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Tips for continuation writing
Some general concepts
What makes a good story
Writing a good article is just like to be a
good man: You should have a noble soul,
a strong body and suitable clothes.
Three principles to evaluate a continuation writing
评估
1. From the plots
2. From the details
合情合理（真善美、积极向上）
生动具体/跌宕起伏+合乎逻辑+文风一致
3.From the expressions
丰富准确的表达
三原则：正能量，一致性，曲折性
Step 1
Step 2
Step 3
Step 4
Step 5
研读文本，寻找冲突
确定主题，围绕核心
揣测首句，预测情节
关注伏笔，高度融合
解决冲突，升华主题
Steps for continuing your story
读后续写高分要素
1. 眼前一亮的书写卷面
2. 情节合理，衔接过渡自然，
3. 内容可读性强，创造性、逻辑性、丰富性、合理性
4. 生动的动作和贴切的心理描写+环境衬托+少许对话
5. 丰富具体生动高级的语言表达
6. 积极和有意义的结尾（解决冲突）
How to make your continuation writing vivid
题材
题材
Skill 1 ：Show, don’t tell
1. 动作描写
动作链：使用一连串动作让画面动起来
He died/is dead/passed away.
He lay still on the ground without a breath, his heart not beating any more.
动作描写 –动作链
题材
题材
例1:
①Fortunately, he threw me a branch and pulled me out.
②He lay on his stomach, pushed the branch before him and wound his way towards me. I grabbled the branch with care and was ultimately dragged out of the ice water.
Action1
Action2
Skill1:并列动作-并列谓语动词表示（动词时态要一致）
Action3
Action4
Action5
妈妈抱着孩子.
形成动作链: 冲向前 蹲下来 一把抱住
Mum dashed forward, knelt down and gathered the kid into her arms.
Create an action chain
Sub. +V1, V2 and(then) V3
Mum hugged the kid tightly.
Mum gave the kid a (tight) hug.
她拥抱了Betty. (失散多年的老朋友）
She dashed forward， gathered Betty into her arms and burst into tears.
冲上去--
抱住她--
流下眼泪--
dash forward
hug/ gather her into her arms
burst into tears
上车？
get into the car
get on the bus
She stopped a car , got into it and told the driver her destination.
Skill 1: Create an action chain : Sub. +V1, V2 and V3
“我去救公主”
我要带上最好的剑
翻过最高的山
穿过最深的树林
把公主带回来
动作少怎么办？
我带上最好的剑 翻过最高的山 闯入最深的森林 把公主带回
I climbed over the highest mountain, found my way into the
deep forest and brought back the princess.
Carrying the best sword, I went into the deep forest and brought
the princess back.
I climbed over the highest mountain and found my way into the dense forest, bringing back the princess.
After climbing over the highest mountain, I found my way into the dense forest to bring back the princess.
流畅三连动
同时发生
有先有后，有因有果
She stood on the top of the mountain, looking into the sky and feeling the precious peacein her inner mind .
She stood on the top of the mountain, looked into the sky and felt the precious peaceinin her inner mind.
Standing on the top of the mountain, she looked into the sky, feeling the precious peace in her inner mind.
Practice makes perfect
心理描写: 喜怒形于色----He is happy.
His smile broadened from ear to ear.
He clapped his hands together and jumped up and down with joy.
He giggled and squealed with excitement.
face
body
voice
Skill2: 从 面部/肢体和声音 三个方面体现人物的喜怒哀乐.
v.咯咯地笑
v. 长声尖叫
ripple over(to spread through a person like a wave)
flood=overwhelm[ v welm]
well up情感涌动=surge up突然迸发或激增=boil up
come in waves
brim over充满/overflow/bubble with (feelings)
Her heart _______________________________________ happiness.
A wave of happiness _________________________________________.
was brimming over/overflowing/bubbling with
flooded/rippled over/overwhelmed me.
welled up/surged up/boiled up/came in waves .
sb
He was very happy. 他喜上眉梢。
无灵主语
Different
emotions
seize,
grasp,
grip(hold tightly) , take hold of,
tear ... into pieces
jealousy,
fear,
curiosity
panic,
anxiety,
anger,
bitterness
doubts,
joy, ...
Anxiety _________________________________
seized/grasped/gripped/took hold of her.
tore her into pieces.
A wild joy
（negative emotion）
took hold of her.
（positive emotion）
She was very happy.
She was very nervous.
The Interplay between Inner thoughts
and Outward Expressions
Skill 3: 续写中的内外穿插法
外在表象：
陈述、动作、对话、表情、
环境、五感、外貌等
内心世界：
心理活动、感受描写等
相互作用
交替运用
他默默地站在那里，感激的泪水在眼眶打转。
He stood there dumbly, tears of gratitude welling up in his eyes.
With tears of gratitude welling up in his eyes, he stood there dumbly.
