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读后续写——捡手机
One afternoon after school, Mary and her brother, Keith, were eating at a cafe near their home. That afternoon, they had to share their table with another person. That person was a young lady in her twenties. After eating, she went to the restroom. Without realizing, she had left her handphone on the table. Five minutes later, she came out and walked out of the cafe without looking back.
Mary saw the handphone on the table. She quickly told Keith, “Keith, the girl left her handphone behind.”
Keith looked at the handphone, It took his breath away. It was one of the latest models on the market.
Keith had always wanted a handphone. But his parents had told him, “You don’t need one. You can always use the house phone.”
He stared at it for some minutes. Then he said slowly, pausing on every word, “I want to take the handphone.”
Mary could not believe her ears. She merely stared at her brother, “You can’t! What if the owner comes to look for it ”
Having made the decision, Keith quickly grabbed the handphone and put it in his schoolbag. Then, he took Mary’s hand and led her out of the cafe quickly.
Once back home, Keith locked his house door with trembling hands. Inside his room, he took out the beauty. Oh, he liked it so much. Now he had his own handphone. Soon, he was polishing it happily.
But Mary told him, “Keith, you cannot keep the handphone. What will you tell Father about this He will ask you how you got the handphone.”
Keith said quickly, “I will say a friend lent it to me.”
Mary said, “Now you are lying too.” Oh dear! When had Keith turned so dishonest
Then Mary saw a house phone number on the plastic cover of the handphone, “This is the girl’s phone number. Why don’t we just call this number We will talk to her and ask her to come and take back her handphone.” She was trying to talk some sense into him.
【写作指导】前文概述：Mary和她的弟弟在餐馆就餐时，看到了一个被忘在餐桌上的手机，此时机主已经离开。她的弟弟一直想要一部手机，便不听 Mary 的劝说，将手机带回了家，并准备撒谎说是朋友借给他的。Mary看到了机主的联系电话，准备和机主联系。
续写思路：根据续写第一段的首句 “That night, Keith turned over in bed from time to time”可确定第一段的写作思路—弟弟Keith为何难以入睡 他想到了什么 对拿走机主手机的事，是否感到愧疚？最后他是否做出了归还手机的决定？根据续写第二段的首句 “Mary was very happy to hear that”可确定第二段的写作思路—姐姐Mary为何高兴？他们联系上机主了吗？机主有何反应？他们是怎样归还手机的？通过这件事，他们有何感受？
That night, Keith turned over in bed from time to time. He had difficulty sleeping, uncertain about what he should do. Of course, he liked the new handphone. However, he was feeling sorry for the owner. When he thought how sad the young lady would be at the loss of her handphone, he was full of guilt and shame. The next morning, after a long and restless night, he was determined to return the handphone to the owner. After school, he told Mary, “I am going to phone the owner.”
Mary was very happy to hear that. Back home, they phoned the owner’s house phone. A girl answered the phone. Keith asked, “Are you the owner of the handphone I’m Keith. I have your handphone. Can you come and get it ” The girl replied “Yes” excitedly, expressing her gratitude repeatedly. Ten minutes later, she was at the same cafe to meet Keith. Handing back the handphone to her and seeing her smile happily, Keith realized that honesty was indeed the best policy.
1.字数，每段最多空2行
2.书写，大小适中，每行10-11个单词左右，高度占一半，单词尽量不要跨行
3.人称，绝不能出现第1人称和第2人称，“我和姐姐去还手机”
4.情绪
She wiped away Keith's tears on his cheeks and hugged him.
The more he thought, the more he felt worried. worried-uneasy
5.中式英语/时态
The education he had accepted didn't allow he keep this handphone.
However, Mary's words surounded near his ears.
Then he lost sleepy. 付 失眠 He failed to fall asleep.
He didn't want to be a thief people. 时 people多余
She hugged Keith tightedly. 时 tightedly-tightly
You always want to have a handphone. Now, you have.师
These words Marry said appeared in his heart and mind.杜
... told his sister he will call the lady on numbers.孙
The handphone was not belong to him. 马 was改为did
He knew exactly the handphone was not belonging to him. 秦
正确He knew exactly the handphone didn't belong to him.
I find it so long time. 袁
The girl thanks to them a lot. 袁 thank sb. for sth.
... which made both of us happily. 袁 happily-happy
If father knew this thing, he will be very angry. 李 knew, will
中式英语/时态
6.生搬硬套
At the same time, they had come to appreciate honesty was of great significanc for personal growth and develeopment.
