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(共36张PPT)
continuation writing
与原文融合
动作链的使用
上节精彩回顾
读后续写常识
细节性语句欣赏
细节描写欣赏 (抓住动作与神态)
普通的：Willa is sad and discouraged.
精彩的：
After coming back home,Willa sat on the sofa motionlessly,crossing her fingers in her lap,with sorrow and regret written on her tear-stained face.
环境描写欣赏 (抓住风雨；河流；阳光之类)
普通的：It was raining hard.
精彩的：
Thunder roaring and icy rain violently beating against the windows,I could barely hear
the voice.
1.能捕捉所给故事的关键信息，画出可能设置伏笔的地方，思考 能否在续写部分进行照应。
2.想象情景，勾勒画面，草拟出连锁的动作链。从情节线和情感线 双线开展细节描写。
3.结合评分标准，把握故事的结局，学习三种结局的
写法。
Learning Objectives
1.读后续写的原文所给词数多少？
2.续写的部分单词数量是多少？
3.评分时，从哪三个方面进行考察？
A survey
1.读后续写的原文所给词数多少？
2.续写的部分单词数量是多少？
3.评分时，从哪三个方面进行考察？
A survey
350
150
plot + expressions
+ structure
一篇好的续写=内容构思+语言表达+篇章结构
内容构思不准确是分数无法提高的重要原因之一
存在问题：
1.读中：缺少阅读发现，阅读时不知道如何挖掘原文中的材料 为续写所用。
2. 写中：缺少衔接与连贯，续写与原文疏离。
Tips: （与原文情境的融合很重要）
3. 根源：原文没读通透，从而抓不住本质。
Tips: （续写要完整）
捕捉关键信息
阅读下面材料，捕捉关键信息
When I was 12 years old, I started my first job of delivering newspapers. I worked for my hometown paper called Times-News.
Each afternoon, the newspaper company dumped (丢下) a pile of papers on my driveway (车道). I had to roll them up, fit a band around each one, and pile them into my shoulder bag. Then I would jump on my Schwinn ten-speed bike and ride a couple of blocks (街区) to deliver them to neighbors. That was the easy part for my job.
However, the hard part was collecting money each month. It was in the early 1980s before online payments, so l had to go door-to-door.
One of my customers was an elderly woman who lived by herself. The first time I met her, she was quite angry. She complained about where I threw her paper each afternoon. She didn't want it on the driveway and she wanted it on her doorway. I had never had a dissatisfied customer before, so I stood there speechless with my mouth hanging open. As a final insult (侮辱), she waved a finger in my face and refused to pay.
I rode my bike back home discouraged (泄气的) and upset. When I talked to my parents about what happened that night, they gave me advice that sounded incredible. But it helped solve the problem almost immediately.
It's the wisdom I've carried with me for the last forty years. What did they tell me "Brian, be kind to her, and she may turn out to be your best customer." To the ears of a 12-year-old, that sounded ridiculous (荒谬的), like I could jump on my bike to the moon. There was absolutely no possibility that this lady could be nice. I was convinced about that.
1.But to appease (安抚) my parents, I gave it a try.
_______________________________________________
2.This time, she greeted me differently. _______________________________________________
结合原文构思连贯的情节；创造2-3条动作链。
接纳建议--提供周到的服务（what）
态度转变----对我特别好（how）
动作链练习
1.坐车
（拦下-上车-目的地）
She hailed a taxi,got into it and told the driver her
destination.
动作链练习
2.给狼喂肉
3.抱儿子
4.获奖发言
5.回教室
动作链练习
2.喂肉（拿出肉--瞄准狼--扔出去）
He pulled out the meat,aimed at the wolf and
throw it straight to the fierce animal.
3.抱儿子（冲上前--蹲下来---一把抱住）
She dashed forward,knelt down and gathered her son into her arms.
动作链练习
4.获奖发言（看一眼奖杯--深吸一口气--说到：感谢sb）
She glanced at the trophy,took a deep breath and said, “Thank Sarah!”
5.回教室（回楼--上楼--进入）
He walk towards the teaching building A , went up to the second floor and slipped into the classroom.
命题训练
6.服务周到的描写
7.老太太对我很好
收获满满动作链运用
6.服务周到的描写
（到达--跳下车--送至门口）
I arrived at her house, jumped off my bike and delivered her paper to her doorway.
进一步增加内容（时间+原文线索）。
动作链运用
6.服务周到（到达--跳下车--送至门口）
Each afternoon , when I arrived at her house, I jumped off my bike and delivered her paper to her doorway just as she requested before.
收获满满动作链运用
7.对我很好（对我挥手微笑--给我零食--付小费）
She waved to me with a smile ,offered me cookies,and tipped me extra money.
进一步增加内容（时间+升华主题）
动作链运用
7.对我很好（对我挥手微笑--给我零食--付小费）
For the rest of my time as a newspaper carrier,she waved to me with a smile ,offered me cookies,and tipped me extra money which made my job meaningful.
收获满满伏笔的运用
1.一整月之后，又到了收钱的日子。
I did this for a month , and then the time for payment came again.(+原文情绪)
2.感谢你把报纸送到了我的门前。
“Thank you for delivering my paper to the doorway,young man,” she said . “I have trouble in walking and now it makes it much easier for me.”(+提示的结果)
续写完整 情境融合
参考范文:
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But toappease(安抚)myparents I gave it a try.Each afternoon, when I arrived at her house, I jumped off my bike and delivered her paper to her doorway just as she had requested before(动作链）. She was the only customer who got this type of special delivery .I did this for a full month, never seeing her. And then the time for payment day came again.（原文伏笔）I was worried about it.I could remember l was extremely nervous（原文信息）（+情绪） when walking to her door and ringing the doorbell（动作链）.
This time she greeted me differently. Gone was the complaining and angry elderly woman.（原文信息） Now she presented me with kindness in her eyes.（呼应首句）“Thank you for delivering my paper to the doorway, young man,”（运用伏笔） she said with a smile. “ I have trouble in walking and now it makes it much easier for me." She gave me a check which surprised me with a big tip.（+结果）For the rest of my time as a newspaper carrier she waved to me each day, offered me cookies, and tipped me extra money (动作链）which made my job meaningful .（有意义的结局）
不同的结局
1.感叹
What a 形容词①and 形容词② experience!
2.回忆
After these years ,the 形容词 scenes are still in my mind/memories.
3.感悟
Only then did I realize that...
I rode my bike back home discouraged (泄气的) and upset. When I talked to my parents about what happened that night, they gave me advice that sounded incredible. But it helped solve the problem almost immediately.
It's the wisdom I've carried with me for the last forty years. What did they tell me "Brian, be kind to her, and she may turn out to be your best customer." To the ears of a 12-year-old, that sounded ridiculous (荒谬的), like I could jump on my bike to the moon. There was absolutely no possibility that this lady could be nice. I was convinced about that.
1.What an incredible and helpful lesson/experience!
2.After these years ,I still admire my parents’ wisdom and it makes me achieve a lot during my rest of life.
3.I realized that only if you treat others kindly will you be treated in the same way.
佳句积累
（1）Para 2. Each afternoon, the newspaper company dumped (丢下) a pile of papers on my driveway (车道). I had to roll them up, fit a band around each one, and pile them into my shoulder bag. (动作链）
（2）Para 4 ... I had never had a dissatisfied customer before, so I stood there speechless with my mouth hanging open. (with的复合结构）As a final insult (侮辱), she waved a finger in my face and refused to pay.
( 3 ) Para 6
...To the ears of a 12-year-old, that sounded ridiculous (荒谬的), like I could jump on my bike to the moon. （比喻）
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