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Unit 8 Literature
Writing Workshop
A Continuation of a Story
You are going to write a continuation of the story The Last Leaf.
Writing Task
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her.________________________________________
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. _______________________________
Writing Task
Text
analysis
Language use
Plot construction
Principles of continuation writing
1. Consistency of the gist（主旨大意）
2. Consistency of the plot（情节）
3. Consistency of the logic（逻辑）
4. Consistency of the emotion（情感）
5. Consistency of the style（风格）
2. Consistency of the plot（情节）
Plot-related mistakes
1. Not following the given hints when organizing the plot（情节没有跟着文章提示走）
Then vivid memories came flooding back.
Some Ss failed to mention what memories they were.
2. Overuse of dialogues（过度使用对话）
Too many dialogues between the two main characters, Jenny and her mother. As a result, their stories are long and dull.
3. Wrong use of person（人称使用错误）
When I got up at 6 o'clock, I have seen my mother busy cooking in the kitchen every weekday.
Plot-related mistakes
Mistakes in expressions
1. Spelling mistakes（拼写错误）
Clam(calm) Down!
…her mother turely (truly) loves her..
Her mother prepared a lot of snakes(snacks) for her.
The seller smailed(smiled).
Don’t leave me along(alone).
Jenny chocked(choked)
2.Wrong use of collocations（词组搭配介词乱用）
She shared happiness to(with) her mother.
Jenny approached to(/) her mother and hugged her.
She thanked to(/) the seller and left quickly.
Mistakes in expressions
3. Mistakes in part of speech, tenses, voices, etc.（词性、时态、语态）
take a deep breathe(breath)
I want to make an apologize(apology).
Whatever you had met, I will always standing(stand) behind you.
I shouldn’t shouted(shout) to you.
Nobody can heard(hear).
The door wasn’t been(/) closed.
She always remembered the smell of the meal which (was) cooked by her mother.
Mistakes in expressions
Mistakes in expressions
4. Mistakes in sentence structures（句子结构）
Not until did she hear what the seller told her she came to realize that…
So thankful she was that…
When her mother seeing her, she jumped to her feet.
They hugged each other, understood other’s heart.
Mistakes in expressions
5. Chinglish（中式英语）
But she rushed to the kitchen with no words.
You are OK just enough.
Thinking here, Jenny made a decision to apologize to her mum.
Mom is the best person in the world, a man is like
a treasure who has mother.
Wonderful expressions and beautiful sentences
Expressions:
1. Vivid words & various expressions
（生动的词/多样的表达）
2. Verbs in action（表动作的词）
3. Varied sentence patterns（句式多样）
4. Plots corresponding to the given passage（情节紧扣）
5. Proper statement of the theme（主题升华恰当）
1 Read the text again and discuss the questions.
1. What happened in the story
Old Behrman saved a young artist at the cost of his own life.
2. Why did the doctor call “The Last Leaf” Behrman's masterpiece
Without Behrman’s sacrifice, Johnsy wouldn’t have the chance to recover.
3. What was the main thread(主线/线索) of the story
The last leaf is the title, and also serves as the main thread of the story.
Text Analysis
2 Read the last paragraph and brainstorm what might happen in pairs.
1. How will Johnsy feel when she heard what Mr Behrman did for her and that he died for her
Johnsy’s deeply moved and grateful.
2. How will the story end What will happen to Johnsy
Johnsy will become a successful artist and do something to return the favor.
Plot Construction
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. _______________
How did Johnsy feel
What did Johnsy do
What did Johnsy say
She felt moved, heartbroken, grateful…
She went to see Mr. Behrman.
She gave thanks and was determined to succeed.
Plot Construction
Ten years later, Johnsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. ____________
How successful was she
What did Johnsy do to remember Mr Behrman
What did the painting mean
Her works…
She drew the same painting as Mr Behrman did.
Hope.
Plot Construction
Vocabulary for continuation writing
动作：stare at(注视，盯着看), take… aside(把…叫到一旁), claim(声称), in an attempt to do(尝试做某事), raise/lift one’s spirits(振奋某人的精神), hear of(听说), make up one’s mind to do(决心做某事), fetch(拿来；请来), long to do(渴望做某事), slip away(消亡，死去；溜走), hold on(在困境或危险中坚持住), wonder(好奇，想知道)
情绪：be tired of(厌倦), with disbelief(不可置信地), helplessly(无助地)
状态：wet through(湿透的), icy cold(冰凉的)
时序：the next morning, the following day, in the afternoon, the next day
时序表达补充：
all of a sudden突然 early in the morning一大早
one Sunday afternoon一个星期天的下午
the other day = a few days ago几天前 the next/following day第二天
just then = just at that moment 正在那时
after that =later on然后 after a while一会儿以后
in the end/ at last/ finally/ eventually最后
from then on从那以后 surprisingly令人惊讶的是
without hesitation毫不犹豫地 Hearing this, … 听到这个，…
After what seemed ages, … 在过了似乎几年的时间后，…（夸张）
After seemingly a long time, … 在过了似乎很长一段时间后，…
Vocabulary for continuation writing
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and staring at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy couldn’t help crying sadly. Although she was too weak to sit up and move around, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy got out of bed and went downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, Johnsy whispered to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life and I promise that I will continue my painting.”
普通版
Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were widely admired and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. When she opened the window and saw the leaf on the wall, she decided it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had longed to produce. In the painting, a leaf held firmly onto the dry branches in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy smiled broadly. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.
普通版
Tears came to Johnsy’s eyes as she knew what Mr. Behrman had done for her. Looking out of the window and gazing at the last ivy leaf that never moved an inch, Johnsy could not contain herself any longer and broke into tears. In fragile health as she was, she was determined to see Mr Behrman the last time. Supported by Sue, Johnsy struggled out of bed and shuffled downstairs. There was Mr. Behrman, the poor old painter, lying dead in his bed. Holding Mr. Behrman’s hand tightly, Johnsy was too depressed to utter a word. After what seemed like ages, she held back her tears and murmured to the pale face, “Dear Mr. Behrman! It’s you who gave me a second life. I promise that from today on, I will put all my heart and soul into painting.”
高配版
Ten years later, Jonhsy became a famous painter due to her dedication and hard work. Her paintings were highly acclaimed and on exhibition at art galleries all over the world. One day, she returned to Greenwich Village. It was the first time she set her foot in the house after she left ten years ago. When she opened the window and caught sight of the leaf on the wall, she knew it was the right time for her to draw the painting that she had been longing to produce all these years. In the painting, a leaf clung firmly to the dry branches swaying in the icy wind. With the last stroke on the paper, Johnsy gave a broad smile on her face. To her, the last leaf is a glimmer of hope that an old man gave to a desperate girl at the cost of his own life.
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