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读原文：5W1HP1P2+角色特点+描写占比
1、串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句，定故事走向
2、划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
3、观察描写占比，续写比例与其一致
（1）首段：角色+大致事件
（2）尾段：决定具体事件+态度
（3）P1P2给定句：定故事结局走向
（1）划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n)：用来续写角色，改写关键词
（2）找出矛盾/需求、关键情节：用来续写情节
（1）看各类描写：续写时尽量占比一致
(2) 语法、句式：尽量保持一致，也可模仿好句
构思前：读原文，找素材 （要用到续写中）
why who关键词 动作 V 情绪/心理adj
角色1
角色2...
what when where how P1P2关键词 topic
矛盾/困难点conflict
Preview words
competitively adv.竞争性地；竞争地
uniform n. 制服
number-one adj.第一的
bookshelf n 书架
show up 出现
break the news 宣布消息
look sb in the eye 看着某人的眼睛
raise v.提升，增加，养育，培养
journey to the meet 比赛之旅
expectation n.期待，预期，指望
come in 进来，到达，达到
lane n.线路，跑道
board n.甲板，木板
Winners Never Quit
I had been swimming competitively for five years but after such a long time, I was ready to quit. I was often the only African American at the swimming competitions and our team couldn’t afford good uniforms. However, my number-one reason for wanting to quit was that I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions (荣誉奖)”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honorable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up.
One summer’s day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to break the news to my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her, she looked me in the eye and said, “Baby, remember these words ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit.’ Your grandmother didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear ” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am.”
Winners Never Quit
I had been swimming competitively for five years but after such a long time, I was ready to quit. I was often the only African American at the swimming competitions and our team couldn’t afford good uniforms. However, my number-one reason for wanting to quit was that I kept receiving “Honorable Mentions (荣誉奖)”. Any athlete knows that you don’t want to have a bookshelf full of “Honorable Mentions”, which you get just because you showed up.
One summer’s day, the day before a big swim meet, I decided to break the news to my grandma that I was quitting the swim team. When I told her, she looked me in the eye and said, “Baby, remember these words ‘Quitters never win and winners never quit.’ Your grandmother didn’t raise losers or quitters. You go to that meet tomorrow, and you swim like you are a grandchild of mine, you hear ” I was too afraid to say anything but “Yes, ma’am.”
swimming competitively 竞赛性游泳 number-one reason 第一原因 show up 出现
African American 非裔美国人 Keep receiving 一直获得
afford v. 承担得起 athlete 运动员
good uniform 好的服装 bookshelf n.书架
break the news to 将消息告知给
quit the swim team 退出游泳队
look sb. in the eye 看着某人的眼睛
afraid adj. 害怕的
The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she was including me in the race so our journey to the meet would not be wasted, and she had no expectations whatsoever that I would come in anything but eighth place and only that, because there weren’t nine lanes.
As I was mounting the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were all here to do just one thing — beat me. All of a sudden, my grandma’s words rang in my head, “Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine. Quitters never win and winners never quit.” “Yes, Grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours,” I said to myself.
arrive at 到达 journey n. 旅行 eighth place 第八名
insist v.坚持 be wasted 被浪费 nine lanes 第九赛道
be allowed to do 被允许做某事 no expectations whatsoever 丝毫没有任何期盼
include me 包括我 come in an anything 获得任何东西
mount the board 上跳板
notice v.注意到
beat me 打败我
all of a sudden 突然之间
ring in my head 在我的脑海里想起
The next day we arrived at the swim meet late, missing my group of swimmers in the 15/16 age group. My coach insisted I be allowed to swim with the older group. I knew she was including me in the race so our journey to the meet would not be wasted, and she had no expectations whatsoever that I would come in anything but eighth place and only that, because there weren’t nine lanes.
As I was mounting the board, all the other girls looked at me. I quickly noticed that these girls were all here to do just one thing — beat me. All of a sudden, my grandma’s words rang in my head, “Quitters never win and winners never quit. You swim like you are a grandchild of mine. Quitters never win and winners never quit.” “Yes, Grandma, I will swim like I am a grandchild of yours,” I said to myself.
续写要求：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
SPLASH! I swam harder than I had ever swum before. ____________________________________________________
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It was then that I heard the claps and cheers around me. ____________________________________________________
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故事解读和分析
Mars is a very cold place. Its atmosphere is full of iron oxide dust, which makes it red
语篇表达意图--故事主题
attitude
perservance
故事人物：
主要人物：
次要人物：
“我” I
my coach,
my grandma,
other swimming girls
Who
Why
why who关键词 动作 V 情绪/心理adj
角色1
角色2...
what关键句 when where how P1P2关键词 构思前：读原文，找素材 （要用到续写中）
写作时，以此表格梳理思路
(考试时，勾画标明信息点）
attitude
topic
perserverance
a swimmer 5 years
my grandma
other swimmers
quit
discouraged
insist
belittled
look at me
determined
my coach
insist
afraid
构思前：读原文，找素材 （要用到续写中）
why who关键词 动作 V 情绪/心理adj
角色1
角色2...
