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高考英语读后续写语篇练习
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——鲨鱼口脱险
题目分析
读后续写
题目再现
范文呈现
努力方向
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Part 1
题目再现
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续写原文
It was a Sunday morning. Betty woke up earlier than usual. She couldn’t sleep any longer because she was so excited that her uncle Mark was taking her to the beach. She had always loved going surfing with her uncle. She put her swimming suit on and took quickly that she had prepared the night got before and went outside to wait. She jumped up and down with joy when she saw her uncle’s red jeep turn the corner down her street.
Uncle Mark got out of the car and helped Betty get in. “Are you ready ” he asked. “Yes!” replied Betty. Uncle Mark could see the excitement in her face. Suddenly he said seriously, “Well, before we go, I have to let you know that a shark appeared recently where we're going to surf today.” Scared and shocked, Betty couldn’t say a word. “Haha! I'm kidding you,” Uncle Mark burst out laughing. Betty laughed too. She knew Uncle Mark liked teasing others. “Let’s go and have some breakfast, I know just the place,” Uncle Mark said. They went to a breakfast shop and ate some tacos (炸玉米饼).
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续写原文
After breakfast the two of them went down to Pacific Beach and got their surfboards ready. “First you have to wax(打蜡)the bottom,explained Uncle Mark. “I know. I’ve watched you do it before!" Betty said as she took the wax from Uncle Mark's hand. It took about 15 minutes to wax the bottom of their boards. When Betty finished, Uncle Mark looked it over to make sure it was done well. “Nice job, Betty, you wax your board like a true surfer.”
Finally, they were ready to get into the water. They carried their boards down to the beach and went out into the water. Betty was overly excited and tried to rush to catch a wave. Predictably, she crashed and had to start over. Next was her uncle's turn. He stood up on his first try and smoothly surfed the wave before jumping into the water. Betty cheered for her uncle's perfect run.
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段首句
Paragraph 1：All of a sudden, Betty felt something touching the bottom of her foot.
Paragraph 2：“Help! Help!” Betty screamed in horror.
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Part 2
题目分析
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续写已知内容
第一段：本段交代了主要人物和故事背景，一个周日的早上Betty很早就起来了，因为这一天Mark叔叔要带她去沙滩上冲浪，她心情激动，迫不及待，这时Mark叔叔的车来了。
第二段：Mark叔叔接上了Betty，跟她开玩笑说这次要去的水域最近报告有鲨鱼出没（这里可以看作一个伏笔），然后两人就去吃早餐了。
第三段：两人来到了沙滩上，进行一些冲浪前的准备动作，主要是给冲浪板打蜡。
第四段：本段主要描写Mark叔叔和Betty准备好后下水冲浪的情景。可以看到，前四段已经将主要的人物和事件交代清楚，属于记叙文，叙事的脉络就是按照时间顺序来展开的，续写的部分要结合所给的开头部分来继续讲述Betty和Mark叔叔在冲浪时发生的事情。
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点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
情节构建的重点
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续写建议
第一段：
续写第一段给出的情节是“突然Betty感觉到有东西碰到了自己的脚”，而续写第二段“救命！救命！Betty恐惧地大叫道”表明Betty在水中遭遇了险情，这里就可以呼应到第二段埋下的伏笔，即Betty在水里真的遇到了鲨鱼，但仍然需要一个确认的过程，续写第一段就可以围绕这一点展开，描述Betty如何察觉危险、她的情绪如何变化、她作出何种应对，甚至可以描写鲨鱼进行了攻击但没有命中，渲染危急紧张的气氛。
第二段：
续写第二段就应该切入另外一个人物Mark叔叔了，听到Betty的求救，他会作何反应，二人又将如何化险为夷，这里是有较大的发挥空间的。另外建议续写比较圆满的结局，这样更加符合一般故事的走向和价值观。
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Part 3
范文呈现
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范文呈现
All of a sudden, Betty felt something touching the bottom of his feet. Failing to resist the impulse of curiosity, she lowered her glance. Within a second, her cheeks paled, and a chill swept over her body. A set of crimson and fierce eyes came into her sight. A shark, its tail shaking, its jaws clicking, made a leap from the sea and afterwards dove back into the water. Picturing the shark teeth tore meat off her leg, Betty felt a sinking in her heart, and her heart in his throat.
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范文呈现
"Help! Help!" Betty screamed in horror. No reply. All was silence. The wave of the Pacific Ocean rose, tightening her throat, making it more and more hard to breathe. "God bless." he prayed desperately with quivering lips. When the color of the indigo blue sky seemingly faded away from the vision and before the consciousness was lost totally, a familiar voice broke the dead silence. It was Uncle Mark who swam close in a rush, grasped Betty firmly with one hand, and dragged her toward the beach. With the tide gently rolling to her feet, Betty, sitting in the sand felt the wave of relief swept across the beach.
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Part 4
努力方向
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高级结构
名词性从句
高级结构
三连动
虚拟语气
形容词做状语
无灵主语
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定语从句
状语从句
（包含倒装句）
强调句
副词做状语
非谓语
（包括独立主格）
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