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A Mother’s Day Surprise
A Practical Guide
to
English Continuation Writing
读后续写解题指导
试题文本
2
解题指导
3
4
范文赏析
目录
CONTENTS
1
导入
5
续写思路及评分标准
01. Leading in（导入）
01.Leading in（导入）
1. Would you give a gift(礼物) or surprise to your mother on Mother’s day
2. What kind of surprise you plan for Mother’s Day.
3. Let’s read a story— A Mother’s Day Surprise
02. 试题文本
A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jema found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jef turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jef to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear！The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
注意：1.续写词数应为150左右：2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
Paragraph 2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
自主学习检测
词 块 检 测
1.decided to boil the porridge_______
2.put some rice into a pot of water_______
3.broke two eggs into a plate_______
4.put two slices into the egg mixture_______
5.turned on the second stove burner_______
6.heat up the frying pan____
7.started frying the bread_______
8.threw the burnt piece into the sink_______
9.steam shooting out of the pot_______
10.the lid starting to shake_______
11.turned off the gas quickly_______
12.continue to cook the rest of the porridge______
13.touched the hot burner_______
14.caught the smell of burning_______
决定煮粥
放一些大米到水壶
打二个鸡蛋到盘子
放2块面包到鸡蛋混合物中
打开第二个火炉燃烧器
加热煎锅
开始烤面包
把烧焦的面包块扔进水槽
注意到蒸汽从锅里冒出来
盖子开始摇晃
快速关掉煤气
继续煮剩下的粥
触碰热炉子
闻到了烧焦的味道
03. 解题指导
文体：记叙文人称: 第三人称
时态：一般过去时
文章大意：本文以母亲节的惊喜为线索展开，讲述了一对双胞胎在母亲节给妈妈送上一份惊喜的感人故事。双胞胎打算亲自做一份美味的早餐献给妈妈，但不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在爸爸的帮助下，他们成功做好早餐并将其献给亲爱的妈妈。
明线：A surprise
暗线：love between families
I.文本解读
II. Read for elements(读懂大意，定六要素和主旨要义)
读后续写原文基本是记叙文，而记叙文主旨要义通常有六要素，即：时间、地点、人物、事情的起因、经过结果。而且文章主题句一般在文章开头段。
Read for elements(定六要素，主旨要义)
Jenna & Jeff (twins), mother, father
At home
At 6:00 am in the morning
The twins wanted to surprise their mother on Mother’s Day.
The twins planned to cook breakfast for their mother
续写内容(待定)
The twins wanted to surprise their mom on mother’s day, so they were preparing the breakfast but it was mess and burned the finger.
III.Read for plots and feelings(定故事情节和情感线)
故事情节定为四部分，分别是主要情节的开头(beginning)、主要情节的发展阶段（development），主要情节的高潮（climax）和结局（ending），结局也就是我们的续写部分。
The twins planned a breakfast and they thought they knew the job.
The porridge became a mess and the second bread turned black.
Continuation para.2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up…
Continuation para.1: Their father appeared….
The beginning went well until the first piece of bread got burnt.
Excited; confident
Fine; under control
Panicked; Lost confidence
Happy; relieved
Sense of achievement
climax
Read for plot & feelings
beginning
ending
IV.细读首句，构思框架
仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。
续写:
Para1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
Para2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
负能量
正能量
反转
在父亲的助攻下,早餐顺利做好了
母亲非常惊喜!
[段首句]决定故事走向
不随意添加新人物
[段首句]决定故事走向
负能量---转---正能量
V.Read for continuation writing(研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，增加细节，定续写内容)
定续写内容是在前面“二定”对文本理解的基础上，对续写开头语利用主谓推进式进行研读，以开头句主谓内容为基础,在原文寻找线索，以问问题（问问题从语言、动作【五官，肢体等】、心理或周围环境角度出发）的形式寻找续写内容的切入点。
①.研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节
Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
承上：
思路1(心理）：How did father feel on seeing the mess
思路2（语言）：What would their father and the twins say when their father appeared
思路3（动作）：What did their father do when he knew the plan
思路4（动作）：How did their father help the twins
原文（最后一段）：The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. … But the stove was a mess now. … Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. … Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
厨房一团糟!!!
①.研究所给首句，寻找原文线索，构思情节
承上：
思路5（动作）：What did the twins do to cheer up their mother 思路6（动作、面部表情等）：How did their mother react and feel when she saw the breakfast
思路7：How did the twins feel What did they understand and realize from this incident
原文细节2:
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.
原文细节3:
But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.
Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.
主线任务是庆祝母亲节!!!
Jeff 小可爱的小手手被烫伤了.
