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(共36张PPT)
logical plotting
__ 读后续写微专题
问题驱动，场景设置
——读后续写微专题
一、读后续写题型解读及能力要求
要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基础上，充分调动想象创新思维，大胆预测文章缺失部分的内容走势，进行充满个性色彩的设计，并用英语进行续写表达。所提供短文多以记叙文故事类文章或夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。
创造性+逻辑性+丰富性
情节+线索（主题）+语言
二、反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施
1.词汇贫乏
2.阅读能力不够
3.时间紧张
4.没有意识到解读文本的重要性
阅读方面
1.内容（逻辑合理性）
2.词汇和语法（丰富准确）
3.语篇（连贯性，前后呼应）
续写方面
内容（逻辑性、合理性）---情节构建中的问题：
* 文章理解不到位，续写情节与原文脱离。
* 情节没有得以展开，体现不出丰富新颖。
* 所创设的情境违背真实生活，缺乏合理性。
* 融洽度不高，衔接不合理。
* 大量对话无意义，段落间分布不均衡。
* 主题升华牵强或跑偏。
二、反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施
语篇的衔接连贯：
二、反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施
* 衔接不符合逻辑，如要求续写的第一段最后一句与所给第二段首句连接不当，或两段间毫不关联。
* 句句间逻辑不严密，不能有效借助连词、代词、副词等语言手段建立清晰合理的逻辑关系。
应对措施：
二、反思学生续写中存在的主要问题及应对措施
* 如何有效构建续写情节
( 问题驱动，场景设置 ）
* 如何打磨续写语言
（词汇和句式两个层面）
01
02
三、问题驱动（课例分析）
(浙江 模拟 )
……..
She was deeply moved. A man who can admit that he's homesick must love his home and care about his family. He must be responsible. She talked too, about her faraway hometown, her childhood and her family. That was a really nice talk, also a beautiful beginning of their love story.
They continued to date. She found that he met all her requirements. He was tolerant, kind, warm and careful. He was such a good man and had it not been for the salt in the coffee, she’d never have really known him!
The rest of the story was just like any other beautiful love story---they married and lived happily together. And every time she made coffee for him, she put in some salt, the way he liked it.
After 40 years, he passed away and left her a letter which said:
Para 1: My dearest, please forgive me for my cheating you all the time. Do you still remember our first date in the cafe ________________________
Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. ____________________________________________________________
三、问题驱动（课例分析）
1. 解读文本，寻找隐含信息，奠定续写基础
读：plot+ language + clue
内容：who, when, where, what (He met her at a party and finally got married. Before death, he left her a letter asking for forgiving.)
why + how (续写内容)
线索/意图 （主题升华）
... He was tolerant, kind, and careful. He was such a good man...
... And every time she made coffee for him, she put in some salt, the way he liked it. After 40 years, he passed away and left her a letter...
三、问题驱动（课例分析）
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展
两个段首句是重要的续写提示，在很大程度上指明了情节的发展方向。对段首句分析，进行设问，可有效地推理续写的主要情节。
第一段：三个逻辑上的衔接（原文+段首句+第二段段首句）
第二段：关注与文章开头的遥相呼应（线索/意图），根据具体语境弘扬真善美
三、问题驱动（课例分析）
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展
Given Para
Para 1.
Para 2.
beginning sentence
beginning sentence
key
words
三、问题驱动（课例分析）
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展：第一段
Para 1: My dearest, please forgive me for my cheating you all the time. Do you still remember our first date in the cafe ___________________________________________
Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated.____________
对第一段段首句进行设问：
What happened at their first date in the cafe
What did he do to cheat her and why did he cheat her
Why did he cheat her all the 40 years
He explained why he made up such a story and asked her to forgive him for his life-long lie.
从第二段首句的关键词：shocked 和 the feeling of being cheated
→ she never doubted in that he liked salty coffee
→ she never tried to meet this special need, which showed what a devoted and considerate wife she was.
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
2. 依据两段首句推理情节发展：第二段
Para 2: She was shocked by the letter, with the feeling of being cheated. ________________
对第二段段首句进行设问：
* Hadn’t she felt anything unusual and suspected he husband in the past 40 years
* Would she forgive him for his life-long lie Why or why not
→ She broke down, regretting her naive decision to marry him. Never would she forgive him and never would she marry him if given a second chance.
→ Reflecting on what he had done for her in the past 40 years, she began to understand his white lie and chose to forgive him. She would definitely marry him again if given a second chance.
