早上Betty很早就起来了，因为这一天Mark叔叔要带她去沙滩上冲浪，她心情激动，迫不及待，这时Mark叔叔的车来了。
第二段：Mark叔叔接上了Betty，跟她开玩笑说这次要去的水域最近报告有鲨鱼出没(这里可以看作一个伏笔)，然后两人就去吃早餐了。
第三段：两人来到了沙滩上，进行一些冲浪前的准备动作，主要是给冲浪板打蜡。
第四段：本段主要描写Mark叔叔和Betty准备好后下水冲浪的情景。
可以看到，前四段已经将主要的人物和事件交代清楚，属于记叙文，叙事的脉络就是按照时间顺序来展开的，续写的部分要结合所给的开头部分来继续讲述Betty和Mark叔叔在冲浪时发生的事情。
续写第一段给出的情节是“突然Betty感觉到有东西碰到了自己的脚”，而续写第二段“救命！救命！Betty恐惧地大叫道”表明Betty在水中遭遇了险情，这里就可以呼应到第二段埋下的伏笔，即Betty在水里真的遇到了鲨鱼，但仍然需要一个确认的过程，续写第一段就可以围绕这一点展开，描述Betty如何察觉危险、她的情绪如何变化、她作出何种应对，甚至可以描写鲨鱼进行了攻击但没有命中，渲染危急紧张的气氛。而续写第二段就应该切入另外一个人物Mark叔叔了，听到Betty的求救，他会作何反应，二人又将如何化险为夷，这里是有较大的发挥空间的。另外建议续写比较圆满的结局，这样更加符合一般故事的走向和价值观。
【范文点评】
与提纲类书面表达不同，读后续写要求考生首先要读懂已有信息，这意味着不仅要读懂文章大意，还要理清文章的脉络和关系。此类题目多以记叙文的形式出现，进行续写时考生需要明白故事的发展进程、前因后果、地理位置变化、人物特征和情感等。在此基础上，考生顺着文章的思路，根据线索，发挥想象，对其后的情节进行合理预测，并用英语表达出来，即可完成续写任务。本文的叙事线索是比较清楚的，在明确故事内容的基础上，需要注意到第二段中埋下的伏笔，并且在续写中反映出来，这样可以使得文章前后形成呼应，给人良好的阅读体验。

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