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2024高考一轮复习
读后续写三大问题
Ballet was a way of life in Kelly's family. Her elder sister Serena was now dancing at a top college. Though Kelly's mom always wanted her to follow in her sister's footsteps and Kelly herself was good at ballet, her love for ballet had faded years before, and she was eager for a new challenge.
One day at school, as Kelly left the dance studio, she walked past the gym, fascinated by boxers(拳击手) training inside the boxing ring. She was deeply impressed by how hard they hit and how fast they moved. In fact, she'd long been attracted to boxing.
She pulled a piece of paper from her backpack. On the familiar Oakwood High School Club Sign-up Sheet was the phrase: BOXING CLUB TRYOUT(选拔). That was what Kelly really wanted to do. She knew her mom had high expectations for her when it came to ballet. Tired of trying to keep up with her sister, Kelly was ready to carve her own path.
The next day, she gathered her courage and told Serena about her new passion. At first, Serena didn't understand and thought she was just joking. But when she saw Kelly was serious, she replied, "You know Mom wants you to be a ballet dancer, right Besides, boxing is only for boys, and you're so good at ballet. Lean into your strength, Kelly."
"But this is where I want to put my strength," Kelly insisted," and what exactly does 'only for boys' mean, anyway Boxing is a sport for everyone!"
Gradually, touched by her determination and passion, Serena began to understand and support her. Kelly could feel it. Her sister was going to respect her decision, no matter what. But that was nothing compared to the preparations for the tryout, where she was required to show her footwork and punching(击打) abilities with other candidates. Boxing didn't come natural to Kelly, but she had made up her mind to stick with her choice.
Para1 Then Kelly began her training for the tryout, keeping it a secret from her mom.
Para2 The following Monday, results of the boxing tryout were posted.
问题一：把握不住续写剧情，写作没有线索。尤其第二段写不出剧情，或者只能写一大段感悟。
续写考的是一个故事，情节是第一需要抓住的重点。再华丽的句子那叫锦上添花。拿到一篇范文，第一反应不应该是背诵华丽的辞藻，而是先分析他的情节是怎么一步一步发展来的，他的逻辑衔接是怎么样的（也就是行文思路）。
基本方法：续写第一段构思情节的起承转合:
第一句：通过将自己定位成某个人，根据这个心情去推理接下来的剧情(起)
第二句：另一个角色对于这个反应做出的回应(承)
第三句：往第二段剧情开始靠，进行转场(或者转折)
①通过逻辑，转换到下一个场景(However、something changed等等)
②对上文的一个总体性评价(等于完结了一件事。就可以讲下一件事了)
③继续写另一个人的反应
以上面例题为例，第一段可以怎么写？
第一句：通过将自己定位成某个人，根据这个心情去推理接下来的剧情(起)
第二句：另一个角色对于这个反应做出的回应(承)
第三句：往第二段剧情开始靠，进行转场(或者转折)
第四句：往第二段剧情开始靠，进行转场(或者转折)
下定决心通过选拔（心情），Kelly挥汗如雨在训练拳击（也许会受伤）
姐姐Serena看到后，受打动（心情）一直在帮助支持妹妹（请教练，陪伴）
被姐姐鼓励着（心情），Kelly练得怎么样？（对上文一个小总结）
（通过逻辑，转换到下一个场景转场），描写选拔当天表现怎样
问题二：第二段的升华，拿不准，升不对，或者硬背名人名言。
①这篇文章的升华可以是什么？
Tired of trying to keep up with her sister, Kelly was ready to carve her own path.
You know Mom wants you to be a ballet dancer, right Besides, boxing is only for boys, and you're so good at ballet. Lean into your strength, Kelly."
1.坚持自己的梦想
2.打破偏见和质疑
②不同的升华，第一段的情节会是一样的吗
当然不是，情节是为主题服务的。
如果是升华1，我们可能会写
如果是升华2，我们也能会写
她挥汗如雨在训练拳击，受到挫折（受伤等）也不退缩
她走进训练场，发现只有她一个女孩，其他选择选手的嘲笑和轻视等
如果挑选升华2，第一段的情节会调整成？
第一句：想证明she could excel in a sport that was not traditionally associated with girls (心情)，她于是非常努力
第二句：训练场的男孩，看不起一个新手姑娘（心情），嘲笑她
第三句：尽管被轻视（心情），Kelly练得怎么样？（对上文一个小总结）
第四句：转场，描写选拔当天表现怎样
综合问题一和问题二，读后续写文章的合理剧情怎么找？
1. 读原文，确定怎么升华（文章主题），从而可推出与主题相关的情节
2. 根据起承转合基本方法，构思第一段完整的情节
3. 第二段前半部分情节（升华之前）可以重复起承转合基本方法。
Para 2 The following Monday, results of the boxing tryout were posted.
第一句：很紧张忐忑，Kelly看到自己的名字在名单上。太开心了，就蹦了起来跳了起来
第二句：姐姐也看到了，激动地拥抱Kelly，说…
第三句：妈妈得知此事后，会….
第四局：升华

Para 2:
1. Extremely nervous and expectant, Kelly cautiously scanned the sheet, eventually catching sight of her name at top of the list. With springing to her feet immediately, the diligent girl let out a loud scream.
2.Having spotted the scene by her side, Serena hugged her tightly with the proud sparkle radiating in the eyes.“Now let's go to tell our mum all the story.”she added.
