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课题：高中英语读后续写（三）
高三英语
专题十八：2020省模拟考
读后续写之再回首
为什么再回首省模考读后续写？
典型性，代表性，考查方向
结合阅卷体会，分析存在问题，提出个人建议
原题重现
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times when I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes. As he had yellow spots on his eyes we called him Spotty. He would have been a stray (流浪) dog, until he came to me.
I was seven years old. My dad had just got a new job in Nasik. We had moved into a rented house. It was raining very heavily on the day we moved.
It was a cold dark night. We had our meal and went to sleep. Somehow in the midnight I heard some strange sounds outside the main door. I gathered courage and looked out through the window and I was really amused with what I saw outside.
There was a small puppy lying on an old doormat which my mother had put outside the door. It was wet and trembling. At first it was difficult to see the lite one. It was the yellow spots on its eyes that made me realize its presence.
It was trying to get under the doormat to avoid the cold air outside and it had managed to get in as I could see only its head outside the doormat. Was it sick or injured
I felt pity for the poor soul. I went in and came out with an old towel. I went near the innocent one and held it in my hand and wiped the puppy till he had become dry. I took him into my room and made a bed for him with a woolen blanket and a small pillow. He seemed very healthy and comfortable in his new bed as he went to sleep immediately.
The next morning, everyone in the family came to know about the unusual guest“Shall we keep him with us " I questioned my mom.
Like any other parents would, my parents first tally refused my idea but my sister and I convinced them to keep Spotty.
Slowly Spotty got on with everyone and became one of the family members.
Para. 1：One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg.
Para. 2: Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly.
续写步骤
第一、精读原文，把握核心，理清线索。
记叙文的六要素：when、where、who、what、
why、how
故事的两条线：情节线和感情线
Story
Who
What
Where
When
I, Spotty, parents,
sister
a cold dark night,
the next moring
my home
I saw a stray dog and
kept him with us. He
became a family member.
Main idea:
On a cold night, a stray dog appeared outside the main door,and I helped to warm him. The next day, my sister and I convinced our parents to keep him.Spotty became our family member.
要素
Beginning
Climax
Ending
I helped him
Process
A stray dog appeared outside the main door
？
We moved into a rented house.
We kept Spotty and he became our family member.
pitiful
nervous and worried
excited and satisfied
feelings
情节线和情感线
续写步骤
第二、分析段首句，预测故事发展，谋篇布局。
以原文结尾为起点，分析给出的两段开头，进行构思，合理预测结局。（抓关键四点）
Paragraph 1:
One day, Spotty returned from his daily walk with a broken leg.
Paragraph 2:
Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly.
1. What happened to Spotty and how did I feel
2.What did my family do with his broken leg
3. Did he recover completely
1.What happened to Spotty and What did my family do this time
3.What were my feelings at last
2.What kind of ending would you prefer for the story
Analysis for the plot developments
What kind of ending would you make for this
story
原文开头句：
Though it is one of the faded memories of my life today, there are times when I remember his face clearly, especially his eyes.
结尾句：
？
A sad and regretful ending......
续写步骤
第三、列出要点，拟写草稿。
第四、修改润色全文，梳理整合，丰富表达、妙笔生花。
范文：Days passed on and one evening when Spotty returned from his long walk, he appeared very exhausted. He came to my room and sat near me. It was then that I saw his hind leg was injured and was bleeding. I called out my mother and she quickly tied a bandage around his leg and gave him food to eat. I was very upset. But the next day, Spotty was up to his usual pranks though he limped a bit. After this incident my relation with Spotty became more intense. I really admired him a lot for his courage.
Almost a year later, one midnight we heard Spotty barking breathlessly. We came out and saw that he was barking continuously heading somewhere. After some time Spotty became quiet. I patted him on his back and came inside. The next day morning, my heart skipped a beat when I didn’t see Spotty. I searched for him in each and every corner but he was nowhere. And this time he had gone and would never come back. I cried and waited for him. We waited for one long week. But there were no signs of him. Then one day my Dad got transferred to Mumbai. We shifted back to Mumbai. What would have happened to Spotty Would he have died These were the only questions in my mind, but they all remained unanswered forever.
省模考续写存在问题
1.从内容方面来看，内容创新不够，平淡无奇。
既然是故事，需要一定的情节构思和布局，不要求考生必须出奇制胜，但也需要考生能有较清晰的逻辑思维能力和一定的创造能力，情节合情合理，达到最后的合理收官。这样至少能达到及格档或以上。内容创造奇葩，但能自圆其说，博得阅卷老师眼球，得分会在第四档或以下。
2.从语言方面来看，很多考生仍然基础薄弱，基础词汇和语法运用不恰当，不能用英文传达意义，汉语式英语表达过多，出现一些低级错误，很容易就被打入低分档。
省模考续写存在问题
3.从篇章结构方面来看，续写内容一定不要脱离原文，不少考生构思能力较为欠缺，无法在短时间内理清故事脉络以及写作意图，对所给两段开头语中提供的线索信息没有很好利用，未实现语言交际的目的。
省模考续写存在问题
4.抄袭现象比较严重。
抄袭的情况一般分为三类：抄自续写原文部分，抄自试卷的其他部分（如阅读题），或者之前背诵的某一段文章。由于读后续写的内容连贯性强，抄袭的同学很难浑水摸鱼，往往以零分告终。
省模考续写存在问题
5.整体卷面美观程度有待提高，行文书写体现不出语言美。单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，其对交际的影响程度也会影响得分。
省模考续写常见问题
Summary
Homework
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
It was a small town with fantastic landscapes that attracted a wealth of the rich to live in it. Ming was also attracted to the town. But he had little money, so he rented a cheap house. But what drew his attention most here was those wealthy people. His job was to sell cell phones. But they were not “real” phones.
One day, Ming’s pocket was empty again and wanted to earn money with his tricks. Luckily, there was still a fake phone in his pocket to sell. Soon enough, he spotted a target, a seemingly wealthy middle-aged man. Ming came up to him and smiled politely, saying, “Hey, friend…….” But the man was very alert and asked, “What’s up ”
Ming said to him immediately, “Friend, I have a phone. I bought it at 5,000 yuan. But now I could sell it to you at only 3,000.” The man seemed uninterested and wanted to go away. Ming stopped him and said, “What about 2,000 ” The man was greatly angry and shouted at him, “What do you want to do with me ”
Ming immediately put up a poor face and hugged the man’s legs, crying to him, “Oh, my dear friend! I am selling phones to make a living. Ok, now I will only sell my phone at 1,000. Only 1,000, is it ok ” The man, after seeing this, felt a little bit affected , took out 1,000 yuan to Ming and took the phone away.
After earning 1,000 yuan, Ming went to a small restaurant to have lunch. After eating he handed over a note of 100 yuan to the cashier. The cashier stared at the note for quite a while, as if checking if it was a fake note(假币), and then said to Ming, “Sorry, I could not find the changes for you for the moment. Please wait a minute.” Then he went away. Staying in the restaurant without anything to do, Ming sat at a table and watched TV.
Paragraph 1: The TV was broadcasting a piece of news...
Paragraph 2: The police car stopped before the small restaurant ...
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制作单位：山东省博兴第一中学
录制时间：2020年 2月 22日

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