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爱狗牵线搭情缘
（2022·全国甲卷完形改编）
【写作任务】
阅读下面的材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
You can tell a lot about a man by how he treats his dogs.
For many years, I enjoyed living in a tiny condo （公寓） with enough rooms for only me and my dogs, Tilly and Chance. Their companionship was nearly enough to keep my loneliness at bay. Nearly.
Last year, I started dating, but with reservations. My first date with Steve was in a bookstore-coffee shop in Boulder, Colo. He had arrived early and was camped at a corner table with a half-empty cup of black coffee and three newspapers. His beard was trimmed, his smile genuine. His age wasn't a problem but his status as a lifelong bachelor seemed like a red flag.
Then， I learned Steve had a dog, Molly, and a cat, Flora, both adopted from the same humane society where I had volunteered. While I was thrilled that he was an animal lover, I worried that three dogs were perhaps too many for one family, and that my dogs might attack Flora, the cat. A first date was surely too soon to be thinking about such things, but I was alert when it comes to worrying, sniffing out every potential problem. After an hour, Steve and I walked to a restaurant for lunch. We were actually enjoying each other's company so much. We agreed to have dinner that night, and then reluctantly parted.
Driving home, I felt greatly relieved for having met someone who shared my interests and seemed to like me. But I still had doubts in mind. Most of the men I had dated were looking for women who were Olympic-level skiers, or at the very least with slim, muscled bodies. Back then I was not a slim kind, my free time devoted to books and animals. I was used to seeing a date's disappointment upon first seeing me.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
One day, we walked our dogs together.__________
It seemed that his giving water to the dogs made us closer.__________
【写作思路】
一审——审要素
When & Where For many years, I enjoyed living in a tiny condo （公
寓）.→Last year, I started dating, but with reservations.
Who I，my two dogs—______ and Chance， _______ and his
dog—Molly, and a cat—______
Tilly
Steve
Flora
What My ___________ with Steve was in a bookstore-coffee shop
in Boulder, Colo.→We were actually __________ each other's
___________ so much, we agreed to have dinner that night,
and then ____________ parted.
Why Driving home, I felt _________________ for having met
someone who ________ my interests and seemed to like me.
How ___________→__________→thrilled; worried; ______;
____________→_________；________
first date
enjoying
company
reluctantly
greatly relieved
shared
loneliness
genuine
alert
reluctantly
relieved
doubt
续表
二定——定主题：正能量原则
Theme You can tell a lot about a man by how he _______ his dogs.
三推测——两步段首句定发展：三衔接原则
（一）标出段首句的关键词
第一段：One day, we __________________ together.
第二段：It seemed that his ___________________________ made us
_______.
treats
walked our dogs
giving water to the dogs
closer
（二）基于三衔接原则：利用复现、代词指代及过渡衔接词三大方法做好衔接。
①根据第一段的段首句可知，有一天“我们”一起遛狗。第一段应描写：史蒂夫（Steve）对待狗的态度——&4& 友善&5& 恶劣。
②根据第二段的段首句可知，史蒂夫给狗喂水的行为让“我们”更加______。
结合第一段遛狗的场景可知，是因为天气&6& 热&7& 冷导致狗口渴，而“我”肯
定__________。第二段应描写：“我们”情感&8& 疏离&9& 加深的过程。根据整
篇文章的主题可知，最终“我”和史蒂夫&10& 分手&11& 结婚。
此处为开放性写作，需要指出事情发生的原因。最有可能的原因是他们一
起照顾____。
亲密
没有带水
狗
③由此可推测第一段的结局：史蒂夫给&12& 自己&13& “我”的狗喂水。第二段结
局：史蒂夫向“我”______。 “我们”还有“我们”的____条狗和一只猫，
__________地生活在一起。
求婚
三
和谐快乐
四构思——每段三个微情节原则
第一段 ①“我”____________
带着
没带水；
②天气______，温度______，“我”十分______“我”的狗；
③史蒂夫建议______，并用手捧着____让“我”的狗喝
★动作链：上升 vi._____→被浸透_________________→倾；倒
v.______→爱上；倾心 _________________
★心理描写：担心的 adj.____________________；尴尬的
adj.______________
炎热
飙升
担心
休息
水
rise
be soaked with
pour
fall in love with
concerned/worried
embarrassed
第二 段 ①开放性写作：“我”的狗蒂莉因做手术需要______；
②史蒂夫主动提出____________________，最终“我们”相处
______；
③史蒂夫向“我”______，以____来对待狗的人也将是“我”终身的
伴侣
★动作链：移除 v._________→相处得好________________→恢复
v._________→求婚 v.__________
★心理描写：怀疑 n.________；和谐的 adj._____________；高兴
n.________
照顾
和“我”一起照顾她
融洽
求婚
爱
remove
get along well
recover
propose
doubt
harmonious
delight
五遣词造句——连词成句，连句成文
（1）高级词汇及语块
①_______ n. 汗水
②______________ adj. 尴尬的
③______ v. 倾；倒
④______ v. （心跳）加速
⑤_______________ v. 发生
⑥_________ v. 移除
sweat
embarrassed
pour
race
occur/happen
remove
⑦________ n. 怀疑
⑧__________ n. 绷带
⑨_________ v. 恢复
⑩__________ v. 求婚
____________ n. 同伴
_________________ 被浸透
_______________ 喘不过来气
doubt
bandage
recover
propose
companion
be soaked with
out of breath
______________________________ 担心
______________ 吭声
_________________________ 单膝下跪
________________ 看到
________________ 相处得好
_________________ 让……高兴的是
be concerned/worried about
utter a word
get down on one knee
at the sight of
get along well
to one's delight
（2）find+宾语+宾语补足语
然而，我很快发现，在烈日下，气温迅速上升。
However, I soon ______________________________________ under the
burning sun.
