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怎样写好读后续写
目录
一、题型解读
二、解题攻略
三、素材积累
四、注意事项
一、题型解读
浙江省在2016 年第一次使用新题型“读后续写”，之后在全国高考试题中被广泛应用。
读后续写的要求
《普通高等学校招生全国统一考试英语学科考试说明》（高考综合改革试验省份试用）（第一版）（以下简称《考试说明》）对读后续写题型提出了明确的要求：
提供一段350 词以内的语言材料，要求考生根据材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150 词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
2020年6月以来，新高考全国卷读后续写考查情况介绍（全国一卷和全国二卷作文相同）
全国卷
时间 词数 体裁 故事情节 类型
2022.6 318+27 记叙文 越野比赛前，老师帮助David重拾信心 人与自我
2021.6 310+22 记叙文 母亲节，双胞胎为母亲做早餐失败后爸爸帮忙 人与自我
2021.1 325+27 记叙文 汽车抛锚，墨西哥一家人帮忙修理 人与社会
2020.6 317+25 记叙文 主人公一家制作爆米花帮助贫穷的邻居 人与社会
2021年新高考全国卷I
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。（25分*1.25=31.25分）
A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.___________________________________________
Para2 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.________________________________________________
2022年新高考全国卷I
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为 150 左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. __________ ________________________________________________________________________
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners._________________________________________________________________
______________________________________________________________________
2016年10月浙江省首次采用读后续写，2016年以来浙江卷读后续写考查情况（2018年11月和2019年6月采用概要写作，其余均为读后续写）
浙江卷
时间 词数 体裁 故事情节 类型
2022.1 329+25 记叙文 实验心理学课上，老师让“我”和一个“我”不喜欢的同学一组，我们被迫合作 人与自我
2021.6 314+14 记叙文 父亲从小把赚的钱用于家庭开支，“我”却不想上交暑期兼职挣的钱 人与自我
2021.1 342+21 记叙文 万圣节，主人公把头卡进南瓜里却出不来了 人与社会
2020.7 320+18 记叙文 “我”和妻子做饭却遇到北极熊，不得不和北极熊交战 人与自然
2020.1 349+21 记叙文 男孩离家上大学，家里的小狗也很沮丧，于是父母又买一条小狗 人与自然
2018.6 321+22 记叙文 “我”和爸爸骑马游玩却在山里迷路了 人与自我
2017.11 340+27 记叙文 家人去旅游，母亲总是健忘拉下东西 人与自我
2017.6 353+17 记叙文 主人公和朋友骑行途中遇到狼，一辆汽车突然出现在他前面 人与自然
2016.10 334+18 记叙文 妻子与丈夫露营时发生争吵，独自走进森林却迷路了，直升机走了，天也黑了 人与自我
【2022.01浙江卷】
第二节 读后续写（满分25分）
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
When Dr. Henderson was assigning (指定) project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn’t assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate (命运) would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren’t there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn’t mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn’t say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis (假说), set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn’t want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn’t sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans._________
Paragraph 2: One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. ___________________________________________________
【2016.10浙江卷】
读后续写(满分25分)
阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.____________________________________________________
Paragraph 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up._____________
原文材料350 词以内，要求续写的文章150 词左右
续写两个自然段，每段开头语已经给出；
所给原文阅读材料以富有情节的记叙文，话题贴近生活，内容为解决问题，必须是正能量的结局.
