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【读后续写原题目（含解析）】
Nature, while beautiful,（短句的魅力） could also be unpredictable and merciless.（暗示下文我们迷路） But most importantly, we bear in mind that in the darkest times, there's always a light at the end of the tunnel（主题句，要心怀希望，方能砥砺前行）, just like Mrs.Evans' cabin light.（下文一定要出现的帮助我们解决问题的人物）
大自然虽然美丽，但也可能是不可预测和无情的。但最重要的是，我们要记住，在最黑暗的时刻，隧道尽头总有一线光明，就像埃文斯夫人的小屋灯一样。
词汇拓展：
at the mercy of任由…摆布（注意完形填空考察）
bear in mind牢记于心
One bright summer day, my friend Peter and I decided to venture into the unexplored trails of the Great Smoky Mountains. Blessed with（与应用文equipped with拥有，结构类同） rich biodiversity and fascinating landscapes, the national park seemed a perfect getaway（度假胜地。takeaway外卖）. Little did we know that（小小的部分倒装） our casual hike would soon turn into an unexpected personal incident, forever engraved in our memories（铭刻在我们的记忆中，可应用在续写最后一句）.
在一个阳光明媚的夏日，我和朋友彼得决定去大烟山的未开发小径探险。拥有丰富的生物多样性和迷人的风景,国家公园似乎是一个完美的度假胜地。我们万万没想到，这次不经意的徒步旅行很快就变成了一件意想不到的个人事件，永远铭刻在我们的记忆中。
相信读到这里你会和笔者一样好奇，大烟山是怎样一座山呢？
风景优美，物产丰富，怪不得我与Peter前去探险。下面继续进入解读：
We set off early in the morning, equipped with our backpacks and a map that was supposed to guide us through the winding trails. The sun was up, casting long shadows on the forest floor as we set off on our journey. We trekked(艰难行走，读后续写课花样“走”那课讲过),laughed, and marveled at（动作链，三联动） the beauty of nature around us.
我们一大早就出发了，背着背包，带着一张本该指引我们穿过蜿蜒小径的地图。太阳升起来了，在森林的地面上投下长长的影子，我们开始了我们的旅程。我们徒步旅行，开怀大笑,惊叹于我们周围的大自然之美。
As we trekked through the dense forests, taking in the natural wonders around us, we couldn't help but feel a sense of adventure coursing through our veins（脉搏）. The trail was rugged and uneven, but we persevered through the challenging landscape.
当我们徒步穿过茂密的森林，欣赏周围的自然奇观时，我们不禁感到一种冒险的感觉在我们的血管里流淌。这条小路崎岖不平，但我们在充满挑战的风景中坚持了下来。
Midway through our expedition, we stumbled（我们一般知道的意思是蹒跚而行，这里指偶然发现） upon a breathtaking waterfall, its glistening waters cascading down the rocks in a quiet and peaceful melody（环境描写，暗示下文一定要出现在我们的续写中）. We sat down by the water's edge,taking a moment to get lost in the beauty of nature. The cool mist from the waterfall enveloped（无灵主语） us,and we felt refreshed and energetic.
在我们探险的中途，我们偶然发现了一个令人惊叹的瀑布，闪闪发光的水沿着岩石倾泻而下，发出安静而平和的旋律。我们在水边坐了下来，沉浸在大自然的美景中。瀑布上凉爽的雾气笼罩着我们，我们感到神清气爽，精力充沛。
As the day wore on, we ventured deeper into the wilderness, eager to explore every comer of this natural paradise. We were so absorbed in the beauty of nature that just didn't notice our way and it seemed that we could not find the way back to the familiar part of the forest.
随着时间的流逝，我们向荒野深处冒险，渴望探索这个自然天堂的每一个角落。我们沉浸在大自然的美景中，只是没有注意到我们走的路，似乎我们找不到回到森林中熟悉的地方的路。
Panicking（adj做状语）, we scrambled to find our way back but the dense vegetation and winding trails only served to confuse us further. We tried to remember any possible signs that might lead us back. No sooner had we（倒装句） celebrated our return to the clear trails than something worse happened.