Watching Over Me
There is nothing more wonderful than the smell of the Adirondack air! It fills your lungs with purity and freshness that motivates a love for living. Every weekend in the summer, my father would plan a trip from our home in upstate New York to one of the splendid lakes nestled among the tall pines and thick forests of the Adirondack Mountains. There were no favorites; instead, each lake was an adventure to explore and enjoy.
One trip that I will never forget was a visit to Oneida Lake at the foothills of the mountains . After arriving at the lake beach area, we emptied the car of our picnic supplies, towels, blankets and beach chairs, carrying them through a wooded path that seemed like a forever distance. Once we located the perfect picnic spot, my dad, sister and I ran into the splashing waves with our beach ball, leaving my mother behind to “set up”. In the lake, we immediately played “monkey in the middle” for at least an hour, and then after retiring the ball, my father let us dive from his knee, throwing us up in the air and turning us over like thick pancakes on a grill. This timeless game went on and on as our begging
试题呈现：
for “more, more” never stopped .
When we were finally tired of our games, my dad stopped to watch my older sister. She loved synchronized swimming (花样游泳) and started practicing skills that her team used in competition. My father, being an athlete himself, was absorbed in her show. I was sad that no one was playing with me; no one was watching me. I became bored and jealous watching her show off. I was in sulk (愠怒) and decided to swim by myself and try some of my sister’s skills on my own in deeper water, far from both of them. The waves were getting stronger, but I didn't care. I just wanted to do what my sister could do so that I could catch my father's attention.
Paragraph 1: As I took a breath to try a dive, a huge wave swallowed me.___ _______________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2: It was my dad!_______________________________________ _______________________________________________________________
Develop the story：
Paragraph 1:As I took a breath to try a dive, a huge wave swallowed me.
Paragraph 2: It was my dad!
巨浪吞没了我--- 我惊恐、害怕，在水中挣扎--- 自救失败，我后悔、绝望--- 有人出现，救起了我
爸爸把我救到了沙滩上--- 全家人安慰我，没有责骂我--- 我深感内疚，明白家人一直爱着我，虽然有时候并没有看/关注着我。
Develop the story：the first sentences
Paragraph 1:As I took a breath to try a dive, a huge wave swallowed me.
Paragraph 2: It was my dad!
逆推法
Sb. came to my help.
Q1:How did I feel about the situation and what did I do (心理活动+动作+情绪/感)
Q2:Did I manage to get out of water How did I feel (心理活动+动作+情绪情感)
Q1:How did I feel after I got onto the beach (心理活动+动作)
Q2:What did my family member do (动作+情绪情感)
Q3: How did I reflect on the unprepared adventure (内心想法+抽象名词+ watch)
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
① ② ...Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
③Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
①As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
②The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
2021 新高考
Q1. What was Father’s first instinct when facing the mess
Q2. How did the twins explain their plan to their father
Q3. What did Father do to help the twins to make delicious French toast and chicken porridge
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
①The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
② The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 am. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
③Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
①As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
②The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
2021 新高考
Q1. What was Mother’s first instinct when waking up
Q2. Would the twins give Mom a big surprise
Q3. How did Mother feel How can you design the ending more appealing and meaningful
One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem — inability to read.
In the library, I found my way into the “Children’s Room.” I sat down on the floor and pulled a few books off the shelf at random. The cover of a book caught my eye. It presented a picture of a beagle. I had recently had a beagle, the first and only animal companion I ever had as a child. He was my secret sharer, but one morning, he was gone, given away to someone who had the space and the money to care for him. I never forgot my beagle.
There on the book’s cover was a beagle which looked identical to my dog. I ran my fingers over the picture of the dog on the cover. My eyes ran across the title, Amos, the Beagle with a Plan. Unknowingly, I had read the title. Without opening the book, I borrowed it from the library for the summer.
Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my reading, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.