高考读后续写特点：
把握关键信息和语言特点的能力 准确运用语言的能力
对语篇结构的把控能力 创造性思维能力
新高考读后续写七档评分标准
一、评分原则
1.本题总分为25分，按七个档次给分。
2.评分时，应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3.评分时，先根据作答的整体情况初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。
4.评分时还应注意：
(1)词数少于120的，酌情扣分。
(2)书写较差，以至影响交际的，酌情扣分。
(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写和词汇用法均可接受
二、评分细则
档次 描述
第七档 (22-25分) ——创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高；
——使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误少，且完全不影响理解；
——自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。
第六档 (18-21分) ——创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高；
——使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解；
——比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第五档(15-17 分) ——创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关；
——使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但基本不影响理解；
——使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第四档(11-14 分) ——创造了基本完整的故事内容，但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情景基本相关；
——使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有部分语言错误和不恰当之处，个别部分影响理解；
——尚有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。
第三档 (6-10分) ——内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文有一定程度脱节；
——所用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解；
——未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义欠连贯。
第二档 (1-5分) ——内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节；
——所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误极多，严重影响理解；
——几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯。
第一档 (0分) 未作答；所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判；所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
二、解题攻略
2.如何开展读后续写
1.存在的问题
1.存在的问题
从教学一线反馈的情况来看,大部分师生并不适应读后续写这种新型的写作考查方式,尤其是英语教育欠发达地区,存在的突出问题主要体现在以下几个方面:
1.英语阅读基本功较差,文本解读不到位,不能抓住故事主旨,影响后文续写（详情见文章）。我校主要是学生单词量不够，关键单词甚至是续写部分的单词不认识，尤其是一些熟词生意。(例如文章中I was so moved by her kindness. 中的 move有的同学翻译作移动，by译作通过。)
2.没有关注续写段落首句,导致续写情节不合理,偏离主题,与原文的切合度不高,天马行空,随意发挥。（详情见文章）
3.细节描写欠缺,故事叙述平淡、不生动（学会举例或把一个动作分解为动作链）。没有使用较丰富的词汇和句型,所续写内容可读性不强。
4.过多使用对话,很难在限定的词数和篇幅内推动后续情节的发展。
5.设定负能量结局,违背了续写内容应该积极向上、传播正能量和立德树人的主流价值导向,甚至不符合生活常识和人之常情。
6.做题时间分配不合理,导致没有充足的时间完成写作。
除以上几个突出的问题外,还存在单词拼写不过关、时态误用、标点符号滥用和字迹潦草等（尤其是高一新生，见试卷）常见的写作问题。
高一第一次月考
When I was a kid my life was a sweet life. I lived in a beautiful house with the beautiful surroundings in Peru(秘鲁）. There was one particular thing I loved and it was a huge tree that was in my backyard. As a child, I used to climb the tree every day. Every time I went, I climbed higher and higher, reaching new branches（树枝）, obstacles (障碍物), and pathways on my way up. One day, I finally reached the top and I could see my island. I felt I was on top of the world, and nothing could stop me. It was the special tree that taught me never to give up and reach higher.
Then, there was the day that seemed like the end of my life. This specific day changed my life forever.
It was a nice summer day. After breakfast, my family went to the park to see my baseball game. In the evening we went to a carnival (嘉年华) in my town. My grandma was selling blankets under a tent. Suddenly, the mood of the day changed when my parents took me to my grandma’s tent. Still to this day, I remember the exact words my dad said to me, “Son, would you like to move to the United States ” I couldn’t believe what he said. I then ran away from him as the tears rolled down my cheeks. My perfect life was being taken away from me.
Two weeks later, we arrived at New York in late July, and my aunt and uncle drove us to Springfield, Massachusetts where we lived for seven years. As a 9-year-old kid who grew up in Peru, I knew little about local language and culture. What’s worse, September came soon and school started.
高一第一次月考
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右。
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
The first few months in my new school were not fun or easy. __________________________________________________________________
Despite(尽管) all those problems, I sill remembered that special tree. _________________________________________________________________
红色部分是为了降低难度而修改的。
原文如下
The first few months there were not fun or easy. __________________________________________________________________
Despite all those problems, I sill remembered that special tree. _________________________________________________________________
问题1.1：不能抓住故事主旨,影响后文续写
还有时态问题（一般过去时）
问题1.2：不能抓住故事主旨,影响后文续写
问题1.3：不能抓住故事主旨,影响后文续写
……
I first checked the youth hostel (青年旅舍)，but it was completely full.Setting aside five crowns (克朗) for the bus ticket，I had nine crowns to spend.Every hotel I tried to check into charged twenty two to twenty five crowns，until I had only one more hotel to try.If it was too expensive，I'd have to spend the night on a park seat，an uncomfortable idea for someone almost 60 years old.
