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2023.1浙江首考续写解析
The hummingbird
蜂鸟报恩/人鸟情未了
I was invited to a cookout露天烧烤餐on an old friend’s farm in western Washington. I parked my car outside the farm and walked past a milking house which had apparently not been used in many years. A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it. It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape. She was covered in spider-webs(蛛网) and was barely able to move her wings. She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
With the bird in my cupped hand杯状手, I looked around to see how she had gotten in. The broken window glass was the likely answer. I stuffed a piece of cloth into the hole and took her outside, closing the door securely behind me.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes. I removed the sticky spider-webs that covered her head and wings. Still, she made no attempt to fly. Perhaps she had been struggling against the window too long and was too tired Or too thirsty
As I carried her up the blackberry-lined path toward my car where I kept a water bottle, she began to move. I stopped, and she soon took wing起飞 but did not immediately fly away. Hovering(悬停), she approached within six inches of my face. For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes, turning her head from side to side. Then she flew quickly out of sight.
During the cookout, I told my hosts about the hummingbird incident. They promised to fix the window. As I was departing离开, my friends walked me to my car. I was standing by the car when a hummingbird flew to the center of our group and began hovering. She turned from person to person until she came to me. She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a squeaking call吱吱叫and was gone. For a moment, all were speechless. Then someone said, “She must have come to say good-bye.”
Analyze the article 文本解读
I was just about to leave when the hummingbird appeared.
A few weeks later, I went to the farm again.
P1
P2
Why did I go to the farm again
What did I see in the farm
What did I think of
How did I feel when the bird didn’t show up
Why did I leave
The bird didn’t show up.
another cookout with friends
to encounter the bird
the milking house
the repaired window
blackberry-lined path
the memory questions about the adorable humming bird
be at a loss/a sense of loss
It’s time for home./sunset
How did I feel when I saw the bird
What did I do when I saw her
What did the bird do when she saw me
What was the theme/ending
Predict the plot预测情节
appreciate the harmonious relationship/atmosphere between human and animals/nature
What did I think of
questions about the adorable humming bird
Was she all right now
Was she in good shape
Would this adorable creature be trapped in the web again
Hoping she wouldn’t get herself into another sticky situation anymore!
(Not likely, since the hole in the window had been fixed.)
the memory
回忆涌上心头
Thoughts just kept flooding in on me.
这些问题和想法像蜘蛛线一样突然出现在我的脑海中。
These questions and thoughts popped into my head like strands of spider thread.
Her lovely squeaking calls still echoed/ lingered in my mind.
My thoughts couldn’t help drifting back to the moment when I rescued the tiny hummingbird “How I wish I could see her again!”
How did I feel when I saw the bird
A strong flush of joy rushed to my heart.
A surge of warm current flooded into my heart.
I felt my whole day was lit up by this lovely creature.
I felt like I was on top of the world.
In an ecstasy of delight欣喜若狂, I held out my palms for it to rest.
Watching her flapping wings rapidly and making the humming sound, I couldn’t help but reach out my hand
What did I do when I saw her
I looked directly into her small diamond-like eyes.
Eager to create more interaction, I reached out palms for her to rest.
直视她钻石般的眼睛。
渴望更多互动，我伸出手掌让她停歇。
Unexpectedly, she stopped hovering but perched on my cupped hand.
What did the bird do when she saw me
令人惊讶的是，她落在上面，发出吱吱的叫声。
Surprisingly, she perched on my cupped hand, letting out squeaking calls.
She fluttered gracefully towards me.
她拍打着翅膀优雅地向我飞来。
她落在我面前一英寸处远的一根小树枝上，用同样闪闪发光、愉快的眼睛研究着我。
Having perched/Perching on a small twig just an inch before me, she studied me with the same sparkling/crystal and pleasant eyes.
她俯冲到我眼睛的高度,盘旋靠近,用她闪闪发光的眼睛凝视着我.然后它发出吱吱的叫声好像认出了我。
She swooped down to my eye level, hovering close to me, gazing at me with her sparkling eyes. Then she emitted a squeaky sound as if she had recognized me.
She flapped wings rapidly , making squeaking calls.
她快速拍打着翅膀向我飞来，发出吱吱的叫声。
What was the theme/ending
With sunshine enveloping us in its warm hug, I appreciated the harmonious atmosphere from the bottom of heart.
阳光笼罩着我们，我从心底感激着和谐的氛围。
For the first time in my life, I held a firm belief that there literally existed a spiritual bond between we human beings and other animals in the world.
Not until that moment did I start to aware that …
It was at that moment that I started to believe that …
That marvelous experience was deeply engraved in my mind,
which reminded me the harmonious relationship between human and nature.
假如世界上真的存在魔法，那一定是超越任何物种的大爱，正如我和蜂鸟一样。
Were there magic power existing in this world, it must be the universal love that surpassed beyond any species, as was the case with like the hummingbird and me.
