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“失而复得”的猫
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表达积累
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原文分析
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续写扩展
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续写赏析
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“Mom!” I screamed as I looked through the window, “Why is my Ink Spot sitting in Mrs. Cleary’s window "
Mom pushed past me to confirm it. Sure enough, across the street was Ink Spot cleaning himself in the window of Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room. I couldn’t believe my eyes. He was my cat, not Mrs. Cleary’s. She had already adopted ten cats. Why must she keep my cat I could feel anger boiling up inside me. Meanwhile, Ink Spot’s leaving without any signs upset me. A sense of being left out hit me hard.
Ink Spot was special for me. After my baby sister’s birth, “my” parents’ time was taken by her. It seemed no one in the family cared about or even noticed me. Worse still, I was packed off to a kindergarten. I hated being left out from the bottom of my heart.
It was when mom noticed me weeping in a corner one night that things began to change. After that, Ink Spot came into my life. Every night, he curled (卷曲) up beside me in bed and he was there for me after school when I raced home just to be with him.
I fell in love with Ink Spot the first time I saw this tiny black and white kitten, for which I called him Ink Spot. Mom and daddy beamed with pleasure as my eyes danced with joy again. It was the first time that I had smiled since my little baby sister came into the family. As for me he was more than a cat. Actually, he was my life.
But today when I came home, Ink Spot was in Mrs. Cleary’s window. I wanted him back. But mom insisted that if Ink Spot stayed at Mrs. Cleary’s, that meant it was where he wanted to be. “No! Mom, Ink Spot is my cat!” I protested wildly but I had to admit the truth of mom’s words. Standing on the sidewalk, I was at a loss as to what to do. Staring at Ink Spot for a while, I couldn't stand the anger any longer.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
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原文分析
“Mom!” I screamed as I looked through the window, “Why is my Ink Spot sitting in Mrs. Cleary’s window "
Mom pushed past me to confirm it. Sure enough, across the street was Ink Spot cleaning himself in the window of Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room. I couldn’t believe my eyes. He was my cat, not Mrs. Cleary’s. She had already adopted ten cats. Why must she keep my cat I could feel anger boiling up inside me. Meanwhile, Ink Spot’s leaving without any signs upset me. A sense of being left out hit me hard.
Ink Spot was special for me. After my baby sister’s birth, “my” parents’ time was taken by her. It seemed no one in the family cared about or even noticed me. Worse still, I was packed off to a kindergarten. I hated being left out from the bottom of my heart.
It was when mom noticed me weeping in a corner one night that things began to change. After that, Ink Spot came into my life. Every night, he curled (卷曲) up beside me in bed and he was there for me after school when I raced home just to be with him.
I fell in love with Ink Spot the first time I saw this tiny black and white kitten, for which I called him Ink Spot. Mom and daddy beamed with pleasure as my eyes danced with joy again. It was the first time that I had smiled since my little baby sister came into the family. As for me he was more than a cat. Actually, he was my life.
But today when I came home, Ink Spot was in Mrs. Cleary’s window. I wanted him back. But mom insisted that if Ink Spot stayed at Mrs. Cleary’s, that meant it was where he wanted to be. “No! Mom, Ink Spot is my cat!” I protested wildly but I had to admit the truth of mom’s words. Standing on the sidewalk, I was at a loss as to what to do. Staring at Ink Spot for a while, I couldn't stand the anger any longer.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
如何快速梳理故事情节线与情感线？
Tip 1:找时间线索，
时间的变化带
来情节的发展
Tip 2:找地点线索，
地点的变化带
来情节的发展
Tip 3:找逻辑关系词，
逻辑的变化带
来情节的发展
“Mom!” I screamed as I looked through the window, “Why is my Ink Spot sitting in Mrs. Cleary’s window "
Mom pushed past me to confirm it. Sure enough, across the street was Ink Spot cleaning himself in the window of Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room. I couldn’t believe my eyes. He was my cat, not Mrs. Cleary’s. She had already adopted ten cats. Why must she keep my cat I could feel anger boiling up inside me. Meanwhile, Ink Spot’s leaving without any signs upset me. A sense of being left out hit me hard.
Ink Spot was special for me. After my baby sister’s birth, “my” parents’ time was taken by her. It seemed no one in the family cared about or even noticed me. Worse still, I was packed off to a kindergarten. I hated being left out from the bottom of my heart.