The hotel looked much nicer than I expected.It would surely cost more than nine crowns.The person working at the front desk spoke some English，so I told her my story.She listened carefully，and then asked me to wait.A woman came out and in very good English introduced herself as the manager.She asked what she could do to help.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
Again I told my story，and made an offer.
I was so moved by her kindness.
问题1.4：
续写中的句子不会翻译
1.存在的问题
从教学一线反馈的情况来看,大部分师生并不适应读后续写这种新型的写作考查方式,尤其是英语教育欠发达地区,存在的突出问题主要体现在以下几个方面:
1.英语阅读基本功较差,文本解读不到位,不能抓住故事主旨,影响后文续写（详情见文章）。我校主要是学生单词量不够，关键单词甚至是续写部分的单词不认识，尤其是一些熟词生意。(例如文章中I was so moved by her kindness. 中的 move有的同学翻译作移动，by译作通过。)
2.没有关注续写段落首句,导致续写情节不合理,偏离主题,与原文的切合度不高,天马行空,随意发挥。（详情见文章）
3.细节描写欠缺,故事叙述平淡、不生动（学会举例或把一个动作分解为动作链）。没有使用较丰富的词汇和句型,所续写内容可读性不强。
4.过多使用对话,很难在限定的词数和篇幅内推动后续情节的发展。
5.设定负能量结局,违背了续写内容应该积极向上、传播正能量和立德树人的主流价值导向,甚至不符合生活常识和人之常情。
6.做题时间分配不合理,导致没有充足的时间完成写作。
除以上几个突出的问题外,还存在单词拼写不过关、时态误用、标点符号滥用和字迹潦草等（尤其是高一新生，见试卷）常见的写作问题。
问题2.1：不注意第一段末尾和第二段首句的衔接
问题2.2：不注意第一段末尾和第二段首句的衔接
问题2.3：不注意第一段末尾和第二段首句的衔接
1.存在的问题
从教学一线反馈的情况来看,大部分师生并不适应读后续写这种新型的写作考查方式,尤其是英语教育欠发达地区,存在的突出问题主要体现在以下几个方面:
1.英语阅读基本功较差,文本解读不到位,不能抓住故事主旨,影响后文续写（详情见文章）。我校主要是学生单词量不够，关键单词甚至是续写部分的单词不认识，尤其是一些熟词生意。(例如文章中I was so moved by her kindness. 中的 move有的同学翻译作移动，by译作通过。)
2.没有关注续写段落首句,导致续写情节不合理,偏离主题,与原文的切合度不高,天马行空,随意发挥。（详情见文章）
3.细节描写欠缺,故事叙述平淡、不生动（学会举例或把一个动作分解为动作链）。没有使用较丰富的词汇和句型,所续写内容可读性不强。
4.过多使用对话,很难在限定的词数和篇幅内推动后续情节的发展。
5.设定负能量结局,违背了续写内容应该积极向上、传播正能量和立德树人的主流价值导向,甚至不符合生活常识和人之常情。
6.做题时间分配不合理,导致没有充足的时间完成写作。
除以上几个突出的问题外,还存在单词拼写不过关、时态误用、标点符号滥用和字迹潦草等（尤其是高一新生，见试卷）常见的写作问题。
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2.如何开展读后续写
1.阅读原文，能够复述出大概的故事情节
在阅读原文的过程中，可以利用5W1H（即when, where, who, what, why, how)的方法画出关键词，从而明白：什么时间，什么地点，什么人干了什么事情，为什么以及怎样发展的。这也正是记叙文的六要素：时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过、结果。
2.结合续写段落首句，构思续写部分每段的内容
续写部分一般为故事的冲突部分或高潮部分，反复阅读续写第一段的首句和第二段的首句，确定每段话的内容，使冲突或矛盾得到合理解决。
尤其注意结合续写第二段的首句，确定第一段的内容，保证第一段的末尾和第二段开头的衔接要符合逻辑（参考月考题很多同学第一段的末尾和第二段的衔接）。
3.写作要生动，同时注意文章的时态、语言风格、人物性格
续写内容可以写主人公说了什么，做了什么加上心理描写和环境描写，学会举例或把一个动作分解为动作链使记叙文显得生动。记叙文大都讲述过去发生的事情，一般都是过去的时态：一般过去时，过去进行时，过去完成时，过去将来时。切记不要习惯性用一般现在时。注意原文语言风格和人物性格（参考2017.11浙江卷和健忘妈妈一起旅行）对故事发展的指导作用。
【2017.11浙江卷】A Vacation with My Mother
I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my mother—loving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.