My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something
Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
Paragraph 1:
My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something: ______________
Design questions for Para. 1
1. Did he overcome his inability to read Did he go on reading
2. What was the influence of the first book
3. ___________________________________________________________________
4. ____________________________________________________________________
5. ____________________________________________________________________

Paragraph 2:
Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature.____________
Design questions for Para. 2
1. What would happen after he got his PhD in literature
2. Why would he choose literature as his major
3. ____________________________________________________________________
4. ____________________________________________________________________
5. ____________________________________________________________________
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
预测重点以问题的方式显示
1. 预测重点，讲预测的过程显性化
2. 问题之间有一定的逻辑联系，符合故事发展的合理结局。
3. 有效运用逻辑手段
(1) Did he overcome his inability to read Did he go on reading
(2) What was the influence of the first book ,
(3) What would happened after he got his PhD in literature
(4) Why would he choose literature as his major
(5) What would he do for his future career
(6) How did it relate to his very first book
Plot
(a chain of events)
● lack ability to read
● (mother ) encourage me to read in the library
● find a book whose cover was a beagle
● Remind me of my dog looking like beagle
● Recall the final scene of reunion
● Succeed in reading the book
● Overcome my inability to read
Language
◆sat down on the floor… pulled books off…
◆ran my fingers over the picture…
◆eyes ran across the title
◆read very slowly
◆my mind continued…
◆a stream of tears ran down…
Theme
★ inability to read---real sense of reading
★ This was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem — inability to read.
……
Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my reading, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.
Paragraph 1:
My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something:____________
Paragraph 2:
Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature.__________
One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem — inability to read.
……
Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my reading, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.
Paragraph 1:
My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something:____________
Paragraph 2:
Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature.__________
One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem — inability to read.
……
Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my reading, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.
The theme
The power of the words
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
Design questions for para.1:
1. Did he overcome his inability to read Did he go on reading
2. What was the influence of the first book
3. …
4. …
5. …
Design questions for para. 2:
1. What would happen after he got his PhD in literature
2. Why would he choose literature as his major
3 …
4. …
5. …
三、问题驱动（上课课例）
Para. 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.
① What did I do and say
② What was David’s reaction
③ David finally looked at me , saying with determination, “I’m going to run”.
Para. 2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
① What did I see
②What difficulty did he meet with
③ What was the reaction of the spectators
④ Facing the difficulties, what did David do
⑤ What was the ending
根据P2的首句可以推断P1的最后的情节应该是David决定参加.
三、问题驱动（2022 新高考 I）
四、场景设置（课例分析）
场景设置
阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成―篇完整的短文。
I was in my room, slowly getting ready to head to the community theater with the rest of my family. I wasn't in the mood for being onstage.
“Kate，come here,” my mom called from down the hall.
I found my mom outside the bathroom, holding a wet book. Henry, my new stepbrother, was nearby, working on a complicated string knot (结), as usual.
My mother gave the book a shake. “Henry's book is in the bathtub. Did you put it there ""
“Not on purpose," I said. “It was already on the edge, and it happened to fall in when I stepped out of the tub." mother glared at me, something she never did before I had a stepfamily. “You could have picked it up," she said. "That would have been the kind thing to do."
As Henry walked ahead of us to the car, my mom took me aside. “This is our corner of the world now，Kate,” she said. "Let 's try to make it a good one."
The community theater was busy when we got there. Theater used to be what my mom and I did together—one play a year for our special thing. With Henry involved, it didn't seem so special anymore.
Henry's dad, who had arrived earlier to help set up, was already in costume. “Dear children," he called in a theatrical voice, “Come to Father.” I thought he was a nice guy even before he and my mother started dating. Unfortunately, I now had a stepbrother to deal with.
Soon, it was curtain time. I peeked (偷看) out at the audience and noticed that the darkened theatre was full. My heart beat faster. I forgot my annoyance at Henry as the lead actress sang，“The hills are alive with the sound of music! .” Nothing compared to show nights.
Before long, it was my turn. I went onstage, song book in hand. As we kids lined up before Henry's dad, who was playing the part of our father, I realized how poorly I'd tied the string on my skirt which was over leggings (打底裤). I should have asked my mom for help.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
And then, suddenly, the string knot on my skirt came untied.
I shot Henry a grateful glance.
根据续写段落定关键词、定场景
四、场景设置（课例分析）
场景设置
And then, suddenly, the string knot on my skirt came untied.____________________
scene1; I was at a loss and felt embarrassed, shy （ Kate的不知所措和尴尬）
scene2: Henry helped me timely （ Henry 在台上的及时帮助）
scene3: I was relieved （尴尬得到了化解）
I shot Henry a grateful glance. ________________________
scene 4: Response of Henry （Henry 的反应）
scene 5: I completed the performance successfully & extended heartfelt gratitude to Henry
（成功完成演出，感谢Henry）
scene6: I changed my attitude to Henry（心态变化，主题升华）
四、场景设置（课例分析）
场景设置 ( 根据关键词定场景）
Finally we heard the words we had been waiting for from the mother, “Please, Abdel is back in the living room.”
1.我们的急切心情: be eager to meet…
2.见面的尴尬和惊讶（不是朋友）: be surprised to find ..