动作描写
心理+表情描写
情境：John just broke up with Sarah during a dinner date in a restaurant. 请描写Sarah走出餐馆的一幕。(写出她的伤心）
John just broke up with Sarah during a dinner date in a restaurant. Sarah couldn’t hold back her tears as she stepped out onto the sidewalk. Fragments of their sweet past kept flashing in her mind. How could she let go of these She felt as if the whole world had come crashing down around her. “It hurts. It really hurts.” She sobbed.
内外描写的交织
陈述
动作描写
心理活动
感受描写
对话/独白描写
表情描写
思考：紫句插在红绿之间会更好吗？
The words echoed in her mind, refusing to sink in. "We're getting a divorce." Her parents had dropped the bombshell just moments ago, and the teenage girl was struggling to process the news. She sat on her bed,______________________________________________. She felt lost, helpless, and alone. As the minutes ticked by, the girl's mind raced with questions, doubts, and fears. Would they still love her the same way Who would she live with Would anything ever be the same again With a heavy heart, she buried her face in her pillow, wishing she could escape the pain and confusion that had taken over her life.
staring blankly at the wall, as tears slid down her face
(表情描写）
Decode how the author constructed the girl’s emotion.
心理活动+对话
陈述
感受描写
环境描写
心理活动
感受描写
动作描写
心理活动
动作描写
寻找单句中内外描写的交叉手段
（内）心理活动、感受描写
(外)陈述、环境、五感、表情、动作、外貌描写
The sun beat down mercilessly on the young couple as they trudged through the endless expanse of sand. Their throats were parched, and their lips cracked from the relentless heat. They had been wandering in the desert for hours, with no idea which way to turn. Panic started to set in, __________________________________. The young man took his girlfriend's hand, trying to comfort her as they stumbled forward. With every step, they could feel their bodies weakening, their hope fading.
Just when they thought it was over, the couple spotted a small cluster of trees in the distance. Summoning all their strength, they pushed forward towards the oasis, praying for a miracle. As they drew closer, they could see a trickle of water seeping from the ground, and their hearts leaped with joy. They collapsed beside the spring, drinking the life-giving water with tears of gratitude in their eyes. They knew they were lucky to be alive and vowed to never take the gift of life for granted again.
as they realized they might not make it out alive
(动作描写+表情描写）
技巧识别和训练：
环境+动作描写
五感描写
陈述
心理描写
动作描写
心理活动
陈述
动作描写
心理活动
环境/陈述
感受描写
动作描写
表情描写
心理活动
感受描写
感受描写
动作描写
寻找单句中内外描写的交叉手段
（内）心理活动、感受描写
(外)陈述、环境、五感、表情、动作、外貌描写
请用内外穿插法描写我上台弹钢琴时的紧张及战胜紧张的过程。
Every nerve in my body stretching to a breaking point, I finally made firm steps to the piano bench. With a deep breath, I arranged my fingers on the keys cautiously and began to play. To my great relief, the first note was like a drop of water dripping into a barren land(切换描写对象）, instantly driving away my awkwardness and nervousness. Following the first note, the beautiful melody flew out naturally with the dance of my fingers.（拟人） I grew more and more confident, smiling with eyes closed, and entirely immersed myself in the show.
感受描写
动作描写
动作描写
感受描写
感受描写
动作描写
感受描写
Tip：注意两个切换：描写对象的切换&内外描写的切换
Writing time
第二节(满分25分)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Charlie was a little boy of ten. He was such a good boy that everyone loved him a lot. Due to his father’s job, his family shifted to a new city, where he was admitted into a new school. As Charlie was a good boy, most of his new classmates became his good friends soon. The teachers also praised Charlie for his intelligence and good behavior.
But there was one boy in the class who did not like Charlie at all! His name was Bill and he was a very naughty boy, so no one liked him at all. He found that Charlie was a quiet boy, so he started making trouble for his new classmate. But Charlie still kept quiet and did not complain to the class teacher. When Charlie’s parents learned about Bill, they wanted to go to school and complain about this naughty boy’s behavior. But Charlie stopped them and said, “Mom, Dad, please do not worry. Everything will be all right.”
Days went by and the time came for the annual sports meeting at the school. Charlie was also good at sports and he was participating in a number of events. Bill was participating in the sack race (套袋跑), though he could not run very fast due to his fat body. When Bill saw that Charlie won first prize in the 100-meter race, he felt very jealous (妒忌的) and decided that he would not let it happen in the sack race.
As planned, Bill tried to push Charlie while jumping on the track during the sack race. But he lost his balance and fell down! His leg was badly injured and he could not even stand up by himself. But as he was unpopular among his friends, no one turned up to help him!
注意：1．续写词数应为 150 左右；
2．请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Charlie noticed what had happened.
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Charlie took Bill to the school doctor.
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Charlie was a little boy of ten. He was such a good boy that everyone loved him a lot. Due to his father’s job, his family shifted to a new city, where he was admitted into a new school. As Charlie was a good boy, most of his new classmates became his good friends soon. The teachers also praised Charlie for his intelligence and good behavior.