My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks Mom had forgotten.
David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept. “You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind:
“Honey, where are the kids ”
“What ! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.”
We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances.
On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections. If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.
注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1: The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Mom insisted that we must make full use of it since we had brought it. David and I cast a look at Dad, hoping he could turn down her crazy idea again. Much to our frustration, he agreed unexpectedly. Mom’s eyes twinkled with pleasure. She pulled over the car and searched for the tent instantly. All of a sudden, she let out a cry of anxiety. “Oh, gosh! We left the tent in the hotel!” she burst out crying like a child. Absolutely speechless as we were, we made up our mind to head back to the hotel. Luckily, we managed to retrieve the tent and even enjoyed a night in our tent for the first time. The next day, we continued our trip pleasantly.
Paragraph 2: We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. The vast bright blue sky, the limitless fresh green grass, the blossoming wild charming flowers, the group of adorable sheep kept me spellbound. However, all the breathtaking and picturesque scenery faded away compared to my absent-mind and forgetful mom, it dawned on me that without all the unnecessary trouble caused by mom, the journey wouldn’t be such a fantastic and amazing experience to treasure in my childhood. It was her who brought light to our plain life. I really love my Mum.
2021.6全国卷 A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot
and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
Para1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
Para2 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
试卷分析
时间when: Mother’s day
地点where: Home
人物who: The twins Jeff and Jenna，Mom, Dad
事件What: The twins were preparing the breakfast but they messed it up and burned the finger.
起因why: They wanted to surprise their mom.
经过How:
Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.
范文一
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Knowing what they were preparing for, he was greatly surprised. So immediately, he offered to get involved in the kids' job. Firstly he put the pot of porridge on a gentle heat, asking Jeff to watch out for it going for fifteen minutes. And then, he asked Jenna to break another two eggs and mix them with milk. With all preparations done, they started to fry bread together. In a flash, sweet smell filled the air in the kitchen. To their delight, the breakfast was a success in the end.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.Eyes opened, the woman heard a harmonious “Happy Mother's Day” from her twin kids with hot sweet breakfast before her. Behind the children stood their father. To shed light on the game of the gift, he told the mother the whole story. After learning about what happened, she rose quickly to gaze at the boy's hand with moved tears rolling down her cheeks. “Thank you, my honey！” said the mother.
范文二
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. One look and he knew what they were up to. Seeing their disappointed faces, he told them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twins cheered up and did as told. Within an hour, the kitchen was cleaned, and Father had made some egg sandwiches and cooked some porridge. Then he went back to bed quietly. The twins prepared the breakfast tray and added a card they had made.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They hugged her and shouted, “Happy Mother’s Day, dear Mummy!” Mother hugged the twins. Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast. She shook Father who was pretending to sleep. He faked astonishment when he saw the breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted. Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father’s eye and they smiled at each other secretly.
范文三
Para1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
Their father seemed to understand exactly what had happened and what to do next. He grabbed the handle of the pan and slipped a bar of butter to melt before putting another slice of cup. Then he swiftly removed the burnt porridge away, and poured another cup of rice, starting to cook it all over again. In between, he kept silent and focused on what he was doing. The twins stood straight and awe, watching the hustle and bustle from their father. At 7 o’clock, every thing was done and perfect. The twins took over the tray, feeling guilty about being over-confident about their competence in performing the house chores.