温馨画面定格
人生新感悟
虚拟语气结尾
原文好句积累
A noise at a window caught my attention, so I entered it.
It was a hummingbird (蜂鸟), desperately trying to escape.
She ceased her struggle the instant I picked her up.
When I opened my hand, the bird did not fly away; she sat looking at me with her bright eyes.
The broken window glass was the likely answer.
Still, she made no attempt to fly.
she soon took wing起飞 but did not immediately fly away.
Hovering(悬停), she approached within six inches of my face.
For a very long moment, this tiny creature looked into my eyes,
turning her head from side to side.
Then she flew quickly out of sight.
As I was departing离开, my friends walked me to my car.
She turned from person to person until she came to me.
She again looked directly into my eyes, then let out a
squeaking call吱吱叫and was gone.
For a moment, all were speechless.
鸟类动作描写
Respond to the original text回应原文
The same dilapidated milking house, the same gigantic/sticky spider-webs, the same blackberry-lined path.
Walking past the familiar milking house, I noticed the repaired window, which reminded me of the adorable hummingbird.
When I happened to pass the milking house, I decided to check out the window there. To my relief, the broken window had already been fixed. Yet, the sight of the scene immediately reminded me of the hummingbird.
deserted/obsolete废弃的
[d a ɡ nt k]
/d l p de t d /
学生优秀句子展示
I closed my eyes, praying that the humming bird would come again.
It was the hummingbird that made me realize the love between human and animals.(Zqm)
Memory of that hummingbird would be engraved in my mind.(Zyj)
Standing out of the milking house, I felt a surge of disappointment sweeping over me.(ZN)
A flush of warmth swept over me. This marvelous experience was engraved in my heart that could never be erased.(黄XR)
It was truly a heartwarming moment that would never vanish.(Yyh)
I threw my head back, running like an arrow towards her. At sight of the tiny and familiar figure, I was injected with fresh blood.
The wonderful encounter put a brand in my heart that I could never erase, which reminded me that our human beings should live in harmony with other creatures in the world.(Qjw)
P1
A few weeks later, I went back to the farm. Walking past the familiar dilapidated milking house, I spotted the repaired window, which reminded me of the adorable hummingbird. Was she all right now Would she be trapped in the web again. Hoping she wouldn’t get herself into another tough situation anymore! Thoughts like these just kept flooding in on me. My thoughts couldn’t help drifting back to the moment when I rescued the tiny hummingbird “How I wish I could see her again!” I was immersing myself in the memory when my friends interrupted me, inviting me to the cookout. Soon, the sun began to set and it was time for home. Having searched for the hummingbird up and down, I still couldn’t even hear a sound, with a sense of loss overwhelming me.
deserted/obsolete废弃的
困在
艰难的
想法不断涌上我的心头
思绪不禁飘回到
正沉浸在…突然…
打扰
已经搜索
失落感淹没了我
P2
I was about to leave when the hummingbird appeared. Having fluttered gracefully towards me, she perched on a small twig just an inch before me, studying me with the same sparkling and crystal eyes. In an ecstasy of delight, I reached out my palms for it to rest. Unexpectedly, this time, she landed on my cupped hand. “It must be YOU!” I exclaimed. A surge of warm current flooded into my heart. Not until that moment did I start to aware that there literally existed a spiritual and harmonious bond between we human beings and other animals in the world.
先拍打着翅膀朝我优雅地飞过来，
落在
树枝
水晶般闪烁的眼睛pleasant and diamond-like
欣喜若狂
伸出手掌
呼喊道
一股暖流涌入我的心
直到那一刻，我才开始意识到，我们人类和世界上其他动物之间确实存在着精神上的和谐的纽带。
That marvelous experience was deeply engraved in my mind, which reminded me that…
奇妙的
It was at that moment that I started to believe that…
译文
1.几周后，我回到了农场。当我走过熟悉的破旧挤奶房时，那只可爱的蜂鸟吱吱作响的叫声仍然在我的脑海中回荡。她状况好吗？这个可爱的生物会再次被困在网中吗？这些问题和想法像蜘蛛线一样突然出现在我的脑海中。那一刻，一股想再次见到她的欲望席卷了我。我正沉浸在记忆中，突然我的朋友打断我，邀请我去野餐。很快，太阳开始落山，该回家了。到处寻找蜂鸟后，我仍然听不到任何声音，失落感淹没了我。
2.我正要离开时，蜂鸟出现了。她优雅地向我振翅飞来，落在距离我一英寸处的一根小树枝上，用同样闪闪发光的水晶般的眼睛打量着我。我欣喜若狂，伸出手掌让它休息。没想到，这一次，她落在了我杯状的手上。“一定是你！”我呼喊道。一股暖流涌入我的心。直到那一刻，我才开始意识到，我们人类和世界上其他动物之间确实存在着精神上的和谐的纽带。
就在那一刻，我开始相信…
那奇妙的经历深深地刻在我的脑海中，它提醒我…
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