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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头续写两段，使之构成一个完整的短文。 Boys like to be considered to be brave, but what kind of things can be considered to be brave It is not a question that can be answered by words, but by the actual deed. A boy with the name Henry gave us a good example. Ronny and Henry were two friends in the same class. They always played together and went home together. One day as Ronny and Henry were going home after school, they saw some people fighting in the street corner. Ronny said excitedly, “Some people are fighting! Let's go and have a look!” But Henry refused, “It's none of our business. We'd better go home and don't get close to them. Also our parents are expecting to have dinner with us together at home and I don't want them to worry about me.” “You are a coward, and afraid to go,” said Ronny, and off he ran to the spot with some other boys. Henry had to go home alone and didn't think about it anymore.
But Ronny thought Henry was a coward and told all the boys that. They laughed at him a great deal. From then on, they looked down upon Henry and didn't want to play with him. Henry was sad but he wasn't angry with Ronny for his rude behavior, because he had learned that true courage was shown most in bearing misunderstanding when it was not deserved, and that he ought to be afraid of nothing but doing wrong. Thus, he just ignored the other boys' laughter and continued to stick to his thought and go to school and study as well. However, Ronny didn't invite Henry to go home with him anymore. Instead, he had his new friends who also thought Henry was a coward. Every day after school, they didn't go home directly but went to the river or somewhere to play games and had lots of fun.
A few days later, something terrible happened to Ronny.______
At that moment, Henry happened to pass by.____
Reading Material
Who
When
What
Henry,Ronny and other boys
Paragraph 1:
A few days later, something terrible happened to
Ronny.____________________
Paragraph 2:
At that moment, Henry happened to pass by._________
friendship, bravery
Theme:
after school
Ronny thought Henry was a coward and told all
the boys that. They laughed at him a great deal.
From then on, they looked down upon Henry and
didn't want to play with him.
文章主题bravery，人设十分清晰。Ronny和Henry对勇敢的不同理解，成为故事中人物行为的出发点。原文故事在情节上和续写部分没有太大的关联，但是人物性格已塑造，下文的发展应依据人物性格合理拓展。
第一句重点“something terrible”，根据原文里的内容及人物，时间和地点 “new friends” “after school”, "river"，可以想象Ronny和新朋友在放学后去河边发生了意外或危险（洗澡/游泳时抽筋/被水草绊住、意外掉入水中等），着重事件的描述。另，文章主题bravery，出事原因可以根据这个主线，比如：谁敢下水游到对岸谁就是最勇敢的孩子。这样可以和真正的勇敢（Para2）进行对比。
第二句Henry出场。本段第一句应该描写Henry发现意外，使得上下句连贯衔接。根据原文对Henry的描述（Henry was sad but he wasn't angry...），他会选择帮助他们，体现真正的勇敢，呼应原文开头。
文本分析：
Plot
情节1：
第一段：几天后可怕的事情发生 了。
--Ronny 和朋友像往常一样去河边找乐子。
--Ronny掉水里了，惊慌，挣扎。
--新朋友不敢救他。Ronny,绝望。
第二段：就在那时，Henry路过。
--Henry看到Ronny在水里挣扎。
--Henry毫不犹豫救Ronny。
--Ronny感激，羞愧，道歉， 和好。
Plot
情节2：
第一段：几天后可怕的事情发生 了。
--途遇打架，要搞事情。
--新朋友秒怂。
--Ronny惊慌，挣扎，绝望。
第二段：就在那时，Henry路过。
--Henry 看到Ronny被困住，有危险。
--Henry毫不犹豫救Ronny。
--Ronny感激，羞愧，道歉，和好。
The problems
3衔接：
1. A few days later, something terrible happened to Ronny.______
2. At that moment, Henry happened to pass by.____
something terrible (terrible 的程度，something 的过程 ，过渡）
that moment （Henry怎么知道是Ronny）
3. 新朋友和Ronny的关系，性格
4. 新人物？
1.喊声阻止了他的进步，他看到Ronny在水中挣扎。
A shouting arrested his progress and he saw Ronny struggling in the water.
2.他刚把绳子扔进河里， Ronny立刻抓住了它。
No sooner had he thrown the rope into the river than Ronny immediately grabbed it in a hurry.
3.随着时间的流逝，Ronny慢慢地失去了意识
As time dragged by, Ronny felt his legs heavier and weaker, losing his consciousness.
4.当心！他的朋友们冲他大喊大叫，但为时已晚。在Ronny弄清楚发生了什么之前，他已经掉进河里了。
“Watch out!” his friends shouted at him, but it was too late. Before Ronny could figure out what was happening, he had fallen into the river.