It was when mom noticed me weeping in a corner one night that things began to change. After that, Ink Spot came into my life. Every night, he curled (卷曲) up beside me in bed and he was there for me after school when I raced home just to be with him.
I fell in love with Ink Spot the first time I saw this tiny black and white kitten, for which I called him Ink Spot. Mom and daddy beamed with pleasure as my eyes danced with joy again. It was the first time that I had smiled since my little baby sister came into the family. As for me he was more than a cat. Actually, he was my life.
But today when I came home, Ink Spot was in Mrs. Cleary’s window. I wanted him back. But mom insisted that if Ink Spot stayed at Mrs. Cleary’s, that meant it was where he wanted to be. “No! Mom, Ink Spot is my cat!” I protested wildly but I had to admit the truth of mom’s words. Standing on the sidewalk, I was at a loss as to what to do. Staring at Ink Spot for a while, I couldn't stand the anger any longer.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
I found my Cat Ink Spot cleaning himself in Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room
Ink Spot comforted me during the lonely tough time.
I was at a loss what to do.
annoyed, sorrowful
Lonely, sad
At a loss, angry
happy
Read for plots
Background
Rising action
Climax
Falling action
Ending
Since my baby sister’s birth, I felt lonely and sad. But Ink spot was brought to comforted me
I found my Cat Ink Spot cleaning himself in Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room

Analyze the Plot and Emotion
I was at a loss what to do.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
“Mom!” I screamed as I looked through the window, “Why is my Ink Spot sitting in Mrs. Cleary’s window "
Mom pushed past me to confirm it. Sure enough, across the street was Ink Spot cleaning himself in the window of Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room. I couldn’t believe my eyes. He was my cat, not Mrs. Cleary’s. She had already adopted ten cats. Why must she keep my cat I could feel anger boiling up inside me. Meanwhile, Ink Spot’s leaving without any signs upset me. A sense of being left out hit me hard.
Ink Spot was special for me. After my baby sister’s birth, “my” parents’ time was taken by her. It seemed no one in the family cared about or even noticed me. Worse still, I was packed off to a kindergarten. I hated being left out from the bottom of my heart.
It was when mom noticed me weeping in a corner one night that things began to change. After that, Ink Spot came into my life. Every night, he curled (卷曲) up beside me in bed and he was there for me after school when I raced home just to be with him.
I fell in love with Ink Spot the first time I saw this tiny black and white kitten, for which I called him Ink Spot. Mom and daddy beamed with pleasure as my eyes danced with joy again. It was the first time that I had smiled since my little baby sister came into the family. As for me he was more than a cat. Actually, he was my life.
But today when I came home, Ink Spot was in Mrs. Cleary’s window. I wanted him back. But mom insisted that if Ink Spot stayed at Mrs. Cleary’s, that meant it was where he wanted to be. “No! Mom, Ink Spot is my cat!” I protested wildly but I had to admit the truth of mom’s words. Standing on the sidewalk, I was at a loss as to what to do. Staring at Ink Spot for a while, I couldn't stand the anger any longer.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
Read for Characters
I :
Mrs. Cleary :
sensitive, lonely, straightforward, cat-loving,
Caring,
kind-hearted
“Mom!” I screamed as I looked through the window, “Why is my Ink Spot sitting in Mrs. Cleary’s window "
Mom pushed past me to confirm it. Sure enough, across the street was Ink Spot cleaning himself in the window of Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room. I couldn’t believe my eyes. He was my cat, not Mrs. Cleary’s. She had already adopted ten cats. Why must she keep my cat I could feel anger boiling up inside me. Meanwhile, Ink Spot’s leaving without any signs upset me. A sense of being left out hit me hard.
………
I fell in love with Ink Spot the first time I saw this tiny black and white kitten, for which I called him Ink Spot. Mom and daddy beamed with pleasure as my eyes danced with joy again. It was the first time that I had smiled since my little baby sister came into the family. As for me he was more than a cat. Actually, he was my life.
But today when I came home, Ink Spot was in Mrs. Cleary’s window. I wanted him back. But mom insisted that if Ink Spot stayed at Mrs. Cleary’s, that meant it was where he wanted to be. “No! Mom, Ink Spot is my cat!” I protested wildly but I had to admit the truth of mom’s words. Standing on the sidewalk, I was at a loss as to what to do. Staring at Ink Spot for a while, I couldn't stand the anger any longer.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
Read for conflicts
1.My favorite seemed to abandon me and settle in Mrs. Cleary’s
house.