Para2 The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They presented the well-cooked breakfast in front of Mother. Their mother beamed from ear to ear, praising and appreciating children’s nice act of gesture. However, the twins lowered their heads, shoulders drooping down. It didn’t turn out as they had planned. Finally, Jenna broke out the silence, confessing “Mother, we have taken it for granted for so long that the breakfast that you make for us every morning is a super easy job. ” Jeff cut in “But it wasn’t.” Jenna continued “On this Mother’s day, we would like to thank you for your dedication and care for us.” “And from tomorrow, we will learn to make our own breakfast in order to take back our responsibility from you. ” Mother’s eyes were welled up with tears and nodded.
范文四
三、素材积累
学会通过 语言+动作+人物描写（内外情绪和样貌）+环境描写
使记叙文更加生动
actions
facial expressions
words
environments
言语：说 动作:(脚)走，（眼睛）看，
人物情绪：高兴，难过，惊讶，害怕（见word文档）
环境：自然环境之天黑了
表示“看” 的词
look、see、watch、gaze、
glance、notice、stare、
glare...
表示“说”的词
say, speak, talk, chat, remark, claim, gossip, read, cry
murmur，wisper低声说话
acknowledge 承认add 接着说；补充说
admit 承认affirm 肯定；确认
analyze 分析道announce 宣布
argue 争辩；主张assert 断言
boast 夸口说caution 告诫说
claim 声称complain 抱怨说
communicate 传达，沟通concede承认
conclude 断定；下结论
confess 供认；承认
表示“情绪情感” 的词
Book1:anxious, annoyed, frightened, confident, confused, amazed, honoured, shocked...
__________, He burst into tears.
He looked at his toy _________.
He looked at his toy _________.
He looked at his toy __________.
He looked at his toy ___________
正确使用状语：
adjective
adverb
in + emotion
with + facial expression
Heart-broken,
sadly
in sadness
with tears
with + body part +doing
with his eyes shining with tears.
__________, he jumped into air.
He jumped into air _________.
He jumped into air_________.
He jumped into air __________.
He jumped into air ___________
adjective
adverb
in + emotion
with + facial expression
Overjoyed,
joyfully
in joy
with overjoyed laughters
with +body part +doing
with his head shaking happily.
正确使用状语：
2016.10浙江卷 妻子与丈夫露营时发生争吵，独自走进山间森林却迷路了，直升机走了，天也黑了
lonely, anxious
hopeless, regretful
Environments
01
02
03
04
Actions
Facial expressions
Words
Use 4 aspects to
show Jane's emotion.
1. Darkness covered the forest.环境描写
2. She kept walking and hoped to find her husband.动作
3. Tears came up in her eyes. 人物描写
4. Jane said: “I will never quarrel with Tom again.”语言
5. She felt tired and she slept on the ground. 人物描写+动作
新高考读后续写都是记叙一个故事，故事中主人公遇到困难并想办法克服困难，最后取胜。例如乌鸦喝水，英雄救美，西游记。西游记中孙悟空也是不停地遇到困难并克服困难，最后取胜。可以学习英文版Journey to the West里边克服困难时的语言，动作，环境和情绪描写的英文词汇和句子。
练习：
唐僧师徒西天取经路上遇到大河……
续写第一段开头，见图片一二。
续写第二段开头，见图片三四。
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四、注意事项
1.多做真题，熟知思路
2.多阅读，会翻译文章并复述出主要情节。增加词汇量和提取关键信息的能力。
3.多背诵句子、文章，模仿写句子、作文，然后独立造句，写作文。例如用优化探究单词造句，仿续写答案的作文。
4.写作中注意五种基本句型（注意时态，状语和定语位置）在翻译中应用，非谓语，主语是动名词，情态动词加动词原形，某地或某时有某物用there be句型。
五种基本句型翻译练习
1我们努力学习英语。
2.一轮红日从东方升起。
3.1939年爆发了第二次世界大战。
4.飞机很快就要起飞了。
5.那家水果店关门了。
6.会议在三点开始。
7.我的心跳得很厉害。
8.今天早上我6点钟起床。

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