②.遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容
Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
思路1(心理）：How did father feel on seeing the mess
思路1+ 思路2+ 思路3+ 思路4
(看到一片狼藉的厨房):父亲双手叉腰,眉头紧皱, 从他的表情判断,很明显他…
Skill1+skill2:
面部+肢体语言Judging from sb’s voice/ eyes/ expression/ behavior, it was evident that sb was trapped in + 情绪名词. (情绪外露)
从某人的声音/眼神/表情/行为判断,很明显他陷入了…
His eyebrows narrowed and his hands rested on his hips. Judging from his expression, it was evident that he was about to exploded after seeing the mess.
②.遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容
Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
思路2（语言）：What would their father and the twins say when their father appeared
思路1+ 思路2+ 思路3+ 思路4
“Oh dear, I thought it was your mother here in the kitchen, anyway, what are you doing here
“Oh, Daddy, today is Mother’s Day, we just want to prepare a French breakfast for mum, but...
运用直接引语，增加表达的生动性
②.遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容
Para.1 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
思路1+ 思路2+ 思路3+ 思路4
了解情况后, 蹲下来安慰, 给拥抱/拍肩膀, 说…
Having done…
主+谓语1, 谓语and 谓语3
思路3（动作）：What did their father do when he knew the plan
思路4：How did their father help the twins
Having learned their plan, he knelt down, patted them on their shoulder/ gave them a big hug and comforted, “Time is on our side. Let’s do it together”.
1. They started the battle once again.
2. They cleaned up the mess, cooked the porridge and toasted the bread once again.
运用分词短语作状语描写人物动作，提高语言的丰富性
动作链:主+谓语1, 谓语and 谓语3
②.遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容
Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.
思路5+ 思路6+ 思路7
思路5（动作）：What did the twins say to cheer up their mother
基础版: They said ：” Happy mother’s day, mummy!”.
黄金版: "Happy Mother's Day! A big surprise for you!". They yelled in chorus, their eyes twinkling with excitement
yell的使用及眼部动作的描写，独立主格的运用，描述了孩子们送给妈妈早餐时非常兴奋的心情。
②.遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容
Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.
思路5+ 思路6+ 思路7
思路6（动作、面部表情等）：How did their mother react and feel when she saw the breakfast
基础版: 1.When mom saw the breakfast, she was moved to tears.
2.She tasted the breakfast, praised the kids and gave them a hug.
黄金版:
1. The moment mom saw the breakfast, her eyes widened up and twinkled with joy.
2.Deeply touched, the mother said thank you and she tasted the perfect sandwich as well as the porridge, saying that it’s the biggest surprise she has received. So shocked and delighted was she that she hugged the twins tightly, tears of joy welling up in her eyes.
the moment引导从句，非谓语动词V-ed,v-ing 的使用，使语言表达多样化；so+adj.部分倒装的使用，更突出了母亲的的喜悦，tightly使动作描写更加生动。
面部表情描写使故事更打动人。
②.遣词造句、增加细节，定续写内容
Para.2：The twins carried the breakfast and woke their mother up.
思路5+ 思路6+ 思路7
思路7：How did the twins feel
虽然很累, 但是他们都非常开心和自豪
although/though/as
Exhausted / Worn out as/ though they were, their hearts were filled with nothing else but joy and pride.
As/though 引导让步状从的倒装
完美结局，主题升华
房间里充满爱,多么美好的惊喜啊!
The sun was shining on the proud mother’s face through the windows. What a beautiful and sweet surprise!
感叹句的使用
VI.高级句型
1.在父亲的指导下，他们采取了积极的行动，重新开始。(运用固定搭配)
Under the guidance of their father, they took positive actions and started all over again.
2.父亲帮助他们调整火候，这是成功的关键。(运用非限制性定语从句)
Father helped them adjust the fire,which was the key to success.
3.孩子们听从爸爸的指令，小心翼翼地把火打开，重新把面包放进锅里。(运用非谓语动词结构)
Following their father’s instructions, the children carefully turned on the fire and put the bread into the pot again.
4.妈妈一句话也没说，笑得很灿烂，把双胞胎搂在怀里。(运用名词动化)
Speechless, Mother smiled a bright smile and took the twins into her arms.
5.看到厨房里乱糟糟的场面，父亲惊讶地皱起了眉毛。(运用短语修饰动词)
Seeing the mess in the kitchen, Father raised his eyebrows in surprise.
VI.高级句型
6.他惊讶地发现面包躺在地上，而Jeff看上去也是一副狼狈模样。 (运用宾语从句)
He was surprised to find that the bread was lying on the ground.
and Jeff was like a drowned mouse.
7.妈妈睁开眼睛，她发现孩子们正站在床边，用期待的目光看着她。(运用非谓语动词结构)
Opening her eyes, Mother found the children standing on the edge of the bed watching her with eyes full of hope.
