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段落结构
语料积累
(情节+情感)
读后续写·挑战
1. 交白卷
2. 结构混乱
3. 对话来凑
4. 不知所云
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读后续写·想法
Narrative Arc
Narrative Arc
是什么
用处
教学
实例
Narrative Arc
情节
Orientation
Complication
Action
Action
Result
Narrative Arc
Evaluation
Red lives in a village near the forest and will be visiting her grandmother. However, she dawdles on the way and talks to a stranger --- the wolf. The wolf takes a shortcut, swallows the grandmother and awaits Red. Red discovers the wolf and calls out for help from the woodsman. In the end, the wolf is defeated. Red realizes what she did was wrong and has learned her lesson.
Little Red Riding Hood
Red lives in a village near the forest and goes to visit her grandmother.
However, she dawdles on the way and talks to a stranger --- the wolf.
He takes a shortcut, swallows the grandmother and awaits Red. Red discovers the wolf and calls out for help from the woodsman.
In the end, the wolf is defeated.
Red realizes what she did was wrong and has learned her lesson.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Little Red Riding Hood
Narrative Arc
用处
Finally John started his long walk. Tired filled with his body, and he felt hungry. But he didn't stop. There is nobody in the road. It is so quiet around him. He carried on walking along with the road. Although he was afraid, getting company was more important than that. After two hours, he was very tired so that he did'nt carry on walking. He sat down on the road.
Finally John started his long walk. ①Tired filled with his body, and he felt hungry. ②But he didn't stop. ③There is nobody in the road. ④It is so quiet around him. ⑤He carried on walking along with the road. ⑥Although he was afraid, getting company was more important than that. ⑦After two hours, he was very tired so that he didn't carry on walking. ⑧He sat down on the road.
Finally John started his long walk. ③There is nobody in the road. ④It is so quiet around him. ②But he didn't stop.⑥Although he was afraid, getting to company was more important than that. ⑤He carried on walking along with the road. ⑦After two hours, he was very tired so that he didn't carry on walking. ⑧He sat down on the road.①Tired filled with his body, and he felt hungry.
Narrative Arc
教学
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
But no more helicopters came and it was dark. __________________________
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It was daybreak when Jane woke up. ________________________________________________________________________________________________
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
But no more helicopters came and it was dark. ____________________________________________________________
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. ____________________________________________________________________
orientation
orientation
解读续写段落首句
Interpretation of the first sentence 首句解读
1.But no more helicopters came and it was dark.
2.It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
根据推测，必须描写Jane 独自在森林里呆了一晚的情形！
orientation
result
Para. 1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.
What esle can you add to the environment
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
① How did Jane feel at the beginning
② What happened
③ What did Jane do and how did she do
④ Was Jane prepared for the night
⑤ How did Jane finally fall asleep
⑥ How did Jane feel in her dream
scared
regretful
calm
brave
谋篇布局
续写第一段
以情感线的角度：
恐惧→后悔→逐渐镇定/勇敢→思念
① How did Jane feel at the beginning
② What happened to Jane
③ What did Jane do and how did she do
④ Was Jane prepared for the night
⑤ How did Jane feel
⑥ How did Jane finally fall asleep
首句解读：
Para. 1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Para. 1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.
5 senses: temperature/light/sound
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Conflicts: difficulties/dangers/injuries/troubles/changes
Actions: brave/determine/fight back/deal with
Goals/Aims: shelter/fire/warmth/food/water/sleep
Feelings: mentally/ physically, body and soul
情感线： 失落→恐惧→后悔→逐渐镇定/勇敢→思念
Para. 1 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.
As the light dimmed, the warmth of the day was ebbing into a faint chill.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Darkness soon fell upon the forest, while the sounds of night started to grow and eyes from among trees began to glow.
Frightened but determined, Jane took a deep breath and quickened her pace, hoping to find an open area soon. (stagger, stumble, fumble… )
And after walking a long distance, to her great joy, she eventually reached an open area.
Exhausted inside out, Jane sat on the ground, built a fire and slowly fell asleep. (Though…, managed to build… before …dropped …and fell …)
Filled with regrets and missing her husband, she cried(sobbed) in her dreams.
Possible version
Paragraph 2
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. The sun shone lightly, bringing warmth and hope to the world. Jane stayed at the open area patiently to wait for others’ help. Two hours later, the helicopter which she had seen yesterday caught her eyes. Jane took off her yellow blouse to flag it and yelled out to make the helicopter notice her. Fortunately, the helicopter noticed her and came closer, finally landing at the open area. Her husband, Tom , got out of the helicopter. Surprised and overjoyed , Jane held him tightly and told him how much she loved him. At the moment, the mountain was filled with love.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
hopeful --- excited --- happy --- love
Narrative Arc
一模
学生作文
Student’s version 惊悚版
Paragraph 1
Finally John started his long walk. Walking along the quiet street and holding the bat tightly, he could hear nothing but his own breath, heartbeats and the sound of wind. Suddenly, when he was going to pass a crossing, a group of homeless dogs rushed out from the roadside bush, barking loudly at him. John was so frightened that both of his hands and legs were trembling. He hold the bat and knife tightly and stepped back. Soon the dogs had him cornered. John was so helpless that his brain went blank.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Student’s version 惊悚版
Paragraph 2
At that time, a car was drawing closer. Meanwhile, the enormous bear was drawing closer too. John wanted to ask for help but he was so tired that his lips parted in a soundless scream. He waved ...
complication
Student’s version 平淡版
Paragraph 2
At that time, a car was drawing closer. He got his hopes up again and waved with all the strength left in him at the car. The car stopped in front of him and the window was rolled down. John was surprised to find that the driver was a woman and a little girl was sitting in the back seat. After knowing the situation, the woman opened the door and gave him a lift. John was deeply moved by the kindness of the woman and decided not to go out at midnight again.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Narrative Arc
语料的积累
适应性考试
学生仿写
Student’s version
Paragraph 1
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I'd had lunch. I was about to say yes but my stomach gave out a signal before my mouth opened. The girl received the signal and smiled. I saw her walked to the truck and told something to her parents. Then she took a paper bag and brought it to me. She said they took some feature food of their hometown and wanted to share it with me. After I thanked her, I watched them left at the end of the road.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Student’s version
Paragraph 1
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I'd had lunch. After a long time of waiting and working under the burning sunshine, I did feel hungry. So, awkwardly, I shook my head. The little girl quickly opened the door, got into their car, took out a piece of bread and a paper bag and handed them to me. Gratefully, I accepted her gifts and, in return, I gave her a new robot. Seeing them leaving, I addicted myself to the warmth they gave me heart and soul.
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
Student’s version
Paragraph 1
When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I'd had lunch. Hearing that, I suddenly realized that I had been waiting and working there for several hours and my stomach had been already empty. I replied, with an embarrassing smile, “No, I haven't.” A smile worked its way across the girl's face and she jumped into the truck and took a hand-made sandwich in a paper bag and a bottle of water to me. At that moment, a warm current rose in my heart and I eyed the little girl up and down and could hardly speak. The little girl was just like an angel, shining her kindness to me, a stranger who ....
orientation
complication
action
result
evaluation
段落结构
语料积累
(情节+情感)
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