佳句赏析：
5. Ronny着陆时，脸色苍白，脑子一片空白。他坐在地上，恐惧地哽咽着，直到一个温柔的声音问他感觉好不好。
When Ronny landed, his face was pale and his mind went blank. He sat on the ground and choked with fear until a tender voice asked him if he felt good.
6. Ronny不小心滑进了河里。惊慌中，他疯狂地挥动手着手臂，试图把头伸出水面，但徒劳。
Accidentally, Ronny slipped into the river. Panic set in, he waved his arms madly ， attempting to keep his head above the water , but in vain.
7.这些话从他嘴里挤出来，充满了不安和感激。
These words were squeezed out from his mouth with a mixture of restlessness and gratitude.
8.他们吓得胆战心惊，一动也不敢动。
Frozen with terror , they were too timid to move an inch.
佳句赏析：
8.突然间，他失去了平衡，滑到了河里。他惊慌失措地求救，不断地拍打水面。
Suddenly, he lost his balance and fell into the river. Scared, he shouted for help with his hands slapping the surface of the water constantly.
9.水淹入他的嘴巴和鼻子，吞没他，使他窒息。
Water flooded into his mouth and nose, swallowing him and making him chocked.
10.Ronny紧紧握住木棍，使劲地拉着它。
Ronny held the stick tightly, dragging it with all his strength.
11.充满感激地，Ronny紧紧拥抱Henry，喃喃地说：“你不是胆小鬼，谢谢你的勇敢救了我！”
Consumed with gratitude, Ronny hugged Henry tightly, murmuring “You are not a coward Thanks you. It was your bravery that saved me.”
佳句赏析：
12. Henry快速地游向Ronny, 抓住他的腰/衣领用力把他拉到岸边。
Henry swam swiftly to Ronny, grabbing his waist/ collar from behind and dragging him to the shore with all his strength.
13.看到Ronny挣扎着飘浮起来，大喊大叫，被其他人吓了一跳。
Seeing Ronny struggling to float up and yelling forShocked by the scene, other boys stood rooted with terror.
14. Ronny脸色苍白，全身发抖，他大声呼救。然而，他的朋友们吓得不敢动弹，不敢伸出援助之手。
With his face pale and whole body trembling, Ronny asked for help at the top of his voice. However, his friends were too scared to move , not daring to offer a helping hand.
15. Ronny在水中挣扎，挥手喊：“救命！我不会游泳！他的声音因恐惧而颤抖。
Ronny struggled in the water, waving his hands and shouting “Help! I can’t swim!” His voice trembled with horror.
佳句赏析：
A few days later, something terrible happened to Ronny. That afternoon after school, Ronny was bathing with some of his new friends in the river happily. Suddenly, he was stuck in the mud and couldn't get out. He struggled hard but he was still trapped. He screamed for help, but all in vain. The boys who had called Henry a coward got out of the water as fast as they could. They were so scared and did not even try to help him.
At that moment, Henry happened to pass by. He heard the screams and ran to the river as soon as possible. Seeing Ronny was almost drowned, Henry took off his clothes immediately and jumped into the water without any hesitation. He reached Ronny
just as he was sinking the last time. With great efforts, and with much danger to himself, he brought Ronny to the shore in time. Henry was happy to help his friend, though he was extremely tired.
One possible version:
A few days later, something terrible happened to Ronny. As usual,Ronny and his new friends went to the river together after school.All of a sudden,Ronny fell into river on account of carelessness.Seeing this scene,his friends was completely dumbfounded that they stood silently,much like statues. Feeling extremely frightened, Ronny struggled to rise from water.He raised his arm, yelling at the top of his voice, ''Help!Who can help me '‘ On hearing his words, his friends realized that they ought to help him. However, none of the dared to approach river. The cold wind bit into their hands and faces, making them shiver and tingle.Faced with tear,they were cowards.
学生佳作1：
At that moment, Henry happened to pass by. No sooner had he seen Ronny than he rushed to the river and jumped into it. He swam to Ronny and reached out his hands to grasp Ronny‘s hands. Then he dragged Ronny and swam back to the bank. Saved by Henry,Ronny felt a warm glow emerged from the bottom of his heart. He looked at Henry, Ronny's eyes twinkling with gratefulness.Then he made an apology to Henry for his previous rude behavior.''Henry,you are my hero.''Ronny uttered tearfully.Hearing his words,Henry felt a wild gaiety took hold of him.He hugged Ronny tightly with a broad smile blossomed on his face.After that day,Henry was considered as the bravest boy in their school.

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