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读后续写的具体要求
提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
What's the style of the passage
Narration (记叙文)
Exposition (说明文)
Argumentation (议论文)
所给原文阅读材料以富有情节的记叙文为主，话题贴近生活，内容为问题解决。
时态以一般过去时为主
narration (记叙文)
who(人物)
when (时间)
where(地点)
why(原因)
how(事件怎样发展)
what(事件)
确定文章的时态.
确定地点，激活环境词汇.
用第几人称叙述，有多少个人物
找出原因，通过逻辑，猜测故事走向.
确定故事发展的每个阶段:开始的写作部分.
考查点，通过以上要素，确定续写内容.
Description -- 描写
场景描写：自然背景、社会背景
动作描写：一般过去时
心理描写：直接描写、间接描写
有效对话：生活化、简洁化、口语化
修辞：比喻、夸张、拟人、排比
Practice 1
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一个完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右
1One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp.”and walked away.
2With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
3“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
4No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
5Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
6As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
Paragraph 1：
But no more helicopters came and it was dark._______
Paragraph 2：
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.________________
Step 1 Read for information
who Jane, her husband Tom
when one weekend in July
where in the forest, an open area
why they quarreled; Jane was lost
how
what
第三人称
一般过去时
Step 2 Read for the logical plotting
behavious feelings
para. 1 quarrel, walked away angry
para. 2 was lost frightened
regretful
confused
para. 3 cried
para. 4 keep moving, had to stop, wanted
Read for the logical plotting
behavious feelings
para. 5 saw, drank and ate, felt stronger, walk joyful, hopeful
para. 6 heard, took off, thinking hopeful, anxious
Step 2 分析续写的开头语，理顺逻辑关系
But no more helicopters came and it was dark._______
线索词：helicopter, dark
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.______________
线索词：daybreak, woke up
设计情节：如何在森林里度过
如何获得救援
与本文较为契合的主题为：爱
场景描写、动作描写、心理描写
动作描写、心理描写、对话
主题升华(对话、心理描写)
Step 3 writing (using the linking words)
Para 1: But no more helicopters came and it was dark. There was nothing but silence. Jane was extremely frightened and missed her husband, Tom. She couldn’t help crying. However, having a deep breath, Jane kept picking her way bravely. Jane concentrated all efforts on walking down along the stream. To her great joy, she eventually reached an open area. Feeling a little uneasy, she fell asleep.
Para2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. The sun shone lightly. Jane stayed at the open area patiently to wait for others’ help. Two hours later, the helicopter which she had seen yesterday caught her eyes. Jane took off her yellow blouse to flag them and yelled out to make the helicopter notice her.
Fortunately, the helicopter noticed her and came closer, finally landing at the open area. Her husband, Tom, got out of the helicopter. Surprised and overjoyed a great deal, Jane held him tightly and told him how much she loved him. At the moment, the mountain was filled with love.
How to complete a narrative article
Step one: thorough reading who; when; where; what; why; how
Step two: logical plotting the behavious, the feelings, the given two sentences, reasonable ending
Step three: vivid writing linking words, details
获得高分的写作技巧
Tip 1: 故事要围绕着主要人物展开。
Tip 2: 详细刻画角色及其情感。
Tip 4: 使用恰当的修饰词以使描写更加生动。
Tip 3: 使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更有连贯性。
Tip 5: 做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。
Tip 6: 确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。
Notes
用一般过去时！用一般过去时！用一般过去时！
以文章中的人物为主
写作篇幅：每段平均75个词，大概6句话
写作时间不超过30mins
要有观点输出
Practice 2
Winners Never Quit
1I had been swimming competitively for five years but after such a long time, I was ready to quit. I was often the only African American at the swimming competitions and our team couldn’t afford good uniforms. However, my number-one reason for wanting to quit was that I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions(荣誉奖)”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a shelf full of “Honorable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up.
2One summer’s day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to tell my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. After I told her, she looked me in the eye and said, “Baby, remember these words. ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit’. Your grandmother didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear ” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am.”
3The next day, we arrived at the swim meet late, which meant that I missed my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older 17/18 age group. I knew she didn’t think I could win; she just didn’t want me to have taken such a long drive to get here for nothing.
4As I mounted the board, all the other girls looked at me. I realized that these girls were here to do one thing — beat me! All of a sudden, my grandma’s words rang in my head. “Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine.” “Yes, grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours,” I said to myself.
Paragraph 1:
SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. ___
Paragraph 2:
It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me.
Step 1 Read for information
who I, grandma, coach, other girls
when the swim meet day
where swim meet
why I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions”
I was quiting the swim team
“You swim like you are a grandchild of mine”
late.15/16 age group→17/18 age group
第一、三人称
一般过去时
Step 2 Read for the logical plotting
behavious feelings
para.1 ready to quit, kept receiving, lose heart
para.2 told afraid
para.3 arrived late, missed, allowed to swim nervous
para.4 mounted, realized, beat, swim, said determined
Step 2 分析续写的开头语，理顺逻辑关系
SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before.
线索词：swam harder
It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me.
线索词：heard, claps and cheers
Step 2 设计情节
第一段：比赛过程
比赛结果(赢了)
第二段：coach, other girls, grandma对我的称赞
我的感想
与本文较为契合的主题为：不放弃
动作描写、心理描写
动作描写、对话
主题升华(心理描写)
合理发展
Step 3 writing (using the linking words)
SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. However, the girls swam faster than me. Halfway through the race, I already began to feel tired. At that moment, I remembered my grandma’s words, “Quitters never win and winners never quit.” I sped up to keep swimming and used every last bit of strength to swim the last 50 meters. As soon as I touched the wall, I looked up at the screen, waiting anxiously for the result.
It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. I could hardly believe it — my name was at the top of the list! My coach ran to me and hugged me tightly when I got out of the water. I did win my first real trophy that day. Everything felt like a dream as I stood on the winner’s podium, weeping tears of joy. Back at home, I delightedly replaced the “Honorable Mentions” on my shelf with the new trophy. “Yes. Grandma, you’re right. Quitters never win and winners never quit.”
Thank you.

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