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读后续写
Continuation Writing
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读后续写高考评分标准
一.评分原则：
1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2. 评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3. 评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
（1）与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
（2）内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；
（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
（4）上下文的连贯性；
4. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。
5. 如书写较差，以至影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
6. 词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
“两个读，一个写”
一读前文理情节
二读段首续发展
三写后文重表达
“读”什么？
(5W1H)
Who is it about
What happens
Where does it happen
When does it happen
Why does it happen
How does it happen
7-year-old Tommy Wilkinson’s childish desires got the best of him. He envied his best friend Eric over his new fancy bicycle. One day, Tommy gathered the courage to demand the bicycle. His parents refused him. But his dad, Peter Wilkinson, made a suggestion: “You can get the bike if you save up for it.” Without a second thought, Tommy decided to set aside money from his allowance (零花钱) every day to raise the amount he needed: $600. Every day, the little boy made sure he placed some money into his piggy bank.
After almost two years, the day finally arrived. “Finally!” Tommy joyfully shouted as he dropped the piggy bank to the floor. Inside was $830! More than the $600 he was aiming for! Instantly, the excited boy asked his dad to take him to the bike store. On their way to the store, Tommy accompanied his dad to the supermarket to buy some groceries. They were lining up at the checkout when Tommy noticed an old woman with a little girl in a wheelchair. The old lady dropped her groceries on the road. She looked helpless, and since she was holding the little girl’s wheelchair, she couldn’t pick them up.
Tommy quickly approached the woman. “Hey let me help you. Where is your car ” he asked the woman whose name was Barbara. The woman told him that they lived across the street and didn’t have a car. “I’ ll carry them for you,” Tommy said. On the way, the woman’s granddaughter, Chloe, told Tommy their story. It turned out Chloe injured her leg in a car crash, and her parents died in it. Barbara had to sell her car to pay for Chloe’ s surgery and wheelchair. Their story moved Tommy.
After arriving at Barbara’ s house, Tommy made an unbelievable offer. “I’ ll get you a car!” he shouted with joy. “Not a new one, though. My dad sells used cars and I ll get you one!”Tommy’ s offer really shocked Barbara. “But I don’ t think I can afford a car now,”she said.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
“Don’t worry! My dad will help you get one. I promise!” Tommy said firmly.
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Peter was surprised that Tommy would offer to give all his savings to help Barbara.
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Who
When
Where
What
Why
How
5W和1H
一. 要素分析
his dad, Peter Wilkinson
7-year-old Tommy Wilkinson’s childish desires got the best of him. He envied his best friend Eric over his new fancy bicycle. One day, Tommy gathered the courage to demand the bicycle. His parents refused him. But his dad, Peter Wilkinson, made a suggestion: “You can get the bike if you save up for it.” Without a second thought, Tommy decided to set aside money from his allowance (零花钱) every day to raise the amount he needed: $600. Every day, the little boy made sure he placed some money into his piggy bank.
After almost two years, the day finally arrived. “Finally!” Tommy joyfully shouted as he dropped the piggy bank to the floor. Inside was $830! More than the $600 he was aiming for! Instantly, the excited boy asked his dad to take him to the bike store.
On their way to the store, Tommy accompanied his dad to the supermarket to buy some groceries. They were lining up at the checkout when Tommy noticed an old woman with a little girt in a wheelchair. The old lady dropped her groceries on the road. She looked helpless, and since she was holding the little girl’s wheelchair, she couldn’t pick them up.
Tommy quickly approached the woman. “Hey let me help you. Where is your car ” he asked the woman whose name was Barbara. The woman told him that they lived across the street and didn’t have a car. “I’ll carry them for you,” Tommy said. On the way, the woman’s granddaughter, Chloe, told Tommy their story. It turned out Chloe injured her leg in a car crash, and her parents died in it. Barbara had to sell her car to pay for Chloe’s surgery and wheelchair. Their story moved Tommy.
After arriving at Barbara’s house, Tommy made an unbelievable offer. “I’ll get you a car!” he shouted with joy. “Not a new one, though. My dad sells used cars and I’ll get you one!” Tommy’s offer really shocked Barbara. “But I don’t think I can afford a car now,” she said.
Climax
Ending
Development
Beginning
What happened and how does it happened
What:Tommy wanted to buy a bike.
How: He saved money every day.
What:Tommy and his dad met an old woman and a little girl.
What:Tommy help them go back home and want to help the old woman a car.
How: Tommy ask his dad for help.
Plot Story
beginning
development
climax
ending
二. 情节分析
Tommy and his dad met an old woman and a little girl.
Tommy and his dad met an old woman and a little girl.
What:Tommy help them go back home and want to help the old woman a car. Tommy ask his dad for help.
Para. When &Where Who What/how Why
Para 6
三. 情节构思
Para. When &Where Who What/how Why
Para 7
三. 情节构思
“Don’t worry! My dad will help you get one. I promise!” Tommy said firmly. The boy immediately rushed back to talk to his dad about it. “Well, it’s hard to buy a car if she has no money,” Peter said. Tommy felt disheartened because he had promised Barbara he would get her a car. Then Peter came up with another suggestion. “Maybe I can help her with a monthly payment plan, so she won’t have to pay the whole amount at once. But still, it won’t be easy for her.” Without hesitation, Tommy said, “I can help her with my＄830!”
Peter was surprised that Tommy would offer to give all his savings to help Barbara. “Are you sure ” Peter asked. “Yes! She needs a car more than I need a bike, Dad.” Tommy said. Peter was deeply touched by his son’s kindness and agreed. Soon, he helped Barbara get a used car. Tommy was truly happy, and he stopped complaining about the things he didn’t have. Instead, he felt grateful for the good health and love he was blessed with. He realized that the goodness around him was priceless and that money was nothing compared to it.
四. 范文赏析
【导语】文章以人物为线索展开，本文讲述了7岁的汤米想要一辆新自行车，他决定从零用钱中攒出一笔钱买自行车，终于，他攒够了钱，高兴地和爸爸一起去自行车店。路上，他遇到一位老妇人和一个坐在轮椅上的小女孩，小女孩在一次车祸中伤了腿，她的父母也因此丧生，因为家里没有车，小女孩的出行很不方便。看到这一切，汤米决定帮助她们买一辆车。
【详解】1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“‘别担心！我爸爸会帮你买的。我保证！’汤米坚定地说。”可知，第一段可描写汤米和爸爸想出了什么方法帮助她们买车。
②由第二段首句内容“彼得很惊讶汤米会拿出所有积蓄来帮助芭芭拉。”可知，第二段可描写父子二人帮助芭芭拉的过程及这件事带给汤米的感悟。
2.续写线索：商量如何买车——汤米决定拿出零用钱——父亲感到惊讶——买车成功——汤米的感悟

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