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(共24张PPT)
Continuation writing
第二节(满分25分)
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Today was Community Service Day at school. Maya’s class was going to make cards for the seniors living in a nursing home. It was also the first day Maya would be wearing her leg brace (腿支架) to school, which was designed to help her walk more steadily and smoothly.
It was a cold autumn morning, Maya looked down, feeling embarrassed. To make it lovelier, she had delicately decorated the brace with pretty butterfly patterns. Still, she was unsure about others’ reaction. All morning at school, kids kept glancing at her brace. To her relief, they didn’t say anything.
In the classroom, Maya was drawing little green buds(芽)and pretty flowers when her friend Samir came over and sat by her. She felt his eyes fixed on her brace and heard him asking, “What’s that for ” Not knowing what to say, Maya pretended she didn’t hear him. After a few seconds of awkwardness, she glanced back at him, and found that he looked a little sad.
After lunch, the class set off. The nursing home was on a small hill and all of them walked there happily along the path. Maya found that the brace did make it easier for her to walk up.
Maya and Samir were paired up with a lady who was 83 years old. There at the end of the hall in a wheelchair, with a big smile on her face, sat the lady, wearing a pink coat, with red lipstick and beautiful earrings. She looked bright and full of life. Moving flexibly and fast towards Maya and Samir, she greeted first. “I’m Joan, ”she said cheerfully, “Glad to meet you. ”
Maya and Samir handed her the cards they made. Joan looked at Samir’s card carefully and spoke with admiration, “You’ve written a poem! That’s so artistic!” Samir’s face reddened with shyness. Then Joan turned to Maya’s picture. “The first flowers of spring!” she cried in delight. “You really have a gift for using colour!” she said. Clearly, Joan’s praise added great power into Maya.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ”
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Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home.
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Steps for continuation writing
Narration：（记叙文）
Step1: Read for the theme.（确定主题）
Step2: Read for the plot.（定位线索：plots and key words)
Step3: Outline the possible plots or events in each paragraph.
（构思续写情节，搭建结构支架）
Step4: Writing based on the outline and using words, phrases, sentence patterns.
（运用用句型模板，落笔成文）
The plotting
Who: Maya, Samir, Joan
Where: school, nursing home
When: cold Autumn morning, after lunch in the afternoon
What: Maya equipped herself with a new leg brace to move more conveniently. Though feeling a little embrrassed, she decorated the leg brace and was sentive about others’ reaction. while drawing, she refused the care and inquiries from her friend, Samir. After that they went to the nursing house happily and met their paired old lady, Joan, who was dressed up delicately. Joan greeted them nicely though confined in the wheel. Both Maya and Samir presented their gifts to Joan, and received her heartfelt thanks and praise, greatly enhancing their confidence and interest.
How/why: To care the seniors in community service day. Maya’s disability was always her secret trouble and Samir’s care was neglected, thinking Maya didn’t take him as true friend.
The plotting
Brief introduction/Background info: Maya equipped herself with a new leg brace to facilitate her movement in her Community Service day at school.
The beginning: She delicately decorated the brace and was nercous and sensitive about others’ responses. Luckily, nobody asked about it.
The development: while Maya was drawing, she found Samir’s eyes focused on her brace, but she turned a deaf ear to his inquries, which made Samir sad.
One Climax: After lunch, they happily went to the nursing house to show care to the elderly, they met their paired old lady, Joan, who delicately dressed up and greeted them fondly and praised their gifts, making them confident and fulfilled.
The bigger climax: With more power added to their heart, what will they exchange Will their communication involve sonething they are sensitive about
3. What are the plots given in the reading part
（给出信息）Maya在社区服务日赶往学校做卡片，戴上新安装的腿支架只为便捷地移动出行；→秋日的清晨看着自己的腿，Maya虽然精心装饰了支架，仍然有一丝难为情，幸好同学虽然知道了，但并没有询问；→ 画画时朋友Samir过来了，看着她的支架并询问起来，Maya无言以对假装没听见，这让Samir一丝尬意和伤心；→午餐完毕，他们开心爬过山坡去养老院，Maya发现支架真是她的移动利器；→和他们结对的83岁的Joan,虽然坐轮椅，可Joan打扮精致驾驭轮椅迅速灵活，她主动问候了小朋友；→呈上礼物之后，他们得到了Joan衷心地赞美，让Samir脸红了，让Mayay也自信了。。。
Paragraph1: In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ”
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Paragraph 2: Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home.
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The quality and status of the roles
Maya
physically disabled
helpful
caring
sensitive
delicate
incofident
Samir
caring
loving
inexperienced
introverted
unconfident
not thoughtful
sensitive
Joan
wise
warm
affectionate
inspring
considerate
optimistic
delicate
decent
Key Words
These words or information deserve to be in your continuation task.
1. brace leg
2. move
3. drawing, colour, artistic, pattern
4. card
这些词值得在你的续写中出现，让前后文连贯。
1.把握内容要点
所给首句：阅读每一段中的首句，进行布局、解读。在布局第一段的内容时，要兼顾两段的首句：第二段的首句决定着第一段的走向。
1: In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ”
2: Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home.
Step 2
审题与构思
注意：第一段续写要巧妙衔接第二段，助人为乐多了，才会声名
远播才能吸引别人。
Step 3: Outline the possible plots or events
in each paragraph.
1. 所续写的短文词数应为150左右,主线清楚;
2. 关键人物和角色随故事情节逻辑发展转变自然，注意人称;
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好;
4. 确定好续写情节，用合理句型和直接引语表达;
Tip 5:Predict the ending of paragraphs based on the two given sentences.
