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高考英语读后续写语篇练习
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——2023广东省广州市天河区二模 帮助贫困家庭过圣诞节
题目分析
读后续写
题目再现
范文呈现
努力方向
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Part 1
题目呈现
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续写原文
Gifts for the poor
Mrs. Susan was mean and bad-tempered. There was no other way to describe her. Just the other day I heard her telling the headmaster that children took too much time in arts. She even said that most of us didn’t understand what we were doing. I left the office feeling very angry.
My anger didn’t last, however. It was December and Christmas was approaching. Excitement filled me right up to the top of my head. I smiled and laughed, singing “Jingle Bells” as we rode home from school.
After dinner, Mom and Dad called me into the family room. I knew what we were going to discuss. Every year for as long as I could remember, we had chosen a family who needed some extra help at Christmastime, and we had taken gifts and food to their house. It was one of our family’s favorite traditions.
Dad said, “It’s time we decide which family to help this year. Do you have a suggestion ” Some years it had been really easy to decide, but this year I couldn’t think of anyone. Dad looked at Mom. “Maybe Mom has a suggestion. Sometimes she notices things the rest of us miss.” Mom smiled. “I do know of someone who needs our help. I think we should help Mrs. Susan.”
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续写原文
I couldn’t believe what I was hearing! “But, Mom,” I protested, “she seems to have plenty of money and she dresses in nice clothes. Besides, she’s really bad-tempered. She doesn’t even like kids. She might even kick our gifts off her porch (门廊). I think we should choose someone else.”
“I know Mrs. Susan has enough money,” Mom said. “I know she isn’t very pleasant to be around. But she was divorced before she moved here. She has three children who have their own children and never come to see her. She is very lonely and unhappy. You see, she never celebrates Christmas. April, you weren’t quite right when you said she wasn’t poor.”
“You mean she’s poor in love ” I asked. “Yes. Sometimes it’s much more painful to be poor in love than it is to be poor in money ”I was quiet for minutes. Then Dad said, “Let’s take a vote.” Dad’ and Mom’s hands went up. Looking at them, I unwillingly raised mine.
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段首句
Para 1：Mom said besides buying her a gift, we should make something by hand.　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
　　　　　　　　　　　　　　
Para 2: With the box in hand, I could feel my heart pounding when ringing Susan’s doorbell.
　　　
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Part 2
题目分析
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点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
情节构建的重点
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续写原文分析
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本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了每年圣诞节，作者和家人会选择帮扶一个贫困家庭。就在今年的圣诞节，妈妈帮助Susan女士，作者是极力反对的，因为她经常说孩子们学习艺术没有用处，同时似乎看起来不太喜欢孩子。在听说Susan虽然有三个孩子，但是没有家人陪伴后，作者同意帮助Susan女士。
续写思路分析
Para 1：Mom said besides buying her a gift, we should make something by hand.
由第一段首句内容“妈妈说除了给她买礼物，我们也应该亲手做些东西。”可知，第一段可描写作者苦思冥想制作礼物和包装礼物的过程。
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续写思路分析
Para 2：With the box in hand, I could feel my heart pounding when ringing Susan’s doorbell.
由第二段首句内容“拿着盒子，当我按苏珊的门铃时，我能感觉到我的心砰砰直跳。”可知，第二段可描写作Susan女士在看到我们到来以及接受、打开礼物时的惊讶表现。
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续写思路分析
续写线索
决定帮扶——制作礼物——赠送礼物——Susan女士接受礼物——Susan女士满怀感激
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续写素材
可用词汇：
行为类
①.系：tie/attach ②.拥抱：hug sb./gather sb. in the arms
情绪类
①.激动：excitement/thrill
②.哭泣：sob/with tears rolling down
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续写素材
可用句型：
[高分句型1]. When I finished all the preparations, my heart was full of excitement. （由连接词when引导时间状语从句）
[高分句型2]. It’s a picture I made myself, which was about Ms. Susan reuniting with her family. （由关系代词which引导非限制性定语从句）
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Part 3
范文呈现
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范文呈现
Mom said besides buying her a gift，we should make something by hand . Reminded by my mother（过去分词作状语）, I spent a long time making a gift and writing some Christmas wishes. I wrapped the gift carefully and put it in a beautiful box. On the top of the box, I tied a bright red bow. Time flowed. When I finished all the preparations, my heart was full of excitement（时间状语从句）. On Christmas Day, my family and I went to Susan's door.
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范文呈现
With the box in hand, I could feel my heart pounding when ringing Susan‘s doorbell. Ms. Susan was so surprised that her jaw dropped when she saw us. I said with great joy, “Merry Christmas! Here’s a present for you, Ms. Susan!”With great gratitude, Ms. Susan invited us in and opened my giftbox. It’s a picture I made myself, which was about Ms. Susan reuniting with her family. She was so excited that she burst into tears and suddenly hugged me in her arms, sobbing（现在分词作伴随状语）, “This is the most meaningful gift I have ever received, and the most unforgettable Christmas I have ever had!”
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范文译文
妈妈说除了给她买礼物，我们还要亲手做点什么。在妈妈的提醒下，我花了很长时间做礼物，写了一些圣诞祝福。我小心翼翼地把礼物包装好，放在一个漂亮的盒子里。在盒子的顶部，我系了一个鲜红色的蝴蝶结。时光荏苒。当我完成所有的准备工作时，我的心中充满了兴奋。圣诞节那天，我和家人去了苏珊的门口。
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范文译文
拿着盒子，当苏珊的门铃响起时，我能感觉到我的心在跳动。苏珊女士非常惊讶，当她看到我们时，她的下巴掉了下来。我非常高兴地说：“圣诞快乐！这是给你的礼物，苏珊女士！”苏珊女士怀着极大的感激之情邀请我们进去，打开了我的礼盒。这是我自己拍的一张照片，是关于苏珊女士与家人团聚的故事。她激动得泪流满面，突然把我抱在怀里，抽泣道：“这是我收到过的最有意义的礼物，也是我有过的最难忘的圣诞节！
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Part 4
努力方向
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高级结构
名词性从句
高级结构
三连动
虚拟语气
形容词做状语
无灵主语
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定语从句
状语从句
（包含倒装句）
强调句
副词做状语
非谓语
（包括独立主格）
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