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高三新题型读后续写不同主题分析--亲子教育
板块一--例文
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数为150左右。
Arthur was messy. He didn’t try to make messes, but he didn’t try to clean up much, either. There were always small pieces of food on the table when he was done eating. His socks never made it into the hamper (洗衣篮). And he only picked up his toys when Mom threatened to throw them away. Most days, Mom followed Arthur around the house and cleaned up after him. She brushed the crumbs (碎屑) into her hand and threw them away after meals. She picked up his socks and made sure they got washed, dried and folded neatly before going back in the drawer. She often picked up his toys when he left them to do something else.
One day, Mom asked Arthur to pick up his toy trains. “Not right now,” Arthur said. He was reading a comic book. The trains had been on the living room floor since the morning.
“You know what, Arthur I’m not going to ask you again. I’m done cleaning today.” And with that. Mom put her feet up on the sofa and picked up a book to read.
At dinner time, Arthur noticed that there was a big pile of crumbs at his place at the table. Mom’s spot was nice and clean. Arthur didn’t like the crumbs very much. After dinner, Arthur’s feet felt cold. He went to his room and opened his drawer, but the drawer was empty. “Mom, where are my socks ” Arthur called.
“There weren’t any socks in your hamper, so I didn’t wash them,” Mom said. Arthur felt unhappy. Now his feet would be cold, unless he wanted to wear dirty socks from the floor. He decided to stay barefoot.
When it was time for bed, Arthur said good night to Mom and turned to go upstairs. Arthur stepped right on his toy train in his bare feet. “Ouch!” cried Arthur. “That really hurt !”
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However, Mom was still reading and said nothing.
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“Mom ” said Arthur. “Tomorrow can you show me how to do the washing so I can wash my socks ”
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【答案】Paragraph 1
However, Mom was still reading and said nothing. Arthur wasn’t sure if she had heard him or not so he called for help again, but still Mom didn’t come. Then Arthur realized maybe it was he that could solve his problem at that very moment. He quietly picked up the toy train and put it in the box. It only took a minute for him to put the toy away, and now he wouldn’t have to worry about hurting his feet again.
Paragraph 2
“Mom ” said Arthur. “Tomorrow can you show me how to do the laundry so I can wash my socks ” “Of course,” said Mom. “It’s nice to see you begin to learn to take care of yourself. I am always here to do whatever I can to help you become a more independent boy.” Arthur felt better. He didn’t want to wait until the next laundry day to have clean socks again. Maybe being neat wasn’t so hard after all.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。
【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知，Arthur是个不爱整洁的男孩，尽管妈妈说了他很多次，他也不改正，妈妈总是跟在他后面为他整理东西，直到有一天妈妈下定决心要惩罚Arthur，于是不再给他整理东西了。Arthur找不到自己的东西，没有袜子穿，脚还踩到自己乱丢的东西上弄疼了。
续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：然而，妈妈仍然在看书，什么也没说。所以后文应该是讲述Arthur意识到必须自己整理自己的东西了，他悄悄地拿起玩具火车，把它放进箱子里。他只花了一分钟就把玩具收起来了，现在他再也不用担心自己的脚受伤了。第二段开头是：“妈妈？”Arthur说。“明天你能教我怎么洗吗？这样我就能洗我的袜子了。”本段应该写Arthur决心自己洗衣服，妈妈也很高兴他的改变，决定帮助他成为一个更独立的男孩。
最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：call for, pick up, worry about, take care of, after all等高级词汇；宾语从句Arthur wasn’t sure if she had heard him or not so he called for help again, but still Mom didn’t come.强调句Then Arthur realized maybe it was he that could solve his problem at that very moment.等高级句式。
版块二---读后续写精彩词句集锦
表达说话的动词：
speak:说，讲，说话，演说。着重开口发音。say:说，说话。意义非常广泛，是一般用语。着重内容，指连贯的说话。talk:讲，说话。着重说话的动作，而不着重所说的话。它多指两个人或多个人在一起讲话。tell:说，告诉，讲。指把一件事情传达给别人或讲述一个故事等。有连续叙述的意思。chat:闲谈，聊天。多指非正式的，轻松的，愉快的，没有中心地、没有特殊目的地谈话或聊天。含有亲热的意味。
1. gossip:只在后面说人是非，闲谈他人的事情。2. Can you child speak yet 你的孩子会说话了吗？3. He said he wanted to go to town. 他说他想去城里。4. I want to talk to you about an urgent matter. 我想和你谈一件紧急的事。5. Tell me what happened. 告诉我发生了什么事。6. They dropped in for a chat last night. 他们昨晚顺便来闲聊了一会儿。7. You shouldn’t listen to gossip. 你不应该听流言蜚语。
表示笑的动词：
smile:“微笑”。通常指好意的微笑，无声的微笑，如表示亲切、愉快等。laugh:“笑”，“发笑”。指一般的笑。beam:“笑”。指面露喜色，带有笑容的意思。
1. She smiled when she saw me. 她看见我时露出微笑。2. We all laughed loudly when she made a joke. 她说了个笑话，我们都大声笑起来。3. He beamed on his visitors. 他对着客人们微笑。
板块三--能力提升（现学现用）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
No Time
With a broad smile on her lips, 15-year old Sirin rushed to her mom to show off her new painting. But mom raised her eyebrows with eyes wide open, and spoke in an impatient tone, “No time, baby. Right now I am busy with an important talk. Just wait for some time,OK ”
Holding her oil painting, she frowned (皱眉), and then searched for her dad.
