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Week 4
个人成长＋恐惧篇
Wednesday
巧学续写微技能
5R 弄清信息点
when
where
who
what
the day of the big cross-country run
the scene where the big cross-country run
would take place
David,I ,the school's coach
患有脑疾的大卫参加越野跑比赛，在学校里没有同学认为这有什么不妥，他只是比其他人慢一点完成训练的内容而已。但是在比赛当天，大卫担心其他学校的学生会取笑他，他决定放弃
1R Read for the characters
I
a special education teacher
David
determination; perseverance
coach
David couldn't walk or run of his brain like a normal child because of his brain disease.
David participated in all the activities
in the school together with other kids.
David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish
gave David the choice to run or not run
classmates and students from other schools
时间线
情感线
the big cross-country run
Students were warming up and walking the route
David was standing by himself off to the side by a fence
I asked David and the coach the reason
I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.
续写部分
David hesitated and then said he had decided not to run
He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing.
Read for plots and emotional changes
1、What was the problem？
David hesitated whether to run or not.
2、How did it come about
David couldn't walk or run like a normal child because of his brain disease.
At school his classmates
thought of him as a regular kid.
There were participants from other schools .So the coach gave David the choice to run or not.
On the big day David hestitated and told me he had decided not to run .
Read for conflict and theme
theme: 战胜自己、身残志坚；个人成长
捕捉和对应原文续写点
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
续写部分细节描写可衔接处
the problem
捕续写点 妙照应衔接
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
续写第一段劝说情节部分可衔接处
续写第一段可衔接的David 不参加比赛的原因：害怕被嘲笑
I bit back my frustration (懊恼). I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
续写部分比赛过程David跑步动作细节描写可衔
接处
暗示David会参加比赛
暗示David会参加比赛，而且会坚持到最后，跑完全程，只不过花的时间要久一点
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer -that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
续写部分劝说情节可衔接处：determination
续写部分劝说情节可衔接处：perseverance
所给首句是做好衔接的重要依据
注意：
Read the 2 given sentences 推续写情节
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
David wouldn’t
look at me.
衔接1：不愿意看我的肢体动作表现：
He lowered his head and wriggled his hands.
情节2： 作者如何安慰并鼓励大卫继续完成比赛
情节1： David的动作描写
衔接2： David决定参加比赛
内疚？不甘？或其他？
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
David moved up to the starting
line with the other runners.
劝说成功
衔接3：接着描写比赛开始的场景
情节1：David赛跑动作的描写，同学们和其他观众的反应
情节3：比赛结果+观众的反应
情节2：中途是否遇到困难？
结尾： 大卫比赛感受+升华主题：战胜自己的勇气和决心
情感细节描写：尴尬、激动、高兴
神态细节描写： 添加神态描写表现David的尴尬、犹豫
动作细节描写： 用肢体动作描写David赛跑过程中的具体动作
比赛场景和观众的反应描写
添加细节描写
续写第一段 （侧重描写肢体动作、难过的情感，并添加人物对话描写）
1.他低下头，扭动着双手。
He lowered his head and wriggled his hands. (两连动词，肢体动作）
2.大卫很受鼓励，他深吸了一口气，鼓起勇气，“我会试一试的。”
①David was inspired, so he took a deep breath and gathered his courage, “I will give it a try”. (两连动词+对话）
②___________, David took a deep breath and gathered his courage, “I will give it a try”. (形容词作状语+两连动词+对话）
Inspired
续写第二段 （侧重描写肢体动作并利用场景描写烘托比赛气氛）
3.赛跑的信号一响，除了大卫之外，赛跑者们像子弹一样飞奔而去。
As the signal to run ignited, runners shot out like bullets, except David. （明喻）
4.其他学校的观众的目光落在了大卫身上。
The eyes of the audience from other schools ________upon David. （无灵主语句）
5.他努力往前跑，小小的身子随着奔跑的节奏摇晃着。
①He struggled to run forward, and his small body rocked with the rhythm of his run. (肢体动作，并列句）
②He struggled to run forward, with his small body ________ with the rhythm of his run. （with复合结构）
fell
rocking
6.同学们纷纷出现在赛道上，热情地为他加油, “加油！你能做到！ ”
①Classmates all appeared on the racing track, and cheered for him enthusiastically， “Come on! You can make it! ” （双连动作+副词，对话描写）
②Classmates all appeared on the racing track, _____________________ him enthusiastically， “Come on! You can make it! ” （分词短语作状语）
7.最后，尽管大卫是最后一个，但他在热烈的欢呼和掌声中，胜利地举起双臂冲过终点线。
①Finally, though he was the last one, David raised his arms in triumph as he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause. (肢体动作+场景描写）
②Finally, ______________________________, David raised his arms in triumph as he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause. （省略句）
though the last one
cheering for
观众反应描写
The crowd applauded, whooping and whistling.人群报以热烈的掌声、欢呼声和口哨声。
The audience cheered and clapped.观众又是喝彩又是鼓掌。
The audience burst into wild applause.观众爆发出热烈的掌声。
To the thunderous cheers and applause, David crossed the finish line with tears of pride and excitement spilling out of his eyes.
在雷鸣般的欢呼声和掌声中，大卫满含骄傲和兴奋的泪水冲过终点线。
a good ending
主题升华句
人们被他的毅力深深打动，这是体育精神中最宝贵的东西。
People were deeply moved by his _________________ and it was the dearest thing in sportsmanship.
大卫一如既往地露齿一笑：“谢谢你，你让我意识到，如果为我的目标而努力，我总会成为赢家。”
David cast his usual ___________________ and said," Thank you, you made me realize I'd always come out a winner if I wanted something badly enough to work for it."
big toothy smile
perseverance
衔接原文最后一段的细节描写
与特定细节的衔接
与特定细节的衔接

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