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Continuation Writing
读后续写讲评课
主讲人：
考情分析
1.能基本读懂故事，
2. 对原文分析不够具体到位
3.写作句式简单，描写生硬
教学目标
通过故事来分析原文本的基本框架，分析出故事要素（人物，时间，地点，事件），分析出人物关系，环境，情节发展，并作出合理预测。
通过搭建脚手架，提供语料，使学生能够用正确合适的语言合理续写故事。
如何构思续写的内容
Step 1 Figure out the elements
Step 2 Figure out the plots
Step 3 Figure out the main idea
Step 4 Make predictions
Mary waited anxiously for her turn in the empty dressing room. Never had she been so nervous before. This competition was of vital importance to her comeback .“If I can win today,” she said to herself, “I can dance on the national stage next month.” Three months ago, her left arm was seriously injured in a car accident.After the medical treatment , she began to recover slowly. She practiced over and over again in order to regain her dancing skills.
“Hi, Mary,” in rushed her friend Jessica.“How is your arm Is it going to influence your performance ”
“I guess it can be tolerated for I am to win the match . ” said Mary with a determined look.
“Admirable! But I hear that a girl called Linda is really gifted and strong.She can be your real well-matched e on!”
After Jessica left,Mary decided to practice her most difficult spin . “If I don’t try harder, I won’t grasp this chance.” She thought. But her arm began to hurt, making her worried. “Mary, what makes you think you have a chance tonight ” she said to herself. After the pain was gone, she continued to warm up.
A slim girl hurried in and put down an equipment bag on the chair.Then, she took out her dance dress quickly and put it on skillfully. Seeing Mary, she smiled politely and said “Hi, I’m Linda. I am the next one!” Mary nodded in reply but felt uncomfortable. “This is just my competitor. Because of her, I may lose tonight.” Her mind was wandering when Linda let out a scream, “Oh, God, I can’t find my music tape!” Linda searched her bag but in vain . “It may be missing on the way.”With these words, she then rushed out.
Paragaph1:
Suddenly, Mary caught sight of a black box under the chair where Linda put her bag.____________________________________________________
Hearing her name called, Mary walked on the stage with her heart beating faster and faster. ▲_____________
Possibilities:
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got the plane on time
续写
要素分析：
when Before the dance competition where who
what
why
in the empty dressing room
Mary
Linda
waiting for a dance
competition
arm was seriously
injured
put on her dance dress
say hi to Mary
Lost her music tape
anxiously
nervous
wanted to win
determined
gifted and strong
worried and searched her tape
but in vain
Theme
when Before the dance competition where in the empty dressing room who Mary/Linda
what Mary and Linda were dance competitors. Mary had an arm injury while Linda was very gifted.
why Linda couldn't find her music tape.
如何构思续写的内容
plot
feelings
characters
Writing purpose
Problems and solutions
Beginning
Build-up
Conflict
Resolusion
1
2
3

Mary was eager to win a dance competition with an arm injury.
Her friend Jessica said Linda was talented.
Linda lost her music tape right before the competion.

Story moutain
Beginning
Conflict
Build-up
Resolution
Ending
anxiously
nervous
Mary was eager to win a dance competition with an arm injury
Jessica said her competitor Linda was talented
determined
Linda could be Mary's real well-matched competitor
nervous and worried
Linda lost her music tape,but only Mary knew where it was
To tell the truth Not
struggled
Main idea
Mary在化妆间等待参加舞蹈比赛，但是感到胳膊上的伤是晋级的一大障碍。比赛前，朋友Jessica向她透露Linda是她最大的竞争对手，Mary为此感到紧张和不悦。偶遇Linda，却得知Linda遗失了伴奏带。Linda外出寻找，而Mary碰巧发现伴奏带在椅子下。
Make prediction
Mary内心纠结是否要告诉竞争者Linda伴奏带在哪里？
Mary是否战胜内心的弱点？是否赢得比赛？
Plot Story 情节设计
beginning
development
climax (Linda lost her music tape,but only Mary knew where it was)
ending (Did Mary tell the truth or not Did she win the competition or not )
Mary was eager to win a dance competition with an arm injury
Jessica said her competitor Linda was talented
1. What did Mary think about in her mind at the moment
2. What happened next
3. How did Mary feel
1. How did Mary react to the music tape
2. What happened to Linda
3. What was the final ending
central conflict
Make prediction
Character Mary Linda
Setting in the empty dressing room/on the stage
Action caught sight of the tape/dance competition
Mood in a dilemma？feel relieved in low spirits
段首句 Paragraph 1: Suddenly, Mary caught sight of a black box under the chair where Linda put her bag. Paragraph 2: Hearing her name called, Mary walked on the stage with her heart beating faster and faster. What happened
What did Mary think about What did Mary do How did Mary feel
1. How did Mary react to the music tape
2. What happened to Linda
3. What was the final ending
Writing based on the outline and using sentence patterns.
情感描写的表达
动作描写
合理的细节描写
分解动作，使动作过程化、具体化
His mind began to race,trying to think of a good solution.
A brilliant idea suddenly crossed his mind.
A terrible idea hit/struck /occurred to sb.
At that very moment, he wondered whether he would...
was determined to...
So the young man realized that...
I focused my thoughts on...
I convinced myself that...
mental activity
Language database for descriptions
mental activity
Language database for descriptions
Then ... tried to figure out what ...
All of a sudden, a horrible thought just came into one's mind: ...! Having realized ...
At this dark and hopeless moment, a wonderful idea came to ... It filled one's mind with a great, bright light.
... thought for a moment, was about to agree; but ...changed one's mind.
... nodded one's heads in agreement, understanding each other.
Language database for descriptions
Emotional languages：happiness
excited；glad；happy；cheerful;pleased; joyful ; thrilled
几乎无法掩饰他的兴奋的心情：can hardly hide
心情愉快：in cheerful spirits
因...而高兴：be joyful over/about
快乐至极：be overwhelmed with
欣喜若狂：be wild with delight
Language database for descriptions
Emotional languages：happiness
Body languages
高兴地跳起来：dance/jump for joy
乐得大叫：yell with delight
使某人心情愉快：brighten sb up
使某人高兴 make sb's day
感到高兴 feel thrilled/delighted
极度激动be obviously overcome with excitement
Language database for descriptions
Emotional languages：sadness
Facial expresions
fall into despair
ran out in panic
with a heavy heart
in low spirits
a sense of loss/failure
with a worried look
feel embarrassed/depressed/frustrated/discouraged
lose heart
Suddenly, Mary caught sight of a black box under the chair where Linda put her bag. She went over and then opened the box to find Linda’s tape was just inside. At that time, she was in a dilemma, “This is my chance to defeat her.” But on a second thought, she changed her mind, “If I hide it, I will will the competition but I may lose something.” She placed it on the chair carefully, leaving a note saying “Take it easy, we are the best.” Soon, it’s her turn to come on the stage.
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Hearing her name called, Mary walked on the stage with her heart beating faster and faster. She kept reminding herself, “I have been practicing for so long, and I will certainly make it.” But the serious pain in her arm came again when she was performing the most difficult spin. She fell down on the stage. At that moment, Linda came back in low spirits. To her surprise and relief， she saw the tape and Mary’s note. With Mary’s kindness and encouragement, Linda finished her performance calmly and skillfully. Finally, Mary lost the game but she believed she had won everything.
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