3. After getting home, though her mom was initially hesitant about her new pursuit, she preferred to feel proud to see her daughter grow up with fulfillment and happiness.
4. Actually,for Kelly, the real reward was not a position/place as a boxer(加入试训队) but an opportunity to prove to everyone that she could carve her own path with efforts，love and support.
问题三：续写动作描写，心理描写到底该怎么写，怎么写长，怎么写具体。
首先明白一个立场，心理描写的具体一定是建立在能够促进突出主线剧情的前提下的，是否能为主线服务。比如，下面三句心理描写，哪一个最好？
①Seized by a surge of sadness, she couldn’t help crying bitterly
②Upon hearing the bad news, she felt seized by a surge of sadness and couldn’t help crying bitterly.
③Upon hearing the bad news, although tears was rolling down her cheeks, she still rushed to....
每篇文章150词，每段7，80词左右，你要花将近20个词，写一个心情或环境的描写，那你必定会压缩写故事情节的句子。
①He stood in silence, tears of grievance springing up in his cheeks.
②With tears of grievance springing up in his cheeks，he stood in silence, resolving to do....which made.....（心情只是主人公做某一各动作的原因，是动作的陪衬）
所以，好的心情描写应该是心情+心情产生的动作+主线剧情
那动作描写呢？一个字，拆！把一个动作拆成一个动作链(A，BandC)。
比如一个上出租车的动作 he got into the car
拆成：拦下车，上车，告诉司机目的地。
He hailed a taxi, got into it and told the driver her address.
再比如，he threw the meat at the wolf写成he pulled out the meat, aimed at the wolf and threw it straight to the fierce animal.
或者用上having done 句型，Having pulled out the meat, he aimed at the wolf and threw it straight to the fierce animal.
这是单一动作描写，那如何构成动作面？可以进一步加上肢体和面部的细节描写。或者写出心理+心情的原因+完整的动作链。
1.Although tension swept over me, a freshman, I tried my best to stay calm and handed out plates of food to those in need,with my hands trembling.
2.Although tension swept over me (情绪) who was a freshman，I tried my best (动作1)to stay calm and hand out plates of food to those in need (动作2) , my hands shaking.(肢体细节)
注意：并不是高级词汇的堆叠才能拿高分，但是表达有效且具体，剧情流畅连贯自然，逻辑自洽，且扣题，句式不要太单一。
干货小技巧：
①高三要用到的高级词汇或表达替换
say, believe, think --------figure, hold the view that, assume that, I am convinced that
improve------promote，enhance, strengthen
never give up--------stick to it, insist on doing，persist in, adhere to
should---------be supposed to do，It is wise/sensible/ makes sense to do，nothing could be better than.
It's worthwhile to do，deserve doing, find it rewarding and enjoyable to do. . .
Like--------have a passion for, be fond of, fall in love with，have an affection for
Come------approach, around the corner, up-coming
Make------enable, allow
Thank------appreciate, be grateful to, convey my heartfelt thank to sb,
Help-------do sb. a favor, go/come to one 's aid, with the assistance of，give sb. an aid
Use-----gain access to, be accessible to
more and more popular---increasingly popular
big----enormous，tremendous
very-----extremely, remarkably, overwhelmingly, pretty, perfectly
famous-----accomplished, have a high reputation，distinguished
good-----amazing, unbelievable, incredible
bad----disgusting, awful, terrible
important----significant, vital, essential, fundamental, crucial
all kinds of-----a variety of, various，diverse
about------concerning, relevant, related
② 一.避免主语重复
1.主语同义替换
Jack----The adj boy----He
2.主语并不一定是人或者词汇(主语从句)
I want to do something------What I want to do is doing
He likes playing basketball------What he likes is playing
Helping my parents with some housework enhances the relationship(加强关系) between my family members.
What enhances the relationship(加强关系) between my family members is helping my parents with some housework
二.将句子写长
1.加各种定语从句
Jack likes playing basketball
主语位置加定语Jack who is a handsome boy likes playing basketball
Jack who is a handsome boy likes playing basketball, which relaxes him very much
2.加同位语
Jack ,a handsome boy ,likes playing basketball
4.加非谓语动词
I decide to help my parents with some housework to release/ease/lessen/reduce their pressure.
I decide to help my parents with some housework to release/ease/lessen/reduce their pressure，which I think is of benefit to enhance the relationship between my family
③读后续写最常见错误表达。
以下是错误写法:
1. Hearing the news, a wave of frustration rushed over me.
2. Ashamed and guilty, tears were streaming down my cheeks.
3. To my surprised, my mom didn't blame me.
4.I was wild with joy, a wide smile spread over my face.
5. [常见错误单词]
hesitation/occurred/lowered/beginning/sorrow的形容词/fear的形容词/ashamed的另一个形容词和名词/sigh/breath/excitement/regret/ moved/ murmured/
whispered/stammered/nervous/uneasy/guilty/apologize/catch/desperate/afraid/thought/shake.
6. Overwhelmed by a sense of delighted, my heart was violently wildly.
7. Not until then did I realized that xXX..
It was not until then that did | realize that XXX..
Not until then did | aware of xxx..
8. So frustrated I was that xxX..
9. Cathing sight of my mom arrived at home,I was scared to death.
10. can/will.
11. I could do nothing but sank myself onto the ground.
12. The moment my mom hearing the news, she burst into crying.
The moment hearing the news, she burst into tears.
13. With holding my breath, I quietly stared at my son on the stage.
14. Being surprised to see him injured, I called out with anxiety.

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