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2021年惠州三模读后续写
妈妈的生日礼物
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Thomas watched the irrigation canal (灌溉渠) for a sign of water. It looked as dry as he felt inside. Thomas’s thoughts were interrupted as his younger sister, Maggie, came skipping across the field.
“What are you giving Mama for her birthday ” she asked.
Thomas felt his stomach turn. He had forgotten that Mama’s birthday, the first since they left their hometown, was tomorrow. “It’s a surprise, Maggie,” he answered. It was the truth.
Even he would be surprised.
Thomas would wish to be back in the mountains of their hometown. Surely Mama would want the same. At least it rained there. Each time it did, Mama, Thomas, and Maggie would sit on the front porch (门廊) and watch for a rainbow. Then each of them picked out a favorite color in the rainbow. Mama always gave the same answer. “Turquoise (绿松石色),”she would finally say with a dreamy smile, pointing at the sky. “Squeezed in tight, between the blue and green. Close your eyes and you can see it. If you could touch it, it would feel cool, like a breeze (微风) blowing across the stream.”
Thomas was discouraged. The sun would be setting soon, and he still had nothing to give his mother. What he saw around were rocks and sand. Suddenly, something caught his eye.
“Hey, what’s this ” he asked.
“Let’s find out,” Maggie yelled. Thomas and Maggie dug with their fingers and uncovered a small, round stone. In the center, there was a tiny hole.
“That’s just a turquoise bead (珠子),” Thomas exclaimed. “My friend Jack’s sister has a jar full of them.”
“Let’s see if there are more,” Maggie got excited.
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“I have an idea,” Thomas said cheerfully.
Early the next morning, Thomas and Maggie set a small package on the table.
理解材料
Who are the characters in the text
Thomas and Maggie.
2. Thomas was content with their new home and life at the beginning. (T or F)
F
3. What is their mother’s favorite color in the rainbow
Turquoise.
4. What object inspired the two children to make a birthday gift
A turquoise bead.
理解原材料
Thomas came up with a wonderful idea …
1. Opening
Thomas was unhappy after the move and Maggie reminded him of mother’s birthday.
Thomas started to recall their good old days and it occurred to him that turquoise is their mom’s favorite color.
Thomas fell into depression because he had no birthday gift idea. Out of the blue, they found out a turquoise bead.
They put a small package on the table the next morning …
2. Build-up
3. Climax
4. Resolution
5. Ending
研读两段给出句，想想它们给我们提供了哪些续写线索？
Para. 1: “I have an idea,” Thomas said cheerfully.
Q 1：What would Thomas and Maggie do next How should we illustrate Thomas’ and Maggie’s actions in detail
Q 2：What would Thomas say or think about while putting the idea into practice
Para. 2: Early the next morning, Thomas and Maggie set a small package on the table.
Q 3：How did the mother react as soon as she saw the package
Q 4：What did the mother say when she saw the present How should we highlight the mother’s excitement
Q 5：How should we end the story to show Thomas’ and Maggie’s love for their mother
“I have an idea,” Thomas said cheerfully. They kept digging and found more beads. _______________________________________________________ （托马斯把它们放在衬衣里，紧紧地拿着，以免掉在地上。holding动词-ing形式作状语;so that引导目的状语从句。）Then he carried them to the river, and Maggie helped him wash them. Carefully, they dried and _______（擦拭）them with a handkerchief. “Mama will have a birthday present
________________________________________(毕竟；终究）!” Thomas exclaimed.
_______________________________________________________ （他似乎看到一条项链正在妈妈的脖子上闪闪发光，而妈妈在深情地抚摸着它。see sb. doing sth. ）
根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分。
根据括号中的提示，补出范文缺失的部分。
Early the next morning, Thomas and Maggie set a small package on the table. __________________ （里面是一条项链…… 介词inside置于句首，主语非人称代词，句子全部倒装。） they had made with the beads they had dug. “What’s this ” Mama asked curiously. _______________________________________________________ （当她打开小包裹时，她惊讶地屏住了呼吸。 As引导时间状语从句，表示“当……的时候”；gasp表示由于惊讶而倒抽气、屏住呼吸。）“What a beautiful necklace!” she cried, _______（拉）Thomas and Maggie close. “I can almost feel a cool breeze blowing across the stream.” Mama closed her eyes and smiled. “It _______（闻起来像）rain and I can see that turquoise in the most beautiful rainbow. Thank you. My dearest children.” Thomas _______（感觉不错） inside. Mama had her favourite turquoise!