“Dad, see what I have done,” Sirin announced aloud in a thrilling voice. Her dad turned around while adjusting his tie, grinned at her, and showed his thumbs up!
Immediately, blowing her two cheeks, Sirin replied angrily, “Dad, you haven’t seen it yet.”
He smiled at her saying, “No time, baby. I will see it later.” He just patted her back lovingly, kissed her forehead, and rushed for his office.
She was not a kid to be pleased with simple gesture or smile. She stood there for a few seconds,and then stormed off to her own bedroom. Hot air was blowing from her nostrils (鼻孔); her face turned into apple red. She threw the painting on the table, slammed (把……砰地关上) the door and threw herself on her bed.
“Why is everybody so busy ” She recalled thousands of incidents that hurt her in pre-school, middle school and even in high school too! She assumed at least her own family members would give some values to her thoughts, but they were no exception. Unconsciously, her eyes were filled with tears.
The knocking sound on the door put a sudden brake to her thought. Her mom was calling her for dinner. Sirin deliberately came late to join them. She kept silent and didn’t look at anyone, scratching the table mat with her nail. Her mom was puzzled at the unusual behavior. Suddenly, the morning incident clicked in her mind. Softly, she asked, “Honey, did I do anything wrong ”
Para 1: At this very moment, Sirin could no longer resist her anger.__________________
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Para 2: When back from school the next day, Sirin was surprised to see her beautifully-decorated paining on the wall______________________________________________________________
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【答案】At this very moment, Sirin could no longer resist her anger. “Why is everybody so busy ” she roared, tears streaming down. She assumed that her mom and dad would feel proud of her great talent, would appreciate her painting but she was disgusted with everybody having “no time” for her. “I hate you!” She screamed, grabbed the painting on the table and tore it in half. Shocked, mom threw her arms around her tightly, announcing regretfully and firmly, “Baby, I am so sorry! I promise this mistake will not be repeated.”
When back from school the next day, Sirin was surprised to see her beautifully-decorated painting on the wall. It was beautifully framed and just below the painting, it was written “We are so proud of you, our little angle!” On seeing it, she burst out crying. She ran to her mom and hugged her tightly as well, fully aware of her mom’s love. Recalling her mom’s stress from work and daily life, she was regretting her previous behavior. She ducked her head, apologizing, “Sorry, mom!” It dawned on them that though everything came and went, mutual understanding would stay forever in their family.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达属于读后续写。
【详解】1.认真读懂所给提供的材料：15岁的瑟琳嘴角挂着灿烂的笑容，跑到爸爸妈妈面前炫耀她的新画作。但是爸爸妈妈并没有给予真正的关注和欣赏，而是不耐烦地表示没有时间。这让瑟琳非常地生气。
2.根据第一段首句At this very moment, Sirin could no longer resist her anger.(此时此刻，瑟琳再也无法抑制自己的愤怒)可以围绕瑟琳开始发泄自己的愤怒展开构思；根据第二段首句When back from school the next day, Sirin was surprised to see her beautifully-decorated painting on the wall.(第二天从学校回来的时候，瑟琳惊讶地看到墙上挂着她装饰得很漂亮的画)可以推知，爸爸妈妈可能意识到她们忽略了她的感受，所以把她的画装饰的很漂亮，并挂在了墙上。第二段可以围绕瑟琳与爸爸妈妈的进一步交流展开构思。
3.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。
【点睛】范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如独立主格结构“Why is everybody so busy ” she roared, tears streaming down.形容词作状语、非谓语动词及宾语从句Shocked, mom threw her arms around her tightly, announcing regretfully and firmly, “Baby, I am so sorry! I promise this mistake will not be repeated.”让步状语从句It dawned on them that though everything came and went, mutual understanding would stay forever in their family.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。

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