我们慌慌张张地想找回去的路，但茂密的植被和蜿蜒的小路只会让我们更加困惑。我们试图记住任何可能带我们回去的标志。我们刚庆祝回到了清晰的小路上，更糟糕的事情就发生了。
Paragraph1: Suddenly, the weather took an abrupt turn.
第1段：突然，天气发生了变化。（两个突然，暗示情况糟糕）
Paragraph2: Just when we were about to give up, a faint light flickered in the distance.
第2段：就在我们快要放弃的时候，远处有一束微弱的光在闪烁。（应当有首段的Evan太太出现了）
【情节梳理】
主要人物：
“我”；同行的朋友Peter；Mrs.Evans埃文斯太太
视角：第一人称
原文情节线：
我与友决定徒步旅行，冒险探索大烟山的未知小径——在森林中感受到了自然的美丽和神奇——在探险途中，发现了一个令人惊叹的瀑布，停下来欣赏大自然之美——随着时间推移,迷路了，无法找到回去的路，开始感到恐慌。
主题：
人与自然。面对不可预测挑战时的恐慌和希望。（让笔者联想到了浙江高考的北极熊拍摄、夫妻森林吵架）。传达了自然的美丽，但也强调了自然的无情和不可预测性。（正如首段所言，再次强调其重要性）在困难时刻，存在希望和光明，就像文中提到的埃文斯夫人小屋传来的“light at the end of the tunnel”，是希望之光。
【范文解析与拓展评价（必读）】
Suddenly, the weather took an abrupt turn. 环境描写：Dark clouds shrouded（覆盖。不会使用的同学可用替换词blanket，也是一样的） the sky, and a heavy downpour ensued（继而发生。不会使用的可用following by下雨 。也可加上结果，使我们drench浸湿。之前讲过的balmy breeze惬意的和风也可用进去，变成biting bitter wind刺骨寒风，sent a tremble to my spine（脊柱））. The comforting forest sounds quickly turned into（与原文协同，turn into，突出变化） a terrifying symphony（交响乐） of thunder and wind. The trail（利用好原文出现的“小工具”，trail来增添描写和环境渲染，突出自然之变。之前积累过的环境描写thunder rumbled, with lightning streaking across the sky, adding to our fear.tree groan呻吟等也可用上） that was once so clear became a muddy mess, making it impossible to continue（与下文首句“快放弃了”照应）. We tried to consult our map, but it was too late; we were lost in the wildness.（也可这么写 we clung（仅仅抓住） to each other and plodded（沉重地走） our way, searching for any shelter to shield us为下文出现光做铺垫） Hours passed, and our attempts to find the trail proved to be in vain（徒劳）. With the cold creeping in（creep in续写高频好词，几乎每次都会出现。无灵主语描写环境，人爬上床等动作都可以使用）, despair started to set in.
Just when we were about to give up, a faint light flickered in the distance. Curiosity overpowered our fear（情绪描写的好句，建议积累）, and we decided to follow it. As we drew closer,（衔接必不可少） we saw a small log cabin（首段对Evan太太房子的描写）,lights shining from its windows. Knocking on the door（非谓语）, an elderly woman, Mrs. Evans,welcomed us with a warm smile. She was a retired ranger（护林员） who had chosen to live her twilight years（暮年。很形象的表达。影视剧小马宝莉中的紫悦twilight sparkle暮光闪闪以及暮光之城the twilight saga都可推断出） in the heart of the mountains. She offered us sielter（庇护所） for the night, and the next morning,guided us back to the main trail（“小工具”：路，再度出现）. This incident strengthened our friendship（我与友的友谊小主题。应用文增进友谊promote/strike friendship） and taught us the value of resilience（恢复力） and hope. The experience was unexpected, terrifying, but enlightening all the same（与首段对大自然的描写形成呼应。也可与首段最后一句进行呼应：
In that moment, we came to understand that even during the bleakest of times, there indeed existed a light at the end of the tunnel, which guided us safely through the unpredictable and merciless nature.

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