What to write
段1首句: 1. In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ”
1. How did Maya feel after asking the question
2. What were Joan’s responses to Maya’s question (emotions and actions)
3. What did Joan answer in response to Maya’s inquiry
4. How was Samir involved in them (a descriotion is preferable)
5. What was Maya’s comprehension after hearing and their departure
The core: How did Joan answer Maya’s question
Samir应该时刻流露出对Maya关切的心情
Joan的回答一定要和Maya的实际情况结合起来，可以暗暗指出Joan明白Maya的残疾，明白她的心态和顾虑
What to write
段2首句： 2: Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home.
1. How did Maya break the silence
2. What did Maya say and do to Samir
3. How did Samir respond to Maya
4. How did Maya think of her disability and their relationship
5. Maya’s feelings and understanding or sublimation
The core:1. What did Maya say and do to Samir on the bus
2. How did Maya deal with her disability thereafter
主题Theme：
残疾女孩突破心魔，勇敢面对自己的缺陷，接受自己、接受朋友，并主动勇敢解决对朋友的误会。
第一段：女孩如何得到启发，面对残疾和现实，---来自Joan老奶奶的开导。
第二段：如何表现她愿意去面对，主动和朋友沟通，消除误会，真诚面对关怀。
幡然醒悟，father’s love is as great as a mountain, and we could sacrifice our small private interests for appreciation
面对缺陷，珍视关怀：I will try hard to become the best child in this world because you are the best Father in this world and you do not deserve less than it.
文章主题：
1.你给我生命中最好的东西：你的时间，你的关怀还有爱，我对此充满感激庆幸生命中有你。
You have given me the best things in life: your time, your care, and your love. I am.____________________________________.
2. 没有一天我不仰望父亲因为他对我的爱和牺牲，正如别人说起，没有比父亲和儿子之间更强的纽带。
________________________________when I have not looked up to him for his care and sacrifice. As someone has said, “there is ______________________________between a father and a son!’’
3. 知道父亲耗费他的时间和所有成就现在的我，最好的回报他的方式就是给他我能给的。
Knowing that Dad has spent most of his time and resources______________________________, the best way to repay him is to_________________________________________.
truly thankful to have you in my life
There has never been a day
no greater bond than the one
shower him with what I can.
to get me to where I am now
情感心态变化
担忧、害怕、怯懦地遮掩和逃避---试图获得同理心和共鸣-受到启发，拥有自信，勇敢面对，接纳别人的注意和关心。
Good ending
Maya kept her face to the Autumn sunshine, believing the shadow had been left away in her path.
Ending (scene)
1. On the way back to school, rays of sunset ____________(滤进) the bus window, ______________________________________(沐浴在金色阳光里). Mary thought she had an inpiration of her next drawing.
2. A gentle Autumn breeze softly kissed them on the way back, as beautiful as Joan’s card with the poem and picture.
2. Shame is ________________________(并不涉及) that is actually wrong with ourselves. Actually, if we __________________(暴露真我), we will eventually prove that we do deserve love.
Ending-sublimation
3. Our life is ___________________(不由残疾定义). Only when we face and accept it, and learn to overcome it, can we fulfill our life.
4. Misfortune as disability is, accepting it and knowing we are not defined by it are the sweetest feeling.
filtered through
bathing the two friends in the golden light
not related to anything
reveal our true selves
not defined by disability
In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ” No sooner had she blurted it out than she felt a gust of guilt, thinking it offensive. Joan, however, gently took Maya’s hand without a slightest hint of annoyance and answered, “As for me, there were also tough moments. I tried to conceal my concern and fear, only to make the situation worse. Luckily, friends were by my side, freeing their help and care. Now it’s like a racing car or wings, loading my speed and passion and flying me wherever my dreams lie.” Joan’s answer amused the two kids, eliminating their embarrassment. A happy afternoon finally came to an end. Joining the hands of the two kids together, Joan smiled and accepted their farewell.
Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home. With Joan’s words constantly flashing across the mind, Maya felt it an absolute necessity to make an apology to Samir. “Samir, I apologize for my neglecting your care, and now I know how lucky I am to have you in my life,” Maya uttered bashfully, her head drooping, seemingly consumed with guilt. Samir turned to her and held her hands tightly, replying sincerely, “It was I who failed to factor in your feelings. We’ll always be friends.” As their eyes met, happy smiles flitted between them, dispersing misunderstandings and unhappiness. A gentle Autumn breeze softly kissed them on the way back, a picture as beautiful as on the card.
(Ouyang GPT)
In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ” Joan flashed them a smile and answered, “Aha! It’s fantastic. Sometimes it’s like going on the roller coaster, and at other times like piloting a helicoper, rushing me into clouds never to be restricted.” With curiosity gratified, Maya subsconsciously looked down on her leg brace. Meanwhile, a hint of concern registered on Samir’s face. Gaining the insights into the situation, Joan added, “Initially, I thought it a shame to reveal myself, and soon I got into bigger trouble. As I opened up my hearts, everything was back on track.” Maya nodded as if absorbed in thought. When farewell party came, they exchanged their blessings and determined on the next meeting.
Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home. It took a lot of nerve before Maya turned to Samir and asked, “Do you like the patterns on my brace ” Completely stunned for a while, Samir then came back to himself and stuttered, “I-i-it’s beautiful. I was just too worried, so I asked about it.” Maya cast an understanding smile, replying with guilty, “You are my best friend. I shouldn’t have concealed it.” With all misunderstandings rectified, the pair was reconciled and felt even closer to each other. Thanks to the service and great Joan, Maya came to realize that allowing others to show their care is not a sign of her weakness, but the courage to take up challenges.
(Ouyang GPT)

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