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I was a single mother in my 30s who lived down and out with my daughter Peggy in a small apartment struggling hard to make our ends meet.One day, I headed to the downtown for an interview, I sat down in the streetcar, and there against those seats was a beautiful silk umbrella with a silver handle decorated with gold scrolls, among which there was a name carved.
On impulse I determined to find the owner myself. I got off the street car in the heavy rain and thankfully opened the umbrella to protect myself. Then I searched a telephone book for the name. I found it immediately and called it, waiting patiently, and then a lady answered.“Yes,” she said in surprise, with extreme excitement. “It was my umbrella which had been stolen a year ago.”
So appealing was her pleasure that I forgot I was looking for a job and went directly to her small house. She took the umbrella with teary eyes, explaining with choking voice that the umbrella was given by her parents, now dead. Her happiness at retrieving(找回) this special possession was such that to have accepted her reward would have spoiled something. So I refused her offer and left.The following months were hard.
I can only obtain temporary employment, for a small salary. What was worse, I had just lost my last job before Christmas, with only fifteen dollars left. Unless a miracle happened, I would be homeless in January, foodless and jobless.
l had prayed steadily for weeks, and there had been no answer but this coldness and darkness.The air was full of Christmas merriment, with the bells ringing and children shouting in the bitter dusk of the evening.
But there should be no Christmas for me, I knew, no gifts no remembrance whatsoever.Thinking of this, I couldn’t control my tears on my way home, but I managed a smile so I could greet my little daughter.
She opened the door for me and throw herself in my arms, dreaming joyously and demanding desirably for her Christmas gift. There I stood, frozen overwhelmed by misery.
【2022年9月A9协作体高三暑假返校联考英语试题】
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150词左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: Suddenly, the doorbell rang and Peggy ran fleetly to answer it, calling that it must be Santa Claus.
Paragraph 2: Abruptly, a note attached to one package caught my eyes.
文本分析：
这次故事包含8个自然段。其中第一段交代人物的背景，a single mother, in a small apartment, struglling hard to make our needs meet，此处的single, small, struggle hard to都表明了作者处境的艰难。包括后面的段落中，也有语言形容她的处境，比如第六段中的hard, obtain temporary employment for a small salary, homeless, foodless, jobless。这些语言都刻画了作者的贫穷，生活的艰难，而唯有这种艰难更能衬托出雪中送炭的可贵。
2-5段作者通过一件小事交代了事情的前因，也就是她在若干月前将一把雨伞归还给了一位妇人。此处值得注意的是对于这把精致雨伞的描写，她写道a beautiful silk umbrella with a silver handle decorated with gold scrolls, among which there was a name carved。同时，对于归还伞这件事情，作者用到了on impulse, determined to, thankfully, immediately, patiently, directly等词来刻画她虽然对这把伞心有喜欢，却依然义无反顾地要归还。而对于妇人的失而复得，作者也用到了in surprise, with extreme excitement, so appealing was her pleasure, with teary eyes等来形容妇人的激动和感激之情。
6-8段则是对比了作者的处境和周边的环境。作者的处境异常艰难，她说到the following months were hard, could only obtain temporary empoyment, for a small salary, lost my job, with only 15 dollars left, would be homeless, foodless, jobless, there had been no answer but this coldness and darkness, no Christmas for me, no gifts, no rememberance, couldn't control my tears, there I stood, frozen overwhelmed by misery这些语言描写了一个濒临绝境之人，而周边的环境又造成强烈反差，深深刺痛着她脆弱的神经，她提到the air was full of Christmas merriment, with the bells ringing and children shouting, my daughter threw herself in my arms, screaming joyously, demanding desiraly。处境和环境的对比，作者带给读者的是一种震撼以及对所要发生之事的一种期待。
情节续写：
续写首段的第一句是Suddenly, the doorbell rang and Peggy ran fleetly to answer it, calling that it must be Santa Claus. 关于这段的续写，学生要考虑的是来者何人，结合第二段的首句Abruptly, a note attached to one package caught my eyes, 第一段内容要涉及到一些packages，圣诞节的礼物包裹，投递包裹则很容易想到是个快递员。有人可能会想到那个妇人，妇人是必须要有的，否则前面四段的伏笔就白写了，但是假如是妇人，则让二段中的这张便条note失去了意义。所以这篇续写的情节不难编写，快递员投递包裹——作者难以置信——细看包裹内容——孩子欢呼雀跃——便条交代原委——作者感动落泪——细想当时善举——抒发人生感悟。
主题：
圣诞节是西方文学中必不可缺的主题。皆因为“圣诞”是耶稣的诞生，与之相关的一切文学作品必定环绕着“痛苦与救赎”、“爱与被爱”展开。A9协作体的这篇续写，就是典型的“圣诞”文学。
题眼：
结尾点出了a miracle happened, 是因为miracle这个词是本文的文眼。
下水作:“
Paragraph 1:
Suddenly, the doorbell rang and Peggy ran fleetly to answer it, calling that it must be Santa Claus. The moment she opened the door a delivery man was present with a lot of packages in his hands. He handed over the packages to us and wished a merry Christmas. But I still wonder if he had made a mistake and delivered to a wrong place.The man reread the delivery address carefully and ensured us. Peggy was on the moon and couldn't wait to open the packages one by one. Candies, wine, dolls, clothes...it seemed that Santa presented us all we needed at the moment..
Paragraph 2:
Abruptly, a note attached to one package caught my eyes. The words on the note reminded me of the lady to whom I returned that delicate umbrella several months ago.I was told that she had moved to another city but still thought what I did for her.Therefore, she prepared some gifts in case that we needed. Also, she wanted to express her gratitude for my kindness. Reading this, tears rolled down my cheeks, I felt the air full of merriment, warmth welling up in my heart. One good turn deserves another. On this Christmas, I witnessed a miracle happened.
故事的原文中，我们在结尾可以读到hope。的确，作者身处绝境，妇人的这些包裹给她带去了生活的希望，相信后文会更精彩。
官方范文
Suddenly, the doorbell rang and Peggy ran fleetly to answer it, calling that it must be Santa Claus. Then I heard a man's hearty voice coming and went to the door. He was a delivery man with his arms full of parcels. "This is a mistake", I said, but he read the name on the parcels and they were for me. When he had gone, I didn't know what to do. Subsequently, Peggy and I sat on the floor, looking at each other unbelievably. What a surprise! I searched for the name of the sender.
Abruptly, a note attached to one package caught my eyes. I picked up the note, which read "Thanks for your returning the umbrella. Merry Christmas!" It was the lady who sent us these parcels. Holding the note tightly, I was on the verge of tears, with a stream of warmth spreading across my body. On the chilly Christmas, I forgot I had no money for the rent and only fifteen dollars in my pocket. We just sat in our small apartment unwrapping the gifts one by one in happiness. A sweet peace flooded into me like a blessing, which made me hopeful again.

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