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生活方式
人与环境
主题语境:生活方式关键词: overweight语篇类型:现象说明
短文词数:266语篇难度:★★★建议时间:22mins
阅读下面短文,根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要
Many people are concerned about the health of children. One big problem is that children are becoming more overweight. Being overweight is a problem that costs money. People are less productive when they weigh too much. They also have more health issues when they are overweight.
One thing that makes people overweight is eating too much junk food. Chips, candy and sugary snacks are called junk food. Junk food is not healthy for people. It can make them overweight. Most junk food contains too much fat and sugar when children have too much fat and sugar in their diets, they can become overweight or even obese.
Teenagers and children eat a lot of junk food. Some studies say that teenagers drink soda every day and eat too much fast food.
The governor of California wants children to be healthier. He held a special summit meeting to talk about the problem. He invited several other health groups, as well as children. He talked to the children about staying healthy. He asked them to exercise more and to stay away from junk food the governor also took a walk with the children. He wanted to show them that exercise can be fun. He asked the students for a commitment to stay health.
The governor also signed a new law. It limits the sale of junk food and soda in school cafeterias Law makershope that this new law will stop children from eating so much junk food. They hope this will help make children healthier in the state.
语言点津
junk food的说法来自葡萄牙语。大约500年前,在葡萄牙语里有一个词junk,意思是“ old pieces of rope(旧日缆绳)”。时间一长,这个词的意思逐渐演变为任何可利用的废弃材料。最后,junk用来指价值不高或根本没有任何价值的东西。于是,人们就称没有多少营养的食物为 junk food
文章来源
本文选自英文网站,原文题目为“ Governor Wants Kids to Eat Healthily”《州长想让孩子吃得健康》,作者不详。
语篇解读
本文是一篇说明文,主要说明了孩子的肥胖问题是吃过多垃圾食品而导致的。解决问题的唯一途径就是远离垃圾食品并且多运动。
难句解读
原文：When children have too much fat and sugar in their diets, they can become overweight or even obese
译文:当孩子们的饮食中含有太多的脂肪和糖时,他们就会变得超重甚至肥胖。
分析:When引导时间状语从句。
笔前点睛
★审题分析
从写作素材来看,本篇概要必须涉及以下几个要点
1.孩子们超重成为许多人担心的问题。
2超重的原因是孩子们吃太多垃圾食品。
3.加利福尼亚州州长开峰会专门讨论孩子的健康问题;他本人以身作则,亲自带孩子进行锻炼
4州长签订新法律来限制垃圾食品。
思路点拨
本文是一篇说明文。本概要应用一般现在时先介绍孩子们的健康问题,然后以一般过去时介绍加利福尼亚州州长为解决孩子们的健康问题而釆取的措施
高分范文
That kids are becoming overweight is a big problem which concerns many people.(要点 1)It‘s known that eating too much junk food makes kids overweight. (要点2)To solve the problem, the governor of California held a special summit meeting, which he invited health groups and children to attend. Not only did he ask kids to stay away from junk food, but he had a walk with them to show that exercise can be fun .(要点3)Furthermore， he signed a new law to limit the sale of junk food and soda in schools.(要点4)(74 words)
★高级语块重要短语
invite sb. to do sth.邀请某人做某事
stay away from远离
concerns (vt.)使….担心
not only…. but also….不但..而且..
高级语块
★高级句型
That kids are becoming overwieht is a big problem which concerns many people(That引导主语从句;which引导定语从句)
It's known that eating too much junk food makes kid overweight(it是形式主语,that引导的从句作真正的主语)
Not only did he ask kids to stay away from junk food, but he had a walk with them to show that exercise can be fun( not only位于句首,其后的句子要用倒装;that引导宾语从
精彩点评
全文要点齐全,叙述有条理,思路清晰,主题突出。
使用了不同的句式和短语,以及衔接上下句的过渡词,语言运用灵活,功底扎实。。
语境演练
These days our society develops rapidly and forces people to rush. It appears that people have got used to being in a hurry. However, it is better for people to take their time and live their life at a slower pace than to hurry to get things done.
阅读短文,根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要
The main reason that convinces us to oppose doing work in a hurry is the possibility of doing wrongs in a rush. When people do their jobs or take actions in a hurry, they cannot make a sound decision and probably regret later. As the saying goes, "Haste makes waste. We should think carefully before making a decision and do our work less quickly. We should not make mistakes by doing work hurriedly. Slowing down the pace of life helps people enjoy their life better. For example, taking a train to some place certainly will take more time than taking a plane. However, taking a train makes people have enough time to get to know a lot of new friends. Besides, it allows people to fully enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way. On the contrary, being in a hurry will make us lose chances in enjoying our life.
Finally, slower life pace provides better healthy conditions for us. As is known to all, taking actions in a hurry bothers people and raises their stress. People think if they are not in a hurry, they will become a loser and that annoys them. Being in a hurry can hurt people both physically and mentally. According to some studies, people who have as lower pace suffer fewer diseases, tend to be happier and live much longer than those whose life is tense, even if the former finish jobs more slowly than the latter.
In short, working quickly will bring about more material benefits to make our society more advanced. However much stress can 't bring enjoyment, friends and health, which are much more important than money and other material advantages. Therefore, take your time and live your life at a slower pace
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高分范文
To live life at a slower pace is better than to live life in a hurry. There are three reasons for this(要点1) Firstly, doing things in a hurry will raise the possibility of making mistakes(要点2) Secondly, being in a hurry will not give people enough time to enjoy their life(要点3) Thirdly, doing things in a hurry raises people's pressure and therefore is bad for their health(要点4) n brief, it is better for people to live life at a slower pace than to live life in a hurry.(要点5)
范文解读
本文是一篇议论文。本文的要点应主要包括以下内容:
一是解释作者的观点:生活节奏慢要比生活节奏快好,有三个原因;
二是将上述提到的个原因当作三个要点分别阐述:
一是做事情匆忙会增加犯错的可能性;
二是匆匆忙忙的生活无法让人享受生活的乐趣;三是做事情匆忙会增加的压力,这对人的健康有害;
最后一个要点是进行总结:简而言之,生活节奏慢要比生活节奏快
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