8.爸爸没有慌张，相反，他冷静地环顾厨房，心中已有了主意。(运用介词短语)
Instead of panicking, Father calmly looked around the kitchen with an idea in his mind.
9.一切都解决了，爸爸离开了厨房，答应为他们保守秘密。(独立主格，非谓语V-ing动词结构）
Everything settled, Father left the kitchen, promising to keep their secret.
10. Jeff手里端着早餐，心依然像小鹿乱撞一样，不禁加快了脚步。(运用明喻)
Jeff held breakfast in his hand with his heart still popping like a deer and quickened his pace.
04.参考范文
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. His eyebrows narrowed and his hands rested on his hips. Judging from his expression, it was evident that he was about to exploded after seeing the mess. To their relief, having learned their plan, he knelt down, patted them on their shoulder and said, “Time is on our side. Let’s do it together”. Without the slightest hesitation, they cleaned up the mess, cooked the porridge and toasted the bread once again. Before long, armed with the experience of failure and an extra helping hand, the breakfast was ready, giving off pleasant smell.
2021年新高考I卷读后续写范文赏析
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. Happy Mother’s Day!” yelled the twins. “ a big surprise for you!”Their father laughed heartily and told her that the twins had prepared breakfast for her. So shocked and delighted was she that she hugged the twins tightly, tears of joy welling up in her eyes, “Thanks， my dear kids.” Her face lit up with happiness. She tasted a piece of French toast and said that it was the best breakfast she had ever had. Love filled the whole room. What a beautiful and sweet surprise!
2021年新高考I卷读后续写范文赏析
so…that,倒装
独立主格
生动的语言
感叹句
总结：读后续写（母亲节的惊喜）解题指导
05.续写思路及评分标准
05 续写思路及评分标准
1、写作思路
(1) 基本情节：
前文大意：本文以母亲节的惊喜为线索展开，讲述了一对双胞胎在母亲节给妈妈送上一份惊喜的感人故事。双胞胎打算亲自做一份美味的早餐献给妈妈，但不幸的是，他们连连失败，后来在爸爸的帮助下，他们成功做好早餐并将其献给亲爱的妈妈。
续写思路：双胞胎正感到失望的时候，爸爸出现了。看到厨房的景象，在得知双胞胎的计划后，爸爸没有责备，安慰他们，主动提出要帮忙。孩子们又变得兴奋起来，帮忙收拾厨房，第一种情况：爸爸熟练地做好了早餐，他让孩子们保守秘密，继续实施他们的惊喜计划，然后自己偷偷回到卧室。第二种情况：双胞胎在爸爸的指导下，姐妹俩亲自为妈妈做好早餐（体现了爸爸的爱和理解）。做好早餐后，双胞胎把早餐端上楼，叫醒了妈妈。妈妈看到早餐既惊奇又感动，爸爸也假装很惊讶。紧紧地抱着孩子们并表示感谢。 使她非常感动的不仅是这个惊喜，还有孩子们对她的爱。孩子们和爸爸也会心地一笑。多么美丽的一个惊喜！
1. 写作思路
(2) 续写要点（建议）：
续写首句核心词：Mother’s Day，the twins, disappointment, their father appeared; the breakfast, woke their mother up
第一段：看着厨房里的一切,爸爸非常惊讶。Jeff告诉爸爸计划, 爸爸没有责备，反而安慰他们，决定帮她们。她们清理了厨房,重新做好了早餐。
第二段：孩子们说:母亲节快乐,妈妈看到早餐, 感动流泪。妈妈品尝早餐,夸赞并拥抱孩子们。
升华:房间里充满爱,多么美好的惊喜啊!
(3) 重点细节：
①爸爸如何帮助双胞胎完成早餐。 ②妈妈看见双胞胎制作的早餐，妈妈的反应及与孩子的互动
05 续写思路及评分标准
05 续写思路及评分标准
2. 评分标准
（1） 评分原则
①给分公平、公正；宽严并济，不能过严或过松；得分有理，扣分有据。
②立意积极、情节合理、语言水平及风格（语言风格与前文一致）、书写美观。
③三个逻辑一致原则：续写部分与所给短文之间的逻辑一致；续写两段内容之间的逻辑一致；续写部分与所给开头语之间的逻辑一致。
（2）评分程序
阅读第1遍：根据续写总体情节及重点内容描写，初步确定所属档次。
阅读第2遍：根据写作语言（修辞、句式，词汇等），确定或调整档次。
阅读第3遍：看词数（少于130个，从总分中扣2分）；看书写（书写及卷面较差的降一档次）。
05 读后续写评分标准
（3）评分档次本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
05 读后续写评分标准
（3）评分档次本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
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