what when where how P1P2关键词 topic
矛盾/困难点conflict
quit or not
a big swim meet
swim meet/board/swimming pool
persevere/overcome difficulties
swam harder/heard the claps and cheers
情节结构
我参加游泳比赛，并拼尽全力
我赢下了比赛
我一直未能获得理想的成绩，打算退出游泳队
冲突
行动
解决
续写内容构思
由于各种原因，我想要退出游泳队，但在告诉祖母之后，祖母阻止我退出，并且要求我去参加明天的比赛。教练和我到达场馆之后，我已经错过了本来的比赛，教练安排我参加了其他组别的比赛。
我参加比赛的细节和过程。
主要人物：我 次要人物：其他比赛女孩
我看到了自己的比赛成绩，并且获得了奖项。主要人物：我
次要人物：教练
二. 写大纲：十句五定法
1.心理:
(我正在参加比赛的兴奋和激动。）可在描写心情的同时加入动作描写）
2.动作/环境
3.语言：也可为主角的心理活动
4.关键情节（由角色特点决定）
5.根据第二段首句决定
（比赛结束的描写）
6. 心理：
（我获奖后的心情）
7.关键情节
8.动作/语言/环境
9.结局（我将奖杯带回家）
10.价值升华
（永不放弃的体育精神）
2.动作：What happened in the middle of the race
1.心理：How did I feel and what did it happen when I was at the beginning of the competition
3.语言（或可用心理替代）：How did I feel in the middle of the race
4.关键情节：How did I finish the race
5.根据第二段首句决定：What was my reaction as the race ended
1.心理：How did I feel and what did it happen when I was at the beginning of the competition
I felt quite/extremely + adj.
have a lead over sb. 超过别人
speed up
加速
“我”感到紧张又激动，然后抢占先机
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例句：Nervous and scared, Peter managed to step onto the stage, starting to deliver his speech.
(感到) 紧张和害怕，彼得鼓起勇气走上舞台，开始发表演讲。
（感到）紧张和激动，我不断加速，领先其他女孩半个身体的长度。Nervous and excited,I speeded up constantly,having a half-body length lead over the girls.
情绪描写与动作描写相结合
1. 非谓语：情绪形容词1+情绪形容词2, sb do sth, doing sth. (感到xx和xx,某人做某事1，并做某事2)
2.动作：What happened in the middle of the race
speed up 加速
narrow the gap 缩小差距
catch up with 追上；赶上
be passed by 被……超过
fall behind 落后，掉队
leave sb in the dust 把某人拉在后面
其他人和“我”的差距越来越小，甚至快追上“我”
3.语言（或可用心理替代）：How did I feel in the middle of the race
P49 身心疲惫
“我”被其他女孩超过，感到非常疲惫
4.关键情节：How did I finish the race
“我”想起祖母的话，坚持不懈，全力以赴的游。
这个时候应该怎么办？谁帮助了我？
4.关键情节：How did I finish the race echo in one’s earscome into my mindring in one’s head在某人耳边响起will one’s leg用意志力驱使腿gather up all one’s strength极尽全力use every last bit of strength用尽最后一丝力气dash for the finish line冲向终点P49激发动力全力以赴5.根据第二段首句决定：What was my reaction as the race ended
touch the wall
触碰到墙
screen 屏幕
wait for 等待
anxiously 焦急地
6. 心理：How did I feel when I heard the claps and cheers
7. 关键情节：What was the reaction of my coach
9. 结局：What did I do after the swim meet
8.动作描写:What did I win
10.价值升华:What did I learn from the experience
6. 心理：How did I feel when I heard the claps and cheers
①hardly believe
②rank first 排名第一
at the top of the list
③a narrow victory 险胜
不敢相信“我”得了第一名
7. 关键情节：What was the reaction of my coach
①excited/thrilled adj. 激动地
②hug sb. tightly 紧紧抱着某人
③congratulate sb 祝贺某人
他很激动，跑来拥抱我并且祝贺我
8.动作描写:What did I win
“我”赢得了真正意义上的第一个奖杯，激动，站上领奖台。
①win the trophy
赢得奖杯
②feel my heart pounding
感受心脏剧烈跳动
③collect the prize
领奖
④stand on the winners‘ podium
站在领奖台上
9. 结局：What did I do after the swim meet
思路①告诉奶奶这个好消息，“我”做到了
思路②回到家，把奖杯放到书架上，替换之前得的“荣誉奖” 。
①break the news to sb
宣布消息给某人
②make it 做到了；成功了
③replace sth with sth 用某物替换某物
10.价值升华:What did I learn from the experience
升华一下：attitude和perseverance态度和坚持
Quitters never win and winners never quit.
1. 心理和动作联合：Nervous and excited,I speeded up constantly,having a half-body lead over the girls.
2.动作：However，they sped up and narrowed the gap.Halfway through the race,the girl to my left almost drew level with me,which made me tired physically and mentally.
3.语言：At that moment, the powerful words of my grandma echoed again in my ears, “Quitters never win and winners never quit.”
4. 关键情节：I willed my arms and legs to keep swimming and used every last bit of strength to swim the last 50 meters.
5.根据第二段首句决定：As soon as I touched the wall, I looked up at the screen, waiting anxiously for the result.
6. 心理+动作描写：Delighted and joyful,I saw my time on the screen — my name was at the top of the list!
7. 关键情节：My coach ran to me and hugged me tightly when I got out of the water.
8. 动作：Narrow victory as it was, I did win my first real trophy that day.Everything felt like a dream as I stood on the winner’s podium.
9.结局：Back at home, I delightedly replaced the “Honorable Mentions” on my shelf with the new trophy.
10. 情感升华：Grandma is right. Quitters never win and winners never quit.
写作技能培养
echo in one’s ears 在某人的耳边回响
will one’s leg 用意志力驱使 gather up all one’s strength 极尽全力 dash for 冲向
touch the wall 触碰到墙 screen 屏幕 wait for 等待
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At that moment, the powerful words of my grandma echoed again in my ears,”Quitters never win, and winners never quit.”
I willed my legs and arms to keep swimming, and gathered all my strength to dash for the final line.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________
Touching the wall, I looked up the screen and anxiously waited for the result.

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