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2022深圳二模
Continuation Writing
第二节（满分 25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
On a hot September afternoon, Peter and his friend Isabel were on their way to the library. When they passed by Tubman park, Isabel suggested cutting through it to get to the library. As they entered the park, the sight of the swings (秋千) and the merry-go-round brought back a flood of memories of their childhood spent there. But now everything looked so old, sad, and dirty. Litter lay on the ground next to
an overflowing trash bin. There were still young schoolchildren playing there but they had to avoid the trash that littered the playground. A little boy told them that the city took the other trash cans away and the remaining one never got emptied often.
As they headed toward the library, the two high school students wrinkled their forehead. In the library, they encountered Mrs. Evans, their kind-hearted fifth-grade teacher, retired yet still passionate. Mrs. Evans listened as Isabel and Peter eagerly explained what they’d seen. Finally,
she recommended them to go to the City Hall to voice their concerns.
The next day, Isabel and Peter went into the building of the City Hall but were met with an impatient officer. They were informed that the city couldn’t help with their problem due to a tight budget. Discouraged, they left and turned to Mrs. Evans for help.
Under her guidance, they decided to ask Go Green, a non-profit organization whose goal is to protect the environment, for help. “This group is good at raising money
for projects just like yours,” said Mrs. Evans. She promised to arrange them to present their ideas to Go Green. Hearing this, their face lit up.
Two main tasks remained ahead: researching ways to clean up the park and preparing a convincing presentation. As Isabel was good at researching while Peter always had a talent for speaking, they cooperated quite well. Isabel learned from a science magazine that a new type of trash bin can squeeze the trash down without being emptied often, which saves time, money, and energy. Based on this, Peter practiced his presentation over and over again.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting. _____________________
_________________________________________________
After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news. ____________________________________________
题型分析：这篇文章是个记叙文。本题是续写部分围绕两名高中生为守护记忆中的绿色公园，尝试说服说服当地的非盈利组织Go Green筹集资金保护他们儿时的公园环境而展开。这样的话题非常符合高考对于“人与社会——环境保护”主题语境的考查。但是，真正参加这样的非营利性组织的环保活动的同学还是有限的，因此本题难度较大，同学们既要关注续写故事的合理性又要关注自己的语言点。
Story
when
where
who
what
how
why
in hot September
park, library, at the back of the hall
Peter，Isabel and their retired teacher Mrs. Evans
Peter and Isabel found the park was not clean any longer and tried to change the situation with Mrs. Evans’s help.
The city would not help with their problem due to a tight budget.
1. 浅层信息理解
首先要审题：⑴体裁：_______；⑵人称：_______________；⑶主体时态：____________；主题语境：__________________ 。
记叙文
第三人称
一般过去时
人与自然之环境保护
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
2. 深层信息理解
①理清故事的发展线索（How）
PARAGRAPH（段落） Behaviors（行为） Topic（段意）
passed by，entered，brought back，looked so old, sad, and dirty，lay，had to avoid，took away Peter and Isabel passed by Tubman park and found that litter lay around.
Para. 1
2. 深层信息理解
①理清故事的发展线索（How）
PARAGRAPH（段落） Behaviors（行为） Topic（段意）
wrinkled，encountered，recommended，went into，couldn’t help，turned to，present their ideas to Go Green，lit up Their retired teacher Mrs. Evans offered them certain tips to raise money for the Tubman park.
Para. 2 — 4
2. 深层信息理解
①理清故事的发展线索（How）
PARAGRAPH（段落） Behaviors（行为） Topic（段意）
was good at researching，had a talent for speaking，cooperated ，can squeeze down，saves Peter and Isabel made good preparations for cleaning up the park.
Para. 6
… When they passed by Tubman park, Isabel suggested cutting through it to get to the library. As they entered the park, the sight of the swings (秋千) and the merry-go-round brought back a flood of memories of their childhood spent there. But now everything looked so old, sad, and dirty. Litter lay on the ground next to an overflowing trash bin. … A little boy told them that the city took the other trash cans away and the remaining one never got emptied often.
②挖掘故事情节和情感
续写伏笔，后续故事一定会发生某不喜悦之事
Showing that both Peter and Isabel had a good memory here, which hints the development of the story
The contrast between their memory and the fact makes them decide to do sth.
The main problem occurs
冲突1，暗指后续故事一定会出现一系列解决举措
… the two high school students wrinkled their forehead. In the library, they encountered Mrs. Evans, their kind-hearted fifth-grade teacher, retired yet still passionate. Mrs. Evans listened as Isabel and Peter eagerly explained what they’d seen. Finally, ...
… They were informed that the city couldn’t help with their problem due to a tight budget. Discouraged, they left and turned to Mrs. Evans for help.
②挖掘故事情节和情感
indicating their down spirits
indicating that they will get help from their teacher
indicating they’re enthusiastic
indicating their down spirits
冲突2，暗指后续故事一定会出现其他解决举措
Under her guidance, they decided to ask Go Green, a non-profit organization whose goal is to protect the environment, for help. “This group is good at raising money for projects just like yours,” said Mrs. Evans. She promised to arrange them to present their ideas to Go Green. Hearing this, their face lit up.
…As Isabel was good at researching while Peter always had a talent for speaking, …. Peter practiced his presentation over and over again.
