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读后续写人与动物Four legged Guardian Angel讲义-2024届高三英语复习写作专项
这篇续写主要运用了感官细节（sensory details）和具体动词(specific verbs)。
读后续写原题目：
A Four-legged Guardian Angel
Snow had just melted off the ground that April day at our house in Regina Beach, Saskatchewan. I had just cleaned up the pool in preparation for selling the house. The year before, I had lost my job with the provincial government, and now our financial situation was grim. In despair, I had finally put the home on the market, and a real estate agent was due to show up later that day. Even worse, I would have to give up my beloved Great Dane, Brigitte, because I could no longer afford the cost of feeding it. The thought of losing the dog and our beautiful home was almost more than I could bear.
四月的那个天，我们位于萨斯喀彻温省里贾纳海滩的家里的雪刚刚融化。我刚把水池清理干净，准备把房子卖掉。前一年，我失去了省政府的工作，现在我们的财政状况很严峻。在绝望中，我终于把房子推向了市场，一位房地产经纪人将于当天晚些时候出现。更糟糕的是，我将不得不放弃我心爱的大丹犬布丽吉特，因为我再也负担不起喂养它的费用了。一想到失去这只狗和我们美丽的家，我几乎无法忍受。
Deep in despair, I sat typing up resumes and cover letters. Out of the corner of my eye I could see my thirteen-month-old son, Forrest, as he lay on the carpet, playing near our big, gentle nanny-dog, Brigitte. It seemed as if Brigitte was always meant to be in this family and she turned out to be a perfect companion.
在深深的绝望中，我坐在那里打字简历和求职信。从我的眼角，我可以看到我十三个月大的儿子福雷斯特躺在地毯上，在我们温柔的大保姆狗布丽吉特附近玩耍。布丽吉特似乎一直都是这个家庭的一员，而事实证明她是一个完美的伴侣。
Brigitte came to our house on Christmas eve when the doorbell rang and I was sure some of my Christmas packages had arrived. I ran to the door and swung it open, but no one was there. I sensed something and looked down, only to find a beautiful Great Dane sitting there, looking up at me with big intelligent eyes. There was no way that she could have rung the doorbell by herself, was there Perhaps. Someone had found the puppy somewhere and left her there, and then rang the doorbell and ran away. They accurately guessed I would welcome an additional family member and take care of her.
圣诞节前夕，布丽吉特来到我们家，门铃响了，我确信我的一些圣诞包裹已经到了。我跑到门口把门打开，但没有人。我感觉到了什么，低头一看，却发现一只美丽的大丹犬坐在那里，用一双聪明的大眼睛抬头看着我。她不可能自己按门铃，是吗？可能有人在某个地方发现了小狗，把她留在了那里，然后按了门铃就跑了。他们准确地猜测我会欢迎一位额外的家庭成员并照顾她。
Thinking of these, I couldn't help heaving a sigh and went straight back to work. However, I hadn't typed more than two sentences when Brigitte began barking furiously and running back and forth to the sliding glass door overlooking our pool.
想到这些，我忍不住叹了一口气，直接回去工作了。然而，我还没打两句话，布丽吉特就开始狂吠，并来回跑向俯瞰我们游泳池的滑动玻璃门。
I raced to see what was happening and noticed that the sliding door was slightly open. Suddenly, I realized Forrest was nowhere to be seen. In panic, I opened the door and ran outside.
