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高考英语读后续写语篇练习
去山区徒步，成功解救一名路人
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题目分析
读后续写
题目再现
范文呈现
努力方向
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Part 1
题目呈现
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续写原文
Pam Bales left her car and stepped onto the snow-covered Jewell Trail. She planned a six-hour hike through New Hampshire’s Mount Washington State Park. The hike up the lower part of Jewell was pleasant. At 8:30 am, still below the tree line, she took the first in a series of on-the-trail selfies.
Less than an hour later, she took another photo, after she’d climbed into colder air and deeper snows. She made her way across the snow-covered ridge toward Mount Washington. Then she noticed something: a single set of footprints in the snow ahead of her. She’d been following faint tracks all day and hadn’t given them much thought, because so many people climb Jewell Trail. But these, she realized, had been made by a pair of trainers, not suitable for hiking on snow.
By 11 am, Bales was getting cold and decided to abandon her plan. The only thing keeping Bales on Gulfside Trail was the trainer tracks in the sonw. As she fought the wind and heavy sleet (雨夹雪), the tracks made a hard left-hand turn off the trail.
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续写原文
Now she alarmed. She was sure the hiker could get through in the ow visibility and was heading straight toward the challenging trails of the Great Gulf Wilderness. Bales stood there, stunned. The temperature and clouds were in a race to find their lowest point, and darkness was mere hours away. She turned to the left and called out, “Hello!” into the frozen fog.
Nothing. She called out again: “Is anybody out there Do you need help ”
The strong westerly winds carried her voice away. She blew into her rescue whistle. For a fleeting moment she thought she heard someone reply, but it was just the wind playing games with her mind. She stood listening, then turned and walked cautiously in the direction of the single set of tracks. Bales followed the tracks cautiously for 20 to 30 meters. She rounded a slight corner and saw a man sitting motionless.
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段首句
Para 1：When she approached him and said hello, he did not react.
Para 2：After waking the man up, Bales recognized that they had to get out of there soon.
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Part 2
题目分析
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点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
情节构建的重点
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续写思路分析
本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了帕姆·巴勒斯计划在新罕布什尔州的华盛顿山州立公园徒步六小时，不到一小时后，她已经爬进了更冷的空气和更深的雪中。她穿过白雪覆盖的山脊，向华盛顿山进发。然后她注意到了一件事：她前面的雪上有一组脚印。她一整天都在跟踪微弱的轨迹，并没有给它们太多的思考，因为有太多人爬珠尔小道。但她意识到，这些鞋是由一双运动鞋制成的，不适合在雪地上徒步旅行。后来，她在一个小角落，看见一个人一动不动地坐着。
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续写思路分析
Para 1：When she approached him and said hello, he did not react.
由第一段首句内容“当她走近他打招呼时，他没有反应。”可知，第一段可描写巴勒斯救助这名已经失去意识的男子的过程。
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续写思路分析
Para 2：After waking the man up, Bales recognized that they had to get out of there soon.
由第二段首句内容“在叫醒那个人后，巴勒斯意识到他们必须尽快离开那里。”可知，第二段可描写巴勒斯和那名男子一起下山，脱离险境的过程。
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续写思路分析
续写线索
检查——拿出物品给男子取暖——唤醒男子——扶起那名男子——一起下山——脱离险境——感受
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续写素材
可用词汇：
行为类
①检查：check/ examine
②唤醒：wake up/awaken
③努力：struggle to do/make great efforts to do
情绪类
①高兴：happiness /joy
②焦急：anxious/worried
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续写素材
可用句型：
[高分句型1] Taking a deep breath, Bales got closer, checked his pulse and suddenly realized that the man must have passed out. (运用了现在分词作状语和that引导的宾语从句)
[高分句型2] Anxious, Bales struggled to help the man up, supporting his weight and inching along the trail, following the tracks left by her hiking boots. (运用了形容词和现在分词作状语)
[高分句型3] Exhausted as she was, Bales felt a wave of happiness welled up inside.(运用了让步状语从句的倒装结构)
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Part 3
范文呈现
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范文呈现
When she approached him and said hello, he did not react. Taking a deep breath, Bales got closer, checked his pulse and suddenly realized that the man must have passed out. She knew she had to wake him up immediately or the dreadful weather could put him in greater danger. Out of her bag, Bales took a carpet to wrap the man, gave some hot water to him, called out repeatedly and shook him hard. Fortunately, it didn’t take long before the man came to himself.
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范文呈现
After waking the man up, Bales recognized that they had to get out of there soon. The wind kept howling with the heavy sleet driving fiercely, and even worse, darkness began to fall. Anxious, Bales struggled to help the man up, supporting his weight and inching along the trail, following the tracks left by her hiking boots. After what seemed like ages, they finally made it to the foot of the mountain. The man was rushed to hospital immediately. Exhausted as she was, Bales felt a wave of happiness welled up inside.
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范文译文
当她走近他打招呼时，他没有反应。Bales深吸了一口气，走近一点，检查了一下脉搏，突然意识到那个人一定昏过去了。她知道她必须立即叫醒他，否则恶劣的天气会使他处于更大的危险之中。Bales从包里拿出一块地毯把那个男人裹起来，给了他一些热水，反复喊了一声，用力摇晃他。幸运的是，没过多久，这个人就苏醒过来了。
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范文译文
把那个人叫醒后，Bales意识到他们必须尽快离开那里。狂风呼啸，雨夹雪猛烈地刮着，更糟糕的是，黑暗开始降临。Bales焦急地挣扎着扶起这名男子，支撑着他的体重，沿着她的登山靴留下的痕迹，沿着小路慢慢前行。经过似乎很长时间，他们终于来到了山脚下。该男子立即被紧急送往医院。虽然Bales已经筋疲力尽，但她感到内心充满了幸福。
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Part 4
努力方向
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高级结构
名词性从句
高级结构
三连动
虚拟语气
形容词做状语
无灵主语
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定语从句
状语从句
（包含倒装句）
强调句
副词做状语
非谓语
（包括独立主格）
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