2. I argued against Mrs. Cleary for my cat.
Themes
故事的主题：误会化解，找回爱猫
原文分析
原文分析
故事概要：看到我的小猫跑到 Mrs. Cleary’s 家，我很生气也很伤心，有一种被抛弃的感觉。于是我怒气冲冲去她家，准备要回我的猫。
“Mom!” I screamed as I looked through the window, “Why is my Ink Spot sitting in Mrs. Cleary’s window "
Mom pushed past me to confirm it. Sure enough, across the street was Ink Spot cleaning himself in the window of Mrs. Cleary’s sitting room. I couldn’t believe my eyes. He was my cat, not Mrs. Cleary’s. She had already adopted ten cats. Why must she keep my cat I could feel anger boiling up inside me. Meanwhile, Ink Spot’s leaving without any signs upset me. A sense of being left out hit me hard.
………
I fell in love with Ink Spot the first time I saw this tiny black and white kitten, for which I called him Ink Spot. Mom and daddy beamed with pleasure as my eyes danced with joy again. It was the first time that I had smiled since my little baby sister came into the family. As for me he was more than a cat. Actually, he was my life.
But today when I came home, Ink Spot was in Mrs. Cleary’s window. I wanted him back. But mom insisted that if Ink Spot stayed at Mrs. Cleary’s, that meant it was where he wanted to be. “No! Mom, Ink Spot is my cat!” I protested wildly but I had to admit the truth of mom’s words. Standing on the sidewalk, I was at a loss as to what to do. Staring at Ink Spot for a while, I couldn't stand the anger any longer.
Para 1：I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
Analyze language
少量的对话描写
部分心理描写
根据语篇协同性原则：
续写部分应该有少量对话描写与适当的心理描写
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续写扩展
What did I say to Mrs. Cleary
P1: I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Para2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
What was Mrs. Cleary’s reaction when she heard what I said
Analyse the given sentences
What did I feel and what did I do seeing my beloved cat.
What lesson did I learn from the experience (THEME)
What can you infer from the two sentences
P1: I walked towards Mrs. Cleary’s house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily.
Paragraph 1
I asked Mrs. Cleary angrily why my cat was in her home
Mrs. Cleary led to the sitting room.
Mrs. Cleary explained and apologized to me.
P2: Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash.
Paragraph 2
I felt happy and hug my cat .
I realized that I misunderstood Mrs. Cleary and thanked her. (THEME)
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表达积累
reply,
respond,
answer,
agree,
promise,
comfort,
state(陈述),
claim(声称)
interrupt,
guess,
warn,
beg(乞求)，
doubt,……
各种说的表达---直接说
announce（宣布),
suggest, ……
add,
repeat,
remark（评论说),
apologise,
admit,
complain,
explain,
ask,
wonder,
各种说的表达----间接说
yell,
scream，……
gasp（倒抽一口气），
frown（皱眉）,
sigh（叹气）,
glare,
glance,
stare,
weep(流泪)，
sob（呜咽），
cheer,
grin（咧嘴笑），
beam（眉开眼笑）
shout，cry,
roar（咆哮）,
murmur（呐呐地说）, whisper（低声说），
groan (哼哼呻吟)，
mumble（咕哝）,
sniff(嗤之以鼻)，
stammer（结巴）
例1：“Honey,” Mom said weakly, “I have a terrible cold. You can have cereal (燕麦) for breakfast and watch cartoons. I’m going to stay in bed.”
套路一:
1. said +________：loudly/delightedly/ surprisedly……
练习：
"What should we do to cheer Poppy up？"Dad ____________（困惑地问）,“we've tried everything.”
asked confusedly
副词
带着情绪“说”套路一
例2：At the sound of his mom coughing, Jeremy knocked on her bedroom door and asked with great concern, “Mom, are you ok ”
套路二:
2. said +__________________：
in a pleasant愉悦的/firm坚定的/rude粗鲁的/sad悲伤的 tone语气;
in a high 高/low低 / sweet甜/loud响亮/soft 软/weak弱 voice 声音
with concern/wild joy/a big smile
with eyes fixed on me, with his head lowered
练习：
Then mom held the dress up before her and ____________________ (赞同地说), “You know what I think it looks nice.”
said in an aprroving tone
介词短语
带着情绪“说”套路二
带着情绪“说” 套路3
promised, his eyes twinkling
非谓语
例3： “Where did it come from ” Jeremy wondered, reaching into the washer to take out more clothes.