我跑过去看看发生了什么，注意到滑动门微微打开。突然，我意识到福雷斯特不见了。我惊慌失措地打开门跑了出去。
续写段落1： There I was surprised to see Brigitte, who was terrified of water, dive into the pool
续写段落2： Finally, the doctor said Forrest was all right and could be released from hospital
故事概要
“我”面临着经济困境, 即将出售自己的房子，而且由于照顾Brigitte的费用较高，“我”决定放弃Brigitte。一天，当“我”在编辑简历时，听到Brigitte开始狂吠起来，并来回跑向可以俯瞰游泳池的玻璃推拉门。我赶紧跑过去，发现推拉门是微微打开的。突然， Brigitte不见了。我慌忙打开门向外跑去。
续写段落1
There I was surprised to see Brigitte, who was terrified of water, dive into the pool
续写段落2
Finally, the doctor said Forrest was all right and could be released from hospital
先看段落2，明确孩子得救。那段落2的大方向应该是 Brigitte 对家人很重要，“我”不会将其送走，最后再升华。
如何体现Brigitte对家人的重要呢？救孩子，这个是明面上的，应该可以一笔带过。我们还可以通过描写Brigitte跟家人的互动来体现这一感情：
回家，放下孩子，Brigitte走过来（迎接我，或者“查看”孩子情况均可，我选择“查看孩子”）动作描写
“我”看着这温馨场景，做出决定。
段落1主要写孩子落水后，Brigitte 和我对他的拯救。
Brigitte跳入泳池后，
我吃惊 sensory details
我跑向泳池，看到 (Brigitte 、孩子)… specific verbs
我跳入泳池，把孩子拉上来 specific verbs
孩子 description
我拨打医院电话
创设续写情节
创设续写根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，两段故事的情节，创设画面要有动作、情绪、心理、环境等描写。
Paragraph 1:[开端]布丽告特跳进了游泳池。[故事发展1布丽专特跳勇敢地向“我”儿子游去->“我”也立刻跳进水里一“我”拨打了911，把儿子送到了医院治疗。Paragraph 2:[高潮]儿子没事出院了一布丽特高兴地在家门外等待。[结局1布丽告特-一直陪伴着儿子一决心要让布丽吉特永远和“我”们在--起。[感悟1人与动物的和谐相处。
下水文1：
There I was surprised to see Brigitte, who was terrified of water, dive into the pool.
Panic coursed through me as I sprinted towards the pool's edge, fearing the worst. I had always known Brigitte had an instinctual protective nature, but her fear of water had been undeniable. It was baffling to witness her taking such a risk.As I reached the pool, I saw Brigitte swimming frantically forwards. And then I spotted Forrest, his tiny arms flailing as he struggled to stay afloat. Without hesitation, I jumped into the pool, my clothes weighing me down. Brigitte reached Forrest first, her jaws gently gripping the back of his diaper and keeping Forrest's head above water. I reached them and managed to hoist Forrest out of the water and onto the safety of the poolside. He coughed and sputtered, but he was safe. I hurriedly called 911, seeking immediate medical attention for him.
Finally, the doctor said Forrest was all right and could be released from hospital.
After returning from the hospital and stepping back into our home, I gently lowered Forrest onto the couch. Brigitte approached with a gentle curiosity, her sizable head dipping down to sniff the baby. Forrest, in turn, gazed at Brigitte with wide-eyed wonder, as if recognizing her as the hero who had come to his rescue. It was a moment that spoke volumes about the unspoken bond that had been forged in the crucible of adversity, one that I couldn't imagine severing. She had become more than just a pet; she was a guardian angel, a symbol of unwavering love and devotion.
下水文2
There I was surprised to see Brigitte, who was terrified of water, dive into the pool.I panicked and couldn't catch my breath as I watched Britt bravely raise his head high and swim towards my son like an arrow, who was desperately splashing the water in the distance. Almost at the same time, I immediately jumped into the water and approached the place where they were floating. I picked up my son from Brigitte and dragged him to the shallow shore of the pool, only to find that he had stopped breathing. At that moment, Brigitte accidentally held my phone in his mouth. I immediately dialed 911 and performed cardiopulmonary resuscitation on Forrest with trembling hands. It wasn't long before the ambulance arrived and took us to the hospital, where Forrest received meticulous treatment.
Finally, the doctor said Forrest was all right and could be released from hospital. We - Brigitte, who was eagerly waiting outside our house when we arrived, barked loudly and wagged her tail happily, as if expressing her excitement. In the following days, this loyal dog - always accompanied Forrest and never let him out of his sight. My love for my Britt is indescribable, so I suddenly made up my mind to make Britt always be with us-- In the coming weeks, despite our poor economic situation, I will never give up on my beloved company. Whenever my life experiences ups and downs, Brigitte not only guards my son, but also melts away the people who appear in my life.

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