7.单词拼写
Keith seemed a little shame, he walked aside the house phone sliently.冯 shame-shameful aside-into sliently-silently
He stared this phone and seemed a little hesitantion. 冯
stare at, hesitantion-hesitation
He determinded to sleep, but he couldn't sleep. 周
determine-determined
He tried to colsed his eyes to sleep but it not did. 付 colsed-closed
Keith's face turned read. 姚 read-red
Inspiring by your words, I learnt my deed was wrony. 姚Inspiring- Inspired wrony-wrong
I was pround of you. 苏pround-proud
The girl came to thier home.... 苏 thier-their
Keith expressed his guity and said sorry to the girl with a real heart. 周 guity-guilty real-sincere
The young lady is very greatful and come to take back her phone. 沈 greatful-grateful
8.词性
I will back it to you at the cafe.冯，李，马
Mary said angry again. angry-angrily
If I don't give the phone back to the girl, what will happened ” Keith said to himself. happened-happen
A sense of gulity was full of his heart. 付
The lady expressed her grateful to Keith. 何 grateful-gratitude
Thinking this, a sense of guilty swept over him.张 guilty-guilt 非谓语错
A flood of nervous and scare creeps upon him. 张 nervous-nervousness/uneasy
He opened his eyes with nervous. 袁 nervous-nervousness
正确 He was full of guilt and shame.
A flood of nervous and scare creeps upon him. nervous-nervousness
They must feel disappoint/fear for him. disappoint-disappointed fear-scared/worried/fightened
Even he will lose his friends. will-would
There were two people arguing in his mind. A person thought ... The other thought ...
正确 He was overwhelmed by a mixture of guilt and excitement.
9.重复
“should I send it back ” he asked himself. Soon, he nodded, “I must send it back.”
10.无关紧要的信息
Keith put out the phone.
So they promised they call the plastic cover of the handphone tomorrow.
Then sitting on the chairs in the cafe, May and Keith waited for the lady without knowing what would happen.
11.简单错误
He hugged he tightly. 司 he-him
stay honesty honesty-honest
Seeing the handphone, the excited looks and smile on Keith's face was faded away. 侯 was删除
Keith looked the handphone a long time. 杨 a long time前加for
He was hestitate and don't know what to do. 杨 hesitate-hesitant
It's right 马 Is it right /Am I right
Keith realize the valuable of honesty. 马 valuable-value
Undoubtly,... 马 Undoubtedly
After minutes, the lady came and expressed her thank for them.马 thank-thanks for-to
He took a determination to give it back.... 李 下定决心做某事
Thank you for you pick up my phone.
He stood up walked with great anxious. 王 anxious-anxiety
He was afraid of being find he was lying. 赵 find-founded
He bluck up his courage to find Mary. 赵 bluck-pluck
12.词选错
The moment he imaged the sence that his father found him stealing the handphone, he was frightened as if ... 高，苏 imaged-imagined sence-scence
Next morning, Keith said his idea to Marry. 杜 said-told
He said to Mary about the idea yesterday.
“When I lost my handphone, I couldn't feel good.”张 when-if
13. 人物的心理活动和感情不符合常识，不够自然
捡了个手机，纠结了半天，哭着找姐姐，很愧疚。
把手机还给失主，失主说：“我原谅你了，不会因为你最初没有把手机还给我而生气。”
I know you are low spirits, because you are a good boy. 何
Everyone should keep a honest heart. 侯
After the phone belonged to the girl, she took some fresh fruit and cash for them.杜
The lady said it's nothing as long as he learnt from his mistake with her warm voice.
Mary and Keith make an apology to the lady.
Mary numbered the phone and then a voice of nervous sounded, “Did you picked up my phone at a cafe yesterday ” Mary's heart sank and she took a deep breath to react.
an honest boy a people, people表“民族”
好的表达：
So beautiful the handphone is that Keith didn't want to give it back to the young lady.——郭雅婷
From the experience, Keith has come to appreciate the significance of honesty and selflessness.——郭雅婷
He would be blamed... ——郭雅婷
Keith was stuck in a delimma. ——郭雅婷
The next morning, the sunlight lightened Keith's room and his face. He decided to give back... ——周安然
A wave of sadness swept over him.——赵子龙
She said with a gentle voice; “ I know you are a honest boy, you won't make me down.” 赵晨宇 a-an make-let
1. From this experience, Keith learned that honesty is second to none.
——杨悦
2. A wave of guilt flooded into him. ——龚心怡
3. The lady came and expressed her heartfelt gratitude to Mary and Keith.——王嘉倍
4. With fear and worry, he failed to fall asleep, feeling like lying on pins and needles.——王嘉倍
5. A mixture of relief and guilt flooded over him. ——任秋雨
6. Having gone through this experience, Keith has come to understand that honesty is the most important virtue of people.—— 任秋雨
7. Overwhelmed by uneasiness and worry, he was sleeping as if he were lying on the needles.——李周倩
8. Honesty is always an exceptional quality that you need to stick to throughout yout life.——张兰兰
9. The eagerness for a handphone and the shame for keeping other s’ things were fighting in his mind, making him feel like sitting on pins and needles. ——赵盈
10. Honesty is always the most valuable virtue shining like a diamond.——赵盈
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×His sister’s words sounded near him.
√Mary’s words made him lost in thought.

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