3.我解释地址错了: explain …（ 过渡到下文 the piece of paper ）
I took out the piece of paper Abdel had given me in Kentia and showed it to the new Abdel.
1.其他人的反应 ( response )
2.对方的反应 (response )
3.我对他们的感谢 ( 主题升华）theme
四、场景设置
场景设置
1. 一起吃饭
It brought back the vivid memories of our family eating together, which is a great way to share love. But now, only we two were eating at the dinner table….
2. 恐慌，努力想办法
The bright and powerful feeling drained away. With every minute that ticked by, Henry felt more helpless and terrified…,
3. 遇险求救
Joan pressed his check against the tree. Her entire body ached. Her hands were ragged from climbing the tree. Her started to cry, her sounds drowned by wind…
四、场景设置
4.回家受欢迎的场景
A few weeks later the boy arrived home from university. Immediately, the house was turned into a sea of happiness. No sooner had he bent down to give Poppy a bear hug than happy kisses rained upon his face. …(2020 . 1 浙江）
5. 交通阻塞，心理焦虑
Jenny opened his window and stuck his head out. The line of cars and truck stretched as far as she could see…
6. 运动场上获得第一名 （ 考试比赛获胜）
Crossing the finishing line, Kevin let out a roar. He won the first place! After years of hard training, he succeeded! He knelt down, kissing thee dear track. The he ran to the coach and held him tightly in his arms. his coach hugged him , tears of pleasure blurring his vision. ( wave to the audience…)
7. 遇到困难想放弃
Desperate and hopeless, they felt as if thee world came crashing down. Then suddenly Mom’s encouraging words echoed in her brain, a ray of hope flickering in her eyes. “ I shouldn’t give up easily,…” she murmured.
杰克和妈妈争吵之后离家出走。独自在街道上游荡，身无分文，饥饿难耐。偶遇一位热心老板，免费给他一碗面条。感激之情，难以言表。而老板说，“最应该感谢的是你的妈妈。”杰克意识到自己的错误，决定回家向妈妈道歉。请运用环境描写、动作描写和心理描写等设计一段杰克在见到妈妈之前的描写，首句已给出。
Darkness increased and Jack made his way towards the house.____________________
四、场景设置
Darkness increased and he made his way towards the house. Heart beating wildly and mind racing swiftly, he cautiously inched closer and hesitantly knocked on the door with a trembling hand. No answer. “Where could Mom have gone ” wondered Jack, confused. Then the seller’s words flashed across his mind again. Countless harsh winter dawns had witnessed mom rising early cooking breakfast for him. But never once had he said a single Thank You to her. With eyes glistening and throat tightening, he resolved to apologize to her. Then he felt a touch on his head-
theme
叙述意图 /主题
情景设定 scene
人物/人物关系 relationship
emotion , change
人物情感变化
冲突及解决方案 conflict , solution
续写段落1的新冲突 conflict 1
续写段落2的新冲突 conflict 2
两个续写文段开头语的过渡 logic transition
Effective Information
读后续写，需要重点考虑5点
1. 明确续写内容的叙述意图/主题。
2. 厘清已给短文的故事要素及人物情感变化
3.研读段落开头语
挖掘新冲突、解决方案
4. 合理构思后续故事的发展。
5. 落实好句子与句子之间、2个段落之间的词汇衔接
三大主题语境下的读后续写素材活用：家庭生活、家国情怀、动物描写
主题语境：人与自我
（人与自我语境主要侧重：1.个人、家庭、社区及学校生活；2.健康的生活方式、积极的生活态度；3.认识自我，丰富自我，完善自我；4.乐于学习，善于学习，终身学习；5.优秀品行，正确的人生态度，公民义务与社会责任；6.未来职业发展趋势，个人职业倾向、未来规划等）
主题语境：人与社会
（语篇主题主要侧重：1.良好的人际关系与社会交往；2.公益事业与志愿服务）
Part one：良好的人际关系与社会交往篇
1. 助人为乐，学会感恩-陌生人 2. 助人为乐，做人做事，体现社会温情 3. 良好的人际关系和社会交往:(社会温情篇：助人亦助己) 4. 社会交往：赠人玫瑰手有余香 5. 社会交往：来自陌生人的善意
Part two: 家国情怀，公益事业，志愿服务
1. 山区支教 2. 救死扶伤(话题也包含了主人公个人职业的选择)
主题语境：人与自然
（话题主要涉及人与环境，人与动植物的语篇）
四、场景设置
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