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About a half-mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond. In summer, my brother Harry and I would run through a stand of oak trees to skip stones there. The pond wore a collar of black mud. It was not a place for swimming.
In late summer, the pond would be covered by a green and bubbly scum（起泡的浮渣）. Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. We stayed away.
When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.”
The ice looked solid. No water showed through it, but I hesitated. “Go ahead.” Harry urged. “Try it. You’re lighter than I am. If the ice holds, we can run and slide carefully on it. It’ll be fun.” I wanted to please Harry, and I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond.
In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack（裂缝）! I stretched out（伸展）my arms. The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black and awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures.
I tried to climb out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass. Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. I was wearing a coat of heavy material. As it became completely wet, it dragged me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice.
I looked at Harry on shore. He seemed rooted to the spot. “I can’t get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph1:
Harry turned and ran from the pond.
Paragraph2:
The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.(共14张PPT)
Analyze the article 文本解读
About a half-mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond. In summer, my brother Harry and I would run through a stand of oak trees to skip stones there. The pond wore a collar of black mud. It was not a place for swimming.
In late summer, the pond would be covered by a green and bubbly scum(起泡的浮渣). Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. We stayed away.
When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.”
The ice looked solid. No water showed through it, but I hesitated. “Go ahead.” Harry urged. “Try it. You’re lighter than I am. If the ice holds, we can run and
slide carefully on it. It’ll be fun.” I wanted to please Harry, and I thought
about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond.
What led to the change
What’s the purpose of the description
In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack(裂缝)! I stretched out(伸展) my arms. The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black and awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures.
I tried to climb out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass. Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. I was wearing a coat of heavy material. As it became completely wet, it dragged me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice.
I looked at Harry on shore. He seemed rooted to the spot. “I can’t get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath.
Analyze the article 文本解读
I fell into the icy water and couldn’t get out by myself!
原文好句积累
The ice looked so solid that no water showed through it. I couldn’t wait but run and slide carefully on it, which turned out to be of great fun.
In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way (垮掉)with a sudden crack(裂缝)!Within two seconds, from my shoulders down I hung in icy water, feeling freezing cold.
I thought of the bottom of the pond, which would be black, awful,and full of mud with rotting creatures(腐烂的生物).
Making a desperate attempt to(拼命) climb out of the hole, I got a knee on the ice, but it broke like window glass. （反复修辞手法）Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. Out of expectation, the hole widened. To make things worse, I was wearing a coat of heavy material. As it became completely wet, it dragged me down.
Eventually, tired of struggling, I rested with my arms stretched out on the ice. “Help!I can’t get out!” I screamed at Jim, who seemed rooted to the spot on shore.
Pre-writing
Harry
brother
the pond
What and why did Harry ask his brother
to do
fell into the ice
an inviting place
Topic: How to survive the ice
Why did “I” do so
I
3
Keep as calm
as possible.
5
Roll your body across the ice once you're out.
4
Focus your energy on getting out immediately.
1
Brace yourself.
Not panic
2
How to
Survive
a Fall
Through Ice
Get horizontal
and kick your legs.
3
1
2
What should you do once You're Out
Retrace your footsteps back to safety.
Take off wet clothes.
Get warmed up.
Paragraph 1:
Harry turned and ran from the pond.
Paragraph 2:
The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed
over.
“I” was rescued.
How was “I” rescued
Possibility：Harry ran away and asked sb./ sth. for help.
1.What was Mum’s reaction when she saw me wet through the body
2. What did Mum do and say
3. What was Harry’s reaction
4. What did that teach “me”
Plot prediction情节预测
At times we should say “No” to others rather than try to please others by putting our ass on the line.
Thematic sublimation 主题升华
两肋插刀
The pond/this experience put a brand in my heart that I could never erase.
万能金句
…在我心中留下永远无法抹去的烙印
was engraved in my heart
雕刻；铭记
It was “the pond” that made me realize that…
强调句结尾
It was on that day that I was truly/literally aware that at times…
文章中关键事物
文章中关键时间
until 倒装句结尾
Until then did I realize that at times we should say “No” to others instead of trying to please others by putting our ass on the line.
was I aware that
Never had I fallen into such a dangerous situation.
The experience was deeply engraved in my mind
and reminded me that…
否定 倒装句结尾
Paragraph 1:
Harry turned and ran from the pond. Staring at his familiar figure out of sight, I was seized by panic. Desperate and hopeless, I closed my eyes, praying this was all a dream. “If I hadn’t slid across the pond, I wouldn’t be in such a dangerous situation,” I thought to myself, sighing. What’s worse, the water was so cold that it felt like millions of needles were stabbing me. Seeing Harry storming back to the pond with a long stick in his hand, I was injected with fresh blood. His appearance reignited the flame of hope in my heart. “Grab it！You can do it!” His determined voice echoed in my head. Stretching out my arms, I seized the stick with all my strength and climbed carefully out of the hole inch by inch. What a narrow escape! We staggered shiveringly home, with my wet clothes dripping and my shoes squishing and squirting water.
冲回来
注入
点燃了心中的希望之火
回荡
伸出
一点一点地
虚拟语气
夸张修辞
我心想
叹气
伴随非谓语
真是九死一生！
颤抖着踉跄着走回家
湿漉漉的衣服滴着水
Paragraph 2:
The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, Mum rushed over. “You are soaking wet. Where have you been ” she asked in surprise. After I tearfully told to her what had happened to me, her eyes were wide with horror. Without hesitation, she dragged me into the bathroom and gave me a warm bath. After that, she dressed me in a warm coat, wrapped me in a blanket and poured me a cup of hot milk. Sure enough, Harry was criticized by Mum about getting a younger sibling into such a trouble. His head hanging with shame, Harry murmured an apology to me. I was temporarily comforted and relieved but I would never forget the life-risking experience and never act so blindly again.
撞进
啜泣着
冲过来
湿透了
含泪诉说
吓得睁大了眼睛
果然
批评/说教lectured
兄弟姐妹
他因为羞愧低下了头
低语
暂时地
松了口气；缓解
永远不再盲目行动
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