阅读以下参考范文，并学习范文的精彩表达。
“I have an idea,” Thomas said cheerfully. They kept digging and found more beads. Thomas put them in his shirt, holding it tight so that he wouldn’t drop them. Then he carried them to the river, and Maggie helped him wash them. Carefully, they dried and polished them with a handkerchief. “Mama will have a birthday present after all!” Thomas exclaimed. He seemed to see a necklace sparkling around Mama’s neck and Mama touching it fondly.
Early the next morning, Thomas and Maggie set a small package on the table. Inside was the necklace they had made with the beads they had dug. “What’s this ” Mama asked curiously. As she unwrapped the small package, she gasped. “What a beautiful necklace!” she cried, pulling Thomas and Maggie close. “I can almost feel a cool breeze blowing across the stream.” Mama closed her eyes and smiled. “It smells like rain and I can see that turquoise in the most beautiful rainbow. Thank you. My dearest children.” Thomas felt good inside. Mama had her favourite turquoise!
“I have an idea,” Thomas said cheerfully. They kept digging and found more beads. Thomas put them in his shirt, holding it tight so that he wouldn’t drop them. Then he carried them to the river, and Maggie helped him wash them. Carefully, they dried and polished them with a handkerchief. “Mama will have a birthday present after all!” Thomas exclaimed. He seemed to see a necklace sparkling around Mama’s neck and Mama touching it fondly.
兄妹二人共同合作，挖珠子，运珠子，洗珠子，擦珠子，put、hold tight、 carefully等词以及感叹句的使用极具画面感，也从侧面传递了兄妹二人认真细致、做事专注的优秀品质以及对母亲深深的爱。
exclaim展现了Thomas
兴奋到尖叫的心情。
see sb. doing sth.看到某人/某物正在做某事
holding动词-ing形式作伴随状语； so that引导目的状语从句
范文赏析——生动的语言
对Thomas的语言和心理活动进行了细致的描绘，由最开始的烦躁→惊讶→沮丧到兴奋等等，凸显了他情感的发展变化。
Early the next morning, Thomas and Maggie set a small package on the table. Inside was the necklace they had made with the beads they had dug. “What’s this ” Mama asked curiously. As she unwrapped the small package, she gasped. “What a beautiful necklace!” she cried, pulling Thomas and Maggie close. “I can almost feel a cool breeze blowing across the stream.” Mama closed her eyes and smiled. “It smells like rain and I can see that turquoise in the most beautiful rainbow. Thank you. My dearest children.” Thomas felt good inside. Mama had her favourite turquoise!
一系列语言和动作描写，语言丰富多样，生动形象地描绘出妈妈拆礼物的场景，展现了妈妈的惊喜、感动。
结尾朴素且真挚，凸出亲情主题，文章为广大青少年树立了良好的榜样。
妈妈的反应与材料中的Surely Mama would want the same遥相呼应，说明了这份珍贵的来自沙漠的馈赠犹如一场及时雨，在托马斯全家最需要慰藉的时候，为他们送上了一份美好。
范文赏析——生动的语言
运用介词放置句首的全部倒装句，直接点出并强调包裹里的生日礼物，引出下文妈妈的反应。
hold it tight
after all
touch it fondly
unwrap the small package
pull Thomas and Maggie close
smell like …
feel good
亮点语块
紧紧攥着它
毕竟
深情地抚摸它
打开小包裹
将托马斯和麦姬拉到身边
闻起来像……
感觉不错
续写素材积累
Thomas put them in his shirt, holding it tight so that he wouldn’t drop them.
Carefully, they dried and polished them with a handkerchief.
Inside was the necklace they had made with the beads they had dug.
He seemed to see a necklace sparkling around Mama’s neck and Mama touching it fondly.
As she unwrapped the small package, she gasped.
She cried, pulling Thomas and Maggie close.
I can almost feel a cool breeze blowing across the stream.
It smells like rain and I can see that turquoise in the most beautiful rainbow.
Thomas felt good inside.

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