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高考英语读后续写语篇练习——女儿和妈妈的陪伴题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向Part 1题目呈现续写原文There was something in the elderly woman’s grace that caught my eye. Although slow and unsure of her steps, the woman moved with deliberation(从容), and there was no hesitation in her gestures.It was a few years ago, and I had taken a part-time holiday-season job in a video store at the local shopping mall. From inside the store, I could see the people outside rushing by.The elderly woman entered the store, along with her daughter, who was displaying a serious case of impatience, rolling her eyes, sighing and checking her watch every few seconds. I guessed if she had possessed a rope, she would have fastened it to her mother to drag her along to keep step with the rush of other shoppers.The elderly woman separated from her daughter and began to seek through the DVDs on the nearest shelf. After the slightest hesitation, I walked over and asked if I could help her find something. The woman smiled up at me and showed me a title written on an old piece of paper.Rather than rush off to locate the DVD for the woman, I asked her to walk with me so I could show her where she could find it. Looking back, I thought I wanted to enjoy her company for a moment.续写原文Something about her deliberate movements reminded me of my own mother, who’d passed away the previous Christmas. I missed my mom and still felt regretful about the moments when I’d used my impatience to make her life unhappy.As we walked along the back of the store, I introduced its floor plan: old television shows, action movies, cartoons, science fiction. The woman seemed glad of the unrushed company and casual conversation.We found the DVD and she thanked me, saying that it was the one she’d enjoyed when she was her daughter’s age. Unwillingly, I accompanied her to the cash register, realizing I had to return the elderly woman to her daughter, who was still tapping her foot at the front of the store.续写段首语Paragraph 1:As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter.Paragraph 2:Together they made their way toward the store’s exit.续写原文分析几年前，我在当地购物中心的音像店做了一份兼职的假期工作。从店内，我可以看到外面的人匆匆而过。有一天，一位老妇人和她的女儿走进了店里。女儿表现出严重的不耐烦，翻着白眼，叹着口气，老妇人则开始在最近的架子上寻找DVD。在稍稍犹豫之后，我走过去问我能不能帮她找点东西。我没有急于去找那个女人的DVD，而是让她和我一起走，这样我就可以告诉她在哪里可以找到它。回想起来，我想享受一下她的陪伴。这一切让我想起了我自己的母亲，她在去年圣诞节去世了。我想念我的妈妈，仍然为我用我的不耐烦让她的生活不快乐的时刻感到遗憾。我们找到了DVD，她感谢我，说这是她女儿这个年纪时喜欢的那张。我不情愿地陪她去收银台，意识到我必须把老妇人还给她的女儿……续写思路分析第一段当老妇人在收银台排队等候时，我走到她的女儿身边。“介意一些建议吗？”我问道。她翻了个白眼，道：“当然不是。我微笑着向她表明我没有批评。“珍惜她，珍惜你能和她在一起的每一刻，”我说。然后我回答她好奇的表情说：“当她离开时，这些小时刻会回到你身边。像这样的时刻。“我知道。”说完这句话，我注意到老妇人带着她的考虑回到了她的女儿身上。续写思路分析第2段他们一起走向商店的出口。然后女儿瞥了一眼年迈的母亲。慢慢地，几乎是不情愿地，她用显然不习惯的感情把胳膊放在母亲的肩膀上，轻轻地引导她回到人群中。当我看着他们消失在人群中时，泪水充满了我的眼睛。Part 2题目分析点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点Part 3范文呈现范文呈现Paragraph 1As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. “Mind some advice ” I asked. She rolled her eyes and said, “of course not.” I smiled to show her I wasn’t criticizing. “Cherish her and cherish every single moment you can stay with her,” I said. And then I answered her curious expression by saying, “When she’s gone, it’s these little moments that will come back to you. Moments like this. I know.” Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation back to her daughter.范文呈现Paragraph 2Together they made their way toward the store’s exit. Then the daughter glanced over her elderly mother. And slowly, almost unwillingly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mothers’ shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd. Tears filled my eyes when I watched them disappearing in the crowd.Part 4努力方向高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）低头是题海，抬头是前途。终将上岸，阳光万里!祝大家前程似锦!

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