They hugged her and shouted, “Happy Mother’ s Day, dear Mummy!”
Samantha gave me a big hug, saying, "You are so brave and clever! I wouldn't know what to do without you! “
套路三: said，+______________： said, comforting me……
comforted me, saying ……
hugged me and said,
练习:“I bet you are too busy to fix your car, so just leave it to us!” the old man ______________________________. (向我保证，眼睛闪闪发光）.
例4： Tired and hungry, Jane finally said to herself, “Tom, I miss you! I shouldn’t have quarreled with you.”
套路四: ___________________，+said：
练习:
_________________________________(越来越羞愧后悔)，he went to apologise to his mom, “I’m sorry for cheating in the exam. I promise not to do it any more.”
带着情绪“说”套路四
Increasingly ashamed and regretful
形容词作状语
例5:“I did it!” she said to herself, her eyes filled with pride.
套路五: said, +____________________
练习:
练习5:“Am I wrong ”___________________
(他问道，眼里充满疑虑).
he questioned, eyes full of confusion.
独立主格
带着情绪“说” 套路五
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续写赏析
优秀学生习作
情节合理丰富，
衔接流畅自然
语言丰富多样，
大量动作描写
优秀学生习作
情节合理丰富，
衔接流畅自然
语言丰富多样，
大量动作描写
及格版范文
I walked towards Mrs. Clearys house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily. When Mrs. Clearys opened the door, I asked her immediately, “Why is my cat in your window “ Mrs. Clearys was so confused that she answered, ”I didn’t know he was yours.I thought he was abandoned by his host. So I just wanted to give him a home. I am so sorry if what I did has hurt you.” Then she led me directly to the sitting room and I saw the cats were playing happily.
Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash. Excited and glad, I picked him up quickly, held him tightly in my arms, and kissed him softly. There was a sense of guilt flooding in my heart when I found I had misunderstood my kind neighbor. Now my anger disappeared, tears of gratitude welled up in my eyes. I thanked her again and again before I took Ink Spot to my home. The lost and found partner made me feel I was someone again.
优秀版范文
I walked towards Mrs. Clearys house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily. The moment she opened the door, I asked Mrs. Cleary with watery eyes, “Why is my cat in your window ” With a confusing expression , Mrs. Cleary responded ,“Honestly I had no idea he was yours. I had just thought he was another abandoned pathetic cat so I took him in just like I took in all the rest. If what I did has hurt you, I am awfully apologetic.“ Without the slightest hesitation, she led me directly to the sitting room, where cats were playing happily.
Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash. A flood of excitement passed through my body. I immediately scooped him up in my arms and held him close as he rubbed beneath my chin, purring contentedly. Seeing my cat well taken care of, it dawned on me that I had misunderstood my caring neighbor. Now my anger gave way to gratitude. I extended my appreciation to her again and again before I took Ink Spot home, where I thought he should belong. The lost and found companion made me feel I was someone again.
及格版范文默写
I walked towards Mrs. Clearys house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily. __________________ (当克利里斯太太打开门时), I asked her immediately, “Why is my cat in your window “ Mrs. Clearys was __________________(如此的困惑，以至于她回答说), ”I didn’t know he was yours.I thought he __________________(被他的主人抛弃了). So I just wanted to ______________(给他一个家). I am so sorry if __________________(如果我的行为伤害了你).” Then she led me directly to the sitting room and I saw the cats _______________(正在快乐地玩耍).
Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash. _______________ (又兴奋又高兴), I _______________(赶紧把他抱起来), ___________ (紧紧地搂在怀里) in my arms, and _______________(轻轻地亲吻了他). There was __________________(一种负罪感涌上心头) when I found I had misunderstood my kind neighbor. Now my anger disappeared, ____________(感激的泪水) welled up in my eyes. I thanked her again and again before I took Ink Spot to my home. The lost and found partner __________________(让我觉得我又成了一个人) .