②挖掘故事情节和情感
The solution to the second conflict was found
indicating she’s enthusiastic and helpful
indicating they’re enthusiastic and helpful
为故事续写最终冲突最终成功解决做好了铺垫
3. 整合本篇的故事情节和情感线索：
九月份的一个下午，比特和伊莎贝尔一起去图书馆，途径他们儿时的公园，发现曾经干净的地方变得非常糟糕，垃圾到处都是，在退休老师伊万建议下，他们去政府部门寻求帮助，但是被告知因为财政紧张不能解决公园的问题。老师又给他们介绍了非盈利组织Go Green。为了说服该组织筹集资金，他们做了充分的准备……
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
由第一段首句内容“A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting.”（一周之后，彼特紧张地站在了Go Green即将集会的大厅的后面。）可知，彼特要开始他的游说了。 设问如下：
①Which words or phrases should be focused on
(stood nervously)
②What did Peter do to avoid his nervousness
③ What did Peter present at the meeting？
④How did he perform on the stage
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
由第二段首句After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news. (会议之后，伊莎贝尔兴奋地告诉了彼特这个好消息。)可知，这一段将主要描述会议之后的情节。设问如下：
⑤Which words or phrases should be focused on
(excitedly told，good news)
⑥What was the good news
⑦How would their teacher and Peter react to their behavour
⑧What was the result？
根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节。
[开端]彼特紧张地站在集会大厅。[故事发展]试着缓解紧张神经→伊莎贝尔鼓励彼特→谈论了公园的糟糕状况→评委们似乎对彼得项目很感兴趣。 [结局] Go Green已经同意捐款，伊莎贝尔把好消息告诉了彼得→老师代表Go Green询问彼特和伊莎贝尔是否愿意做志愿者。
三、运用和原文相一致的语言风格组织续写情节
四、高分范文
A week later, Peter stood nervously at the back of the hall where Go Green was meeting. ①Closing his eyes and taking a deep breath, Peter tried to relax his tension. ②“Take it easy, Peter! I believe you can make it.” Isabel winked at him and encouraged him. It was just then that Peter heard his name called to make a presentation. ③He strode onto the hall stage and started his detailed description of the dilemma, expressing his worries about the Tubman Park and offering their research about the advanced trashcans. ④Seemingly quite interested in Peter’s passionate project, the judges smiled and nodded from time to time.
四、高分范文
After the meeting, Isabel excitedly told Peter the good news. Go Green had agreed to donate money to buy the advanced trash cans for the park! Hearing the inspiring news, they both leaped into the air with joy. ⑤What was more exciting was that they would go further to find what else they could do to make the park more picturesque for the locals. ⑥Before they could share the thrilling news with Mrs. Evans, Peter’s phone rang. ⑦ It was from Mrs. Evans, who was calling to ask Peter and Isabel if they were willing to work as volunteers for Go Green on behalf of the organization.
五、高分范文英译中
一周之后，彼特紧张地站在了Go Green即将集会的大厅的后面。闭上眼睛，深呼吸，彼特试着缓解他紧张的神经。“放轻松，彼特。我相信你可以做到的。”伊莎贝尔朝彼特眨了眨眼睛并鼓励道。就在这时，彼得听到有人叫他做报告。 他大步走上大厅的讲台，开始详细描述困境，表达了他对塔布曼公园的担忧，谈论了公园的糟糕状况，并提供了他们关于先进垃圾桶的研究。 评委们似乎对彼得充满激情的项目很感兴趣，时不时地微笑点头。
五、高分范文英译中
会后，伊莎贝尔兴奋地把这个好消息告诉了彼得。 先进的垃圾桶! 听到这个振奋人心的消息，他们都高兴得跳了起来。 更令人兴奋的是，他们将进一步寻找其他可以做的事情，使。 他们还没来得及把这个激动人心的消息告诉埃文斯夫人，彼得的电话就响了。 是埃文斯夫人打来的，她打电话问彼得和伊莎贝尔是否愿意代表这个组织为“绿色行动”做志愿者。
六、名师点评
本文续写中，作者通过语言、心理和动作的描写，讲述了一个在彼得和伊莎贝尔共同努力下，为自己儿时的公园恢复原貌努力付出并取得成功的故事。①句现在分词短语做时间状语，描述了彼得上台前的紧张；②句通过语言和动作描写，再次展现了伊莎贝尔是彼得好搭档，同时强调句的使用渲染演讲的紧张气氛；③句精确借用strode onto，started，expressing，offering等动词，将讲台上有条不紊娓娓道来的彼得的形象生动地展现了出来，与原文Based on this, Peter practiced his presentation over and over again相呼应；④句通过对
六、名师点评
裁判们的动作描述，间接说明彼特的演讲得到了肯定，与下一段的首句进行承接；⑤句中含有what引导的主语从句和及that引导的表语从句，体现了作者深厚的语言功底，而且more exciting和going further两个比较级的使用也和前一句构成递进关系；⑥句before引导时间状语，使句子间的时间衔接更加紧密；⑦句中含有who引导的非限制性定语从句和if引导的宾语从句，将故事的情节推向最高潮，同时故事到此戛然而止，给读者留下了足够的想象的空间。
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