But there was one boy in the class who did not like Charlie at all! His name was Bill and he was a very naughty boy, so no one liked him at all. He found that Charlie was a quiet boy, so he started making trouble for his new classmate. But Charlie still kept quiet and did not complain to the class teacher. When Charlie’s parents learned about Bill, they wanted to go to school and complain about this naughty boy’s behavior. But Charlie stopped them and said, “Mom, Dad, please do not worry. Everything will be all right.”
Days went by and the time came for the annual sports meeting at the school. Charlie was also good at sports and he was participating in a number of events. Bill was participating in the sack race (套袋跑), though he could not run very fast due to his fat body. When Bill saw that Charlie won first prize in the 100-meter race, he felt very jealous (妒忌的) and decided that he would not let it happen in the sack race.
As planned, Bill tried to push Charlie while jumping on the track during the sack race. But he lost his balance and fell down! His leg was badly injured and he could not even stand up by himself. But as he was unpopular among his friends, no one turned up to help him!
注意：1．续写词数应为 150 左右；
2．请按如下格式在相应位置作答。
Charlie noticed what had happened.__________________________________
____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Charlie took Bill to the school doctor._________________________________
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【读后续写解析】
【导语】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Charlie因为搬家进入一个新学校，因为他乖巧懂事、友好聪明，大家都很喜欢他。但是有一个名叫Bill的调皮男孩子不喜欢他，甚至因为Charlie跑步比赛拿第一名而嫉妒他。并计划在套袋跑比赛中使坏推倒Charlie。没想到的是，Charlie没摔倒，Bill自己却摔倒了。Charlie本来即将赢得第一名，但是他为了去帮Bill放弃了比赛。Bill因此被打动，不再使坏，还立志成为Charlie一样优秀的孩子。他们俩也成为好朋友。
【详解】
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“Charlie注意到发生了什么。”可知， 第一段可描写Charlie注意到 Bill摔倒后，放弃比赛拿奖，前去帮忙。
②由第二段首句内容“Charlie把Bill送到了校医那儿。”可知，第二段可描写Charlie如何 把Bill送到医生那里，然后Bill因此而被改变。
2.续写线索：Charlie搬家进入新学校——被同学Bill欺负——Charlie比赛获奖，Bill嫉妒，计划使坏——Bill摔倒，Charlie弃赛帮忙——Bill就医——Bill改变，二人成为好朋友
Charlie noticed what had happened. At that moment, he was far ahead of the other racers and was close to winning the race. However, the moment he saw Bill got injured and was struggling to get up, he abandoned the race and turned back to help him. The little boy had to make a great effort to pull Bill up, as he was much larger in size. As a result, Charlie lost the race, which made his classmates a little disappointed.
Charlie took Bill to the school doctor. At the doctor’s, Bill was carefully checked and was given some treatment. “You lost this sack race only because of me!” said Bill, after coming out of the doctor’s. “My mom tells me that helping a friend is more important than winning a race,” answered Charlie. Deeply touched by his reply, Bill promised to be a good boy like Charlie. After that, they became good friends and everybody was quite surprised at Bill’s big change.
Charlie noticed what had happened. He saw Bill fall down on the track, clutching(因痛苦或害怕)抱紧、紧握 his injured leg. Charlie knew that even though Bill had been mean to him, he couldn't ignore someone in pain. Without hesitation, Charlie ran over to help Bill up and supported him to the side of the race track. Despite the pain, Bill was surprised by Charlie's kindness and was greatly grateful for his timely help.
Charlie took Bill to the school doctor. The doctor examined Bill's leg and confirmed that it was a sprain. He instructed Bill to rest and gave him some medicine to reduce the swelling. While waiting for his parents to pick him up, Charlie stayed by Bill's side, chatting with him and making sure he was okay. Bill was amazed by Charlie's compassion and realized that he had misjudged him. From that day on, Bill stopped his mean behavior and became good friends with Charlie. Charlie's kindness had transformed not only Bill but also the entire class, as they learned the importance of helping and forgiving others.
Charlie noticed what had happened. He saw Bill fall down on the track, clutching his injured leg. However, instead of rushing over to help, Charlie hesitated for a moment. He remembered all the trouble Bill had caused him and wondered if it was worth helping someone who had been so mean to him. But deep down, Charlie knew that kindness was always the right choice. Pushing aside his negative thoughts, he went over to Bill and offered him a helping hand.
Charlie took Bill to the school doctor. With every step, Bill winced in pain因疼痛、恐惧或不适而产生的身体或表情上的突然反应, but Charlie supported him patiently. The school doctor examined Bill‘s leg and determined that it was a fracture(骨折). Bill's eyes welled up with tears, not only from the pain but also from the regret he felt for his actions. Charlie reassured him that everything would be alright and stayed with him until his parents arrived. At that moment, Charlie's act of empathy and forgiveness reminded Bill of the importance of friendship and kindness. From that day forward, Bill became a changed person, and he and Charlie became the best of friends. Their friendship taught everyone in the class the power of forgiveness and the potential for change.
reassure vt. 使……安心，安抚，打消……的疑虑
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