优秀版范文默写
I walked towards Mrs. Clearys house hurriedly and knocked at the door angrily. __________________(她一打开门), I asked Mrs. Cleary __________________(泪眼汪汪地), “Why is my cat in your window ” __________________(克利里太太带着困惑的表情回答说),“I didn’t know he was yours.I just thought he was __________________(另一只被遗弃的可怜猫)so I took him in just like I took in all the rest. __________________(如果我的行为伤害了你), I am _____ (非常抱歉）."Then she led me directly to the sitting room, __________________(小猫们在那里快乐地玩耍).
Upon seeing me, Ink Spot jumped off the window, running towards me in a flash. __________________(一股兴奋的洪流) passed through my body. I immediately picked him up and held him close __________________(它在我的下巴下摩擦着，满足地地呜呜叫着). __________________(看到我的猫被照顾得很好), I realized I had misunderstood my caring neighbor. Now __________________(我的愤怒变成了感激).I thanked her again and again before I took Ink Spot home, where I thought he should belong. The lost and found companion __________________(让我觉得我又成了一个人) .
人与自然——人与动物 话题攻略
Part 1 出彩短语
外貌描写
1. a pair of large watery eyes 一双水汪汪的大眼睛
2. two big round eyes 两只圆溜溜的大眼睛
3. beady/sparkling/twinkling eyes 小珠般圆亮的/亮晶晶的/闪闪发亮的眼睛
4. a nose like a small black gem 一颗黑宝石般的鼻子
5. long/muscular/skinny/spindly legs 长的/肌肉发达的/皮包骨的/干瘦的腿
6. fur is as white as snow 皮毛像雪一样洁白
7. a long little tail 一条长长的小尾巴
8. little ears on the top of the heard 头顶上长着对小耳朵
人与自然——人与动物 话题攻略
Part 1 出彩短语
动作描写
wag the tail 摇尾巴
smell/sniff 嗅
bark/yap/yelp 狗吠
lick 舔
put the ears up 把耳朵竖起来
shake the whole body 抖动全身
bite the corner of the coat 咬住衣角
rub their necks and backs with their paws
用爪子摩擦它们的脖子和背部
9. hold it tightly with the paws
用爪子紧紧按住
10. fall on its back 摔得四脚朝天
11. run around me 围着我跑
12. keep scratching you with his front paws
用前爪不停挠你
13. raise its whole body on its hind legs
用后腿支起全身
14. leap to its feet 跳起来
15. rest the nose in its paws
把鼻子搁在爪子里
16. keep its fore legs doubled up
保持前腿弯曲
Part 2 满分句型
1. After gaining freedom, the wolf howled at me with her head low, showing her gratitude.
重获自由后，狼低着头对我嚎叫，表示感激。
2. Confused and frightened at my approach, the wolf backed away, pulling hard on the trap chain. 狼对我的接近既困惑又害怕，于是它后退了几步，使劲地拉扯着捕兽链。
3. If your cat looks at you and blinks at you slowly, it' s likely communicating affection.
如果你的猫看着你，并慢慢地对你眨眼,这很可能是在传达爱意。
4. The couple urgently needed to find temperature -controlled accommodation for the endangered seaturtles. 这对夫妇迫切需要为濒临灭绝的海龟找到温度可控的住所。
5. Hopefully, the experts will be able to find a way to restore the harmony between the animals andthe humans soon. 希望专家们能尽快找到一种方法来恢复动物和人类之间的和谐。
Part 2 满分句型
6. To my joy, I could also reach into the cage to touch it. When I gently fingered its head, it playfullypecked at me. 让我高兴的是,我也可以伸手到笼子里去摸它。当我轻轻地摸它的头时，它调皮地啄了我一下。
7. The experience has also strengthened my desire to create a beautiful backyard garden that attractslots of bees, butterflies, and birds.这次经历也增强了我想建造一个美丽的后院花园的愿望，它可以吸引大量的蜜蜂、蝴蝶,还有鸟类。
8. Plastic is useful to people because it is strong and lasts a long time, but this is bad news for seacreatures who eator get stuckinit. 塑料对人类是有用的，因为它很结实，可以持续很长时间，但这对吃了它或被困在里面的海洋生物来说是个坏消息。
9. Seeing the adorable dog jumping and running with pure joy, 1 felt myself enveloped ina cheertul atmosphere, feling s0 rlieved to put aside troublesome matters.看着可爱的小狗欢快地蹦蹦跳跳，我觉得自己被欢快的气氛笼罩着，这使我感到如释重负把烦恼抛在一边。

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