（3）“too...to...”意为“太……而不能……”
我很担心我的狗，但因为这只是我们的第二次约会而不好意思开口。
I was concerned about my dogs but _______________________________
as it was just our second date.
found the temperature rising quickly
too embarrassed to speak up
（4）“be doing...when...”意为“正在做……这时……”
我正在挣扎，这时史蒂夫建议休息一下。
_______________________________________________________
（5）独立主格结构
看到这一幕，我心跳加速，我开始爱上他了。
At the sight of this scene, __________________, I began to fall in love
with him.
I was struggling when Steve suggested having a rest.
my heart racing
（6）强调句型
就在那时，史蒂夫再次提出要和我一起照顾她。
__________________________________________________________ with
me.
（7）v.-ing作状语
渐渐地，三条狗和猫相处得很好，形成了一个和谐的群体。
Gradually, the three dogs and the cat got along well,
_____________________________.
It was then that Steve again offered to take care of her
forming a harmonious pack
（8）和开头呼应的结尾
那个用爱对待他的狗和我的狗的人最终成为我一生中最好的伴侣。
______________________________________________________________
turned out to be the best companion in my life.
The man who treated both his dog and my dogs with love
六成文——誊写清晰，字迹工整
One day, we walked our dogs together.__________
It seemed that his giving water to the dogs made us closer.__________
One possible version：
One day, we walked our dogs together. It was a short walk and I hadn't brought any water for them. However, I soon found the temperature rising quickly under the burning sun. We were soaked with sweat and the dogs were out of breath. I was concerned about my dogs but too embarrassed to speak up as it was just our second date. I was struggling when Steve suggested having a rest. Before I could utter a word, Steve got
down on one knee. He poured water from a bottle into his hand and offered it to my dogs. At the sight of this scene, my heart racing, I began to fall in love with him.
It seemed that his giving water to the dogs made us closer. What occurred next removed my doubts. Tilly had an operation on her leg. Just seeing the bandage on her leg made my chest tighten. It was then that Steve again offered to take care of her with me. With time going by, Steve and I made a good
team caring for Tilly. Gradually, the three dogs and the cat got along well, forming a harmonious pack. When Tilly finally recovered, much to my delight, Steve produced a little box with a ring and proposed to me. The man who treated both his dog and my dogs with love turned out to be the best companion in my life.
再次回读原文，并积累以下高级词汇、语块、亮点句型及高级结构
1.______ v. 对待
treat
2.________________ n. 陪伴；情谊
companionship
3.___________ n. 孤独
loneliness
4.____________ n. 疑惑
reservation
5.______ v. 修剪
trim
6.__________ adj. 真诚的
genuine
二次语篇精析
7._______ n. 状态
status
8.__________ n. 单身汉
bachelor
9._______ v. 收养
adopt
10.____________ adv. 不情愿地
reluctantly
11.______ v. 分别
part
12.______________ 远离
keep...at bay
13.____________ 危险信号
a red flag
14._________________ 保护动物协会
humane society
15.独立主格结构
（1）他的胡子修剪得很整齐，笑容真诚。
His beard was trimmed, ___________________.
his smile genuine
（2）那时我不是一个苗条的人，我的空闲时间都被用于看书和饲养动物。
Back then I was not a slim kind,
______________________________________________.
my free time devoted to books and animals
16.while引导让步状语从句+并列的宾语从句中第二个that不可省略
虽然我很激动——他是一个动物爱好者，但我担心三条狗对一个家庭来说
可能太多了，我的狗可能会攻击猫——弗洛拉。
_____________________ that he was an animal lover, I worried that
three dogs were perhaps too many for one family, and
_____________________________ Flora, the cat.
While I was thrilled
that my dogs might attack

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